Evil Thoughts
Author's very pissed off notes- it has come to my attention that I've been criticized. First off yes Gaz is slightly off character, but she is older, do you think that maybe, just maybe I'm hinting she has a thing for him? Next off, the 'dear boys' thing. He didn't mean literally, don't you watch movies? There're a little younger than him, and he was being sarcastic. Next off, if you'd read the chapter, you would have found out that it was only Zim he was torturing (well, there at least), and yes if you stop and think for a minuet, Zim would go through the whole ordeal trying to make himself seem better than he is. Can you consider he was trying to intimidate Nny, make him back off? Next, yes I proof read, but I have grammar issues, I'm failing that class. Plus my word thing isn't working right, so if I did try to fix something I would end up having to rewrite the whole chapter, and though I'm willing to do a lot for this fic, I'm still lazy. I am only human. And with my thing about flamers, I wrote it that way on purpose. I was hyper and in the mood to write something that made no sense. (That is, after all, why I'm writing this). I have a question, are you a Language arts nerd? I can understand why some of the other grammatical mistakes bug you, but come on, run on sentences? All right, so I'm a History geek, and it drives me nuts when people get history wrong, so I'll be more affectionate if this is the case. Ok about the Internet lingo, it's an author's note, NOT, double underlined for a reason, part of the story. I haven't once in the actual story spoke like that. I write you the proper way, I capitalize I, I write out the whole word. Even now, in the author's note, I write properly. Being descriptive is a style of writing, ever read Lord of the Rings? How about Moby Dick? I was introducing my fic, setting up the mood, so to speak. Ok now that that's out of the way, let me say this, this is the LAST time I'll accept criticizes from someone I haven't already ok-ed. Well, on with the chapter.
Disclaimer-Still don't own, still don't sue.
Gaz's hand twitched at her side, she was trying hard to not kill the robot in front of her, but it is becoming more and more difficult. She imagined her hands ripping off his little arms, and then she would crunch his body. Then with pleasure, she would push her hand through the places where his arms used to be, and rip out all his wires. She laughed at the thought; that would be fun. Of coarse she'd have to wait, she hated to admit it, but she needed GIR to find Dib, who she would torture maliciously.
"Awww. Pretty purple haired lady's upset. I think she needs a hug!" The robot shouted in joy.
"Touch me, and I'll show you what your. wires look like." She sighed, how do you threaten an annoyingly happy robot?
"PIGGY!" He shouted becoming distracted.
"TAKE ME TO DIB AND ZIM NOW!!" She shrieked.
"Oh. Okay!" He shouted happily. He began walking off. 'Finally' She mentally smiled, and she followed the robot.
Johnny sat down on his couch. He wasn't entirely sure what the fuck was going on. He was really frustrated, and he didn't like being frustrated. He remembered what just occurred.
*Flashback*
Johnny took off the wig and looked at the spectacle before him. He wasn't human, definitely not human. But he did exhibit human qualities. He was an arrogant jackass, and that was all Johnny really needed. That was when the thought struck him, could he be killed the same way, or could he not die like.people? Well there was only really one way to find out. Johnny pulled out his knife, and again advanced toward him. He smiled as he dragged the knife along his shirt cutting it open. He pushed the knife down, not too hard, but hard enough to draw blood, and slowly pushed it in harder. The, whatever he was, was shouting, but Johnny wasn't listening, he never listened to his victims. His blade was halfway deep when he ripped it immediately downward. He turned it side ways so that the sharp side was facing the left and cut only slightly that way before removing the knife from his what should have been gut. He lifted up the knife and slashed many times, each time going deeper than the previous. After his tenth cut he stepped back to look at his handiwork. The bigheaded boy was practically going into fits; he seemed to know he was next. The, thing, in front of him, however, wasn't dead. He was just really pissed. It's not like he scared Johnny, but that was his reaction, he was shouting in a language Johnny had never heard before. Johnny stared at the shouting being, and the blue blood dripping from his body.
"GIR, I'll deactivate you next chance I swear, this is the last straw. Fuck, I'm quoting these pathetic earth beasts!" Johnny heard. That was when he decided to leave, he was just too confused, and he wasn't in the mood to consider this GIR thing.
*End Flashback*
Johnny sat back and began thinking about what he currently had in the basement. His mind then flashed to the girl, Gaz, he had met at the 24/7 yesterday, he wasn't sure why. He headed back to the basement, he'd go torture the bigheaded one for a while, that should clear up his mind.
Gaz was now sure, following the merry machine was the worst thing she'd ever done. They'd been walking in circles for hours now. She was getting REALLY pissed off. More violent thoughts entered her mind.
"GIR, I swear to god it you don't take me to Dib NOW I'll destroy you- you worthless piece of-"
"We're here nice Gaz girl!" GIR announced cutting in. Gaz's eyes opened as she looked at the shack in front of her. Why were they here? Who was 'thin creepy man'? She shuddered at quoting GIR, even mentally. She sighed.
"After you." She said calmly following the android into the poor excuse for a house.
Review, no more constructive criticism, that's all I can take with out going on a murder rampage.
