I don't usually like humor fics, but here's one that shows what I don't
like about fanfiction. I'll give examples of each so that it's not a list.
Peace ^.^.
Son Vegeta is training in a gravity chamber with chibi trunks. "Hey dad, how is your hair today?" Trunks asks. Son Vegeta feels around on his head and then notices he's as bald as a monkey's ass (ya, that didn't make sense but I umm.. Ah.. Did it on purpose! Yeah, that's it!!) "You insolent impudent audacious unruly brat!" Son Vegeta yells, veins pulsing. Son Vegeta walks out of the chamber and sits down at the breakfast table. The Goku's immediate family and Son Vegeta's immediate family are there. Goku powers up to Super Saiyajin and then all the soup evaporates. "Oops!" He said. "You stupid obtuse dimwitted foolish idiot!" Son Vegeta says. "Well Son Vegeta, who's the idiot now!! You're but naked" says Goku. "We all noticed but I thought you did it on purpose," Bulma says. The families all laugh, all except for Son Vegeta. Then Celll, Friza, and Boo break through to window and Goku, and Vegeta fuse and kill Boo. Then Trunks and Goten fuse and kill Friza. Then Gohan and Bulma fuse and kill Cell. They saved the day yay!
Example one. Terrible!!!
Son Vegeta is training in a gravity chamber with chibi trunks. (A lot of people see Goku's last name, Son, and are puzzled at why it's before his first name. They usually figure that it's some kind of weird Japanese thingie like dono, san, sama, etc. So they put Son before every guy they think is cool.) "Hey, dad how is your hair today?" Trunks asks. Son Vegeta feels around on his head and then notices he's bald. (Why would Trunks do this? He respects his father.) "You insolent impudent audacious unruly brat!" Son Vegeta yells, veins pulsing. (Vegeta isn't the smartest guy in the world, he doesn't know all those big words.) Son Vegeta walks out of the chamber and sits down at the breakfast table. Goku's immediate family and Son Vegeta's immediate family are there. Goku powers up to Super Saiyajin and then all the soup evaporates. (Goku can usually control his power. Just because he is stupid doesn't mean he's clumsy.) "Oops!" He said. "You stupid obtuse dimwitted foolish idiot!" Son Vegeta says. (big words again) "Well Son Vegeta, who's the idiot now!! You're butt naked" says Goku. (Extremely out of character, goku wouldn't ever make fun of anybody except for a bad guy) "We all noticed but I thought you did it on purpose," Bulma says. The families all laugh, all except for Son Vegeta. Then Celll, Friza, and Boo break through to window and Goku, and Vegeta fuse and kill Boo. Then Trunks and Goten fuse and kill Friza. Then Gohan and Bulma fuse and kill Cell. They saved the day yay! (o_O spellings of the name, just wanting to fuse random people for no reason, and where the hell did those three come from!?!?!?)
Signing off, Beautiful Black Roses.
Beautiful Black Roses.
Son Vegeta is training in a gravity chamber with chibi trunks. "Hey dad, how is your hair today?" Trunks asks. Son Vegeta feels around on his head and then notices he's as bald as a monkey's ass (ya, that didn't make sense but I umm.. Ah.. Did it on purpose! Yeah, that's it!!) "You insolent impudent audacious unruly brat!" Son Vegeta yells, veins pulsing. Son Vegeta walks out of the chamber and sits down at the breakfast table. The Goku's immediate family and Son Vegeta's immediate family are there. Goku powers up to Super Saiyajin and then all the soup evaporates. "Oops!" He said. "You stupid obtuse dimwitted foolish idiot!" Son Vegeta says. "Well Son Vegeta, who's the idiot now!! You're but naked" says Goku. "We all noticed but I thought you did it on purpose," Bulma says. The families all laugh, all except for Son Vegeta. Then Celll, Friza, and Boo break through to window and Goku, and Vegeta fuse and kill Boo. Then Trunks and Goten fuse and kill Friza. Then Gohan and Bulma fuse and kill Cell. They saved the day yay!
Example one. Terrible!!!
Son Vegeta is training in a gravity chamber with chibi trunks. (A lot of people see Goku's last name, Son, and are puzzled at why it's before his first name. They usually figure that it's some kind of weird Japanese thingie like dono, san, sama, etc. So they put Son before every guy they think is cool.) "Hey, dad how is your hair today?" Trunks asks. Son Vegeta feels around on his head and then notices he's bald. (Why would Trunks do this? He respects his father.) "You insolent impudent audacious unruly brat!" Son Vegeta yells, veins pulsing. (Vegeta isn't the smartest guy in the world, he doesn't know all those big words.) Son Vegeta walks out of the chamber and sits down at the breakfast table. Goku's immediate family and Son Vegeta's immediate family are there. Goku powers up to Super Saiyajin and then all the soup evaporates. (Goku can usually control his power. Just because he is stupid doesn't mean he's clumsy.) "Oops!" He said. "You stupid obtuse dimwitted foolish idiot!" Son Vegeta says. (big words again) "Well Son Vegeta, who's the idiot now!! You're butt naked" says Goku. (Extremely out of character, goku wouldn't ever make fun of anybody except for a bad guy) "We all noticed but I thought you did it on purpose," Bulma says. The families all laugh, all except for Son Vegeta. Then Celll, Friza, and Boo break through to window and Goku, and Vegeta fuse and kill Boo. Then Trunks and Goten fuse and kill Friza. Then Gohan and Bulma fuse and kill Cell. They saved the day yay! (o_O spellings of the name, just wanting to fuse random people for no reason, and where the hell did those three come from!?!?!?)
Signing off, Beautiful Black Roses.
Beautiful Black Roses.