Guardian Within
I don't own Neon Genesis Evangelion.
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""-Normal speaking
-Computer messages
' ' -In German
[ ] -Thought or speaking in the mind
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Chapter 4
"...Shinji?"
Misato asked as she popped into Shinji's room. It's been awhile since the battle against the
fifth angel. His hands were still recovering from the burns he received.
Life had been normal. Touji and Kensuke came in the morning saying they'll walk with Shinji
to school while trying to get a look at Misato. Just like any morning.
"...Shinji? Come on sleepyhead." Misato said as she shook him by the shoulder. She was on
her uniform.
"What is it? I'm tried." Shinji said as he rolled around, trying to get away from Misato.
"I know you been talking a lot with Rei, but I know the real reason why you're sleepy and why
you come home late."
"It's nothing like that!" Shinji yelled as he shot up from bed.
"I'm just teasing you." Misato said "Come on. We're supposed to meet the Second Child in
"Over the Rainbow", Touji and Kensuke are already waiting for you"
"...ok" Shinji said as he got of the futon "You mind?"
"No, I don't" Misato said still standing in his room. Shinji growled as his face changed into
anger. Misato remembered that face, she slowly backed away from the now "angry" Shinji. He
let out a growl and Misato ran out.
She was scared to hell. When she sat in the couch, she heard laugh from Shinji's room. Shinji
opened the door, dressed in his casual while carrying a bag on his shoulder, filled with
miscellaneous items.
"You had seen your face. It was priceless!" Shinji said as he laughed.
"I'll getcha.... Come on, let's go," Misato said as she stand up and headed to the door.
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On the helicopter, Shinji was asleep, Touji was drooling over Misato, who was looking out
the window, and Kensuke... pressed against the window catching everything he could with his
camcorder rambling to no one about the ship who was waiting for them
The helicopter landed with a bump. Misato opened the door and the small group left the
sleeping Shinji on the helicopter. Touji's cap, which he got only to try and impress Misato, took
off.
Kensuke went around pointing his camcorder in everyway. The crew waved their hand as the
camera pointed in their general direction. Touji was still chasing his cap. Misato moved around
looking for a specific person. The three ended up at the same place. Someone stepped on Touji's
cap...
"It's good to see you again." Asuka said as Touji tried to pull his cap away from the redheaded
girl foot.
"Hey! Asuka, beautiful as ever." Misato said.
"And don't you forget it." Asuka said as she put her hands on her hips but the wind wanted to
show more. Asuka's skirt flew up. Kensuke and Touji's eyes widen, jaws dropped... then, they
saw the ground. Their cheeks now had a bright red mark.
"What the hell was that for!?" Touji yelled.
"Viewing fee. Quite a bargain, don't you think?" Asuka said.
"It was overpriced, but here's you change!" Touji yelled as he pulled down his pant and
boxers. Asuka freaked out and delivered a swift but deadly kick to his groin. Touji was KO.
"So where's the Third Child?" Asuka asked, not paying attention to the now limp Touji.
"Isn't any of them." Misato said, looking around for Shinji, but showing some pity for the
injured "boy".
"I know that. These bakas can even move one finger on an Eva... So where's Shinji, I want to
make good my old promise."
"How do you know Shinji?" Misato asked, not expecting her to know him. Just on queue, he
entered into the scene.
"Hey! Misato. Why didn't you wake me up?" Shinji asked. He let out a yawn and stretched a
bit, but when he looked down...
"On the second thought. Thanks for not waking me up." Shinji said as he kicked Touji on the
ribs. He only growled and mumbled something about not feeling something.
'Hey Asuka. Long time no see.' Shinji said in German as he held out his right hand. His bag on
his left shoulder
'Yeah,' Asuka said as she shook his hand. Her eyes flashed with mischievously. Asuka then
pulled Shinji and tried to punch him. Shinji ducked and dropped his bag. He grabbed the coming
punch and flipped over her. He held both of her arms across her neck.
'Do you give up?' Shinji asked.
'No way,' Asuka said as she tried to kick him. Shinji jumped back and got into a ready stance.
'So you do know martial arts,' Asuka said as she got into her own fighting style.
