Guardian Within
Don't own Neon Genesis Evangelion
" "-Normal speaking Computer messages ' ' In German [ ] Thought or speaking in the mind
#3
Shinji groaned as another message popped up. After he rescued Toji and Kensuke they
spread the word Shinji was the pilot.
[That's it.] Shinji said as he pulled out a disk form his bag and put it in. He typed some
commands into the computer.
"Woah. Triple firewall," Kensuke said to himself. He was checking Shinji's computer
when he couldn't get in. Kensuke rubbed his hands and started to try and break thought when he
got pass the second firewall an image of a skull and crossbones appeared. The Skull's jaw
laughed as a pop up after pop up of useless came up on Kensuke's screen.
[He's good. Three firewalls and a pop up bug,] Kensuke said as he restarted his
computer. When it came to the desktop Kensuke was in for a surprise. All of his customized
programs were gone. A message popped up.
Don't brother trying in my computer A message from Shinji's computer. He used the
name Raikiri.
"Class. Time to PE," the teacher said. Everyone stood up and headed for the change
rooms. Shinji followed the routine. Knowing that about half were watching his every movement.
The other half were out cold when one stopped and started to day dream. The other girls chased
into the daydreamer and caused a big pileup.
"Everyone here," the PE teacher said as he gathered everyone, "You have a choice of
either sport or the weight room. For boys it's basketball and girl it's volleyball," Shinji chose
weighs. Toji did weighs. For some reason Kensuke was no where in sight.
"Hey Shinji. My man. Mind if you can spot me?" Toji asked.
"Whatever," Shinji said as he moved behind the bench press. Toji sat down and lifted the
bar off the stand.
"Hey man. I want to thank ya for the other day," Toji said as he pushed it up.
"It's my job," Shinji said as he followed the bar.
"And for sister. She was in one of the those building when that first angel attack. She
didn't know what to do. She said the robot pushed the angel away," Toji said as he pulled it up.
"My job is to protect humanity," Shinji said as he put the bar on the stand. Toji stood up
and moved behind as Shinji put on 120lbs of weighs on the bar.
"You sure you can lift it?" Toji asked as he eyed the weigh.
"Just spot me," Shinji said as he lifted the bar off the stand and he started to moved it up
and down.
"I hate to pick that fight with you. I bet not a lot of people want to fight you," Toji said.
"I only been in two fights on school grounds. When I was young these much older guys
thought it been fun to pick on a 7 years old. They learned not to judge a book by it's cover. One
from the other day. Not all of the boys who are gone are because they ran away," Shinji said.
"Not of us boys like a new out of nowhere stealing our girls," Toji said.
"I'm not here to steal girls ok. Here's a question about girls. What's with Rei?" Shinji
asked.
"You mean Silent Rei?" Toji asked.
"She wasn't like this when I was young," Shinji said as he lifted the bar.
"You knew Rei when you were a kid? I see why you're not after our girl. You got one in
mind already? So what place do you like more?" Toji asked.
"She's like a sister to me so don't go down the list of female parts," Shinji said.
"No one knows much about her expect she works at Nerv and is often absent," Toji said
as he scratched his head.
[Gendo must have lived her to live without emotions or will of her own I guess] Shinji
thought as he put the bar on the stand. Shinji stood up.
"Where's that other guy? Kenshin, kensik or something like that?" Shinji asked.
"Kensuke?" Toji asked. Suddenly they heard screams. Girl screams. Kensuke bursted
into weigh room than out to the gym. A small group of girls chased after him.
"He's normally better at hiding," Toji said.
"I see why he carries around a camcorder," Shinji said. He headed for the punching bag
and started to pound it.
"Shinji. The test is over," Ritsuko said, "Your sync is 88%,"
"Ok," Shinji said as he open his eyes. Something caught his eye. He focused the Eva's
eyes and to the scene. Rei was talking to Gendo. Shinji breathed out and got out.
At the apartment Shinji laid on the couch with Misato beside him.
"Rei? About 3 weeks ago Eva 00 went berserk. The Entry plug was ejected but it was
burning hot. Gendo opened it with his hands despite the temperature being like 200 degrees,"
Misato said, "Rei was seriously injured in the accident. You see her injuries first hand. Come.
