A/N: Hi again pplz! This Chapter might be a little short because I want to
get it up for you guys! So I'll probably write like half of what would be a
full chapter, put it up and then keep working on the rest of it. How does
that sound?
Here are some comments I got:
Shadowweaver: "wow! This is as good as reading the books. I am jelous, you've got Colfer's style of writing perfect and have even improved some aspects of it. Great chappie, update soon."
Thank you so much :) That means a lot to me:)
Angel: "Wow!! This is an amazing story! I was highly doubtful when I read the summary but it doesn't even do your story credit! Wonderful! Very good spelling, I only caught one error. Course was spelled Coarse in your story. Course=(Of course) Coarse=(rough, vulgar). And of course I remember that song on Casper! I love that song!"
Thanks for telling me :) I changed the summary. I know I'm terrible w/ that spelling. it actually all started when I was typing the line "Even the smallest person can change the course of the future." And then my friend was like "No! It doesn't go like that!" and ever since I've spelled it wrong all the time. its like jinx! I love that song too ^-^
Animezebra: "Oh wow...u have to update soon. I need to know what happens! And btw, "Remember Me This Way" is one of the prettiest songs ever...use it if you can! That would be so sweet!"
Yah, I love that song. I'm singing it in an up coming talent show. I will try to make a fic for it soon then :)
Cutykitt: "Hey i joined fan fiction because of you your agreat writer please keep going, i am serious i need to now what happens next. I cant wait to read more of your stuff by the way do you mind if i print the story read again off-line?"
First of all I'm very flattered. Secondly, go right ahead! I'm happy somebody likes my story so much!
Cutykitt: "I agree with tine foaly isnt quite right hes the hardest personality to get but i was surprised by the wat you portrayed Artemis, just like the book the one thing was wouldn't he be 15 not sixteen it said he was thirteen in etrinity cube right? i am just not sure. well other than that i wanted to praise your work one last time and say (I love that song, amd that movie). Well write on you have me caught i going to check every day to see if you've written more."
Hi again^-^ Yah, Foaly is hard. I'll just try to be as sarcastic as possible^-^ lol, no I have to go back and read some Foaly parts in Artemis Fowl I, II and III. As for the age; I wanted him to be 16 in this story so I decided that the Arctic incident had been in the middle of the year and the Eternity Code had been at the end so about a month after Artemis was brain wiped he would have his 14th birthday. That's why at the beginning I made Holly think 'two years ago- or almost three now' because I wanted him to be closer to 14. so approximately 2 years later is when this story starts when Artemis has just recently turned 16. Why didn't I just make it 3 years later you ask? Aha! It has something to do with a dwarf and a reunion. Good question BTW :)
Now For the story:
(I rewrote it a bit)
Trees whizzed by below her taut flying position. Holly Short was heading North towards the colossal Fowl Manor, currently 7 miles from her destination. She had 25 minutes to get there and retrieve Artemis Fowl before he -and feasibly her as well- would be stuck in yet another Time Stop. Only this time it would not be simply a means to render them incapable of any resistance or attack- they would be Blue Rinsed off the face of the earth.
Her ride to the surface had been a nightmare. To say it was a 'bumpy-ride' would be the understatement of the year, but Foaly had managed to get her above ground in one piece. The landing was another story. Since the pod had no power there was no way for Holly to control it. Basically all she could do was sit back and hope the pod landed on something soft- it didn't. She wasn't exactly looking forward to going back down the shoot either- no power meant no return flight- she would have to survive with her heat repellant LEP uniform and a set of Humming Bird Wings.
Holly approached the Manor with only 8 minutes to spare. She performed a basic landing tactic by doing a backwards flip towards the ground so her feet landed as soon a she was right side up once more. She had no x-ray vision contacts, no heat sensitive lens in her helmet and no genius centaur that was three steps ahead of the operation and ready to walk her through it. She would have to find Artemis the hard way.
She set her wings to hover and glided down the expansive driveway. She traveled quickly enough not to waste time but not too fast that she would miss something. Decorative trees lined the driveway making it hard to see beyond them. 7 minutes remained on the clock.
The trees were becoming much too dense to see anything past where they grew so she expertly punched a few buttons on the strap that held the elaborate wings to her body and rose to about 7 feet above the cement. It was then, with only 6 minutes to spare, that Holly spotted her target. A tall boy, seemingly in a hurry, entered the Manor about the length of a foot ball field from where she was now. Captain Short sped up and landed where the trees ended- about 20 yards from the entrance way. When her feet touched ground she immediately noticed the tremors that ran through the earth- a sign of a poorly devised and inaccurate Time Stop; this could be dangerous. Holly checked her watch; she should still have at least 5 minutes before anything even started to happen.