'Karate and weapons training,' Shinji said as he cracked his neck. Asuka charged and
attacked. Shinji blocked all the attacks with his arms.
"It's just me or Shinji's on the defense." Kensuke said, his cheek recovering a bit.
"What do mean by that?" Misato asked.
"You didn't hear? Shinji got in a fight a while back and beat the hell out of a bunch of guys."
Kensuke said while Shinji moved into offensive. He attacked with same fierceness as Asuka, but
Misato clearly saw that Shinji wasn't fighting seriously. Shinji missed a jumping kick and hit the
ground leaving a small dent on the steel plating.
"You two, enough!" Misato yelled as she got between the two.
"Why?" Asuka whined.
"Mind telling me why you two are fighting?" Misato asked.
"Long story," Shinji said.
"Hey Shinji! I'll make good on that promise later." Asuka said as she walked off.
"I have time..." Misato said, now looking somewhat annoyed.
"What? I used to live with her around a year. However, she spent most of her time fighting
with me. She has yet to punch or kick me." Shinji said as he put his hands on the back of his
neck and followed Asuka, on the midway, grabbing his bag.
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"I can't believe that the UN fleet has been reduced to carrying toys," The Admiral muttered to
his second-in-command just as Misato and the others came on bridge
.
"Who you may be?" the admiral asked as he turned to face her.
"Captain Misato Katsuragi from NERV. Now if you sign these papers, we can take custody of
the Eva unit and pilot." Misato said as she held out some papers.
"No. The orders I received are to escort the Evangelion and its pilot all the way to Japan. As
you can see we're not in Japan therefore I will not sign the papers yet."
"Ok then, but in any situation may occur. My authority exceeds yours." Misato said.
"Alright Captain" The Admiral said.
"Come on guys. I'm hungry," Misato said as she turned and left the bridge headed to the mess
hall. They started to talk and joke about stuff since they didn't have pretty much else to do.
"I was wondering something, Shinji. What language you spoke to that... devil?" Touji asked
as he stuffed what they called food on this...
"German," Shinji said as he ate some fired rice that he had made yesterday, from a plastic
container he had in his bag.
"How do you know German?" Kensuke asked.
"When I was 5, I lived with a teacher. I found of his books about how to speak German."
Shinji said.
"From a book? You learned German from a book?" Misato asked.
"Keep in mind Misato that I'm a genius," Shinji said as he ate.
"What do you mean by 'genius'?" Asuka asked "Compared to me you're just adobe average."
"Yeah, yeah. You graduated from Berlin University. I'm a graduate from Tokyo 2 Uni. I would
be upgrading my degree but work calls." Shinji said.
"You should be happy. You get to save the world," Asuka said.
"Yeah, Yeah...." Shinji said as he waved her off.
"Guess who?" A voice asked as two hands covered Misato's eyes.
"What the...?"
"What the hell are you doing here!?" Misato yelled as she scrambled away from Kaji.
'Hey there Kaji.' Shinji said as he waved.
'Hey Shinji, what you doing here?' Kaji asked. Touji and Kensuke just looked from one to
another wondering what was said.
'Third Child,' Shinji said as he laid back.
'Guess you and Asuka are going to be fighting a lot more.' Kaji said.
"Hell yeah." Shinji said back to Japanese.
"Seems to me that Shinji knows some martial arts." Asuka said.
"Which arts?" Kaji asked.
"Karate. What about you Asuka?"
"Tae Known Do." Asuka said.
"Seems like different compared to other Tae Known Do artists," Shinji said.
"I know, I used some Kung Fu and Ju-Jitsu." Asuka clarified.
"Could you two please stop with martial art talking?" Touji asked. He had no idea what
martial art was.
"Whatever dummkopf. Come Shinji, I'll show you the true Eva." Asuka said as she
grabbed Shinji and dragged him out barely letting him to grab his bag before leaving.
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"This is the first true Eva! 00 was the Prototype model and 01 was the Test model."
Asuka said as she stood on top of her red Eva.
"Red. Just as I thought, it would be. But four eyes? Hey Asuka! You need glasses or
something?" Shinji joked.