Ritsuko's coming over fo dinner,"
"This is delicious Shinji," Ritsuko said as she ate the dinner.
"Thanks," Shinji said as he washed the dishes.
"Shinji seems a bit out of it," Ritsuko said as she drank the beer.
"Two angels was nothing compare to what's on his mind. He's wondering about Rei. He
said he used to live with her," Misato said before she slipped her drink.
"Shinji!" Ritsuko yelled. Shinji came out of the kitchen. He threw the washcloth over his
shoulder.
"What is it?" Shinji asked.
"I have a favor to ask of you. I got this renewed ID for Rei. I forgot to give to her during
the sync tests. Could you deliver it?" Ritsuko asked as she handed him a card. She told him Rei's
address. Shinji pulled on his blades and headed off.
"What a wreck," Shinji said as he arrived at the location. It was a run down apartment.
He headed for the elevator. They were both out of order. He headed for the stairs and find one of
the pipes busted and leaking water.
"Great. Either I go up in my bladers or get my socks soaked," Shinji said to no one.
11/2 hours later
Shinji lunged out of the stair out of breath. A few bumps and bruises from the numerous
falls due to the wheels on the blades. He stood up and leaned against the wall catching his
breath.
"I'm going to complain to the landlord after this," Shinji said as he moved down the
doors until he found the right one. He looked down to find the mail slot stuffed He couched
down and pulled them out. He knocked on the door. No one answered. Shinji tried again and
again no one. He tried the door knob. The door opened. Shinji popped his head inside. It was
dark and with all of the curtains closed. It was dim. Shinji moved in and looked around.
"How can someone live here?" Shinji asked as he put the mail on a stand here by.
"Rei!?" Shinji yelled.
"Yes Ikari-kun?" Rei asked. Shinji turned around than turned away again. Rei stood here
without anything on.
"Could you put something on?" Shinji asked as his face reddened. He could hear some
noise as Rei put some a pair of panties and a bra. Shinji turned around.
"May I inquire why is your presence is here?" Rei asked.
"I was ask to deliver your new Id card," Shinji said as he pulled it out his pants and
handed it over to Rei. Rei took it.
"Thank you," Rei said still monotone.
"You could clean up this place you know," Shinji said as he looked around. He been
living with Misato so Rei in a bar and panties didn't affect him.
"I feel that I can trust you," Rei said. Shinji looked over to Rei. A undercoat of red filled
his blue eyes.
[Same soul but different body] Shinji thought. When Rei was little she got a scar on her
neck. This Rei didn't have the scar or a any sign of it.
"I have to head home. I'll come by and help clean up this place," Shinji said as he headed
out.
"Who is that?" Misato asked as she yawn. Shinji was gone. He left a note and breakfast.
The bell ring again. Misato yawn and then opened the door. Toji and Kensuke's eyes bulged out
when they saw Misato's short clothes.
"What is it boys?" Misato asked.
"Shinji...is...he.....here?" Toji shuttered as he drooled.
"Come on boys," Misato said as she walked out and lead them up to the roof. Misato
opened the door as half of a tennis ball came at them. Shinji grabbed another tennis ball and
bounced it off the fence post. In Shinji's other hand was a sword. As the ball passed he struck.
The two halves of the ball flew two different directions.
"Hey guys," Shinji said as he put the sword on his shoulder.
"Why didn't you tell me you live with a babe!" Toji yelled as he walked out.
"Yeah," Kensuke said . Misato was gone.
"So what you two doing here?" Shinji asked.
"Thought we could walk with you to school," Toji said. Shinji turned to his left. The
building was one of the tallest building in the city. Suddenly Misato bursted into the rooftop.
"Shinji! Work time!" Misato yelled, "You two. Get to a shelter now!" Shinji looked over
to Misato and pointed to the blue object.
Shinji moved up as the Eva 01 rocketed to the surface.
"We don't know anything about this angel so be on the defense," Misato said.
"K," Shinji said as the hatch opened and 01 came up.
"Energy build up! It has an energy cannon!" Ritsuko yelled.
"The final lock hasn't been release!" Maya yelled.
"Shit!" Shinji yelled as 01 broke the locks and covered it's head as a beam of white came
at him.
