Anonymous: I am amazed at your characterization or should I say lack of characterization?
It's called "motivation" and it explains why characters act the way they act. You failed to deliver Hermione's motivation on one of the greatest scales I've ever witnessed. And so is your Hermione not only incredibly out-of-character, but also unexplained so. If I were a betting man... eh woman I would suspect that your Hermione is nothing but a blatant self-insertion also known as Mary Sue.
THIS IS ONE OF MY FUN THINGS WHY I NEEDED FLAMES THAT ARE STUPID!
NOW, I AM SO SURE THAT DRACO AND HERMIONE COULD EVER BE TOGETHER! EVERY HERMIONE DRACO STORY IS OUT OF CHARACTER AT LEAST A LITTLE! I MEAN SOMEONE TORMENTS YOU FOR SO MANY YEARS YOU REALLY WOULD FORIGVE THEM? I AM SO SURE! SO IF YOU ARE READING DRACO HERMIONE FFS YOU SHOULD HAVE SOME BRAINS TO COME TO TERM WITH IT ALREADY! ANYTHING ELSE? GOOD DIDN'T EVEN HAVE GUTS TO LEAVE YOUR REAL NAME?
A/N I promise that it is a Draco Hermione fic! I swear it! LOL! Please review and comedy is coming in the next few chapters! And lots of it!
Hermione kissed George on the lips, and stepped onto the train with Harry and Ron.
Hermione was glad that it was Thursday. She had one day of school tomorrow, and then it was already Hogsmeade, and she would see George again.
"Slytherin, McGonagall needs to see us in the front compartment." She snapped out of it, and looked at Draco. His eyes were void of all emotions.
"I'll see you guys later, hopefully." She said following Draco. "Head boy/girl stuff?" She asked him.
He said nothing just walked. She rolled her eyes, and followed him. The train hadn't even left station yet.
"Good, you are both here. We are flooing the Head Boy girl rooms. We have already discussed all responsibilities in letter, so I assume you know them?" They nodded at her.
"Now let's move." She said shooing them along.
Hermione looked around the grand common room. The ceiling was like the one in the great hall. The common room itself was twice as big as the Gryffindor's.
"The door there leads to whatever classroom you need to go to. It magically just appears there, or wherever you need to go.
"The bathroom is adjoined, your bedrooms require a password, you may choose one. Your common room is third floor in front of the picture of the centaur. His name is Chas and he has the power to go out of his portrait at any time, so please be respectful.
"You are to be seated at the Head Table in twenty minutes time. The other students arrive in thirty minutes. Understood." The both nodded so she left.
Hermione's room was like the one she had at home. Her closet was already unpacked along with her vanity. She put on her school robes and pinned on her Head Girl badge.
"Ready to go then Slytherin?" He asked her when she came down about fifteen minutes later.
"What do we want our common room password to be?"
"Betrayal." He said walking out of the common room. She collapsed on the ground and started crying. She could only have one.
"Hermione, it's good. You are fine. You have George now. You don't need Draco." She said trying desperately to get rid of the ache in her heart.
True, she liked George. She loved Draco. She wiped her tears, and walked to the Great Hall.
"Agh, we have N.E.W.T potions first. Remind me why I want to be an Auror again." Ron said looking at his time table.
"Ron, stop whining." Hermione scolded him nibbling on her toast.
"You can't say you enjoy that class." Ron said piling more food on his plate.
"Actually I do. I do want to be a potions scientist, you know." Hermione rolled her eyes at him.
"Guys, stop bickering. We have potions and I don't need a headache before it. Snape gets worse my the second." Harry said getting up from the table.
"You're right Harry. Ron, are you coming?" Hermione agreed.
Ron nodded, stuffing food into his mouth rapidly.
"Chew and swallow, breathe, breathe." Harry said laughing. Ron flipped him off. Hermione smiled at them.
"You already know what I expect from my N.E.W.T class, so let's just start. For the next week we will be working an extremely complicated potion.
"The Mortal Filax will disable anyone else to see you or hear you. You will be able to go through anything solid. You will virtually disappear." The class was filled with excited whispers.
"Quiet!" Snape yelled at them. "There are however ways of noticing you, so do not even try to use it in school. It is not allowed to work in Hogwarts." There were disappointed moans from the class.
"You will be doing this in pairs. I will choose them for you since there are only few people in this class.
"Malfoy and Weasley, Brown and Malaya, Slytherin and Potter…" He continued until everyone was paired off. Hermione was glad that she was with Harry. She have Ron a sympathetic pat on the back.
"Potter, the Hippogriff blood goes in after it boils. Ms. Slytherin you had better watch him! Twenty points off Gryffindor." Harry shot him a glare, and moved the vial of green blood away from the cauldron.
"That wasn't too bad." Hermione said looking at the points status.
"For you. Malfoy kept muttering something under his breathe. I thought that he lost his marbles." Ron said his face looking as if it had a bad taste in his mouth.
"What have you got next? I've got Transfiguration." Hermione told them.
"We haven't got Transfiguration until after lunch, double. We have Charms." Ron said. She nodded, and bid him goodbye.