"You baka! It has two types of visions. Normal and thermal." Asuka said.
"I read the specs. Shoulder spikes cannon location right under the Prog. Knife but when
compared to my Eva, this one is physically weaker and slower due to the several weapons."
Shinji said.
"There's no where my Eva is inferior to yours" Asuka said. Shinji's head turned to the
side as a shockwave hit the ship.
"Angel." Shinji said.
"My big chance." Asuka whisper to herself.
"You're coming with me!" She jumped down and dragged Shinji out.
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Shinji pressed the switch on his plugsuit. It was in his bag since he was the back up pilot in
case of some event. Downstairs, Asuka was putting on her suit.
"Would you hurry up?" Shinji asked.
"Shut up you baka!" Asuka said as she came up in her red plugsuit.
"Tell me again, why do I have to come along with you?" Shinji asked.
"I'm going to show how a real Child pilots." Asuka said as she grabbed Shinji and dragged
him away.
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"Just where the hell they?" Misato asked as she came into bridge.
"I think they're over there." Kensuke said beside her, pointing to the Eva 02 as it rose up like
an old wandering warrior.
"Get the umbilical cable ready. I'm taking command." Misato ordered, smiling that the
Children were already set for battle.
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"I'm going to lose my lunch." Shinji said as Asuka willed 02 to jump from boat to boat.
"Stop complaining." Asuka said as she landed on the main ship and attached the umbilical
cable.
"So Shinji, where is it?" Asuka asked.
"You are asking me? You're supposed to be the teacher here." Shinji said.
"Tell me. You know where anything is." Asuka said.
"Duck." Shinji said.
"What?" Asuka asked.
"Just duck!" Shinji yelled.
Asuka panicked and ducked as the angel came over it. It was aiming for the head. Shinji pushed
Asuka aside and pushed one of the buttons. The shoulders opened and fired spikes into the
angel's belly.
"Don't touch anything!" Asuka yelled as she pushed him back.
"Missed the S2 organ." Shinji said as he moved to the back.
"Where is the S2 organ?" Asuka asked curious.
"Inside its mouth." Shinji said, "Are there any other weapons here?"
"The only weapons here are the cannons on the destroyers." Asuka said.
"Jump!" Shinji yelled. Asuka jumped to a destroyer.
"It's aiming for the head, so use it to your advantage." Shinji said, "Move in front of a
cannon. Duck. BOOM! Bye bye Angel."
"Shut up," Asuka said. She then growled knowing the plan would work, "Misato. Tell
the destroyer we're on, to prepare the cannons."
"Ok." Misato said as she tried to contact the destroyer just as a jet launched took of the
carrier.
"Who the...? No time for that." And returned to her previous work
"Where is it?" Asuka asked.
"Swimming like a shark." Shinji said as he watched it.
"Ready." Misato said.
"It's coming!" Shinji yelled.
Asuka ducked and the angel got a mouth full of cannon shells. The cannons swung around
and dropped the angel on the deck. It suddenly started to flop around. 02 stepped on it with a
knife in hand. It drove the knife into the S2 organ and the angel
stopped moving.
"Chalk one up to the Great Asuka!" Asuka yelled over the intercom.
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"Next time Asuka. Ask for permission but you go off charging into battle, but under the
previous circumstances, it's understandable. Now where's Shinji?" Misato asked.
"He disappeared when he left the plug," Asuka said as she looked around.
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Somewhere in the carrier, Shinji stood touching a table. His eyes were red.
"He was here, but I missed him. Dammit. If I could have got him, I could have ended this war
right here." Shinji said.
"Dammit!" Shinji grabbed the table and threw it against the wall.
[Hahahahaha! That attack was to protect him. Even if I die, as long as he lives, we can win
this war.] Gaghiel's spirit said.
"We'll see. We'll see." Shinji said as he kicked the table and smashed it to tiny bits.
Author Notes:
This is the first chapter with Asuka. This took a bit longer due two reasons. Ashanti was
in town and needed extras for Rain On Me. Second reason I had D14852001 pre-read for me.
Thanks man!
