Dorothy opened her eyes, and the rain poured hard upon her long, brown hair. Before her were thousands of ill people, huddled together with nothing more than a blanket each and a prayer.
Dorothy suspected they could be waiting there for several hours, but was ready to take on the challenge. The only trouble was, Carrie wasn't looking well. Dorothy held the sick girl close to her chest, and marched forward, trying to ignore the cold rain.
Many people were there just to praise God for the miracles, but everyone else was at the Kvon Altar for its healing water. Dorothy could not see the spring, for the four of them stood a mile back in line.
"What do we do now?" asked Dave.
"We wait and pray, just like everyone else." replied Dorothy.
They took their place in the line, and waited, their minds going a million miles a minute trying to take it all in. The smell of wet mud, the cries of pain and death...it was everywhere! Alyssa and Dave were anything but patient as they shivered in the damp night.
Carrie reached a weak hand up to grab Dorothy's collar. Dorothy's attention was snapped from the long line down to the little girl in her arms. Now that Carrie had Dorothy's complete attention, she touched her face gently.
"How much longer do we have to wait Dorothy? I feel so tired."
Dorothy looked into Carrie's eyes, and saw that she was drifting.
"It'll just be a bit longer, little one. Be patient, God smiles upon one who can keep such a virtue."
Carrie suddenly was forced to take a gasp for air, and then pulled Dorothy's face down close to her own.
"I thirst so for life!"
Dorothy's eyes widened. There was no way she was going to allow this innocent girl to die in her arms out here amongst all the despair.
Dorothy looked around her. People were dying all around them. Dorothy's mind was racing, she had to do something!
"It's not your time, little one!" she muttered under her breath.
Alyssa put her head on Dave's chest.
"Oh Dave!" she said quietly to her older brother. "We're losing her."
Dave held his sister close, knowing he had to be strong.
"Dorothy," he said. "Come, let us bring Carrie home."
Dorothy breathed heavily, in and out. She looked ahead of her, ignored Dave completely, and began to run through the crowd, Carrie safely held in her arms.
Dave and Alyssa dashed forward, desperately trying to keep up with Dorothy, calling out to her. But she was deaf to them, Dorothy's only thought lay at the altar.
Alyssa and Dave feared that the other people would be outraged that someone would run to the front, however to their surprise, the others in the crowd did not stop her from moving to the front of the line. They simply moved aside.
Dave and his sister heard people say, "The goddess lives!"
Dorothy then suddenly stopped.
Dave and Alyssa walked in front of their friend only to see that her eyes were glowing a golden color, and there was a golden heart on her forehead.
"Please save me goddess!" Carrie breathed quietly.
Golden wings appeared on Dorothy's back. She stroked a hand gently on Dave's cheek, as if in a daze, and smiled at him.
Dorothy threw her head back, emitting a golden glow all around her. She leapt up and began flying above the crowd. Everyone in the large mass of people then suddenly fell to their knees and starting praying, for they knew they would all soon be healed.
Despite wind, rain, thunder and lightning, Dorothy flew on, her white dress fluttering behind her. At last, she was above the Kvon Altar.
She allowed her feet to touch the ground and then fell to her knees.
The alter itself was made of white marble. Above the spring of water were marble cherub statues with their hands cupped over the spring, catching anything that might stain the pure waters.
She took some of the healing water in her hands, and gave it to Carrie. Just then, Dave and Alyssa caught up with their younger sister and Dorothy, panting from the long run.
Carrie began to glow, and when she stopped, the illness which had been holding her hostage had been lifted. Carrie ran to Alyssa's embrace, and then Dave held the two of them close as Dorothy stood slowly.
All of the people looked on in awe, wondering what she would do. Dorothy looked out at the crowd, her eyes still a golden stare.
The golden heart on her forehead morphed to a rose, and she outstretched her fingers. A golden mist left Dorothy's fingertips, and the entire crowd was healed of their illnesses, every one of them.
The rose disappeared, and everything became suddenly dark...
That's the revised version of chapter nine. I hope you like this one better. E-mail me with lots of reviews and e-mails. I love hearing from you. Thanks everybody, I hope you're enjoying!
