Ok, I'm writing one more chapter when I know I have the time to do so.
To Oiram: your review was very useful, (a little bit of criticism! Yeah!), but:
I'm sorry for not being so descriptive, but English is not my first language, so my vocab is sometimes limited.
2) There is no way Lily is in love with Sirius. That's it. And Jemima and Ellie are NOT going to date Sirius and Remus (I know you never wrote that, it's just to stop any ideas anybody had). And read this chapter, and you'll see that James isn't going to need to read Lily's diary to find out what she thinks.
Once again, thanks to all my reviewers (I'm not listing the names anymore, takes too much time).
On with the story.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
During the following week, Potter found a new girlfriend, told her he loved her, slept with her and then dumped her. The girl then went to Lily and cried for an hour. Lily once again tried to make the girl feel better, and once again failed. Lily tried once again to make the girl hate James Potter, and once again failed that one too.
At any normal time, Lily would have just taken Potter apart and yell at him forever. But this wasn't a normal time. Lily had given up ever changing Potter. She had realized that Potter actually enjoyed having Lily yell at him, and she was mad at herself for not understanding that earlier.
Lily took her books, and went to her cave to be alone a little bit. She started to work on her transfiguration assignment. She had been working for about half an hour when a very weird thing happened. She heard noise at the cave's entrance. She prayed very hard that it wasn't Potter or any of his merry men, and then lifted her eyes. She could not believe what she saw. A stag was looking at her. Lily had known for a long time that all sorts of creatures lived in the forbidden forest, but none had ever approached her so close. Tentatively, she smiled and tried to look friendly.
"Come here. I'm not going to hurt you."
The stag looked at her with a look of intelligence, like he actually understood what she said. She was surprised at first, but then realized she was stupid. If the stag lived in the forest, then of course he had special gifts, and it was very likely that he actually understood every word she said. She smiled again, and the stag approached her.
She wandered what she was supposed to say, and figured that she ought to introduce herself.
"My name is Lily. I'm a student at Hogwarts. I'm in fifth year. And I'm a prefect."
She wished very hard the stag could answer to her. He looked so intelligent that she was sure if he was able to answer, they could have a completely civilized conversation. He looked at all her paper with a questioning look.
"Oh, this is my transfiguration assignment. It's almost impossible to work in the Gryffindor common room, so I come here when I want to work in peace."
The stag gave her another questioning look.
"It's Potter and his merry men. They're a real pain. They think they own the common room, and they keep doing all those stupid pranks on people."
The stag looked at her, very interested. Lily figured that she might as well tell him everything that went through her mind. Jemima and Ellie were tired to listen to her complain about Potter, so she didn't have anybody anymore to talk about how Potter drove her insane.
"Do you want to know more about James Potter? I might as well tell you the entire story. It all starts more than five years ago, went I met him in the Hogwarts express."
(Flashback)
Lily Evans was completely scared. She was in King's Cross station, trying to find the train to go to her new school. The ticket said that the train would be on platform 9 ¾, and Lily was absolutely sure that it did not exist. The entire "witch thing had been one more stupid prank from the people who tortured her at school. She turned around and started to leave the station, when she ran into a teen girl of about 17. She had bright red hair, and was carrying a big trunk, bigger than Lily's. The girl took a fast look at Lily and smiled.
"You are a new student in Hogwarts, and you don't know where you're supposed to go," she said, very confident she was right.
"Well, yes," Lily said, amazed, "How did you guess that?"
"Muggles don't' carry cauldrons around the station for the fun of it. My name is Molly, I'm a seventh year. You are.?"
"Lillian Evans. My friends call me Lily."
"Well, nice to meet you, Lily. I bet that you don't know how to go to Platform 9 ¾. Am I wrong?"
"No," Lily said, relieved like never.
"It's very simple. All you have to do is walk through the barrier. Look there, this student is going to do it."
Lily, stunned, watched a teenager disappear through the barrier. She turned to Molly, with big eyes. She was smiling.
"See? Easy! Your turn now," Molly said.
Lily took a big breath and started to run towards the barrier. At the moment she expected the crash to happen. nothing happened. She opened her eyes, and in front of her was a big, bright red train. The platform was packed with wizards. Lily simply could not believe it. She stood at the same place for a few minutes, just observing. Suddenly, something hit her in the back. She turned around and saw that the something was someone. A boy her age with black messy hair was looking at her. She was ready to yell, but he yelled first.
"Are you insane? Don't stand right after the entrance to the Platform! You're blocking everyone from entering!"
"Well, I see that I didn't block you!" she said, massaging her back. You almost killed me!"
"Well, wouldn't that be too bad," he said ironically.
(End of flashback)
"You see," she told the stag, "Potter and I have hated each other since the very moment we met. And now, he wants to date me! And."
She suddenly stopped. There was noise outside the cave, and that was definitely a human walking.
"I've gotta go!"
She raced to the common room, and went up to her dorm. Jemima and Ellie were talking about Jemima's crush on someone, and how she could get him to date her. At that very moment, Lily decided she wouldn't tell them anything about the stag. They would want to see him, and Lily wasn't sure she would ever see him again.
