Hey people. Sorry I haven't written in a while but first there was writer's
block, then I went on a cruise (BAHAMAS ROCK MY SOCKS!!! lol), computer
problems, and then more writer's block. but now, due to the overwhelming
(and entirely positive) response, I shall continue.
Since I've started writing this story, I've bought not only Holes on DVD [only to discover Max Kasch has a girlfriend :'( I sympathize for all his devout female fans.] but I bought the soundtrack. I have gotten a LOT of inspiration from these two sources!
In the true fashion of one of my favorite fanfic writers (Autumn Darkness. I LOVED her "Return to Jurassic" story) I will write personal feedback to my reviewers.
-"Drowchild"~ I'm happy Natasha & I helped you in your writing journey! (lol. wow I sound like a teacher)
-Houser's girl~ don't worry. she tones down the attitude eventually
-"hi"~ no, actually I don't but you could always tell me. ::hint, hint::
-Irish Rain~ I meant to say this before but thanks for the paragraphing help (& the compliments)!
-x0xTrinityx0x~ ::blushes furiously:: awww thanks! Don't worry. I'll be writing for a while.
-"Z"~ well you're gonna have to wait to find out. especially because I haven't decided yet (lol)
-Everyone else who said my story was cool~ thanks a bunch! If it weren't for all of you people I wouldn't be writing!
Ok so to the story.
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It was 4 a.m. when she was awakened. She felt like she had only gotten to sleep when X-Ray shook her shoulder "C'mon. You gotta wake up, now!"
She rolled over on her stomach, ending up face first in her pillow. She sighed and finally gave a muffled "No. It's too damn early!"
"We know, chica, but you gotta start diggin' before the sun comes up!" Magnet yelled from the other side of the room. She smiled in her pillow.
After a lot of coaxing, she managed to get out of bed, reluctantly. She walked with the rest of the D-tent boys to the "Library" to get her shovel. She was so tired that her feet could barely carry her. She eventually wrapped her arms around the closest person to her.
"Carry me." she mumbled to a surprised Magnet. His face suddenly changed from confused to a big smile. He let her hang on his shoulder until they both got their shovels.
Once they go to their designated area, the boys helped her with the specifics about the hole. She all watched the boys start, just to get an idea of good techniques, even though she was no stranger to hard work. Two years ago she was sent to her mother's aunt ranch (that was used as a scare tactic for getting in trouble, just like the hellhole she was at now) and had to do lots of digging and planting and other things like that.
The only good thing about this digging, she thought, was that she had peace and quiet time to think. She never noticed how repetitive the digging was and how lost in thought she could get. She was dying of heat but she was so exhausted she could barely notice.
By the time Mr. Sir had come by to give them water, she had already dug at least 1½ feet of her hole. She was very satisfied about her progress until she had seen how far the boys had gotten (with the exception of Caveman, who was about as far along as she was). She got in line after Zero because the boys had apparently formed their own little order and she didn't want to intrude.
"Hey, why are you all the way behind Zero?" Armpit said to her.
"Um. well. uh." she stuttered.
"Here. come in front of Caveman. You earned it last night after you pulled that crap in the rec. room!" Zigzag said, as he led her by the arm to her new position.
"Um. ok. Thanks," she said to the boys, smiling. She heard Caveman quietly sigh behind her and the guilt got to her. "Look guys, I'm new here so maybe I should just stay in the back of the line-."
"No, really, it's ok. Caveman and Zero don't mind. Do ya boys?" X-Ray said, turning around. Cavemen shook his head no and Zero just kind of stood there. "You don't have to be so sweet to everyone all the time, Natasha." X-Ray continued.
"Yea, really, chica. You've been too nice to us so far!" Magnet added. All the boys seemed to agree while she was blushing uncontrollably.
Zigzag smiled, "Yea, you're too sweet. Your like ."
"Honey!" said Squid.
