VERY IMPORTANT NOTE ABOUT STORY, YOU MUST READ!!!
I will be re-making this story, the prologue is much more better and longer than the original. The name of the story is:
"Changing for the Best"
It will be the same story, but re-made (it will continue being a JAKotsu/KAGome!)
It is MUCH, MUCH BETTER than this one, and I hope to update faster! Check it out I will post it at the same time as this note, so it will be probably up by now. To be easy to find it you can go to my profile and in there you can link to "Changing for the Best"
Last Review Responses of this Story:
Itadakimasu: Thank-you very much, you are one of the only ones of "Now What?" that is reviewing. I also didn't liked a lot the idea of Bankotsu dying, but it was necessary. And yes, Jakotsu will HATE Kagome at first. I hope you can review from the beginning "Changing for the Better" It will really making me happy to see your reviews, the first paragraph of the prologue is the same, but the following ones are new. I really worked hard on them, so I hope they turned out good (in my opinion they did, but in this case my opinion about my story doesn't count. The only opinion that counts is the one of the reviewers.
SuzumiTenshi: Really? I also didn't saw any Jak/Kag that's why it seemed a good idea/challenge. About how I'm going to make him straight, you will have to find out ^_^, (that's part of the plot). I really appreciate and thank your help, but I will prefer to do it alone (I like challenges), THANK-YOU! About the paragraphs and enters, please check "Changing for the Better" and say me if you like it, I tried to do it as you suggested to. And if you do not like it, do not hesitate in telling me and please place an example of the story and how you will like it. Thank-you, I really love, appreciate that you want to read more. I will be no longer updating this story, instead I will be updating "Changing for the Better" it is the same as this one, but with better prologue. And I will also be updating "Now What?" A Bank/Kag fic (Jakotsu is alive in this one as well as Bankotsu ^_^).
Thank-you.
I hope to see you all in "Changing for the Better". From my point of view, it has a lot better prologue of the story and also (I think) better editing. I already checked the spelling.
And now, I will give you a taste of the prologue:
'That's because I don't want you to get hurt. Our journey is full of dangers and the most provable thing is that she will die in one of our battles, well that's what I hope so.'
'And what if she doesn't die?'
'I will personally kill her and by that way you will recover your rightfully souls.' he cupped her chin with one of his hands. 'Maybe she and you look alike, but her face is just a mere copy of yours; yours is much more beautiful than hers, my dearest Kikyo.' with that said they joined in an lasting kiss.
On that moment, I felt how my heart broke into pieces, one by one, slowly. I turned back and ran as fast as I could. When I realized, I was in front of the Goshinboku, I placed my back on the ground, slowly, almost painfully. I kneeled before it and starting to cry like crazy, after some minutes I turned to my pack and went to it. Then I opened it and got out a knife, which I had brought from home to cut the food. I stood with the knife, holding it firmly. I stood in-front of the Goshinboku and placed the knife before my neck; cold iron touching my skin. I took all my power and will into my right hand, which was holding the knife.
The knife was about to cut my skin and finish with my life, when in a flash, silver hair passed by and took the knife out of my hand.
I turned to the direction the flash of silver hair took, and I saw....
I took my favorite part from the prologue. So, if you like it, go and find the story. Please review, I will update the story if you review, thank-you for your reviews, time and patience you have me; I really appreciate it!
I will also appreciate it A LOT if you could re-review (or with different messages in the review) "Changing for the Best"
THANK-YOU!!!
NOTE:
I will be erasing this story in two or less days. And this story will not have any updates since "Changing for the Best" will take its place, the first chapter will be the same or a bit longer (it all depends in how much free time I have).
Take care, and thank-you! I hope to see you there!
Matta Ne =^.^=
I will be re-making this story, the prologue is much more better and longer than the original. The name of the story is:
"Changing for the Best"
It will be the same story, but re-made (it will continue being a JAKotsu/KAGome!)
It is MUCH, MUCH BETTER than this one, and I hope to update faster! Check it out I will post it at the same time as this note, so it will be probably up by now. To be easy to find it you can go to my profile and in there you can link to "Changing for the Best"
Last Review Responses of this Story:
Itadakimasu: Thank-you very much, you are one of the only ones of "Now What?" that is reviewing. I also didn't liked a lot the idea of Bankotsu dying, but it was necessary. And yes, Jakotsu will HATE Kagome at first. I hope you can review from the beginning "Changing for the Better" It will really making me happy to see your reviews, the first paragraph of the prologue is the same, but the following ones are new. I really worked hard on them, so I hope they turned out good (in my opinion they did, but in this case my opinion about my story doesn't count. The only opinion that counts is the one of the reviewers.
SuzumiTenshi: Really? I also didn't saw any Jak/Kag that's why it seemed a good idea/challenge. About how I'm going to make him straight, you will have to find out ^_^, (that's part of the plot). I really appreciate and thank your help, but I will prefer to do it alone (I like challenges), THANK-YOU! About the paragraphs and enters, please check "Changing for the Better" and say me if you like it, I tried to do it as you suggested to. And if you do not like it, do not hesitate in telling me and please place an example of the story and how you will like it. Thank-you, I really love, appreciate that you want to read more. I will be no longer updating this story, instead I will be updating "Changing for the Better" it is the same as this one, but with better prologue. And I will also be updating "Now What?" A Bank/Kag fic (Jakotsu is alive in this one as well as Bankotsu ^_^).
Thank-you.
I hope to see you all in "Changing for the Better". From my point of view, it has a lot better prologue of the story and also (I think) better editing. I already checked the spelling.
And now, I will give you a taste of the prologue:
'That's because I don't want you to get hurt. Our journey is full of dangers and the most provable thing is that she will die in one of our battles, well that's what I hope so.'
'And what if she doesn't die?'
'I will personally kill her and by that way you will recover your rightfully souls.' he cupped her chin with one of his hands. 'Maybe she and you look alike, but her face is just a mere copy of yours; yours is much more beautiful than hers, my dearest Kikyo.' with that said they joined in an lasting kiss.
On that moment, I felt how my heart broke into pieces, one by one, slowly. I turned back and ran as fast as I could. When I realized, I was in front of the Goshinboku, I placed my back on the ground, slowly, almost painfully. I kneeled before it and starting to cry like crazy, after some minutes I turned to my pack and went to it. Then I opened it and got out a knife, which I had brought from home to cut the food. I stood with the knife, holding it firmly. I stood in-front of the Goshinboku and placed the knife before my neck; cold iron touching my skin. I took all my power and will into my right hand, which was holding the knife.
The knife was about to cut my skin and finish with my life, when in a flash, silver hair passed by and took the knife out of my hand.
I turned to the direction the flash of silver hair took, and I saw....
I took my favorite part from the prologue. So, if you like it, go and find the story. Please review, I will update the story if you review, thank-you for your reviews, time and patience you have me; I really appreciate it!
I will also appreciate it A LOT if you could re-review (or with different messages in the review) "Changing for the Best"
THANK-YOU!!!
NOTE:
I will be erasing this story in two or less days. And this story will not have any updates since "Changing for the Best" will take its place, the first chapter will be the same or a bit longer (it all depends in how much free time I have).
Take care, and thank-you! I hope to see you there!
Matta Ne =^.^=