To Oiram: your review was very useful, (a little bit of criticism! Yeah!), but:
I'm sorry for not being so descriptive, but English is not my first language, so my vocab is sometimes limited.
2) There is no way Lily is in love with Sirius. That's it. And Jemima and Ellie are NOT going to date Sirius and Remus (I know you never wrote that, it's just to stop any ideas anybody had). And read this chapter, and you'll see that James isn't going to need to read Lily's diary to find out what she thinks.
Once again, thanks to all my reviewers (I'm not listing the names anymore, takes too much time).
On with the story.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
During the following week, Potter found a new girlfriend, told her he loved her, slept with her and then dumped her. The girl then went to Lily and cried for an hour. Lily once again tried to make the girl feel better, and once again failed. Lily tried once again to make the girl hate James Potter, and once again failed that one too.
At any normal time, Lily would have just taken Potter apart and yell at him forever. But this wasn't a normal time. Lily had given up ever changing Potter. She had realized that Potter actually enjoyed having Lily yell at him, and she was mad at herself for not understanding that earlier.
Lily took her books, and went to her cave to be alone a little bit. She started to work on her transfiguration assignment. She had been working for about half an hour when a very weird thing happened. She heard noise at the cave's entrance. She prayed very hard that it wasn't Potter or any of his merry men, and then lifted her eyes. She could not believe what she saw. A stag was looking at her. Lily had known for a long time that all sorts of creatures lived in the forbidden forest, but none had ever approached her so close. Tentatively, she smiled and tried to look friendly.
"Come here. I'm not going to hurt you."
The stag looked at her with a look of intelligence, like he actually understood what she said. She was surprised at first, but then realized she was stupid. If the stag lived in the forest, then of course he had special gifts, and it was very likely that he actually understood every word she said. She smiled again, and the stag approached her.
She wandered what she was supposed to say, and figured that she ought to introduce herself.
"My name is Lily. I'm a student at Hogwarts. I'm in fifth year. And I'm a prefect."
She wished very hard the stag could answer to her. He looked so intelligent that she was sure if he was able to answer, they could have a completely civilized conversation. He looked at all her paper with a questioning look.
"Oh, this is my transfiguration assignment. It's almost impossible to work in the Gryffindor common room, so I come here when I want to work in peace."
The stag gave her another questioning look.
"It's Potter and his merry men. They're a real pain. They think they own the common room, and they keep doing all those stupid pranks on people."
The stag looked at her, very interested. Lily figured that she might as well tell him everything that went through her mind. Jemima and Ellie were tired to listen to her complain about Potter, so she didn't have anybody anymore to talk about how Potter drove her insane.
"Do you want to know more about James Potter? I might as well tell you the entire story. It all starts more than five years ago, went I met him in the Hogwarts express."
(Flashback)
Lily Evans was completely scared. She was in King's Cross station, trying to find the train to go to her new school. The ticket said that the train would be on platform 9 ¾, and Lily was absolutely sure that it did not exist. The entire "witch thing had been one more stupid prank from the people who tortured her at school. She turned around and started to leave the station, when she ran into a teen girl of about 17. She had bright red hair, and was carrying a big trunk, bigger than Lily's. The girl took a fast look at Lily and smiled.
"You are a new student in Hogwarts, and you don't know where you're supposed to go," she said, very confident she was right.
"Well, yes," Lily said, amazed, "How did you guess that?"
"Muggles don't' carry cauldrons around the station for the fun of it. My name is Molly, I'm a seventh year. You are.?"
"Lillian Evans. My friends call me Lily."
"Well, nice to meet you, Lily. I bet that you don't know how to go to Platform 9 ¾. Am I wrong?"
"No," Lily said, relieved like never.
"It's very simple. All you have to do is walk through the barrier. Look there, this student is going to do it."
Lily, stunned, watched a teenager disappear through the barrier. She turned to Molly, with big eyes. She was smiling.
"See? Easy! Your turn now," Molly said.
Lily took a big breath and started to run towards the barrier. At the moment she expected the crash to happen. nothing happened. She opened her eyes, and in front of her was a big, bright red train. The platform was packed with wizards. Lily simply could not believe it. She stood at the same place for a few minutes, just observing. Suddenly, something hit her in the back. She turned around and saw that the something was someone. A boy her age with black messy hair was looking at her. She was ready to yell, but he yelled first.
"Are you insane? Don't stand right after the entrance to the Platform! You're blocking everyone from entering!"
"Well, I see that I didn't block you!" she said, massaging her back. You almost killed me!"
"Well, wouldn't that be too bad," he said ironically.
(End of flashback)
"You see," she told the stag, "Potter and I have hated each other since the very moment we met. And now, he wants to date me! And."
She suddenly stopped. There was noise outside the cave, and that was definitely a human walking.
"I've gotta go!"
She raced to the common room, and went up to her dorm. Jemima and Ellie were talking about Jemima's crush on someone, and how she could get him to date her. At that very moment, Lily decided she wouldn't tell them anything about the stag. They would want to see him, and Lily wasn't sure she would ever see him again.