"Yea, like Honey. Hey, maybe that can be your nickname- 'Honey'! What do you guys think?" said X-Ray. All the guys apparently liked it. "Okay, so 'Honey' it is!" Natasha was beaming. After the renaming of Natasha, all the boys got their water and returned to digging.
~
What seemed like an eternity of digging she measured her first hole and discovered she was finally finished. While she was digging her hole, every other one of the boys (with the exception of Stanley who had just finished the same time she did) had offered to either wait until she was done to walk her back ("Just to be sure she's make it back incident-free") or actually ask her if she needed help with digging! She politely turned them down and continued her digging herself.
As she tried to get out of the hole, she kept falling back in. Caveman had barely walked ahead before she called out, "Um, a little help here? Please?" Caveman turned around, jogged back, and pulled her out of the hole. They both dusted themselves off.
"I had a hard time pullin' myself out of those holes. It's hard." Caveman said reassuringly. Honey smiled.
"Thanks," she said. They both began walking back together. There was a long period of awkward silence, which Honey finally decided to break.
"I'm really exhausted. You don't mind if I lean on you do you?" she asked
"Um. sure no problem" he said, nervously. She slinked her arm around his shoulder, and his hand around her waist, but not before Honey released a long, hacking cough. Another awkward silence followed, which, once again, Honey had to end.
"Well, apparently, you know what I did to get here. What did you do? If you don't mind me asking."
"No, it's okay" he said. "Well, um, I stole a pair of baseball cleats. Well, not just any cleats- they were Clyde Livingston's game-winning cleats. He's a professional baseball player, by the way, and--."
"I know who he is. I've met him before at a charity event," Honey interrupted. "So what, in the name of all things holy, were you doing with his cleats?"
"Well, um they fell on my head actually. And I didn't know they were stolen. Or Clyde Livingston's," Caveman answered. "My father is an inventor who's trying to find a cure for foot odor and the cleats REEKED--."
Honey laughed. "They don't call him 'Sweet Feet' for just being really fast!"
Caveman laughed, too. "Yeah, really! So anyway, I figured I could bring the cleats home for my dad to work on but as I was running home, the cops picked me up. Apparently they had been missing from a homeless shelter auction and the base value was $500,000!" (a/n: I don't have the book or movie in front of me but I'm just guessing for now.)
"So you're just saying it was an accident?" Honey asked.
"Yeah, kinda. My family has a history of bad luck. That's a whole other long story about my dirty, rotten, pig-stealing great-great grandfather!" Caveman said. They both started hysterically laughing up until they got back to the tent.
"Well I'm gonna go to the rec. room. You wanna come?" asked Caveman.
"No. I'm way too tired to start a fight tonight." Honey answered, starting a whole other laughing fit.
"Well as I was told the first hole's the hardest! I guess I'll catch you later!" Caveman called out.
"Okay, bye! Thanks again for helping me out tonight!"
"No problem! Anytime, Honey!" he called out.
As she changed and began to lie down, she contemplated her new nickname. I've never had that many guys call me Honey since. well before I came, she thought. She laughed to her self immediately before going to sleep.
Within the next minute, Squid walked in.
"Hey," Squid said
"Hi," Honey called, weakly, from her bed.
"Caveman told me you were here alone so I decided to come back just to keep you company just so nothing bad happens."
"Aw, thanks, Squid. That's really nice of you!" She walked over and hugged him.
"Um. it's no. uh. big deal, Natasha. I mean. um. Honey," he said. He was blushing furiously, which made her smile. "Well. um. you can go back to sleep now, If you want. I was. um. thinkin' of tuckin' in early myself. Good night!"
She turned over, only to see him turned away from her taking off his shirt. His toned arms and back made her melt instantly, thinking of how great it would be to be hugged by him, not to mention doing other things.. Ew, I have to take my mind out of the gutter, she thought. "Oh, okay then. Goodnight, Squid!" she said. She smiled to herself one last time before slowly falling asleep
~*~
Yay!! I'm finally done! That took way too long and had too many damn pages!!! Well r&r and be as honest, yet positive as you can! Thanks!
