How to Write a Kingdom Hearts Fic in 10 Steps
By Chi21
Chapter 2- Some Examples and Critiquing
~Note to self- look that word up in a dictionary!~
Disclaimer: I do not own Kingdom Hearts.
R&R, peeps!
Step 4) Figure out how to make your story better. Yes, even better than that. I said BETTER!
Below is a sample of a fic that never has been written. It is in script form, but I will demonstrate a story form afterwards. ***
Riku: Kairi, come share a paopu with me!
Kairi: Only if I can ask you a question first.
Riku: What?
Kairi: What posessed you to think I would ever in my right peanut-sized mind share a paopu with you, of all people?!
Riku: Ansem.
Kairi: *picks up a paopu* here. *Stuffs it down Riku's thrat*
Riku: *picks up a keyblade* huwwe. * Stuffs it down Kairi's throat*
Kairi and Riku looked at each other with their mishapen throats.
***
Okay, so that was the sample. Now, I'm gonna go through and spell check it.
As you can see, I said "Riku's thrat" instead of "Riku's throat." This obviously needs corrected.
After I'm done with that, I can look through and see if there is a place where I can make better words. I mean, use better vocabulary.
I suppose I could've used "shoved" instead of "stuffed." I also could've had Kairi go through some serious pain, like maybe DEATH! *thinking evil thoughts*
Below is a story format for the same sample.
***
Riku grabbed Kairi's arm.
"Kairi, come share a paopu with me," he pleaded. Kairi turned around to face him.
"Only if I can ask you a question first," the crimson-haired girl replied.
"What?" Riku asked.
"What posessed you to think that I would ever in my right peanut-sized mind share a paopu with you, of all people?" she asked suddenly. Riku was shocked for a minute, but he quickly came up with an answer.
"Ansem," Riku remarked. Kairi picked up a small star-shaped fruit.
"Here," she said. She stuffed the paopu down Riku's throat, with some satisfaction.
Although he could barely talk, for his neck was now deformed into a pointy collar, Riku replied, "Huwwe." He took out a keyblade and shoved it down Kairi's throat. Now she appeared to have a two-pronged right and a chocobo-shaped left. The two teens stared at each other for several moments.
***
I don't see any spelling mistakes, but I think the next to last sentence was kind of confusing and choppy.
As far as better writing goes, I would add some more adjectives like:
"What?" Riku asked incredulously.
Um, I might need to spell-check that. I don't have a clue what it means, but it sounds cool. Gotta go get the dictionary.
Mew Friendie: I can't even say that word!
But other than that, it was okay.
Step 5) If you haven't registered at ff.net, you need to do so at this point. It's really simple, and if you don't have an email address, just put your friend's. That's what I did! ~J/K Mew Friendie!~ Also you should create a profile. This is relatively easy to do. If you are good at following directions and not going off-topic. Both of which I am terrible at doing. ~Spams are your friends.~
Also, if you are stuck at a part or your story could use a good kick, check out some other stories for ideas. Ideas only! I hate copycats!
Or you could use the alternative choice of going to a bar and taking so many shots you get light-headed, just to think about some topics or get some fresh... er smokey air.
This goes along with the brainstorming part once again. From this point further, I am not going to mention if brainstorming applies. Because brainstorming is a hard word to type and I am about to put it on the "copy" button and paste it every time I need it. brainstorming!brainstorming!brainstorming!brainstorming!
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Telephone conversation:
Sui: It's Mew Suika, not Mew Friendie! Kazumi: Who's writing this fic, me or you?! Sui: I hate Friendie! Kazumi: Don't make me badmouth you! Sui: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! *sobbing* Kazumi: You are acting like Kairi!! Sui: *instantly stops crying* *foams at mouth* Kazumi:Kairi...childbirth....lemons!!!Hehehe... Sui: *flicks eyebrow* *lowers eyebrow* * raises eyebrow* EYEBROWS!! At this point, the girls 'dissolved into giggles.' The parents of both Mew Suika and Mew Kazumi came in and yelled at the girls until they disintergrated.
Please review so I can tell Suika that I got more reviews than she ever will! Also do me a favor and look up the word "disintergrated" in your dictionary. I love you!
