A/N: Whoa! Hey people, where's the love? I went to check my e-mail when I
came home from school today and there was a lot of negative feedback from
Chapter 5 and 6. Did I screw up that badly? Well anyway, here's a couple I
wanted to reply to:
The Masked Avenger: "ARTEMIS? AND PLANTS? You are doing anything BUT keeping him in character. This better get more believable."
Ok, to this comment I say sorry if you find my writing corny/cheesey/fake/non-believable or whatever. As for the plants thing- first of all BOTANY (and Medicine) are two very significant fields of science. Second of all, in the end of the third book Artemis says that instead of liking the Impressionists he was drawn to more fantastical subject matter. So I was widening this idea by saying over the course of 2 years he had become drawn to other things that were related to the fairies. My reasons for this will be revealed later. Also, the characterization might be hard to pick out for Artemis in the beginning and for quite a while because first he has changed over the coarse of two years and then he is going to change into an even more mature 16 year old who has the same subconscious and desires as other 16 year olds. you get where I'm going right? K.
The Masked Avenger: "You need to check something. If Holly is 8 inches taller than her 4'8" colleagues, that means that she is 5'6". That would mean that she is TALLER than a 5'5" Root. There. That's your math lesson for the day."
Is that so? Let's count. 4'8'' + 1= 4'9'' +1=4'10'' +1=4'11'' +1=5'0'' +1=5'1'' +1=5'2'' +1=5'3'' +1=5'4''. Wanna count how many times I added 1? Let's see. I got eight. So... I would surmise that 4'8'' plus 8'' comes out to 5'4''. Touché
On a side note: The latter of the two reviews I chose to reply to was stated rather rudely and with a very cocky nature- two things which really aggravate me. Also, the statement was incorrect after they put so much time and energy into being so peremptory- which I'm sure, will really aggravate them. So in the future if anybody finds an error in my story that they think should be brought to my attention I would love to hear it! But be sure to take these first steps: think of a nice way to say it and make sure you know what you're talking about.
There was another review that I wanted to reply to except that this one I found to be very flattering. I wanted to e-mail you, LMTran, but your e- mail address was unavailable so I guess we'll have to settle for second best.
LMTran: "Ah, now don't you feel special? I've been searching for a worthy Artemis Fowl Fanfic, and your Story has been offically deemed more-than acceptable. Time for my compliments and my *ahem*, "Wise" words of advice.
Your writing style is great, and the way you incorporated several components that were mentioned in the Artemis Fowl books was stunning. You used the Time-stopping idea and still managed to keep all the details making sense and cooperate with the Time-stop situation. Good job! Does the hieght of Commander Root and Holly have anything to do with the plot later on, or is it just for fun? I like fun...But if it's part of the plot, that's good too.
I also must say, that your plot idea was ingenius, and I must applaude your intellect. I mean, I would have never thought of that (but considering my intelligence level...)!
Now, concerning Artemis's behavior. I would have thought he would be more...illegal. I mean, there's nothing wrong with the Artemis you have now, but It would certainly be more likely for him to be more criminal-like since the nature he had gained by associating with the fairies was erased. The diary entry in the end of "The Eternity Code" was a huge clue that he would pursue his black acts and try to find out about fairies sooner or later (Deja Vu for him...). Well, it's really kind of late for you to change that now, but I'm just saying for future reference. Good job, though! =DrnrnThis also concerns Artimis's behavior-there could have been a way for him to go his way as a law abiding person, but you've forgotton about the Mulch Diggums element (or maybe you didn't and you have plans for him later, I dunno). It couldn't have possibly taken Mulch 2 years to get out of his law problems, after all, Artimis fixed everything up for him-or maybe it does, I really don't know...But it just seemed appropiate to mention at a time like this. If you don't have plans for him in the story, you might want to put him in for a little twist.
Well, yur fanfic is great so far, and I hope you continue it soon! I'm hoping to read it more in the future, as long as you keep up a consistent pace!
-Lizzie-"
First of all I would like to say thank you for all of the compliments :) They're very encouraging. Now I will answer questions and comment on certain things:
Yes, the height does have something to do with plot development... Not so much for Root as far as I know but Holly's height does fit into the story.
Yes, about the whole legal/illegal matter: I know that Artemis had said that he would be secretly practicing criminal activities at the end of the 3rd book -which I think I did actually end up saying he had done in the beginning- but I dragged him away from that path for 2 reasons; I needed him to show more characteristics of actually having been influenced by the fairies and it is crucial to plot development that he not be a criminal... otherwise it would be too dramatic of a change and therefore unbelievable... But that is a good point. I've been meaning to explain that so thanks for the opportunity :)
Yes, I do have plans for Mulch in the future ^-^ No, it certainly wouldn't have taken Mulch two years to get out of trouble... although it may have been hard for him to STAY out of trouble for that long. Remember in the end of the book when Artemis gives Mulch that note that told him to tell his lawyer to check the date for the first search warrant of his cave? Then he advised Mulch to "keep his nose clean" for a couple of years after he was released. He was then instructed to bring the medallion back to Artemis. This is why the story is set 2 years in the future. That was a very good question as well.
-- Okay, thank you to all of my reviewers :) As a final word I just wanted to inform you that the next chapter will likely take a few days to get up as I am not feeling too well lately and my state of health seems to be affecting my writing ability in the sense that I don't make very clever connections in my chapters. I've noticed this when re-reading the most recent chapters and I will fix them eventually. Also I'm finding myself in very irritable moods so the wave of negative comments isn't going over too well at the moment...
Well I luv you guyz and I will try to have the next chapter up ASAP.