Reply To Reviews:
keyblade-00-Excellent chapter. Sorry about the caps lock last time. The drama and action were
all writen well. I really hope Rei and Shinji some how go back to thier brother sister
relationship. I'm really glad to hear Auska is going to be in the next chapter. I hope she brings a
little humor into the story. Your doing a great job so far so please keep up the awesome work. I
hope you update really soon.
BA: I'm update as fast I get my story back
Ghost-149548-Well I for one don't care about grammer and spelling, just as long as I know what
your talking about. So far, I find this story joyable, hope to see you update soon,
BA: Wished more people were like you but hey what're going to do. Thanks for the input
China-boy-great job with this chapter
hope u update soon
BA: Here's it is
ZGMF-X10-i can beta read for you
BA: Thanks for the offer. I may take it up when I finish the next chapter
RichardRahl-Hi, great story but could you mind using dividers when you change sceens etc. I'm
not going to pick out mistakes because I know you need a prereader.
BA: Using the *** dividers and thanks for not writing a huge paragraph about my mistakes and
stuff like that
Zidane Lighting Saiz-Interestivg viewpoint of Shinji as the real Eva pilot that he should be. I
hope that Asuka's personality matches with Shinji's. Any thouhgs about bringing Mana
Kirishima? Like the other reviews, a Beta may do the job. Keep the work.
BA: Mana? I heard of her but have no idea really about her personality. I can't get my hands on
the game until then I do Mana's out. Sorry if you wanted her to be in it.
sakura_star-63-um... i am checking the site everyday...
well i am glad to see that it is updated..:-)
BA: Here's the next one
Ezstarius-agree with Seranov. The theme has been done quite extensively and whilst a bit of
OOCness I can tolerate, you have taken it too far. Shinji being assertive is one thing, but being a
master of every form of martial combat and being more than willing to injure or maim others is
a completely different matter. You've comletely inverted Shinji's character and this takes away
from the read for me.
I won't bother harassing you about a prereader, because you've already had enough of that, and
you said you are looking for one. Try using something to seperate the different scenes, it
sometimes gets confusing when I'm reading one part and the next line is a completely different
scene with no warning. I like to use (* * * * *) to mark the end of a scene, I suggest you use
something similar.
I'll be honest with you, I had a lot of difficulty in getting through the chapters, if it wasn't a
Shinji/Asuka fic then I doubt I would have made the effort. It very rushed and vague, and the
grammar and spelling interfere at times, but it's still readable.
I don't want to cut you down or anything, but this fic does need a lot of work. You've received
plenty of good reviews so far, so you are doing something right, but there is so much more
potential here. Take your time with your writing, don't rush things.
BA: One thing Shinji's a master of Karate as told in chapter 2. I added some tricks there and
here but not every kind of martial combat. Injured and maiming others? It's fun. (I'm surprised I
haven't been gotten in trouble for fighting)
Rushed and vague? It's my nature to rush things (Got bad grades on the report card for it)
I'm a bit impatient and like to finish things fast. This is actually pretty good for me compare
what I normally do
Adyen-^o^ This time, I didn't see any typos while reading.
Smart move, skipping through certain events that really does nothing other than take up space.
But I wouldn't do it too much, especially since you have nothing seperating two different sections.
If you read it yourself, you'll find that spacing is somewhat messed up. If you fixed that, it should
work well.
BA: Skipping certain events. To be honest I don't remember those certain scenes. I working
from memory of a show I saw about a year or so back
RuneKnightsPictures-Good fic. Just one thing, I'M CONFUZZLED. What is up with Shinji? The
first chapter jumped around so much I couldn't keep up. I blame the weed.
BA: Not weed. I live in Canada and guess what they legalized? Just kidding my parents would
kill me if I used it
Twitch-Hey really like your story, this idea has been done before, but not quite like this. I think
this is a good way of doing it. also, if you need a pre-reader, feel free to contact me, i used to
pre-read for another guy until he quit writing. I really enjoy your story and look forward to
reading
BA: I may send you the next chapter. I'll thinking to sending different chapters of the story to
different Pre-readers to make it go by faster. I pirde myself on making old ideas with new twists
to it.
