Ok this is for that jerk who sent me a non-helpful review. To start out I
live on the other side of the country. And another thing don't review
unless you have constructive criticism or you like it and want to see more.
I don't need to know my work just stinks I need to know how to improve it.
I can't make everyone happy so unless you want to get bitched out on the
Internet for everyone to see I suggest you reviews with the intent to help.
If you don't like how I write then DON'T READ IT!
All right now that, mister jerk is trembling in the corner I feel much better. So now I'll continue my story.
Disclaimer: I don't know if I even have to do this each time but just so I don't loose all of my collage funds on being sued, so naturally I don't own anything that has to do with things that aren't mine. Whatever.
Chapter Three: Nightmare!
Kurama: Uh this doesn't have to do with those women does it?
Me: (I just smile and laugh manically in my head)
Kurama: There is no way I'm going to be embarrassed. I demand a double for this chapter!
Me: Who are we going to find stupid enough to be your double! Wait I know I'll go 8-bit!
Entire cast: (sweat drops)
Me: Oh Fighter?
Fighter: (Poof) Uh where am I?
Me: You are in. uh. dream. no wait a nightmare!
Fighter: Nooooooo!
Me: Yes and now you will be tortured by women! Uh I have a headache now Shorty take it from here.
Chapter Three once again: Nightmare!
Shorty: As Kenshin took Kaoru home Kurama went inside to find out that he was in a.
Fighter: Oh no a retirement home! If only I could of read that sign outside! (turns to one of the ladies) I thought that this was a.
Lady one: Are you nuts we wanted Kenshin to come back in so that we could stay on our brakes.
Fighter: Then no dancing, no singing, what kind of place is this!
Lady two: Oh but Kurama there is dancing, just not the same kind.
Fighter: Noooooo! What horror!
Shorty: Just then Black Mage came blasting in because for reasons beyond even the author's consent Black Mage missed Fighter.
Black Mage: Oh no! A retirement home! (To the three workers) How dare you trick my friend into entering such a (then looking around) disturbing place!
The real Kenshin: Hold it aren't we getting a little too random?
Me: Uh I don't know. Are we?
Kurama: Hey as long as I'm not in it I have no say.
Shorty: Uh naw I think it's just fine.
Me: Ok now on with the story!
Shorty: Back at the dojo. Kenshin (note the real Kenshin) put Ms. Kaoru in bed. And for the sick minded no he was not in the bed with her. WHAT KIND OF SICK DEMENTED PERSON DO YOU TAKE ME FOR?
Yahiko: What happened to her?
Kenshin: Uh she passed out.
Yahiko: Duh. I meant why did she pass out!
Kenshin: Uh bad tofu?
Yahiko: Whatever.
Sanoske: Kenshin who is the flat dude?
Kenshin: what flat dude?
Sanoske: The one next to you.
Kenshin: All I see is a line.
Sara: How dare you call me a line! *SMACK*
Kenshin: *swirly eyes*
Sara: It's called two dimensions!
Kenshin: Oh ok that works. So why are you here?
Sara: The same reason Fighter and Black Mage are still at the retirement home. Duh!
Yahiko: Whatever!
Kaoru: Oh my head. what happened?
Kenshin: Nothing, nothing at all.
Kaoru: WHAT DO YOU MEAN NOTHING!
Kenshin: *cowers in fear* No more hitting the head.
Kaoru: Fine I won't hit you, but you have to tell me what you were doing in that place NOW!
Kenshin: What do you take me for?
Kaoru: *under her breath* An idiot..
Kenshin: For your information I. lost a bet.
Kaoru: ?
Kenshin: well I. uh. had to watch a bunch of old people while the workers took enormously long brakes. like all day brakes.
Kaoru: that's it. that's all it was? I don't believe this! Kenshin you are pathetic. Plus I thought you didn't gamble?
Kenshin: I normally don't but it was on me against a 12 year old so I thought I would win.
Kaoru: Do you expect me to believe that?
Kenshin: yes.
Kaoru: Whatever.
Shorty: And that ends this chapter. Join us next time to see the wondrous works of. this story. ok I'm done. Oh Hiei?
Hiei: What?
Shorty: Come here.
Hiei: OMG NOOOOO! Not that anything but that!
(Hiei runs away screaming in terror)
Me: And you will never know what she wanted ether. Muahahahahaha.cough*. Muahaha. oh forget it you guys don't care any who.
