Chapter
Eating all of the ice cream
Authors Note:
Bella- Thank you for the support. You are truly one of my most loyal readers.
Wildgirl44177-Thanks for the help =p
Prima: I understand that I was over dramatic about Jay's review! Like she has said to me 'blame it on a bad day.' I am getting help in grammar and spelling for my story.
Undoubtablyjess- you're also a loyal reader of this story. Thank you for your comments and support.
Professional Scatter brain- Thank you! I was just having a bad day! Hopefully things get better.
Coffeeluver- I still think that if someone doesn't like something they shouldn't read it and I love your support for me. Thank you coffee luver ;)
Britt- I loved your review! I was laughing while reading it. [Having a bad day, laughing was a good thing]
Osaka- I do see that they've both made some good points. Which is why I've asked for some help. I'm glad that you love my fic and look forward to it. It makes me very happy to hear things like that.
Xoxo_cmm_xoxo- Thank you! I love you! The point you made is exactly what I was thinking [we write to be unrealistic and give our own ideas]
MrSchimpf: I write my authors notes out of my opinion. To me they wouldn't need to be spelled the right way. But if you say so then that's good to know. My spelling in my actual story, on the other hand, needs work.
Last but not least - Jay- Even though I still partially disagree with some of the comments you've made I've asked for help. Just like you, I was having a very bad day and wasn't in any kind of mood for such a comment. I was over dramatic and I apologize for being so. The only thing I don't want to change is the way my characters are written. People change over years and this is the way I want them to be. Thank you for bringing this all to my attention. I know it's better off for me to hear real opinions of my writing.
To the rest of the reviewers- thank you for your support, advice and time.
Max fought back tears as she carefully walked down the darkened stairs. She was having trouble dealing with the fact that she wanted to lay on the floor and cry her-self to sleep. All for Tristan; whom she didn't even want to be with. Or at least she didn't think she wanted to be with him. Her mind kept reflecting on his words ' I love you! You're selfish! I found someone who actually cares about me.'
Meanwhile .
"Go to her." The words were simple but they held much more than simplicity.
He tensed up as Jenny released her hand from his grip. "I can't leave you."
"Yes you can." She avoided his eyes and spoke softly. "Your in love with her."
"I love you." He tried to swallow but his throat was dry.
She cringed, "You might, but that doesn't change the fact that your in love with her."
"I can't be with her."
"Stop fighting it."
"She doesn't love me."
Her face fell and her expression shattered in pieces. "She ran out of here, quicker than I could blink."
"So?"
"Her eyes were watery and her lips were trembling. She might have gone fast but I'm sure if I seen so did you. " He didn't say anything, knowing that Jenny was right about Rory, "Go to her." She said again, her voice more persistent this time.
"Why?"
"I couldn't sleep beside you every day and wonder who your dreaming about." Finally she gave eye contact with him, letting him know she was serious. "Me or her."
"It wouldn't be like that."
"My guess would be her." Avoiding his comment with a sigh.
"I could be happy with you."
"You could be happier with her."
"I feel good when I'm with you."
"She opens your eyes and helps you breathe." Smiling slightly, "I can't compare."
After a long moment of silence he forced him self to look into her eyes. "So it's over?"
"I love you."
"I love-."
Bringing her pointer finger to his lips and smiling softly. It felt as if she was convincing him, out of the good or her heart, to let go, "Let this be a happy ending." She finished softly.
"What if I cant live without you?"
"Seriously, I doubt you wouldn't be able to." Getting up and heading toward to door, she said, "You have my number, just in case things don't work out for you."
Giving a soft smile and a thankful nod, he whispered, "I'll miss you."
"Don't give up now and be scared to love her Tristan. You have always loved her and no one could take that from you. She'll come around, give her some time." Her last words came out a faint whisper as she disappeared into the darkened hallway and out of his life.
Meanwhile.
Rory wondered how many ice cream bars she had consumed over the last half hour. She just sat there, in the dimly lit kitchen and ate the melting ice cream. The refrigerator was off, obviously due to the black out. While everyone seemed to be munching on things that didn't need to be heated or frozen, she ate all the ice cream she could. Finishing off, what seemed like the fiftieth chocolate ice cream bar, she got up and decided the bathroom was the best place to relax. Seeing that there were so many bathrooms in the damn house, she picked the closest one out of area to the 'still going on' party. After about an hour of cries and screams from the power being out, people began going back to what they were doing, Thinking it was crazy that people were still enjoying their selves at almost four in the morning, Rory sighed and slid down the inside of the bathroom door. Chuckling softly to her self, thinking that people with rampant hormones have more fun in the dark anyway.
Meanwhile .
Tristan found a nice quiet room and lay on the bed. The pillows were soft and he relaxed into them. Not wanting to think any further to the events that had taken place within the past hour, he drifted off to sleep.
..
Shaky. Short. Boring. Don't mind the spelling/grammar and the usual mistakes I make. I'm looking for a beta-reader, don't worry If any of you care to help with that or offer, email me or write it in a review. Gracias!