Shinji shot up in bed. Holding his face in his head. His breaths were shallow and quick.
He gained control of himself and fell backwards back to the bed. He looked over to see Rei.
"I have been order to inform you of the operation," Rei said as she started to lay out the
plan to use a cannon to destroy the angel. Rei would be on guard while Shinji would be the
sniper.
"Three more seconds and than the armor would met and they've to find a new pilot,"
Ritsuko said, " The shield is a layer upon layer of steel and titanium. The rate of success is
8.7%,"
"Just as I guessed. Odds against us," Shinji said, "Anything else?"
"The angel has deployed some sort of drill that going through the ground for Geofront,"
Ritsuko said, "So it's only a matter of time before the angel reach Geofront. That all for the
briefing,"
Shinji hit the switch for his suit. The air moved out as the suit fit him exactly.
"Hey Rei," Shinji said, "I have a question for you. Why do you pilot Eva 00?"
"It's my connection," Rei said.
"To what?" Shinji asked as he closed the locker.
"To everyone. I protect everyone with it," Rei said as she finished changing, "I'll protect
you,"
"When I was young you called me Sempai. I'll promise to protect you. Even if you don't
remember I will protect you," Shinji said as he headed out.
"Begin operation. Shinji only got one shot at this due to the power needed," Misato said,
"Remember. When the two targets are lined up you pull the trigger. You may have a 98%
shooting accuracy in simulation. We need a perfect shot,"
"K," Shinji said as he moved 01 into position. 00 moved in with a shield.
"Blackout complete. Power is transferring," Aoba said.
"Ma'am. The angel spotted them! It's charging up!" Maya yelled.
"Power transfer complete!" Aoba yelled.
"Shinji. Hurry up!" Misato yelled.
"Move it!" Shinji screamed at the two images as they moved to the center. The angel
fired first. The blast came at him. 00 moved in place with the shield. The blast hit the shield full
force melting the shield fun.
"Now!" Shinji yelled as he pulled the trigger. The cannon fired a powerful cannon. The
cannon shot it the AT field. The angel's cannon ripped through the shield.
"No!" Shinji screamed as he closed his eyes and focused. An AT field appeared in front
of 00 and pushed the cannon back but 00 was in worse shape. The energy cannon pierced the AT
field and blasted through the field and struck the diamond angel. 01 rushed to it's feet. It
grabbed 00 and pulled the back plate off. The plug came out. 01 grabbed it and laid it on the
ground. 01 couched down and the plug came out.
"Rei!" Shinji yelled as he got out and ran to the 00 plug. He pulled on the lock ignoring
the pain as his hands were burned. He pulled the hatch up and looked inside.
"Rei! You are ok?" Shinji asked. Rei sat in her chair in a bit of pain.
"I do not know what to do now," Rei said.
"Try smiling," Shinji said as he tried to catch his breath. Rei thought for a second and
smiled. Shinji laughed a bit before he collapsed backwards to the ground.
Author's note
Third chapter done. By the way I'm looking for pre-readers. I got next to no friends and
all of them are on vacation. Next chapter will bring in the fire queen herself. See what happens
when Asuka and Shinji meet face to face again
Reply to Reviews:
Keyblade-00 EXCELLENT STORY!! THIS STORY IS VERY ENJOYABLE TO READ. PAIR
REI WITH KAWORU, AND GIVE SOME OTHER GIRL TO KENSUKE. I'M REALLY GLAD
THIS GOING TO A SHINJI/AUSKA ROMANCE TOO, I'M A REAL HUGE FAN OF S/A
ROMANCE STORYS. I REALLY HOPE TO SEE SOME ROMANCE IN NEXT CHAPTER
AND FUTURE CHAPTERS. I REALLY HOPE WE DON'T HAVE TO WAIT LONG FOR
SHINJI AND AUSKA TO GET TOGETHER, OR IS IT THAT THEY ARE ALREADY
TOGETHER IN LONG DISTANCE RELATIONSHIP. YOUR DOING A REAL
OUTSTANDING JOB SO FAR PLEASE KEEP UP THE AWESOME WORK. I HOPE YOU
UPDATE REALLY SOON.