Chapter 2- Some Examples and Critiquing
~Note to self- look that word up in a dictionary!~
Disclaimer: I do not own Kingdom Hearts.
R&R, peeps!
Step 4) Figure out how to make your story better. Yes, even better than that. I said BETTER!
Below is a sample of a fic that never has been written. It is in script form, but I will demonstrate a story form afterwards. ***
Riku: Kairi, come share a paopu with me!
Kairi: Only if I can ask you a question first.
Riku: What?
Kairi: What posessed you to think I would ever in my right peanut-sized mind share a paopu with you, of all people?!
Riku: Ansem.
Kairi: *picks up a paopu* here. *Stuffs it down Riku's thrat*
Riku: *picks up a keyblade* huwwe. * Stuffs it down Kairi's throat*
Kairi and Riku looked at each other with their mishapen throats.
***
Okay, so that was the sample. Now, I'm gonna go through and spell check it.
As you can see, I said "Riku's thrat" instead of "Riku's throat." This obviously needs corrected.
After I'm done with that, I can look through and see if there is a place where I can make better words. I mean, use better vocabulary.
I suppose I could've used "shoved" instead of "stuffed." I also could've had Kairi go through some serious pain, like maybe DEATH! *thinking evil thoughts*
Below is a story format for the same sample.
***
Riku grabbed Kairi's arm.
"Kairi, come share a paopu with me," he pleaded. Kairi turned around to face him.
"Only if I can ask you a question first," the crimson-haired girl replied.
"What?" Riku asked.
"What posessed you to think that I would ever in my right peanut-sized mind share a paopu with you, of all people?" she asked suddenly. Riku was shocked for a minute, but he quickly came up with an answer.
"Ansem," Riku remarked. Kairi picked up a small star-shaped fruit.
"Here," she said. She stuffed the paopu down Riku's throat, with some satisfaction.
Although he could barely talk, for his neck was now deformed into a pointy collar, Riku replied, "Huwwe." He took out a keyblade and shoved it down Kairi's throat. Now she appeared to have a two-pronged right and a chocobo-shaped left. The two teens stared at each other for several moments.
***
I don't see any spelling mistakes, but I think the next to last sentence was kind of confusing and choppy.
As far as better writing goes, I would add some more adjectives like:
"What?" Riku asked incredulously.
Um, I might need to spell-check that. I don't have a clue what it means, but it sounds cool. Gotta go get the dictionary.
Mew Friendie: I can't even say that word!
But other than that, it was okay.
Step 5) If you haven't registered at ff.net, you need to do so at this point. It's really simple, and if you don't have an email address, just put your friend's. That's what I did! ~J/K Mew Friendie!~ Also you should create a profile. This is relatively easy to do. If you are good at following directions and not going off-topic. Both of which I am terrible at doing. ~Spams are your friends.~
Also, if you are stuck at a part or your story could use a good kick, check out some other stories for ideas. Ideas only! I hate copycats!
Or you could use the alternative choice of going to a bar and taking so many shots you get light-headed, just to think about some topics or get some fresh... er smokey air.
This goes along with the brainstorming part once again. From this point further, I am not going to mention if brainstorming applies. Because brainstorming is a hard word to type and I am about to put it on the "copy" button and paste it every time I need it. brainstorming!brainstorming!brainstorming!brainstorming!
*****************
Telephone conversation:
Sui: It's Mew Suika, not Mew Friendie! Kazumi: Who's writing this fic, me or you?! Sui: I hate Friendie! Kazumi: Don't make me badmouth you! Sui: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! *sobbing* Kazumi: You are acting like Kairi!! Sui: *instantly stops crying* *foams at mouth* Kazumi:Kairi...childbirth....lemons!!!Hehehe... Sui: *flicks eyebrow* *lowers eyebrow* * raises eyebrow* EYEBROWS!! At this point, the girls 'dissolved into giggles.' The parents of both Mew Suika and Mew Kazumi came in and yelled at the girls until they disintergrated.
Please review so I can tell Suika that I got more reviews than she ever will! Also do me a favor and look up the word "disintergrated" in your dictionary. I love you!