Authors Note:
Bella- Thank you for the support. You are truly one of my most loyal readers.
Wildgirl44177-Thanks for the help =p
Prima: I understand that I was over dramatic about Jay's review! Like she has said to me 'blame it on a bad day.' I am getting help in grammar and spelling for my story.
Undoubtablyjess- you're also a loyal reader of this story. Thank you for your comments and support.
Professional Scatter brain- Thank you! I was just having a bad day! Hopefully things get better.
Coffeeluver- I still think that if someone doesn't like something they shouldn't read it and I love your support for me. Thank you coffee luver ;)
Britt- I loved your review! I was laughing while reading it. [Having a bad day, laughing was a good thing]
Osaka- I do see that they've both made some good points. Which is why I've asked for some help. I'm glad that you love my fic and look forward to it. It makes me very happy to hear things like that.
Xoxo_cmm_xoxo- Thank you! I love you! The point you made is exactly what I was thinking [we write to be unrealistic and give our own ideas]
MrSchimpf: I write my authors notes out of my opinion. To me they wouldn't need to be spelled the right way. But if you say so then that's good to know. My spelling in my actual story, on the other hand, needs work.
Last but not least - Jay- Even though I still partially disagree with some of the comments you've made I've asked for help. Just like you, I was having a very bad day and wasn't in any kind of mood for such a comment. I was over dramatic and I apologize for being so. The only thing I don't want to change is the way my characters are written. People change over years and this is the way I want them to be. Thank you for bringing this all to my attention. I know it's better off for me to hear real opinions of my writing.
To the rest of the reviewers- thank you for your support, advice and time.
Max fought back tears as she carefully walked down the darkened stairs. She was having trouble dealing with the fact that she wanted to lay on the floor and cry her-self to sleep. All for Tristan; whom she didn't even want to be with. Or at least she didn't think she wanted to be with him. Her mind kept reflecting on his words ' I love you! You're selfish! I found someone who actually cares about me.'
Meanwhile .
"Go to her." The words were simple but they held much more than simplicity.
He tensed up as Jenny released her hand from his grip. "I can't leave you."
"Yes you can." She avoided his eyes and spoke softly. "Your in love with her."
"I love you." He tried to swallow but his throat was dry.
She cringed, "You might, but that doesn't change the fact that your in love with her."
"I can't be with her."
"Stop fighting it."
"She doesn't love me."
Her face fell and her expression shattered in pieces. "She ran out of here, quicker than I could blink."
"So?"
"Her eyes were watery and her lips were trembling. She might have gone fast but I'm sure if I seen so did you. " He didn't say anything, knowing that Jenny was right about Rory, "Go to her." She said again, her voice more persistent this time.
"Why?"
"I couldn't sleep beside you every day and wonder who your dreaming about." Finally she gave eye contact with him, letting him know she was serious. "Me or her."
"It wouldn't be like that."
"My guess would be her." Avoiding his comment with a sigh.
"I could be happy with you."
"You could be happier with her."
"I feel good when I'm with you."
"She opens your eyes and helps you breathe." Smiling slightly, "I can't compare."
After a long moment of silence he forced him self to look into her eyes. "So it's over?"
"I love you."
"I love-."
Bringing her pointer finger to his lips and smiling softly. It felt as if she was convincing him, out of the good or her heart, to let go, "Let this be a happy ending." She finished softly.
"What if I cant live without you?"
"Seriously, I doubt you wouldn't be able to." Getting up and heading toward to door, she said, "You have my number, just in case things don't work out for you."
Giving a soft smile and a thankful nod, he whispered, "I'll miss you."
"Don't give up now and be scared to love her Tristan. You have always loved her and no one could take that from you. She'll come around, give her some time." Her last words came out a faint whisper as she disappeared into the darkened hallway and out of his life.
Meanwhile.
Rory wondered how many ice cream bars she had consumed over the last half hour. She just sat there, in the dimly lit kitchen and ate the melting ice cream. The refrigerator was off, obviously due to the black out. While everyone seemed to be munching on things that didn't need to be heated or frozen, she ate all the ice cream she could. Finishing off, what seemed like the fiftieth chocolate ice cream bar, she got up and decided the bathroom was the best place to relax. Seeing that there were so many bathrooms in the damn house, she picked the closest one out of area to the 'still going on' party. After about an hour of cries and screams from the power being out, people began going back to what they were doing, Thinking it was crazy that people were still enjoying their selves at almost four in the morning, Rory sighed and slid down the inside of the bathroom door. Chuckling softly to her self, thinking that people with rampant hormones have more fun in the dark anyway.
Meanwhile .
Tristan found a nice quiet room and lay on the bed. The pillows were soft and he relaxed into them. Not wanting to think any further to the events that had taken place within the past hour, he drifted off to sleep.
..
Shaky. Short. Boring. Don't mind the spelling/grammar and the usual mistakes I make. I'm looking for a beta-reader, don't worry If any of you care to help with that or offer, email me or write it in a review. Gracias!