Whispers Of The Heart-A Lover's Tale
#1-You Are (probably the first love poem I ever wrote; pretty simplistic but also meaningful)
You are...
The radiant sun of my life
The brightest star in the dark night
The purest raindrop that ever fell from the sky
The cool, gentle breeze passing by
The whitest snowflake floated from above
The softest silk ever spun
The most graceful fawn ever born
The sweetest flower in the field
The most beautiful girl in the world
You are... Kathryn Pryde
You are my love, my life
You are everything
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Hope that wasn't too clichéd.
The original poem didn't have the last two lines (of course the name in the third last line was different), should I remove them or keep them?