Tori
Dorothy suspected they could be waiting there for several hours, but was ready to take on the challenge. The only trouble was, Carrie wasn't looking well. Dorothy held the sick girl close to her chest, and marched forward, trying to ignore the cold rain.
Many people were there just to praise God for the miracles, but everyone else was at the Kvon Altar for its healing water. Dorothy could not see the spring, for the four of them stood a mile back in line.
"What do we do now?" asked Dave.
"We wait and pray, just like everyone else." replied Dorothy.
They took their place in the line, and waited, their minds going a million miles a minute trying to take it all in. The smell of wet mud, the cries of pain and death...it was everywhere! Alyssa and Dave were anything but patient as they shivered in the damp night.
Carrie reached a weak hand up to grab Dorothy's collar. Dorothy's attention was snapped from the long line down to the little girl in her arms. Now that Carrie had Dorothy's complete attention, she touched her face gently.
"How much longer do we have to wait Dorothy? I feel so tired."
Dorothy looked into Carrie's eyes, and saw that she was drifting.
"It'll just be a bit longer, little one. Be patient, God smiles upon one who can keep such a virtue."
Carrie suddenly was forced to take a gasp for air, and then pulled Dorothy's face down close to her own.
"I thirst so for life!"
Dorothy's eyes widened. There was no way she was going to allow this innocent girl to die in her arms out here amongst all the despair.
Dorothy looked around her. People were dying all around them. Dorothy's mind was racing, she had to do something!
"It's not your time, little one!" she muttered under her breath.
Alyssa put her head on Dave's chest.
"Oh Dave!" she said quietly to her older brother. "We're losing her."
Dave held his sister close, knowing he had to be strong.
"Dorothy," he said. "Come, let us bring Carrie home."
Dorothy breathed heavily, in and out. She looked ahead of her, ignored Dave completely, and began to run through the crowd, Carrie safely held in her arms.
Dave and Alyssa dashed forward, desperately trying to keep up with Dorothy, calling out to her. But she was deaf to them, Dorothy's only thought lay at the altar.
Alyssa and Dave feared that the other people would be outraged that someone would run to the front, however to their surprise, the others in the crowd did not stop her from moving to the front of the line. They simply moved aside.
Dave and his sister heard people say, "The goddess lives!"
Dorothy then suddenly stopped.
Dave and Alyssa walked in front of their friend only to see that her eyes were glowing a golden color, and there was a golden heart on her forehead.
"Please save me goddess!" Carrie breathed quietly.
Golden wings appeared on Dorothy's back. She stroked a hand gently on Dave's cheek, as if in a daze, and smiled at him.
Dorothy threw her head back, emitting a golden glow all around her. She leapt up and began flying above the crowd. Everyone in the large mass of people then suddenly fell to their knees and starting praying, for they knew they would all soon be healed.
Despite wind, rain, thunder and lightning, Dorothy flew on, her white dress fluttering behind her. At last, she was above the Kvon Altar.
She allowed her feet to touch the ground and then fell to her knees.
The alter itself was made of white marble. Above the spring of water were marble cherub statues with their hands cupped over the spring, catching anything that might stain the pure waters.
She took some of the healing water in her hands, and gave it to Carrie. Just then, Dave and Alyssa caught up with their younger sister and Dorothy, panting from the long run.
Carrie began to glow, and when she stopped, the illness which had been holding her hostage had been lifted. Carrie ran to Alyssa's embrace, and then Dave held the two of them close as Dorothy stood slowly.
All of the people looked on in awe, wondering what she would do. Dorothy looked out at the crowd, her eyes still a golden stare.
The golden heart on her forehead morphed to a rose, and she outstretched her fingers. A golden mist left Dorothy's fingertips, and the entire crowd was healed of their illnesses, every one of them.
The rose disappeared, and everything became suddenly dark...
That's the revised version of chapter nine. I hope you like this one better. E-mail me with lots of reviews and e-mails. I love hearing from you. Thanks everybody, I hope you're enjoying!
Tori