Since I've started writing this story, I've bought not only Holes on DVD [only to discover Max Kasch has a girlfriend :'( I sympathize for all his devout female fans.] but I bought the soundtrack. I have gotten a LOT of inspiration from these two sources!
In the true fashion of one of my favorite fanfic writers (Autumn Darkness. I LOVED her "Return to Jurassic" story) I will write personal feedback to my reviewers.
-"Drowchild"~ I'm happy Natasha & I helped you in your writing journey! (lol. wow I sound like a teacher)
-Houser's girl~ don't worry. she tones down the attitude eventually
-"hi"~ no, actually I don't but you could always tell me. ::hint, hint::
-Irish Rain~ I meant to say this before but thanks for the paragraphing help (& the compliments)!
-x0xTrinityx0x~ ::blushes furiously:: awww thanks! Don't worry. I'll be writing for a while.
-"Z"~ well you're gonna have to wait to find out. especially because I haven't decided yet (lol)
-Everyone else who said my story was cool~ thanks a bunch! If it weren't for all of you people I wouldn't be writing!
Ok so to the story.
~*~
It was 4 a.m. when she was awakened. She felt like she had only gotten to sleep when X-Ray shook her shoulder "C'mon. You gotta wake up, now!"
She rolled over on her stomach, ending up face first in her pillow. She sighed and finally gave a muffled "No. It's too damn early!"
"We know, chica, but you gotta start diggin' before the sun comes up!" Magnet yelled from the other side of the room. She smiled in her pillow.
After a lot of coaxing, she managed to get out of bed, reluctantly. She walked with the rest of the D-tent boys to the "Library" to get her shovel. She was so tired that her feet could barely carry her. She eventually wrapped her arms around the closest person to her.
"Carry me." she mumbled to a surprised Magnet. His face suddenly changed from confused to a big smile. He let her hang on his shoulder until they both got their shovels.
Once they go to their designated area, the boys helped her with the specifics about the hole. She all watched the boys start, just to get an idea of good techniques, even though she was no stranger to hard work. Two years ago she was sent to her mother's aunt ranch (that was used as a scare tactic for getting in trouble, just like the hellhole she was at now) and had to do lots of digging and planting and other things like that.
The only good thing about this digging, she thought, was that she had peace and quiet time to think. She never noticed how repetitive the digging was and how lost in thought she could get. She was dying of heat but she was so exhausted she could barely notice.
By the time Mr. Sir had come by to give them water, she had already dug at least 1½ feet of her hole. She was very satisfied about her progress until she had seen how far the boys had gotten (with the exception of Caveman, who was about as far along as she was). She got in line after Zero because the boys had apparently formed their own little order and she didn't want to intrude.
"Hey, why are you all the way behind Zero?" Armpit said to her.
"Um. well. uh." she stuttered.
"Here. come in front of Caveman. You earned it last night after you pulled that crap in the rec. room!" Zigzag said, as he led her by the arm to her new position.
"Um. ok. Thanks," she said to the boys, smiling. She heard Caveman quietly sigh behind her and the guilt got to her. "Look guys, I'm new here so maybe I should just stay in the back of the line-."
"No, really, it's ok. Caveman and Zero don't mind. Do ya boys?" X-Ray said, turning around. Cavemen shook his head no and Zero just kind of stood there. "You don't have to be so sweet to everyone all the time, Natasha." X-Ray continued.
"Yea, really, chica. You've been too nice to us so far!" Magnet added. All the boys seemed to agree while she was blushing uncontrollably.
Zigzag smiled, "Yea, you're too sweet. Your like ."
"Honey!" said Squid.
"Yea, like Honey. Hey, maybe that can be your nickname- 'Honey'! What do you guys think?" said X-Ray. All the guys apparently liked it. "Okay, so 'Honey' it is!" Natasha was beaming. After the renaming of Natasha, all the boys got their water and returned to digging.