I don't own Neon Genesis Evangelion.
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""-Normal speaking
-Computer messages
' ' -In German
[ ] -Thought or speaking in the mind
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Chapter 4
"...Shinji?"
Misato asked as she popped into Shinji's room. It's been awhile since the battle against the
fifth angel. His hands were still recovering from the burns he received.
Life had been normal. Touji and Kensuke came in the morning saying they'll walk with Shinji
to school while trying to get a look at Misato. Just like any morning.
"...Shinji? Come on sleepyhead." Misato said as she shook him by the shoulder. She was on
her uniform.
"What is it? I'm tried." Shinji said as he rolled around, trying to get away from Misato.
"I know you been talking a lot with Rei, but I know the real reason why you're sleepy and why
you come home late."
"It's nothing like that!" Shinji yelled as he shot up from bed.
"I'm just teasing you." Misato said "Come on. We're supposed to meet the Second Child in
"Over the Rainbow", Touji and Kensuke are already waiting for you"
"...ok" Shinji said as he got of the futon "You mind?"
"No, I don't" Misato said still standing in his room. Shinji growled as his face changed into
anger. Misato remembered that face, she slowly backed away from the now "angry" Shinji. He
let out a growl and Misato ran out.
She was scared to hell. When she sat in the couch, she heard laugh from Shinji's room. Shinji
opened the door, dressed in his casual while carrying a bag on his shoulder, filled with
miscellaneous items.
"You had seen your face. It was priceless!" Shinji said as he laughed.
"I'll getcha.... Come on, let's go," Misato said as she stand up and headed to the door.
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On the helicopter, Shinji was asleep, Touji was drooling over Misato, who was looking out
the window, and Kensuke... pressed against the window catching everything he could with his
camcorder rambling to no one about the ship who was waiting for them
The helicopter landed with a bump. Misato opened the door and the small group left the
sleeping Shinji on the helicopter. Touji's cap, which he got only to try and impress Misato, took
off.
Kensuke went around pointing his camcorder in everyway. The crew waved their hand as the
camera pointed in their general direction. Touji was still chasing his cap. Misato moved around
looking for a specific person. The three ended up at the same place. Someone stepped on Touji's
cap...
"It's good to see you again." Asuka said as Touji tried to pull his cap away from the redheaded
girl foot.
"Hey! Asuka, beautiful as ever." Misato said.
"And don't you forget it." Asuka said as she put her hands on her hips but the wind wanted to
show more. Asuka's skirt flew up. Kensuke and Touji's eyes widen, jaws dropped... then, they
saw the ground. Their cheeks now had a bright red mark.
"What the hell was that for!?" Touji yelled.
"Viewing fee. Quite a bargain, don't you think?" Asuka said.
"It was overpriced, but here's you change!" Touji yelled as he pulled down his pant and
boxers. Asuka freaked out and delivered a swift but deadly kick to his groin. Touji was KO.
"So where's the Third Child?" Asuka asked, not paying attention to the now limp Touji.
"Isn't any of them." Misato said, looking around for Shinji, but showing some pity for the
injured "boy".
"I know that. These bakas can even move one finger on an Eva... So where's Shinji, I want to
make good my old promise."
"How do you know Shinji?" Misato asked, not expecting her to know him. Just on queue, he
entered into the scene.
"Hey! Misato. Why didn't you wake me up?" Shinji asked. He let out a yawn and stretched a
bit, but when he looked down...
"On the second thought. Thanks for not waking me up." Shinji said as he kicked Touji on the
ribs. He only growled and mumbled something about not feeling something.
'Hey Asuka. Long time no see.' Shinji said in German as he held out his right hand. His bag on
his left shoulder
'Yeah,' Asuka said as she shook his hand. Her eyes flashed with mischievously. Asuka then
pulled Shinji and tried to punch him. Shinji ducked and dropped his bag. He grabbed the coming
punch and flipped over her. He held both of her arms across her neck.
'Do you give up?' Shinji asked.
'No way,' Asuka said as she tried to kick him. Shinji jumped back and got into a ready stance.
'So you do know martial arts,' Asuka said as she got into her own fighting style.