BA-Do you have the Caps lock struck or something? Just joking anyways. Asuka wasn't in this
chapter but she's in the next one but don't expect too much romance yet
Shinji's Fan-not bad just hope u really will finish it u know
BA: I aim to please
D14852001-Oh!
Intersting story!
And your format is one of the best (Well at least for me!)
And its pretty bad its not a Shinji/Rei... But I'll tolerate it! I simply prefer Shinji/Rei to
Shinji/Asuka, but from the 1st chapter I knew it was a Shinji/Asuka...
Good!
BA: Thanks for the input.
Knight's Shadow- Really good plot. Thanks for answering the updates question. Why can Shinji
hear the Angel's spirits?
BA: It was an idea from an song called Everything by Vertical Horizon 'Echoes of angels that
wouldn't return'. I was found it neat and put it
Alexei Seranov-fr the love of God, get a prereader. I can barely stand to read this far. If your first
language isn't English, I understand. But still, get a prereader.
The theme's been done to death. Even I've done something similar. However, it's amazingly OOC
on Shinji's part. He'd never just beat people up, especially not if he could with ease.
That, and there's no explanation as to why this so called "Gaurdian" is helping Shinji... or why it
feels the need to leave broken bodies in it's wake. Try and come up with a reasonable
explanation for these things. Then try rewriting, with a prereader to look it over. I see a little
potential for you, don't waste it.
one more time is all I need,
Alexei Nikolaivich Seranov
BA: Sorry if you don't understand and I'm trying to get a pre-reader ok? About the Guardian.
Two reason one is if you were sharing a body with a kid what would you do? Protect him for the
plain reason he dies you die with him. The leaving bodies are example to leave him alone. Or
simply leaves the message mess with me and end up like them.
sakura_star-63-hey, it is cool again.. pls continue
BA: I'm continuing and next time don't post a review twice
China-boy-want more chapters...now
BA: It may take longer with a pre-reader if I get one
Adyen-This is a nice story. Only thing is, you need a prereader (or a better one, if you already
have one). Sometimes, it's not the problem of spelling, but rather typos that spell a different
word than you want.
BA: Looking for one and sorry about the typos. I'm trying to correct that stuff
Don't own Neon Genesis Evangelion
" "-Normal speaking Computer messages ' ' In German [ ] Thought or speaking in the mind
#3
Shinji groaned as another message popped up. After he rescued Toji and Kensuke they
spread the word Shinji was the pilot.
[That's it.] Shinji said as he pulled out a disk form his bag and put it in. He typed some
commands into the computer.
"Woah. Triple firewall," Kensuke said to himself. He was checking Shinji's computer
when he couldn't get in. Kensuke rubbed his hands and started to try and break thought when he
got pass the second firewall an image of a skull and crossbones appeared. The Skull's jaw
laughed as a pop up after pop up of useless came up on Kensuke's screen.
[He's good. Three firewalls and a pop up bug,] Kensuke said as he restarted his
computer. When it came to the desktop Kensuke was in for a surprise. All of his customized
programs were gone. A message popped up.
Don't brother trying in my computer A message from Shinji's computer. He used the
name Raikiri.
"Class. Time to PE," the teacher said. Everyone stood up and headed for the change
rooms. Shinji followed the routine. Knowing that about half were watching his every movement.
The other half were out cold when one stopped and started to day dream. The other girls chased
into the daydreamer and caused a big pileup.
"Everyone here," the PE teacher said as he gathered everyone, "You have a choice of
either sport or the weight room. For boys it's basketball and girl it's volleyball," Shinji chose
weighs. Toji did weighs. For some reason Kensuke was no where in sight.
"Hey Shinji. My man. Mind if you can spot me?" Toji asked.
"Whatever," Shinji said as he moved behind the bench press. Toji sat down and lifted the
bar off the stand.
"Hey man. I want to thank ya for the other day," Toji said as he pushed it up.
"It's my job," Shinji said as he followed the bar.
"And for sister. She was in one of the those building when that first angel attack. She
didn't know what to do. She said the robot pushed the angel away," Toji said as he pulled it up.
"My job is to protect humanity," Shinji said as he put the bar on the stand. Toji stood up
and moved behind as Shinji put on 120lbs of weighs on the bar.
