Author's note: Hey, hope you liked the last chapter. Well, I haven't done
these in a while, but now I think it's time - Review Reviews! (as I like
to call them)
Ievandie- thanks for your ever-kind reviews. They make me smile every time.
Electra- I'm sorry you think my story is really bad, but I wish you would have given me a good reason for what made you come to that conclusion. Yes, I realize that I write nowhere close to as well as Tolkien (the Great). But I'm still in high school, if I could write as well as him, I'd be off making millions, not sitting here complaining about too much P.E. homework. And, I don't really get this but I've "twisted around the given facts too much"? Well, this is fanfiction.net; no I didn't base it completely on the book, just the setting. I said at the beginning that I'm not an expert and that I'm not saying that everything I state is true. I'm sorry about the whole "Legolas' age" thing, I changed it even, just for you, but when I wrote this, I didn't know. Basically, if you think someone's story is bad, I think it's really mean to just say so. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM. Give me a reason for why you don't like my story and how I can fix it, don't just flat out flame me.
Mater Lorron Night- hehe, "Noisomething jerk off sexist" I love that. Hehe.I think it's close to my favorite saying now.
For the "citrus" (love the term by the way, thanks Katherine), that was my first attempt. There'll possibly be some more later on, so let me know how I did. Should I have been more descriptive? Probably hmmmm, well, any help will be gladly appreciated.
Sorry for the slow updates but ff.net has been down for a week! I don't know if it was down for you too, but I've tried this whole week I swear! There were these other stories I was reading and I'm really mad that I haven't had a chance to read them this whole time. Arrrg, anyway I don't know when I'll be able to upload, but I've been checking everyday, and as soon as it's working I'll post it up.
Finally, thanks you guys for the reviews. Last week, my ego was pretty inflated from all the good reviews, and then that one bad one and it shrunk to about the size of a golf ball (I probably took it a bit harder than healthy). Well, one day in the morning I checked my email and I had more than four reviews, and they were all so sweet and pleasant.WARNING: MY EGO INFLATED HEAD IS NOW TOUCHING THE CEILING. Anyway, where that was going is thanks for reading my story and letting me know how I'm doing. Hope I won't disappointment you as I keep going; I'm trying my hardest. And NOW the moment you've all been waiting for - THE STORY!!!
Alinne was now making great pace. Her eyes were wide with anticipation. She got to the top but there was nothing.
"I do not see a thing." She called down to Legolas. She heard his light footsteps on the branches beneath and waited for him to get up to her. She kept looking around for signs of whoever could've been up there but saw nothing.
Legolas was up there in a matter of seconds. He looked around but saw nothing. "Alinne, could it have been a." he began to ask but stopped as he noticed a couple of blood spots on the branch right by Alinne's foot. "There is blood."
Alinne looked to where his eyes were setting and noticed the blood spots. She kneeled down and inspected the drops. "It is not a lot," she said, "It could have simply been a bird."
"No," Legolas said quickly dismissing the idea at once. "There was a cry of pain, I know I heard something, it was not of a bird or any woodland creature, but of something human. or elvish."
"So you heard it too.. that would explain why nothing is up here. By the blood drips I hit nothing more than possibly the arm or made some minor scratch. The surprise of the attack would bring the cry."
"Is there a trail?" Legolas asked, his eyes following all around the centered blood drips. "No, I do not see one." He said answering his own question.
Alinne was about to jump to the lower branch to begin her descent back onto the ground when she noticed a drop. A drop of blood, a single drop, that probable meant that the owner was careful not to let any drop. She jumped to a different branch to get a better view. There was nothing in that direction except.except the camp Noitamni set up for himself. Alinne's face grew hot with fury.
Before she knew it she was at his camp beating on the blankets under which he slept to wake him up. He stood up quickly and tried to hold her back, but wrath had overcome her now and she saw nothing but rage.
"You idiotic ass.how could I have ever considered you my friend?.. How could I have ever trusted you?"
She charged at Noitamni but a pair of strong arms circled around her and held her back. It didn't really help though; it just made her angrier. She kept pushing against those arms and trying to charge at Noitamni but they didn't fail in their grasp. Noitamni's lips were moving now; he was saying something. No doubt Legolas was screaming something to her too, but she couldn't hear it. She couldn't even feel Legolas's arms around her anymore. All she felt was her blood boiling, boiling through every vein and artery, moving up her legs and arms heating up every inch of her body. Her heart, like on fire making every other feeling disappear, nothing but rage filled her now.
She couldn't hold it in anymore. All her energy went into an ear-splitting scream and she lost control of anything that was happening.
