Hey you guys!!! This is for all of you wonderful people who reviewed "Revenge." Now I'll admit I did say I had LOTS more to say. However, I discovered that I could say it better if I just wrote an entirely different poem. Actually, this is more like a song. I've given it a melody and everything! I'm gonna sing it at my school talent show! So anyways, I hope you like it!!!
Disclaimer: Sorry, but as much as I'd like to, I don't own Edward… sigh life sucks sometimes doesn't it?
p.s.- I would like to thank Beadsnabone for pointing out a mistake in my song. She pointed out that in the 3rd verse I wrote "But that that's how they treat they don't understand." There should be a You, between treat and they. So… beadsnabone gets a Johnny is the sexiest man alive magazine… YAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Every time I see your face I cringe and look away.
Your eyes, they hold such sorrow, I'd have cried if I had stayed.
Then again that hollow look is reflected by my soul.
Why does everyone scrutinize, why is every one so cold.
They don't see your beauty they don't see your place,
They think you're a doll they can keep in a glass case.
You try to please them but it's not enough.
They'll never stop 'till you're lost in the everyday rush.
God help all the outcasts, god help the scorned,
God help the innocent souls whose lives we have torn.
God help the timid man with silent tears in his eyes,
God help ignorant fools whose lives are made of lies.
They don't see your beauty they don't see your place,
They think you're a doll they can keep in a glass case.
You try to please them but it's not enough.
They'll never stop 'till you're lost in the everyday rush.
Your hands they create, your heart: it has a soul,
You're not just a robot, unfeeling and cold.
But that's how they treat you, they don't understand,
The terrifying beauty that lies in your hands.
They don't see your beauty they don't see your place,
They think you're a doll they can keep in a glass case.
You try to please them but it's not enough.
They'll never stop 'till you're lost in the everyday rush.
This song is not finished yet, so criticism is VERY welcome! Don't be afraid to point out things that need to be corrected, or words you think would sound better in place of other words. Ideas for later verses are also welcome. Oh, and tell me if you think I should change the "God help the outcasts" to "Here's to the outcasts" and continue with "Here's to" throughout the entire verse. Well, thank you for reading this!!! PLEASE REVIEW!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sincerely,
Pirate