"You sure you can lift it?" Toji asked as he eyed the weigh.
"Just spot me," Shinji said as he lifted the bar off the stand and he started to moved it up
and down.
"I hate to pick that fight with you. I bet not a lot of people want to fight you," Toji said.
"I only been in two fights on school grounds. When I was young these much older guys
thought it been fun to pick on a 7 years old. They learned not to judge a book by it's cover. One
from the other day. Not all of the boys who are gone are because they ran away," Shinji said.
"Not of us boys like a new out of nowhere stealing our girls," Toji said.
"I'm not here to steal girls ok. Here's a question about girls. What's with Rei?" Shinji
asked.
"You mean Silent Rei?" Toji asked.
"She wasn't like this when I was young," Shinji said as he lifted the bar.
"You knew Rei when you were a kid? I see why you're not after our girl. You got one in
mind already? So what place do you like more?" Toji asked.
"She's like a sister to me so don't go down the list of female parts," Shinji said.
"No one knows much about her expect she works at Nerv and is often absent," Toji said
as he scratched his head.
[Gendo must have lived her to live without emotions or will of her own I guess] Shinji
thought as he put the bar on the stand. Shinji stood up.
"Where's that other guy? Kenshin, kensik or something like that?" Shinji asked.
"Kensuke?" Toji asked. Suddenly they heard screams. Girl screams. Kensuke bursted
into weigh room than out to the gym. A small group of girls chased after him.
"He's normally better at hiding," Toji said.
"I see why he carries around a camcorder," Shinji said. He headed for the punching bag
and started to pound it.
"Shinji. The test is over," Ritsuko said, "Your sync is 88%,"
"Ok," Shinji said as he open his eyes. Something caught his eye. He focused the Eva's
eyes and to the scene. Rei was talking to Gendo. Shinji breathed out and got out.
At the apartment Shinji laid on the couch with Misato beside him.
"Rei? About 3 weeks ago Eva 00 went berserk. The Entry plug was ejected but it was
burning hot. Gendo opened it with his hands despite the temperature being like 200 degrees,"
Misato said, "Rei was seriously injured in the accident. You see her injuries first hand. Come.
Ritsuko's coming over fo dinner,"
"This is delicious Shinji," Ritsuko said as she ate the dinner.
"Thanks," Shinji said as he washed the dishes.
"Shinji seems a bit out of it," Ritsuko said as she drank the beer.
"Two angels was nothing compare to what's on his mind. He's wondering about Rei. He
said he used to live with her," Misato said before she slipped her drink.
"Shinji!" Ritsuko yelled. Shinji came out of the kitchen. He threw the washcloth over his
shoulder.
"What is it?" Shinji asked.
"I have a favor to ask of you. I got this renewed ID for Rei. I forgot to give to her during
the sync tests. Could you deliver it?" Ritsuko asked as she handed him a card. She told him Rei's
address. Shinji pulled on his blades and headed off.
"What a wreck," Shinji said as he arrived at the location. It was a run down apartment.
He headed for the elevator. They were both out of order. He headed for the stairs and find one of
the pipes busted and leaking water.
"Great. Either I go up in my bladers or get my socks soaked," Shinji said to no one.
11/2 hours later
Shinji lunged out of the stair out of breath. A few bumps and bruises from the numerous
falls due to the wheels on the blades. He stood up and leaned against the wall catching his
breath.
"I'm going to complain to the landlord after this," Shinji said as he moved down the
doors until he found the right one. He looked down to find the mail slot stuffed He couched
down and pulled them out. He knocked on the door. No one answered. Shinji tried again and
again no one. He tried the door knob. The door opened. Shinji popped his head inside. It was
dark and with all of the curtains closed. It was dim. Shinji moved in and looked around.
"How can someone live here?" Shinji asked as he put the mail on a stand here by.
"Rei!?" Shinji yelled.
"Yes Ikari-kun?" Rei asked. Shinji turned around than turned away again. Rei stood here
without anything on.
"Could you put something on?" Shinji asked as his face reddened. He could hear some
noise as Rei put some a pair of panties and a bra. Shinji turned around.
"May I inquire why is your presence is here?" Rei asked.
"I was ask to deliver your new Id card," Shinji said as he pulled it out his pants and
handed it over to Rei. Rei took it.
