Ok, thankies to everyone who reviewed my poems. I was sugar high last chapter, so I'm just going to give you guys my responses and get on to my newest poem.
Riverwood: Yes, evil Inuyasha. Be afraid, be very afraid.
Dante Gemini: Yes, I do know that my use of adjectives is cliche. But to be honest I couldn't describe Kaoru's eyes without repeating myself. And sometimes gemstones or hues just seem to fit certain people or characters, like Kurama's emerald eyes. The constructive criticism is appreciated, though.
Kikirini: Cool, you reviewed twice! You should watch Inuyasha or get the manga sometime. It rocks!
Arima1: Yay! Another person who likes Demon Inuyasha! More power to ya!
Radire: Your opinion is valued. I've tried my hardest so far on this poem, so see if your advice was used to improve my style of poetry.
This next little thing is for Karasu from YYH. Yeah, I know I promised Hiei, but I can't think if anything for him. It's written in his perspective, during and after the first time we see him fight, so if you don't like any hints of yaoi, don't read it. You can't flame me saying that there was some uncalled-for shounen-ai, cause this is a warning.
Come Closer, Fox
Your crimson locks
Wave gently
In the light breeze.
Leaf-green eyes
Darkened
With thought,
Or perhaps,
A trace of
Fear?
Come closer,
Rose-scented fox.
The final explosion,
Like a breath
Of music,
Caresses my ears.
A smile,
Hidden,
Yet mirrored
In my violet-ice eyes.
Come closer,
Darling fox.
Panicked gaze,
Set in emerald.
Would that your back
Was not to me.
Then
I would have
Drank in
Your surprise,
Your rapid
Beating heart.
Come closer,
Silver fox.
Longing
To once more stroke
That petal-soft skin
Grows strong.
But I can wait.
The burning pleasure
Will be pulsing
Fire
In my veins,
When I deal
Your death blow.
Flower-frail life,
Ended.
Come closer,
Kurama.
Well, what did you think? Did I overdo it?
By the way, I got most of my inspiration from www. reikitantei. net. It's a great web site, check it out. Just don't type in the spaces on the address.