'Karate and weapons training,' Shinji said as he cracked his neck. Asuka charged and
attacked. Shinji blocked all the attacks with his arms.
"It's just me or Shinji's on the defense." Kensuke said, his cheek recovering a bit.
"What do mean by that?" Misato asked.
"You didn't hear? Shinji got in a fight a while back and beat the hell out of a bunch of guys."
Kensuke said while Shinji moved into offensive. He attacked with same fierceness as Asuka, but
Misato clearly saw that Shinji wasn't fighting seriously. Shinji missed a jumping kick and hit the
ground leaving a small dent on the steel plating.
"You two, enough!" Misato yelled as she got between the two.
"Why?" Asuka whined.
"Mind telling me why you two are fighting?" Misato asked.
"Long story," Shinji said.
"Hey Shinji! I'll make good on that promise later." Asuka said as she walked off.
"I have time..." Misato said, now looking somewhat annoyed.
"What? I used to live with her around a year. However, she spent most of her time fighting
with me. She has yet to punch or kick me." Shinji said as he put his hands on the back of his
neck and followed Asuka, on the midway, grabbing his bag.
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"I can't believe that the UN fleet has been reduced to carrying toys," The Admiral muttered to
his second-in-command just as Misato and the others came on bridge
.
"Who you may be?" the admiral asked as he turned to face her.
"Captain Misato Katsuragi from NERV. Now if you sign these papers, we can take custody of
the Eva unit and pilot." Misato said as she held out some papers.
"No. The orders I received are to escort the Evangelion and its pilot all the way to Japan. As
you can see we're not in Japan therefore I will not sign the papers yet."
"Ok then, but in any situation may occur. My authority exceeds yours." Misato said.
"Alright Captain" The Admiral said.
"Come on guys. I'm hungry," Misato said as she turned and left the bridge headed to the mess
hall. They started to talk and joke about stuff since they didn't have pretty much else to do.
"I was wondering something, Shinji. What language you spoke to that... devil?" Touji asked
as he stuffed what they called food on this...
"German," Shinji said as he ate some fired rice that he had made yesterday, from a plastic
container he had in his bag.
"How do you know German?" Kensuke asked.
"When I was 5, I lived with a teacher. I found of his books about how to speak German."
Shinji said.
"From a book? You learned German from a book?" Misato asked.
"Keep in mind Misato that I'm a genius," Shinji said as he ate.
"What do you mean by 'genius'?" Asuka asked "Compared to me you're just adobe average."
"Yeah, yeah. You graduated from Berlin University. I'm a graduate from Tokyo 2 Uni. I would
be upgrading my degree but work calls." Shinji said.
"You should be happy. You get to save the world," Asuka said.
"Yeah, Yeah...." Shinji said as he waved her off.
"Guess who?" A voice asked as two hands covered Misato's eyes.
"What the...?"
"What the hell are you doing here!?" Misato yelled as she scrambled away from Kaji.
'Hey there Kaji.' Shinji said as he waved.
'Hey Shinji, what you doing here?' Kaji asked. Touji and Kensuke just looked from one to
another wondering what was said.
'Third Child,' Shinji said as he laid back.
'Guess you and Asuka are going to be fighting a lot more.' Kaji said.
"Hell yeah." Shinji said back to Japanese.
"Seems to me that Shinji knows some martial arts." Asuka said.
"Which arts?" Kaji asked.
"Karate. What about you Asuka?"
"Tae Known Do." Asuka said.
"Seems like different compared to other Tae Known Do artists," Shinji said.
"I know, I used some Kung Fu and Ju-Jitsu." Asuka clarified.
"Could you two please stop with martial art talking?" Touji asked. He had no idea what
martial art was.
"Whatever dummkopf. Come Shinji, I'll show you the true Eva." Asuka said as she
grabbed Shinji and dragged him out barely letting him to grab his bag before leaving.
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"This is the first true Eva! 00 was the Prototype model and 01 was the Test model."
Asuka said as she stood on top of her red Eva.
"Red. Just as I thought, it would be. But four eyes? Hey Asuka! You need glasses or
something?" Shinji joked.