SEE YOU AROUND..
Note: If you have any ideas, complaints, or complements please e-mail me @ amineaddict@comcast.net and please have it be constructive criticism.
Thank you.
All right now that, mister jerk is trembling in the corner I feel much better. So now I'll continue my story.
Disclaimer: I don't know if I even have to do this each time but just so I don't loose all of my collage funds on being sued, so naturally I don't own anything that has to do with things that aren't mine. Whatever.
Chapter Three: Nightmare!
Kurama: Uh this doesn't have to do with those women does it?
Me: (I just smile and laugh manically in my head)
Kurama: There is no way I'm going to be embarrassed. I demand a double for this chapter!
Me: Who are we going to find stupid enough to be your double! Wait I know I'll go 8-bit!
Entire cast: (sweat drops)
Me: Oh Fighter?
Fighter: (Poof) Uh where am I?
Me: You are in. uh. dream. no wait a nightmare!
Fighter: Nooooooo!
Me: Yes and now you will be tortured by women! Uh I have a headache now Shorty take it from here.
Chapter Three once again: Nightmare!
Shorty: As Kenshin took Kaoru home Kurama went inside to find out that he was in a.
Fighter: Oh no a retirement home! If only I could of read that sign outside! (turns to one of the ladies) I thought that this was a.
Lady one: Are you nuts we wanted Kenshin to come back in so that we could stay on our brakes.
Fighter: Then no dancing, no singing, what kind of place is this!
Lady two: Oh but Kurama there is dancing, just not the same kind.
Fighter: Noooooo! What horror!
Shorty: Just then Black Mage came blasting in because for reasons beyond even the author's consent Black Mage missed Fighter.
Black Mage: Oh no! A retirement home! (To the three workers) How dare you trick my friend into entering such a (then looking around) disturbing place!
The real Kenshin: Hold it aren't we getting a little too random?
Me: Uh I don't know. Are we?
Kurama: Hey as long as I'm not in it I have no say.
Shorty: Uh naw I think it's just fine.
Me: Ok now on with the story!
Shorty: Back at the dojo. Kenshin (note the real Kenshin) put Ms. Kaoru in bed. And for the sick minded no he was not in the bed with her. WHAT KIND OF SICK DEMENTED PERSON DO YOU TAKE ME FOR?
Yahiko: What happened to her?
Kenshin: Uh she passed out.
Yahiko: Duh. I meant why did she pass out!
Kenshin: Uh bad tofu?
Yahiko: Whatever.
Sanoske: Kenshin who is the flat dude?
Kenshin: what flat dude?
Sanoske: The one next to you.
Kenshin: All I see is a line.
Sara: How dare you call me a line! *SMACK*
Kenshin: *swirly eyes*
Sara: It's called two dimensions!
Kenshin: Oh ok that works. So why are you here?
Sara: The same reason Fighter and Black Mage are still at the retirement home. Duh!
Yahiko: Whatever!
Kaoru: Oh my head. what happened?
Kenshin: Nothing, nothing at all.
Kaoru: WHAT DO YOU MEAN NOTHING!
Kenshin: *cowers in fear* No more hitting the head.
Kaoru: Fine I won't hit you, but you have to tell me what you were doing in that place NOW!
Kenshin: What do you take me for?
Kaoru: *under her breath* An idiot..
Kenshin: For your information I. lost a bet.
Kaoru: ?
Kenshin: well I. uh. had to watch a bunch of old people while the workers took enormously long brakes. like all day brakes.
Kaoru: that's it. that's all it was? I don't believe this! Kenshin you are pathetic. Plus I thought you didn't gamble?
Kenshin: I normally don't but it was on me against a 12 year old so I thought I would win.
Kaoru: Do you expect me to believe that?
Kenshin: yes.
Kaoru: Whatever.
Shorty: And that ends this chapter. Join us next time to see the wondrous works of. this story. ok I'm done. Oh Hiei?
Hiei: What?
Shorty: Come here.
Hiei: OMG NOOOOO! Not that anything but that!
(Hiei runs away screaming in terror)
Me: And you will never know what she wanted ether. Muahahahahaha.cough*. Muahaha. oh forget it you guys don't care any who.
SEE YOU AROUND..
Note: If you have any ideas, complaints, or complements please e-mail me @ amineaddict@comcast.net and please have it be constructive criticism.
Thank you.