~
What seemed like an eternity of digging she measured her first hole and discovered she was finally finished. While she was digging her hole, every other one of the boys (with the exception of Stanley who had just finished the same time she did) had offered to either wait until she was done to walk her back ("Just to be sure she's make it back incident-free") or actually ask her if she needed help with digging! She politely turned them down and continued her digging herself.
As she tried to get out of the hole, she kept falling back in. Caveman had barely walked ahead before she called out, "Um, a little help here? Please?" Caveman turned around, jogged back, and pulled her out of the hole. They both dusted themselves off.
"I had a hard time pullin' myself out of those holes. It's hard." Caveman said reassuringly. Honey smiled.
"Thanks," she said. They both began walking back together. There was a long period of awkward silence, which Honey finally decided to break.
"I'm really exhausted. You don't mind if I lean on you do you?" she asked
"Um. sure no problem" he said, nervously. She slinked her arm around his shoulder, and his hand around her waist, but not before Honey released a long, hacking cough. Another awkward silence followed, which, once again, Honey had to end.
"Well, apparently, you know what I did to get here. What did you do? If you don't mind me asking."
"No, it's okay" he said. "Well, um, I stole a pair of baseball cleats. Well, not just any cleats- they were Clyde Livingston's game-winning cleats. He's a professional baseball player, by the way, and--."
"I know who he is. I've met him before at a charity event," Honey interrupted. "So what, in the name of all things holy, were you doing with his cleats?"
"Well, um they fell on my head actually. And I didn't know they were stolen. Or Clyde Livingston's," Caveman answered. "My father is an inventor who's trying to find a cure for foot odor and the cleats REEKED--."
Honey laughed. "They don't call him 'Sweet Feet' for just being really fast!"
Caveman laughed, too. "Yeah, really! So anyway, I figured I could bring the cleats home for my dad to work on but as I was running home, the cops picked me up. Apparently they had been missing from a homeless shelter auction and the base value was $500,000!" (a/n: I don't have the book or movie in front of me but I'm just guessing for now.)
"So you're just saying it was an accident?" Honey asked.
"Yeah, kinda. My family has a history of bad luck. That's a whole other long story about my dirty, rotten, pig-stealing great-great grandfather!" Caveman said. They both started hysterically laughing up until they got back to the tent.
"Well I'm gonna go to the rec. room. You wanna come?" asked Caveman.
"No. I'm way too tired to start a fight tonight." Honey answered, starting a whole other laughing fit.
"Well as I was told the first hole's the hardest! I guess I'll catch you later!" Caveman called out.
"Okay, bye! Thanks again for helping me out tonight!"
"No problem! Anytime, Honey!" he called out.
As she changed and began to lie down, she contemplated her new nickname. I've never had that many guys call me Honey since. well before I came, she thought. She laughed to her self immediately before going to sleep.
Within the next minute, Squid walked in.
"Hey," Squid said
"Hi," Honey called, weakly, from her bed.
"Caveman told me you were here alone so I decided to come back just to keep you company just so nothing bad happens."
"Aw, thanks, Squid. That's really nice of you!" She walked over and hugged him.
"Um. it's no. uh. big deal, Natasha. I mean. um. Honey," he said. He was blushing furiously, which made her smile. "Well. um. you can go back to sleep now, If you want. I was. um. thinkin' of tuckin' in early myself. Good night!"
She turned over, only to see him turned away from her taking off his shirt. His toned arms and back made her melt instantly, thinking of how great it would be to be hugged by him, not to mention doing other things.. Ew, I have to take my mind out of the gutter, she thought. "Oh, okay then. Goodnight, Squid!" she said. She smiled to herself one last time before slowly falling asleep
~*~
Yay!! I'm finally done! That took way too long and had too many damn pages!!! Well r&r and be as honest, yet positive as you can! Thanks!