Discalimer: the bits of fairy tales that you recognize aren't mine, what you don't recognize as anything already written/published/copyrighted is. :o) on with the story!
A/N: I revised Chapter Ten...It's different. You should read it.
I clung to Cedric out of sheer desperation. The Outriders pounded along the crowded streets, shouting useless commands.
"Stop!"
"Halt witch!"
"Wait for us!"
Of course we didn't stop, halt or wait, we just ran. Eventually, we lost the Outriders in the confusion of the crowded streets.
"Halt!" I looked up in confusion; the latest command had come from somewhere in front of us!
We almost ran the speaker over before Cedric pulled the horse to a halt.
"Who the hell do you think you are?" Cedric asked indignantly.
"I'm- a -someone," The man stuttered out defensively.
"A someone?" Cedric's voice was filled with scorn.
"Are you an Outrider or a guard?" I asked bluntly in a moment of pure stupidity.
"Why yes, yes I am." The man smiled and laughed. "You are under arrest, both of you."
"No!" Cedric yelled forcefully. I slipped sideways as the horse bolted forward suddenly, as a result of being jammed in the sides with Cedric's heels.
"Cedric! I'm falling!" I screamed, stating the obvious. I had already tangled my fingers in the horse's coarse mane, but my grip was coming with an increasing price. My fingers were cut deeply by the horse's mane, and my fingers were losing circulation and going numb. My hands were sticky with my own blood.
"Gotcha!" Cedric's hand swung down to grab my waist. He missed by inches. The imposter guard had wrapped his arms around my legs. It had been him who had spoken.
"Dammit Dammit OW!"I screamed more curses and oaths as the fingers that were tangled in the horse's mane either broke or cut more deeply.
"Sparrow! I'll come back to get you! I promise!" The horse plowed on through the now deserted streets. I lost sight of him as my captor dragged me to the ground as he fell.
"Do you really think that he'll come back to get you?" He said in my ear, his words instilling doubt and disbelief.
"Um," I didn't know. Would Cedric come back for me? Our countries were at war, and, theoretically, he shouldn't care whether I lived or died. Even still, I was the prophesized 'key' that would win the war, so he would want to come back for me, but not for me- for my abilities. What if all he had said wasn't true? That he didn't truly love me, that he was just using me to further his own country. Stubbornly, my heart disagreed. "He'll come back, he said so."
"But what is his word worth?"
"Just who do you think you are?"
The man's hand grasped my throat with surprising strength and brutality. "As of the moment, the person who decides whether you live or die."
"He'll come and save me," I said obstinately. "A prince's word is always good." I intoned loftily, not realizing the inanity of my statement. Apparently, the lack of oxygen to my brain was making me say things that should have been kept quiet.
"A prince, eh?" The hand around my throat tightened until unconsciousness had a secure hold on me. I just couldn't seem to remember how to breathe. "We'll see how much he'll pay for your life then, won't we."
I heard the Outriders gallop up, and then, only my heartbeat.
"One hundred gold sovs."
"Are you kidding me? No way, twenty sovs." It took me a little while to realize that they were bargaining over me.
"Ninety."
"Twenty-five sovs."
"You won't get her at that price! Eighty!"
"Fine, thirty-five."
"Sixty-five and no less."
"Fifty-five and it's a done deal."
"Deal." I heard the men shake hands.
My eyes stayed tightly shut, as if glued together, as a big man picked me up and slung me over his shoulder. I gasped when my solar plexus met violently with the man's shoulder.
I tried to move, but discovered that I was bound hand and foot.
"Mmph!" I squeaked in surprise.
"What the hell?" My carrier cursed as I squirmed about pointlessly. I finally fell off his shoulder and onto the floor, conveniently forgetting that I couldn't do anything but wiggle.
"Bitch!" The man lunged after me and hauled me back, cursing as I bit and kicked him.
I finally got my eyes to open just in time to see his fist come crashing into my face.
I screamed and reeled back dizzily. All I could feel was fiery pain! Pain! Pain!
Then, there was nothing.
A/N: Ooh...cliffie. I changed this chapter a lot. I like it a lot more, too. I have more. I just have to type it. I was writing this in the snatches of study hall that i had left over, so i had lots of trouble deciphering my handwriting...hehe. Anyway...review this!
Pabo- thank you for pointing out that it is rather illogical for Liana to just immeadiately trust Cedric. This should make that seem a little more realistic.
Black Jaguar- thanks for reviewing and giving mean honest opinion!! what did you think of the revised chapter?
cherry chica- was this chapter better? i hope so. did things happen at a better pace too? tell me!!
Tallemera Rane- thank you for reviewing again! i hope you had a nice vacation! Yeah, i think the falling in love had to do with Sky's magic so...heehee.
Raspberry Girl- what do you mean when you say the plot is getting "transparent"? Could you explain that comment for me? i would really appreciate it. What did you find random? I believe that this chapter was better with the elaboration of events, although i'm not sure. Could you be a little more specific when you review please? That woul be a big help to help me make the story all together better.