Noitamni's eyes went wide with fear and shock. Legolas was suddenly pushed away from Alinne by a strong force. He fell onto the ground with a thump and then sat up staring with fear at the scene unraveling before him.
Alinne was standing, her arms raised up. Her eyes were open too and head tilted back so that she was staring at the sky. Her mouth was open in a scream. Legolas's jaw dropped however when he saw white lights growing from the ground she was standing on. The lights grew brighter as they circled around her. Soon he could only see her through that blanket of white light, which covered her all around. It didn't stop growing however when it got to her head. It kept growing until soon it was towering over the tall trees of Mirkwood forest and it was casting a long white circle of light into the sky.
Legolas looked back at Alinne after staring into the sky for a while. He realized the scream had stopped; yet Alinne's mouth was still open. She was starting to look weaker, as if all her energy was going into the scream and the light it was making. Then one last time she screamed louder than the last and the light that had circled around Alinne suddenly grew brighter, so bright Legolas couldn't even see her anymore. With the last energy it possessed it exploded out so that Legolas, Noitamni and anything else around there was blown back by the strongest force Legolas had ever encountered and then it died down. Slowly the lights that were growing into the sky began to lose brightness and as if they were growing heavy, began to flow back to the ground.
Alinne still stood there, arms raised. Her mouth was now closed, the scream had ended, but her eyes were open wide, still staring at the sky giving the last of her energy into the light which sometimes would spring up again, as if in a last attempt to go back to the sky, and then it would slowly keep creeping down.
As soon as the last of the rays came to the earth, Alinne fell hard on the ground. Legolas would have been worried about her, but those weren't the biggest problems he had now.
#That light, anyone would have seen it. We must leave now. Oh I hope we will have time to get away before any orcs come. # He picked her up, and shook Noitamni, who was still staring at the sky open-mouthed, to wake him up. Soon all belongings were packed and Legolas, Alinne in his arms, and Noitamni were running as fast as they could away from the place where all this happened.
Author's Note: Don't worry all will be explained in the next chapter (or maybe the one after that one, I'm not sure yet) but soon. For now, please review. I would highly appreciate guesses of what happened. Also, I'm sorry if I didn't describe it terribly well. I had a good image in my head, but I couldn't figure out how to explain it. Ughhh, well I hope I did okay, I will definitely revise it sometime so it makes more sense, but for now, and constructive criticism will be very much appreciated. Thanks!
Expect the next chapter soon unless ff.net decides not to work for me again.
Ievandie- thanks for your ever-kind reviews. They make me smile every time.
Electra- I'm sorry you think my story is really bad, but I wish you would have given me a good reason for what made you come to that conclusion. Yes, I realize that I write nowhere close to as well as Tolkien (the Great). But I'm still in high school, if I could write as well as him, I'd be off making millions, not sitting here complaining about too much P.E. homework. And, I don't really get this but I've "twisted around the given facts too much"? Well, this is fanfiction.net; no I didn't base it completely on the book, just the setting. I said at the beginning that I'm not an expert and that I'm not saying that everything I state is true. I'm sorry about the whole "Legolas' age" thing, I changed it even, just for you, but when I wrote this, I didn't know. Basically, if you think someone's story is bad, I think it's really mean to just say so. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM. Give me a reason for why you don't like my story and how I can fix it, don't just flat out flame me.
Mater Lorron Night- hehe, "Noisomething jerk off sexist" I love that. Hehe.I think it's close to my favorite saying now.
For the "citrus" (love the term by the way, thanks Katherine), that was my first attempt. There'll possibly be some more later on, so let me know how I did. Should I have been more descriptive? Probably hmmmm, well, any help will be gladly appreciated.
Sorry for the slow updates but ff.net has been down for a week! I don't know if it was down for you too, but I've tried this whole week I swear! There were these other stories I was reading and I'm really mad that I haven't had a chance to read them this whole time. Arrrg, anyway I don't know when I'll be able to upload, but I've been checking everyday, and as soon as it's working I'll post it up.
Finally, thanks you guys for the reviews. Last week, my ego was pretty inflated from all the good reviews, and then that one bad one and it shrunk to about the size of a golf ball (I probably took it a bit harder than healthy). Well, one day in the morning I checked my email and I had more than four reviews, and they were all so sweet and pleasant.WARNING: MY EGO INFLATED HEAD IS NOW TOUCHING THE CEILING. Anyway, where that was going is thanks for reading my story and letting me know how I'm doing. Hope I won't disappointment you as I keep going; I'm trying my hardest. And NOW the moment you've all been waiting for - THE STORY!!!
Alinne was now making great pace. Her eyes were wide with anticipation. She got to the top but there was nothing.