The ground was jumping about so much at this point that Holly had to constantly shift her weight around in order to remain standing. About to run for it, she saw two familiar Mud Men round the corner of the Manor and she halted. Just then Artemis came rolling down the front steps and landed in a rather uncomfortable-looking position. She began to run to him but she lost her footing on the quaking earth beneath her and crashed to the ground. Two things happened then- first there was a loud 'CRACK!' that sounded like troll had split its head open. It was coming from a large marble gargoyle right above where Artemis was laying limply. Second; the two Mud Men were staring right at her. She looked down at her hands. She was visible! The tremors in the earth were apparently canceling out the vibration of her body which enabled her to become invisible to the human eye. This was going to cause problems- if their seeing her hadn't brought back a few very reticent memories, it would certainly give them something to talk about!
She hated to do it but it was necessary- she set her Neutrino to stun and shot a masterfully aimed laser beam at them both; knocking them off their feet and out of consciousness. At the same moment the gargoyle fell from his crumbling base and landed on top of Artemis.
"Great," She thought, "Just what I need."
She looked at her watch which told her she had 3 minutes, but the earth was moving so much now that she doubted she had even a whole minute left to her. She cleared the 20 yards as fast as she could and tried to lift the rock that pinned Artemis to his front steps. No luck. She could hear the gurgling sound of a Time Stop wall in the distance. She'd always thought of the noise as calming- much like the noise a stream makes, but now it only managed to cause her further distress. She hastily pulled out a long cable from her waist- a moon belt. Expertly, she tied it to the statue and started up her wings. She flew into the air, lifting the statue from Artemis's chest, flew over to the left and cut the cord- the cement pulverized the marble figure. The roar of the approaching Time wall was almost deafening now. She zipped back down and lifted the unconscious Artemis as though she were holding an infant.
Holly expeditiously fastened a strap- that normally crossed her chest to secure her wings- around Artemis' shoulders and pushed her humming-bird controls into full throttle, launching herself into the air. She had taken off none to soon for just as she was leaving the ground she saw the familiar shimmering wall of a time stop closing in around them. She straightened out her body and flew vertically towards the closing dome that now surrounded the Manor. If she wasn't carrying Artemis she could have made it out easily but the extra weight slowed her down considerably. She gripped the emergency boost handles on her wings, straining the motor and sleek wire frame. Her eyes were squinted and her jaw was set in determination. At the last moment she cleared the opening with only inches to spare and rocketed through the evening sky.
A/N: Better? Better. Ok. I'm writing the next chapter now.
Here are some comments I got:
Shadowweaver: "wow! This is as good as reading the books. I am jelous, you've got Colfer's style of writing perfect and have even improved some aspects of it. Great chappie, update soon."
Thank you so much :) That means a lot to me:)
Angel: "Wow!! This is an amazing story! I was highly doubtful when I read the summary but it doesn't even do your story credit! Wonderful! Very good spelling, I only caught one error. Course was spelled Coarse in your story. Course=(Of course) Coarse=(rough, vulgar). And of course I remember that song on Casper! I love that song!"
Thanks for telling me :) I changed the summary. I know I'm terrible w/ that spelling. it actually all started when I was typing the line "Even the smallest person can change the course of the future." And then my friend was like "No! It doesn't go like that!" and ever since I've spelled it wrong all the time. its like jinx! I love that song too ^-^
Animezebra: "Oh wow...u have to update soon. I need to know what happens! And btw, "Remember Me This Way" is one of the prettiest songs ever...use it if you can! That would be so sweet!"
Yah, I love that song. I'm singing it in an up coming talent show. I will try to make a fic for it soon then :)
Cutykitt: "Hey i joined fan fiction because of you your agreat writer please keep going, i am serious i need to now what happens next. I cant wait to read more of your stuff by the way do you mind if i print the story read again off-line?"
First of all I'm very flattered. Secondly, go right ahead! I'm happy somebody likes my story so much!
Cutykitt: "I agree with tine foaly isnt quite right hes the hardest personality to get but i was surprised by the wat you portrayed Artemis, just like the book the one thing was wouldn't he be 15 not sixteen it said he was thirteen in etrinity cube right? i am just not sure. well other than that i wanted to praise your work one last time and say (I love that song, amd that movie). Well write on you have me caught i going to check every day to see if you've written more."