Author's very pissed off notes- it has come to my attention that I've been criticized. First off yes Gaz is slightly off character, but she is older, do you think that maybe, just maybe I'm hinting she has a thing for him? Next off, the 'dear boys' thing. He didn't mean literally, don't you watch movies? There're a little younger than him, and he was being sarcastic. Next off, if you'd read the chapter, you would have found out that it was only Zim he was torturing (well, there at least), and yes if you stop and think for a minuet, Zim would go through the whole ordeal trying to make himself seem better than he is. Can you consider he was trying to intimidate Nny, make him back off? Next, yes I proof read, but I have grammar issues, I'm failing that class. Plus my word thing isn't working right, so if I did try to fix something I would end up having to rewrite the whole chapter, and though I'm willing to do a lot for this fic, I'm still lazy. I am only human. And with my thing about flamers, I wrote it that way on purpose. I was hyper and in the mood to write something that made no sense. (That is, after all, why I'm writing this). I have a question, are you a Language arts nerd? I can understand why some of the other grammatical mistakes bug you, but come on, run on sentences? All right, so I'm a History geek, and it drives me nuts when people get history wrong, so I'll be more affectionate if this is the case. Ok about the Internet lingo, it's an author's note, NOT, double underlined for a reason, part of the story. I haven't once in the actual story spoke like that. I write you the proper way, I capitalize I, I write out the whole word. Even now, in the author's note, I write properly. Being descriptive is a style of writing, ever read Lord of the Rings? How about Moby Dick? I was introducing my fic, setting up the mood, so to speak. Ok now that that's out of the way, let me say this, this is the LAST time I'll accept criticizes from someone I haven't already ok-ed. Well, on with the chapter.
Disclaimer-Still don't own, still don't sue.
Gaz's hand twitched at her side, she was trying hard to not kill the robot in front of her, but it is becoming more and more difficult. She imagined her hands ripping off his little arms, and then she would crunch his body. Then with pleasure, she would push her hand through the places where his arms used to be, and rip out all his wires. She laughed at the thought; that would be fun. Of coarse she'd have to wait, she hated to admit it, but she needed GIR to find Dib, who she would torture maliciously.
"Awww. Pretty purple haired lady's upset. I think she needs a hug!" The robot shouted in joy.
"Touch me, and I'll show you what your. wires look like." She sighed, how do you threaten an annoyingly happy robot?
"PIGGY!" He shouted becoming distracted.
"TAKE ME TO DIB AND ZIM NOW!!" She shrieked.
"Oh. Okay!" He shouted happily. He began walking off. 'Finally' She mentally smiled, and she followed the robot.
Johnny sat down on his couch. He wasn't entirely sure what the fuck was going on. He was really frustrated, and he didn't like being frustrated. He remembered what just occurred.
*Flashback*
Johnny took off the wig and looked at the spectacle before him. He wasn't human, definitely not human. But he did exhibit human qualities. He was an arrogant jackass, and that was all Johnny really needed. That was when the thought struck him, could he be killed the same way, or could he not die like.people? Well there was only really one way to find out. Johnny pulled out his knife, and again advanced toward him. He smiled as he dragged the knife along his shirt cutting it open. He pushed the knife down, not too hard, but hard enough to draw blood, and slowly pushed it in harder. The, whatever he was, was shouting, but Johnny wasn't listening, he never listened to his victims. His blade was halfway deep when he ripped it immediately downward. He turned it side ways so that the sharp side was facing the left and cut only slightly that way before removing the knife from his what should have been gut. He lifted up the knife and slashed many times, each time going deeper than the previous. After his tenth cut he stepped back to look at his handiwork. The bigheaded boy was practically going into fits; he seemed to know he was next. The, thing, in front of him, however, wasn't dead. He was just really pissed. It's not like he scared Johnny, but that was his reaction, he was shouting in a language Johnny had never heard before. Johnny stared at the shouting being, and the blue blood dripping from his body.
"GIR, I'll deactivate you next chance I swear, this is the last straw. Fuck, I'm quoting these pathetic earth beasts!" Johnny heard. That was when he decided to leave, he was just too confused, and he wasn't in the mood to consider this GIR thing.
*End Flashback*
Johnny sat back and began thinking about what he currently had in the basement. His mind then flashed to the girl, Gaz, he had met at the 24/7 yesterday, he wasn't sure why. He headed back to the basement, he'd go torture the bigheaded one for a while, that should clear up his mind.
Gaz was now sure, following the merry machine was the worst thing she'd ever done. They'd been walking in circles for hours now. She was getting REALLY pissed off. More violent thoughts entered her mind.
"GIR, I swear to god it you don't take me to Dib NOW I'll destroy you- you worthless piece of-"
"We're here nice Gaz girl!" GIR announced cutting in. Gaz's eyes opened as she looked at the shack in front of her. Why were they here? Who was 'thin creepy man'? She shuddered at quoting GIR, even mentally. She sighed.
"After you." She said calmly following the android into the poor excuse for a house.
Review, no more constructive criticism, that's all I can take with out going on a murder rampage.