Okay, this is going to be a whole new type of writing than the first seven chapters, so bear with me. This is the only thing I've ever seriously focused on writing.
The Switch
Chapter 9
Day Two: Afternoon
Link
Link rode away from Kakariko Village, not thinking about how he obtained his new item, but of Malon. Funny as it sounded, Link felt strange that it didn't seem strange to be completely emotionally adjusted to being a seventeen year old. Link used to think of Malon as his weird friend from the ranch, but now that they were both grown up, he thought she was the most beautiful thing on the planet and he was completely in love with her. He was absentmindedly looking through his pocket when he found a letter...
Dear Link,
It seems you have learned of the situation surrounding Zelda and Malon. You must not speak of this to anyone. The two girls were not even meant to know about the other's wish. Inside the envelope is an earring that will help you hold your tongue.
It also seems that you and Malon have affections towards each other. This is perfectly acceptable, but you must not allow anybody, possibly with the exception of Zelda, to know, for when the wish is undone, everyone will think that you were romantically involved with Princess Zelda. If you are then seen with Malon, well, we do not need to tell you what will happen.
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As Link replaced his silver earring with the gold one from the envelope, he thought about his letter. He didn't want to imagine what would happen if... Wait... 'have affections towards each other,'?! That meant that Malon liked him as well! That eased his mind a bit, and he continued on his way.
When Link got to the ranch, he saw Talon just a little ways off, returning from the previous day's deliveries. Link sent Epona off in the direction of the forest and hurried into the ranch. "Zelda! Malon! Talon's coming back!" If Talon caught Malon at Lon Lon Ranch, there'd be some explaining to do! Malon quickly used her new magic to pick up the picnic and she and Link fled to the secret room.
Link pulled Malon through the warp to the Lost Woods, and they found themselves in a clearing. It was surrounded by dense trees, and the only ways out were the tree stump they came through and a ladder inside of a hollowed out tree trunk that seemed to climb up to nowhere, but really connected to a trap door in Link's treehouse that Malon had created.
"What did you do that for?" Malon asked.
"I thought that maybe we could have our picnic after all," said Link. With that, Malon brought out the picnic from Lon Lon Ranch and sat down next to Link, smiling at him gently.
Yeah, it's different. Like I said, this is a new writing style for me, and I still need to adjust. I felt compelled to give Link a goddess letter, and it was an extremely easy way for me to get him and Malon to admit their feelings for each other. It's a technique I'm going to experiment with. I might make some slight changes if I decide it doesn't work, although with my confidence in my own writing, I'm just as likely to rip down the whole fic as I am to change that part. But, I am extremely tolerant with myself, so the fic IS staying up, and I'm probably not going to change it much. In fact, the only part I've changed so far is the fact that at the beginning of chapter 2, it used to say Princess Malon, rather than just Malon. It didn't work too well, and on the advice of a friend, namely my first reviewer, I changed it.
By the way, the guy that wrote that first review is an oddball. It's actually his fault that I use my arm to stir glazes in pottery class... Yeah, I know, TMI. Just had to put that in. Sayonara!
The Switch
Chapter 9
Day Two: Afternoon
Link
Link rode away from Kakariko Village, not thinking about how he obtained his new item, but of Malon. Funny as it sounded, Link felt strange that it didn't seem strange to be completely emotionally adjusted to being a seventeen year old. Link used to think of Malon as his weird friend from the ranch, but now that they were both grown up, he thought she was the most beautiful thing on the planet and he was completely in love with her. He was absentmindedly looking through his pocket when he found a letter...
Dear Link,
It seems you have learned of the situation surrounding Zelda and Malon. You must not speak of this to anyone. The two girls were not even meant to know about the other's wish. Inside the envelope is an earring that will help you hold your tongue.
It also seems that you and Malon have affections towards each other. This is perfectly acceptable, but you must not allow anybody, possibly with the exception of Zelda, to know, for when the wish is undone, everyone will think that you were romantically involved with Princess Zelda. If you are then seen with Malon, well, we do not need to tell you what will happen.
/\
/\/\
As Link replaced his silver earring with the gold one from the envelope, he thought about his letter. He didn't want to imagine what would happen if... Wait... 'have affections towards each other,'?! That meant that Malon liked him as well! That eased his mind a bit, and he continued on his way.
When Link got to the ranch, he saw Talon just a little ways off, returning from the previous day's deliveries. Link sent Epona off in the direction of the forest and hurried into the ranch. "Zelda! Malon! Talon's coming back!" If Talon caught Malon at Lon Lon Ranch, there'd be some explaining to do! Malon quickly used her new magic to pick up the picnic and she and Link fled to the secret room.
Link pulled Malon through the warp to the Lost Woods, and they found themselves in a clearing. It was surrounded by dense trees, and the only ways out were the tree stump they came through and a ladder inside of a hollowed out tree trunk that seemed to climb up to nowhere, but really connected to a trap door in Link's treehouse that Malon had created.
"What did you do that for?" Malon asked.
"I thought that maybe we could have our picnic after all," said Link. With that, Malon brought out the picnic from Lon Lon Ranch and sat down next to Link, smiling at him gently.
Yeah, it's different. Like I said, this is a new writing style for me, and I still need to adjust. I felt compelled to give Link a goddess letter, and it was an extremely easy way for me to get him and Malon to admit their feelings for each other. It's a technique I'm going to experiment with. I might make some slight changes if I decide it doesn't work, although with my confidence in my own writing, I'm just as likely to rip down the whole fic as I am to change that part. But, I am extremely tolerant with myself, so the fic IS staying up, and I'm probably not going to change it much. In fact, the only part I've changed so far is the fact that at the beginning of chapter 2, it used to say Princess Malon, rather than just Malon. It didn't work too well, and on the advice of a friend, namely my first reviewer, I changed it.
By the way, the guy that wrote that first review is an oddball. It's actually his fault that I use my arm to stir glazes in pottery class... Yeah, I know, TMI. Just had to put that in. Sayonara!