"Thank you," Rei said still monotone.
"You could clean up this place you know," Shinji said as he looked around. He been
living with Misato so Rei in a bar and panties didn't affect him.
"I feel that I can trust you," Rei said. Shinji looked over to Rei. A undercoat of red filled
his blue eyes.
[Same soul but different body] Shinji thought. When Rei was little she got a scar on her
neck. This Rei didn't have the scar or a any sign of it.
"I have to head home. I'll come by and help clean up this place," Shinji said as he headed
out.
"Who is that?" Misato asked as she yawn. Shinji was gone. He left a note and breakfast.
The bell ring again. Misato yawn and then opened the door. Toji and Kensuke's eyes bulged out
when they saw Misato's short clothes.
"What is it boys?" Misato asked.
"Shinji...is...he.....here?" Toji shuttered as he drooled.
"Come on boys," Misato said as she walked out and lead them up to the roof. Misato
opened the door as half of a tennis ball came at them. Shinji grabbed another tennis ball and
bounced it off the fence post. In Shinji's other hand was a sword. As the ball passed he struck.
The two halves of the ball flew two different directions.
"Hey guys," Shinji said as he put the sword on his shoulder.
"Why didn't you tell me you live with a babe!" Toji yelled as he walked out.
"Yeah," Kensuke said . Misato was gone.
"So what you two doing here?" Shinji asked.
"Thought we could walk with you to school," Toji said. Shinji turned to his left. The
building was one of the tallest building in the city. Suddenly Misato bursted into the rooftop.
"Shinji! Work time!" Misato yelled, "You two. Get to a shelter now!" Shinji looked over
to Misato and pointed to the blue object.
Shinji moved up as the Eva 01 rocketed to the surface.
"We don't know anything about this angel so be on the defense," Misato said.
"K," Shinji said as the hatch opened and 01 came up.
"Energy build up! It has an energy cannon!" Ritsuko yelled.
"The final lock hasn't been release!" Maya yelled.
"Shit!" Shinji yelled as 01 broke the locks and covered it's head as a beam of white came
at him.
Shinji shot up in bed. Holding his face in his head. His breaths were shallow and quick.
He gained control of himself and fell backwards back to the bed. He looked over to see Rei.
"I have been order to inform you of the operation," Rei said as she started to lay out the
plan to use a cannon to destroy the angel. Rei would be on guard while Shinji would be the
sniper.
"Three more seconds and than the armor would met and they've to find a new pilot,"
Ritsuko said, " The shield is a layer upon layer of steel and titanium. The rate of success is
8.7%,"
"Just as I guessed. Odds against us," Shinji said, "Anything else?"
"The angel has deployed some sort of drill that going through the ground for Geofront,"
Ritsuko said, "So it's only a matter of time before the angel reach Geofront. That all for the
briefing,"
Shinji hit the switch for his suit. The air moved out as the suit fit him exactly.
"Hey Rei," Shinji said, "I have a question for you. Why do you pilot Eva 00?"
"It's my connection," Rei said.
"To what?" Shinji asked as he closed the locker.
"To everyone. I protect everyone with it," Rei said as she finished changing, "I'll protect
you,"
"When I was young you called me Sempai. I'll promise to protect you. Even if you don't
remember I will protect you," Shinji said as he headed out.
"Begin operation. Shinji only got one shot at this due to the power needed," Misato said,
"Remember. When the two targets are lined up you pull the trigger. You may have a 98%
shooting accuracy in simulation. We need a perfect shot,"
"K," Shinji said as he moved 01 into position. 00 moved in with a shield.
"Blackout complete. Power is transferring," Aoba said.
"Ma'am. The angel spotted them! It's charging up!" Maya yelled.
"Power transfer complete!" Aoba yelled.
"Shinji. Hurry up!" Misato yelled.
"Move it!" Shinji screamed at the two images as they moved to the center. The angel
fired first. The blast came at him. 00 moved in place with the shield. The blast hit the shield full
force melting the shield fun.
"Now!" Shinji yelled as he pulled the trigger. The cannon fired a powerful cannon. The
cannon shot it the AT field. The angel's cannon ripped through the shield.