"I do not see a thing." She called down to Legolas. She heard his light footsteps on the branches beneath and waited for him to get up to her. She kept looking around for signs of whoever could've been up there but saw nothing.
Legolas was up there in a matter of seconds. He looked around but saw nothing. "Alinne, could it have been a." he began to ask but stopped as he noticed a couple of blood spots on the branch right by Alinne's foot. "There is blood."
Alinne looked to where his eyes were setting and noticed the blood spots. She kneeled down and inspected the drops. "It is not a lot," she said, "It could have simply been a bird."
"No," Legolas said quickly dismissing the idea at once. "There was a cry of pain, I know I heard something, it was not of a bird or any woodland creature, but of something human. or elvish."
"So you heard it too.. that would explain why nothing is up here. By the blood drips I hit nothing more than possibly the arm or made some minor scratch. The surprise of the attack would bring the cry."
"Is there a trail?" Legolas asked, his eyes following all around the centered blood drips. "No, I do not see one." He said answering his own question.
Alinne was about to jump to the lower branch to begin her descent back onto the ground when she noticed a drop. A drop of blood, a single drop, that probable meant that the owner was careful not to let any drop. She jumped to a different branch to get a better view. There was nothing in that direction except.except the camp Noitamni set up for himself. Alinne's face grew hot with fury.
Before she knew it she was at his camp beating on the blankets under which he slept to wake him up. He stood up quickly and tried to hold her back, but wrath had overcome her now and she saw nothing but rage.
"You idiotic ass.how could I have ever considered you my friend?.. How could I have ever trusted you?"
She charged at Noitamni but a pair of strong arms circled around her and held her back. It didn't really help though; it just made her angrier. She kept pushing against those arms and trying to charge at Noitamni but they didn't fail in their grasp. Noitamni's lips were moving now; he was saying something. No doubt Legolas was screaming something to her too, but she couldn't hear it. She couldn't even feel Legolas's arms around her anymore. All she felt was her blood boiling, boiling through every vein and artery, moving up her legs and arms heating up every inch of her body. Her heart, like on fire making every other feeling disappear, nothing but rage filled her now.
She couldn't hold it in anymore. All her energy went into an ear-splitting scream and she lost control of anything that was happening.
Noitamni's eyes went wide with fear and shock. Legolas was suddenly pushed away from Alinne by a strong force. He fell onto the ground with a thump and then sat up staring with fear at the scene unraveling before him.
Alinne was standing, her arms raised up. Her eyes were open too and head tilted back so that she was staring at the sky. Her mouth was open in a scream. Legolas's jaw dropped however when he saw white lights growing from the ground she was standing on. The lights grew brighter as they circled around her. Soon he could only see her through that blanket of white light, which covered her all around. It didn't stop growing however when it got to her head. It kept growing until soon it was towering over the tall trees of Mirkwood forest and it was casting a long white circle of light into the sky.
Legolas looked back at Alinne after staring into the sky for a while. He realized the scream had stopped; yet Alinne's mouth was still open. She was starting to look weaker, as if all her energy was going into the scream and the light it was making. Then one last time she screamed louder than the last and the light that had circled around Alinne suddenly grew brighter, so bright Legolas couldn't even see her anymore. With the last energy it possessed it exploded out so that Legolas, Noitamni and anything else around there was blown back by the strongest force Legolas had ever encountered and then it died down. Slowly the lights that were growing into the sky began to lose brightness and as if they were growing heavy, began to flow back to the ground.
Alinne still stood there, arms raised. Her mouth was now closed, the scream had ended, but her eyes were open wide, still staring at the sky giving the last of her energy into the light which sometimes would spring up again, as if in a last attempt to go back to the sky, and then it would slowly keep creeping down.
As soon as the last of the rays came to the earth, Alinne fell hard on the ground. Legolas would have been worried about her, but those weren't the biggest problems he had now.
#That light, anyone would have seen it. We must leave now. Oh I hope we will have time to get away before any orcs come. # He picked her up, and shook Noitamni, who was still staring at the sky open-mouthed, to wake him up. Soon all belongings were packed and Legolas, Alinne in his arms, and Noitamni were running as fast as they could away from the place where all this happened.
Author's Note: Don't worry all will be explained in the next chapter (or maybe the one after that one, I'm not sure yet) but soon. For now, please review. I would highly appreciate guesses of what happened. Also, I'm sorry if I didn't describe it terribly well. I had a good image in my head, but I couldn't figure out how to explain it. Ughhh, well I hope I did okay, I will definitely revise it sometime so it makes more sense, but for now, and constructive criticism will be very much appreciated. Thanks!
Expect the next chapter soon unless ff.net decides not to work for me again.