"You baka! It has two types of visions. Normal and thermal." Asuka said.
"I read the specs. Shoulder spikes cannon location right under the Prog. Knife but when
compared to my Eva, this one is physically weaker and slower due to the several weapons."
Shinji said.
"There's no where my Eva is inferior to yours" Asuka said. Shinji's head turned to the
side as a shockwave hit the ship.
"Angel." Shinji said.
"My big chance." Asuka whisper to herself.
"You're coming with me!" She jumped down and dragged Shinji out.
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Shinji pressed the switch on his plugsuit. It was in his bag since he was the back up pilot in
case of some event. Downstairs, Asuka was putting on her suit.
"Would you hurry up?" Shinji asked.
"Shut up you baka!" Asuka said as she came up in her red plugsuit.
"Tell me again, why do I have to come along with you?" Shinji asked.
"I'm going to show how a real Child pilots." Asuka said as she grabbed Shinji and dragged
him away.
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"Just where the hell they?" Misato asked as she came into bridge.
"I think they're over there." Kensuke said beside her, pointing to the Eva 02 as it rose up like
an old wandering warrior.
"Get the umbilical cable ready. I'm taking command." Misato ordered, smiling that the
Children were already set for battle.
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"I'm going to lose my lunch." Shinji said as Asuka willed 02 to jump from boat to boat.
"Stop complaining." Asuka said as she landed on the main ship and attached the umbilical
cable.
"So Shinji, where is it?" Asuka asked.
"You are asking me? You're supposed to be the teacher here." Shinji said.
"Tell me. You know where anything is." Asuka said.
"Duck." Shinji said.
"What?" Asuka asked.
"Just duck!" Shinji yelled.
Asuka panicked and ducked as the angel came over it. It was aiming for the head. Shinji pushed
Asuka aside and pushed one of the buttons. The shoulders opened and fired spikes into the
angel's belly.
"Don't touch anything!" Asuka yelled as she pushed him back.
"Missed the S2 organ." Shinji said as he moved to the back.
"Where is the S2 organ?" Asuka asked curious.
"Inside its mouth." Shinji said, "Are there any other weapons here?"
"The only weapons here are the cannons on the destroyers." Asuka said.
"Jump!" Shinji yelled. Asuka jumped to a destroyer.
"It's aiming for the head, so use it to your advantage." Shinji said, "Move in front of a
cannon. Duck. BOOM! Bye bye Angel."
"Shut up," Asuka said. She then growled knowing the plan would work, "Misato. Tell
the destroyer we're on, to prepare the cannons."
"Ok." Misato said as she tried to contact the destroyer just as a jet launched took of the
carrier.
"Who the...? No time for that." And returned to her previous work
"Where is it?" Asuka asked.
"Swimming like a shark." Shinji said as he watched it.
"Ready." Misato said.
"It's coming!" Shinji yelled.
Asuka ducked and the angel got a mouth full of cannon shells. The cannons swung around
and dropped the angel on the deck. It suddenly started to flop around. 02 stepped on it with a
knife in hand. It drove the knife into the S2 organ and the angel
stopped moving.
"Chalk one up to the Great Asuka!" Asuka yelled over the intercom.
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"Next time Asuka. Ask for permission but you go off charging into battle, but under the
previous circumstances, it's understandable. Now where's Shinji?" Misato asked.
"He disappeared when he left the plug," Asuka said as she looked around.
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Somewhere in the carrier, Shinji stood touching a table. His eyes were red.
"He was here, but I missed him. Dammit. If I could have got him, I could have ended this war
right here." Shinji said.
"Dammit!" Shinji grabbed the table and threw it against the wall.
[Hahahahaha! That attack was to protect him. Even if I die, as long as he lives, we can win
this war.] Gaghiel's spirit said.
"We'll see. We'll see." Shinji said as he kicked the table and smashed it to tiny bits.
Author Notes:
This is the first chapter with Asuka. This took a bit longer due two reasons. Ashanti was
in town and needed extras for Rain On Me. Second reason I had D14852001 pre-read for me.
Thanks man!