Hi again^-^ Yah, Foaly is hard. I'll just try to be as sarcastic as possible^-^ lol, no I have to go back and read some Foaly parts in Artemis Fowl I, II and III. As for the age; I wanted him to be 16 in this story so I decided that the Arctic incident had been in the middle of the year and the Eternity Code had been at the end so about a month after Artemis was brain wiped he would have his 14th birthday. That's why at the beginning I made Holly think 'two years ago- or almost three now' because I wanted him to be closer to 14. so approximately 2 years later is when this story starts when Artemis has just recently turned 16. Why didn't I just make it 3 years later you ask? Aha! It has something to do with a dwarf and a reunion. Good question BTW :)
Now For the story:
(I rewrote it a bit)
Trees whizzed by below her taut flying position. Holly Short was heading North towards the colossal Fowl Manor, currently 7 miles from her destination. She had 25 minutes to get there and retrieve Artemis Fowl before he -and feasibly her as well- would be stuck in yet another Time Stop. Only this time it would not be simply a means to render them incapable of any resistance or attack- they would be Blue Rinsed off the face of the earth.
Her ride to the surface had been a nightmare. To say it was a 'bumpy-ride' would be the understatement of the year, but Foaly had managed to get her above ground in one piece. The landing was another story. Since the pod had no power there was no way for Holly to control it. Basically all she could do was sit back and hope the pod landed on something soft- it didn't. She wasn't exactly looking forward to going back down the shoot either- no power meant no return flight- she would have to survive with her heat repellant LEP uniform and a set of Humming Bird Wings.
Holly approached the Manor with only 8 minutes to spare. She performed a basic landing tactic by doing a backwards flip towards the ground so her feet landed as soon a she was right side up once more. She had no x-ray vision contacts, no heat sensitive lens in her helmet and no genius centaur that was three steps ahead of the operation and ready to walk her through it. She would have to find Artemis the hard way.
She set her wings to hover and glided down the expansive driveway. She traveled quickly enough not to waste time but not too fast that she would miss something. Decorative trees lined the driveway making it hard to see beyond them. 7 minutes remained on the clock.
The trees were becoming much too dense to see anything past where they grew so she expertly punched a few buttons on the strap that held the elaborate wings to her body and rose to about 7 feet above the cement. It was then, with only 6 minutes to spare, that Holly spotted her target. A tall boy, seemingly in a hurry, entered the Manor about the length of a foot ball field from where she was now. Captain Short sped up and landed where the trees ended- about 20 yards from the entrance way. When her feet touched ground she immediately noticed the tremors that ran through the earth- a sign of a poorly devised and inaccurate Time Stop; this could be dangerous. Holly checked her watch; she should still have at least 5 minutes before anything even started to happen.
The ground was jumping about so much at this point that Holly had to constantly shift her weight around in order to remain standing. About to run for it, she saw two familiar Mud Men round the corner of the Manor and she halted. Just then Artemis came rolling down the front steps and landed in a rather uncomfortable-looking position. She began to run to him but she lost her footing on the quaking earth beneath her and crashed to the ground. Two things happened then- first there was a loud 'CRACK!' that sounded like troll had split its head open. It was coming from a large marble gargoyle right above where Artemis was laying limply. Second; the two Mud Men were staring right at her. She looked down at her hands. She was visible! The tremors in the earth were apparently canceling out the vibration of her body which enabled her to become invisible to the human eye. This was going to cause problems- if their seeing her hadn't brought back a few very reticent memories, it would certainly give them something to talk about!
She hated to do it but it was necessary- she set her Neutrino to stun and shot a masterfully aimed laser beam at them both; knocking them off their feet and out of consciousness. At the same moment the gargoyle fell from his crumbling base and landed on top of Artemis.
"Great," She thought, "Just what I need."
She looked at her watch which told her she had 3 minutes, but the earth was moving so much now that she doubted she had even a whole minute left to her. She cleared the 20 yards as fast as she could and tried to lift the rock that pinned Artemis to his front steps. No luck. She could hear the gurgling sound of a Time Stop wall in the distance. She'd always thought of the noise as calming- much like the noise a stream makes, but now it only managed to cause her further distress. She hastily pulled out a long cable from her waist- a moon belt. Expertly, she tied it to the statue and started up her wings. She flew into the air, lifting the statue from Artemis's chest, flew over to the left and cut the cord- the cement pulverized the marble figure. The roar of the approaching Time wall was almost deafening now. She zipped back down and lifted the unconscious Artemis as though she were holding an infant.
Holly expeditiously fastened a strap- that normally crossed her chest to secure her wings- around Artemis' shoulders and pushed her humming-bird controls into full throttle, launching herself into the air. She had taken off none to soon for just as she was leaving the ground she saw the familiar shimmering wall of a time stop closing in around them. She straightened out her body and flew vertically towards the closing dome that now surrounded the Manor. If she wasn't carrying Artemis she could have made it out easily but the extra weight slowed her down considerably. She gripped the emergency boost handles on her wings, straining the motor and sleek wire frame. Her eyes were squinted and her jaw was set in determination. At the last moment she cleared the opening with only inches to spare and rocketed through the evening sky.
A/N: Better? Better. Ok. I'm writing the next chapter now.