P.S. I added some more pictures to that story site if you wanna check it out: w w w . g e o c i t i e s . c o m / a r t e m i s f o w l _ i i / T H R . h t m l
The Masked Avenger: "ARTEMIS? AND PLANTS? You are doing anything BUT keeping him in character. This better get more believable."
Ok, to this comment I say sorry if you find my writing corny/cheesey/fake/non-believable or whatever. As for the plants thing- first of all BOTANY (and Medicine) are two very significant fields of science. Second of all, in the end of the third book Artemis says that instead of liking the Impressionists he was drawn to more fantastical subject matter. So I was widening this idea by saying over the course of 2 years he had become drawn to other things that were related to the fairies. My reasons for this will be revealed later. Also, the characterization might be hard to pick out for Artemis in the beginning and for quite a while because first he has changed over the coarse of two years and then he is going to change into an even more mature 16 year old who has the same subconscious and desires as other 16 year olds. you get where I'm going right? K.
The Masked Avenger: "You need to check something. If Holly is 8 inches taller than her 4'8" colleagues, that means that she is 5'6". That would mean that she is TALLER than a 5'5" Root. There. That's your math lesson for the day."
Is that so? Let's count. 4'8'' + 1= 4'9'' +1=4'10'' +1=4'11'' +1=5'0'' +1=5'1'' +1=5'2'' +1=5'3'' +1=5'4''. Wanna count how many times I added 1? Let's see. I got eight. So... I would surmise that 4'8'' plus 8'' comes out to 5'4''. Touché
On a side note: The latter of the two reviews I chose to reply to was stated rather rudely and with a very cocky nature- two things which really aggravate me. Also, the statement was incorrect after they put so much time and energy into being so peremptory- which I'm sure, will really aggravate them. So in the future if anybody finds an error in my story that they think should be brought to my attention I would love to hear it! But be sure to take these first steps: think of a nice way to say it and make sure you know what you're talking about.
There was another review that I wanted to reply to except that this one I found to be very flattering. I wanted to e-mail you, LMTran, but your e- mail address was unavailable so I guess we'll have to settle for second best.
LMTran: "Ah, now don't you feel special? I've been searching for a worthy Artemis Fowl Fanfic, and your Story has been offically deemed more-than acceptable. Time for my compliments and my *ahem*, "Wise" words of advice.
Your writing style is great, and the way you incorporated several components that were mentioned in the Artemis Fowl books was stunning. You used the Time-stopping idea and still managed to keep all the details making sense and cooperate with the Time-stop situation. Good job! Does the hieght of Commander Root and Holly have anything to do with the plot later on, or is it just for fun? I like fun...But if it's part of the plot, that's good too.
I also must say, that your plot idea was ingenius, and I must applaude your intellect. I mean, I would have never thought of that (but considering my intelligence level...)!
Now, concerning Artemis's behavior. I would have thought he would be more...illegal. I mean, there's nothing wrong with the Artemis you have now, but It would certainly be more likely for him to be more criminal-like since the nature he had gained by associating with the fairies was erased. The diary entry in the end of "The Eternity Code" was a huge clue that he would pursue his black acts and try to find out about fairies sooner or later (Deja Vu for him...). Well, it's really kind of late for you to change that now, but I'm just saying for future reference. Good job, though! =DrnrnThis also concerns Artimis's behavior-there could have been a way for him to go his way as a law abiding person, but you've forgotton about the Mulch Diggums element (or maybe you didn't and you have plans for him later, I dunno). It couldn't have possibly taken Mulch 2 years to get out of his law problems, after all, Artimis fixed everything up for him-or maybe it does, I really don't know...But it just seemed appropiate to mention at a time like this. If you don't have plans for him in the story, you might want to put him in for a little twist.
Well, yur fanfic is great so far, and I hope you continue it soon! I'm hoping to read it more in the future, as long as you keep up a consistent pace!
-Lizzie-"
First of all I would like to say thank you for all of the compliments :) They're very encouraging. Now I will answer questions and comment on certain things:
Yes, the height does have something to do with plot development... Not so much for Root as far as I know but Holly's height does fit into the story.
Yes, about the whole legal/illegal matter: I know that Artemis had said that he would be secretly practicing criminal activities at the end of the 3rd book -which I think I did actually end up saying he had done in the beginning- but I dragged him away from that path for 2 reasons; I needed him to show more characteristics of actually having been influenced by the fairies and it is crucial to plot development that he not be a criminal... otherwise it would be too dramatic of a change and therefore unbelievable... But that is a good point. I've been meaning to explain that so thanks for the opportunity :)
Yes, I do have plans for Mulch in the future ^-^ No, it certainly wouldn't have taken Mulch two years to get out of trouble... although it may have been hard for him to STAY out of trouble for that long. Remember in the end of the book when Artemis gives Mulch that note that told him to tell his lawyer to check the date for the first search warrant of his cave? Then he advised Mulch to "keep his nose clean" for a couple of years after he was released. He was then instructed to bring the medallion back to Artemis. This is why the story is set 2 years in the future. That was a very good question as well.
-- Okay, thank you to all of my reviewers :) As a final word I just wanted to inform you that the next chapter will likely take a few days to get up as I am not feeling too well lately and my state of health seems to be affecting my writing ability in the sense that I don't make very clever connections in my chapters. I've noticed this when re-reading the most recent chapters and I will fix them eventually. Also I'm finding myself in very irritable moods so the wave of negative comments isn't going over too well at the moment...
Well I luv you guyz and I will try to have the next chapter up ASAP.
P.S. I added some more pictures to that story site if you wanna check it out: w w w . g e o c i t i e s . c o m / a r t e m i s f o w l _ i i / T H R . h t m l