Reply To Reviews:
keyblade-00-Excellent chapter. Sorry about the caps lock last time. The drama and action were
all writen well. I really hope Rei and Shinji some how go back to thier brother sister
relationship. I'm really glad to hear Auska is going to be in the next chapter. I hope she brings a
little humor into the story. Your doing a great job so far so please keep up the awesome work. I
hope you update really soon.
BA: I'm update as fast I get my story back
Ghost-149548-Well I for one don't care about grammer and spelling, just as long as I know what
your talking about. So far, I find this story joyable, hope to see you update soon,
BA: Wished more people were like you but hey what're going to do. Thanks for the input
China-boy-great job with this chapter
hope u update soon
BA: Here's it is
ZGMF-X10-i can beta read for you
BA: Thanks for the offer. I may take it up when I finish the next chapter
RichardRahl-Hi, great story but could you mind using dividers when you change sceens etc. I'm
not going to pick out mistakes because I know you need a prereader.
BA: Using the *** dividers and thanks for not writing a huge paragraph about my mistakes and
stuff like that
Zidane Lighting Saiz-Interestivg viewpoint of Shinji as the real Eva pilot that he should be. I
hope that Asuka's personality matches with Shinji's. Any thouhgs about bringing Mana
Kirishima? Like the other reviews, a Beta may do the job. Keep the work.
BA: Mana? I heard of her but have no idea really about her personality. I can't get my hands on
the game until then I do Mana's out. Sorry if you wanted her to be in it.
sakura_star-63-um... i am checking the site everyday...
well i am glad to see that it is updated..:-)
BA: Here's the next one
Ezstarius-agree with Seranov. The theme has been done quite extensively and whilst a bit of
OOCness I can tolerate, you have taken it too far. Shinji being assertive is one thing, but being a
master of every form of martial combat and being more than willing to injure or maim others is
a completely different matter. You've comletely inverted Shinji's character and this takes away
from the read for me.
I won't bother harassing you about a prereader, because you've already had enough of that, and
you said you are looking for one. Try using something to seperate the different scenes, it
sometimes gets confusing when I'm reading one part and the next line is a completely different
scene with no warning. I like to use (* * * * *) to mark the end of a scene, I suggest you use
something similar.
I'll be honest with you, I had a lot of difficulty in getting through the chapters, if it wasn't a
Shinji/Asuka fic then I doubt I would have made the effort. It very rushed and vague, and the
grammar and spelling interfere at times, but it's still readable.
I don't want to cut you down or anything, but this fic does need a lot of work. You've received
plenty of good reviews so far, so you are doing something right, but there is so much more
potential here. Take your time with your writing, don't rush things.
BA: One thing Shinji's a master of Karate as told in chapter 2. I added some tricks there and
here but not every kind of martial combat. Injured and maiming others? It's fun. (I'm surprised I
haven't been gotten in trouble for fighting)
Rushed and vague? It's my nature to rush things (Got bad grades on the report card for it)
I'm a bit impatient and like to finish things fast. This is actually pretty good for me compare
what I normally do
Adyen-^o^ This time, I didn't see any typos while reading.
Smart move, skipping through certain events that really does nothing other than take up space.
But I wouldn't do it too much, especially since you have nothing seperating two different sections.
If you read it yourself, you'll find that spacing is somewhat messed up. If you fixed that, it should
work well.
BA: Skipping certain events. To be honest I don't remember those certain scenes. I working
from memory of a show I saw about a year or so back
RuneKnightsPictures-Good fic. Just one thing, I'M CONFUZZLED. What is up with Shinji? The
first chapter jumped around so much I couldn't keep up. I blame the weed.
BA: Not weed. I live in Canada and guess what they legalized? Just kidding my parents would
kill me if I used it
Twitch-Hey really like your story, this idea has been done before, but not quite like this. I think
this is a good way of doing it. also, if you need a pre-reader, feel free to contact me, i used to
pre-read for another guy until he quit writing. I really enjoy your story and look forward to
reading
BA: I may send you the next chapter. I'll thinking to sending different chapters of the story to
different Pre-readers to make it go by faster. I pirde myself on making old ideas with new twists
to it.