:o) thanks to all you reviewed! (o:
*smile*
A/N: I revised Chapter Ten...It's different. You should read it.
I clung to Cedric out of sheer desperation. The Outriders pounded along the crowded streets, shouting useless commands.
"Stop!"
"Halt witch!"
"Wait for us!"
Of course we didn't stop, halt or wait, we just ran. Eventually, we lost the Outriders in the confusion of the crowded streets.
"Halt!" I looked up in confusion; the latest command had come from somewhere in front of us!
We almost ran the speaker over before Cedric pulled the horse to a halt.
"Who the hell do you think you are?" Cedric asked indignantly.
"I'm- a -someone," The man stuttered out defensively.
"A someone?" Cedric's voice was filled with scorn.
"Are you an Outrider or a guard?" I asked bluntly in a moment of pure stupidity.
"Why yes, yes I am." The man smiled and laughed. "You are under arrest, both of you."
"No!" Cedric yelled forcefully. I slipped sideways as the horse bolted forward suddenly, as a result of being jammed in the sides with Cedric's heels.
"Cedric! I'm falling!" I screamed, stating the obvious. I had already tangled my fingers in the horse's coarse mane, but my grip was coming with an increasing price. My fingers were cut deeply by the horse's mane, and my fingers were losing circulation and going numb. My hands were sticky with my own blood.
"Gotcha!" Cedric's hand swung down to grab my waist. He missed by inches. The imposter guard had wrapped his arms around my legs. It had been him who had spoken.
"Dammit Dammit OW!"I screamed more curses and oaths as the fingers that were tangled in the horse's mane either broke or cut more deeply.
"Sparrow! I'll come back to get you! I promise!" The horse plowed on through the now deserted streets. I lost sight of him as my captor dragged me to the ground as he fell.
"Do you really think that he'll come back to get you?" He said in my ear, his words instilling doubt and disbelief.
"Um," I didn't know. Would Cedric come back for me? Our countries were at war, and, theoretically, he shouldn't care whether I lived or died. Even still, I was the prophesized 'key' that would win the war, so he would want to come back for me, but not for me- for my abilities. What if all he had said wasn't true? That he didn't truly love me, that he was just using me to further his own country. Stubbornly, my heart disagreed. "He'll come back, he said so."
"But what is his word worth?"
"Just who do you think you are?"
The man's hand grasped my throat with surprising strength and brutality. "As of the moment, the person who decides whether you live or die."
"He'll come and save me," I said obstinately. "A prince's word is always good." I intoned loftily, not realizing the inanity of my statement. Apparently, the lack of oxygen to my brain was making me say things that should have been kept quiet.
"A prince, eh?" The hand around my throat tightened until unconsciousness had a secure hold on me. I just couldn't seem to remember how to breathe. "We'll see how much he'll pay for your life then, won't we."
I heard the Outriders gallop up, and then, only my heartbeat.
"One hundred gold sovs."
"Are you kidding me? No way, twenty sovs." It took me a little while to realize that they were bargaining over me.
"Ninety."
"Twenty-five sovs."
"You won't get her at that price! Eighty!"
"Fine, thirty-five."
"Sixty-five and no less."
"Fifty-five and it's a done deal."
"Deal." I heard the men shake hands.
My eyes stayed tightly shut, as if glued together, as a big man picked me up and slung me over his shoulder. I gasped when my solar plexus met violently with the man's shoulder.
I tried to move, but discovered that I was bound hand and foot.
"Mmph!" I squeaked in surprise.
"What the hell?" My carrier cursed as I squirmed about pointlessly. I finally fell off his shoulder and onto the floor, conveniently forgetting that I couldn't do anything but wiggle.
"Bitch!" The man lunged after me and hauled me back, cursing as I bit and kicked him.
I finally got my eyes to open just in time to see his fist come crashing into my face.
I screamed and reeled back dizzily. All I could feel was fiery pain! Pain! Pain!
Then, there was nothing.
A/N: Ooh...cliffie. I changed this chapter a lot. I like it a lot more, too. I have more. I just have to type it. I was writing this in the snatches of study hall that i had left over, so i had lots of trouble deciphering my handwriting...hehe. Anyway...review this!
Pabo- thank you for pointing out that it is rather illogical for Liana to just immeadiately trust Cedric. This should make that seem a little more realistic.
Black Jaguar- thanks for reviewing and giving mean honest opinion!! what did you think of the revised chapter?
cherry chica- was this chapter better? i hope so. did things happen at a better pace too? tell me!!
Tallemera Rane- thank you for reviewing again! i hope you had a nice vacation! Yeah, i think the falling in love had to do with Sky's magic so...heehee.
Raspberry Girl- what do you mean when you say the plot is getting "transparent"? Could you explain that comment for me? i would really appreciate it. What did you find random? I believe that this chapter was better with the elaboration of events, although i'm not sure. Could you be a little more specific when you review please? That woul be a big help to help me make the story all together better.
:o) thanks to all you reviewed! (o:
*smile*