"No!" Shinji screamed as he closed his eyes and focused. An AT field appeared in front
of 00 and pushed the cannon back but 00 was in worse shape. The energy cannon pierced the AT
field and blasted through the field and struck the diamond angel. 01 rushed to it's feet. It
grabbed 00 and pulled the back plate off. The plug came out. 01 grabbed it and laid it on the
ground. 01 couched down and the plug came out.
"Rei!" Shinji yelled as he got out and ran to the 00 plug. He pulled on the lock ignoring
the pain as his hands were burned. He pulled the hatch up and looked inside.
"Rei! You are ok?" Shinji asked. Rei sat in her chair in a bit of pain.
"I do not know what to do now," Rei said.
"Try smiling," Shinji said as he tried to catch his breath. Rei thought for a second and
smiled. Shinji laughed a bit before he collapsed backwards to the ground.
Author's note
Third chapter done. By the way I'm looking for pre-readers. I got next to no friends and
all of them are on vacation. Next chapter will bring in the fire queen herself. See what happens
when Asuka and Shinji meet face to face again
Reply to Reviews:
Keyblade-00 EXCELLENT STORY!! THIS STORY IS VERY ENJOYABLE TO READ. PAIR
REI WITH KAWORU, AND GIVE SOME OTHER GIRL TO KENSUKE. I'M REALLY GLAD
THIS GOING TO A SHINJI/AUSKA ROMANCE TOO, I'M A REAL HUGE FAN OF S/A
ROMANCE STORYS. I REALLY HOPE TO SEE SOME ROMANCE IN NEXT CHAPTER
AND FUTURE CHAPTERS. I REALLY HOPE WE DON'T HAVE TO WAIT LONG FOR
SHINJI AND AUSKA TO GET TOGETHER, OR IS IT THAT THEY ARE ALREADY
TOGETHER IN LONG DISTANCE RELATIONSHIP. YOUR DOING A REAL
OUTSTANDING JOB SO FAR PLEASE KEEP UP THE AWESOME WORK. I HOPE YOU
UPDATE REALLY SOON.
BA-Do you have the Caps lock struck or something? Just joking anyways. Asuka wasn't in this
chapter but she's in the next one but don't expect too much romance yet
Shinji's Fan-not bad just hope u really will finish it u know
BA: I aim to please
D14852001-Oh!
Intersting story!
And your format is one of the best (Well at least for me!)
And its pretty bad its not a Shinji/Rei... But I'll tolerate it! I simply prefer Shinji/Rei to
Shinji/Asuka, but from the 1st chapter I knew it was a Shinji/Asuka...
Good!
BA: Thanks for the input.
Knight's Shadow- Really good plot. Thanks for answering the updates question. Why can Shinji
hear the Angel's spirits?
BA: It was an idea from an song called Everything by Vertical Horizon 'Echoes of angels that
wouldn't return'. I was found it neat and put it
Alexei Seranov-fr the love of God, get a prereader. I can barely stand to read this far. If your first
language isn't English, I understand. But still, get a prereader.
The theme's been done to death. Even I've done something similar. However, it's amazingly OOC
on Shinji's part. He'd never just beat people up, especially not if he could with ease.
That, and there's no explanation as to why this so called "Gaurdian" is helping Shinji... or why it
feels the need to leave broken bodies in it's wake. Try and come up with a reasonable
explanation for these things. Then try rewriting, with a prereader to look it over. I see a little
potential for you, don't waste it.
one more time is all I need,
Alexei Nikolaivich Seranov
BA: Sorry if you don't understand and I'm trying to get a pre-reader ok? About the Guardian.
Two reason one is if you were sharing a body with a kid what would you do? Protect him for the
plain reason he dies you die with him. The leaving bodies are example to leave him alone. Or
simply leaves the message mess with me and end up like them.
sakura_star-63-hey, it is cool again.. pls continue
BA: I'm continuing and next time don't post a review twice
China-boy-want more chapters...now
BA: It may take longer with a pre-reader if I get one
Adyen-This is a nice story. Only thing is, you need a prereader (or a better one, if you already
have one). Sometimes, it's not the problem of spelling, but rather typos that spell a different
word than you want.
BA: Looking for one and sorry about the typos. I'm trying to correct that stuff