"The reasons we have divided our class is, because one is a bit more complicated about potions, and one is for everyone else." Professor McGonagall told them.
"The potions course is a bit more difficult only. Since there is so few of you that managed to make it, we will not need to pair off.
"Today we are learning to accurately transfigure yourself into partial Animagi." There was a loud whisper of excitement between the five of them.
"After Christmas if you manage to make yourself a true Animagi then I will pass you off. I am credible to give you a license if you are legal.
"The reason you need this is because, well, there are some things animals can get, as in potion ingredients that humans can not. It also comes in handy for other things." The Professor said smiling a bit at her students.
"First you need a form. The best way is to do a Patronus." She said doing one as a cat popped out and walked around them. With another flick of her wand it disappeared.
"Begin." She said as the students began to do their own form.
Justin Finch-Fletchy had a beaver, Padma Patil had a bee, Chris Alfaro had a crab. The most surprising of animals were Draco's and Hermione's.
Hermione and Draco had matching Ravens. Draco looked at hers disgustedly.
"Now, these are all satisfactory. For next class remember to have your favorite place picked out, and have a clear image of it. Class is dismissed." She told them.
"So, what are we going to do in Transfiguration?" Harry asked her at lunch while Ron was getting stuffed.
"I dunno. We are in different classes. There is five of us who are doing more advanced stuff that will come on handy in our different career paths.
"We're learning to be Animagi." She said not wanting to make a big deal out of it.
"Ashy lama?" Ron shouted through a full mouth of food. Everyone looked at him. He blushed and sank back down.
"Yes, Ron ashy lama." Hermione said rolling her eyes at him. He swallowed quickly and almost choked.
"Animagi? Legally?" Ron asked her. She nodded at him.
"That's cool, Hermione." Harry said putting a sandwich on his plate. Hermione followed suit.
"It is. I'm going to be a raven since it's my Patronus." Hermione said taking a small bite, "So what about Charms?" She asked them.
"Not much. We learn to make our shadows disappear. It's great fun. We're outside for that since we need sun." Harry told her. She nodded.
Hermione went back to her room. Charms had been fun with the exception of some Hufflepuff accidentally making her bald.
She went to the common room. Draco was sitting there reading a book. She decided to no say anything. She was just about to go through the door that would take her to the Gryffindor Common room when he spoke.
"We have patrol. So don't forget. We start in half an hour." He said possibly even more emotionless then last year.
She ignored the ache in her heart and headed through the door.
"Hermione!" Ron said looking up. Harry's face was blacked out almost completely while Ron's sleeve was missing.
"I'll play." She said repairing the cards along with Ron's robes.
Exploding Snap left them with ash everywhere. Hermione almost singed her wand.
A/N MORE STORY BELOW THIS NOTE! THIS IS JUST SO YOU MAKE SURE TO READ! NEXT CHAPPY SOMEONE IS GETTING MARRIED!
Hermione headed for the Great Hall. She saw a huge sign above it that said 'Hogwarts welcomes former students Fred and George Weasley for an introduction to their shop!'.
Hermione smiled at entered with Harry and Ron. They had the tables removed. There was a stage for them to be on, and lots of merchandise spread out all along the great hall.
At the entrance was a clerk for anyone who wanted to buy something.
"Now on to something a little more useful! FAKE WANDS!" George said through his wand.
"We have a new line of fake wands that transform into animals or transform the holders into objects. I will be handing George a wand that will turn him into an inanimate object!" Fred said handing him what looked like a perfectly real wand.
George waved it trying to do a simple summoning spell. With a thump he turned into a quill. There was a roar of applause. Within fifteen seconds he turned back.
"Only five Knuts! That is cheaper then other imitation wands! They are available right over there," He said pointing to a table on his right that was covered with wands. "Or in our twenty shops that we have throughout England. You can find one in Hogsmeade and Diagon Alley. For a full list of places please ask our checkout clerk!"
"Fred can you handle it by yourself for a while?" George asked him. George jumped down the stage as Fred started on pumpkin juice that turned you into a pumpkin.
"Ickle little Ronnikins. You two get free stuff, and of course you do love." George said putting a hand around Hermione's waist.
"I bet most of the school is in here." Hermione said beaming at him. He kissed her slightly.
"Nasty. Come on mate let's check out the stuff." Ron said pulling Harry with him to the other side of the Great Hall.
"Even the Slytherins are buying. I have to say these wands look incredibly real." She said as they walked over to the fake wands.
"Just some charms. We used a simple potion when we were mixing them to make them look like the user's wand." He said picking one up.
"So how do you get it to work? Just try to use a spell or charm?" She asked him picking one up that immediately looked like her own.
"That was the idea. We all owe it to Harry who gave us enough money to start up. Now we have a chain of successful shops. We tried to give some money to Mum and Dad but they refused. We still buy Ron and Ginny everything they need for school." George said looking over at his little brother.
"That's good of you to do that. How about a trip to The Three Broomsticks?" She asked him. He grabbed her hand wand walked to the stage.
"Fred, I'll be back later." He said. Fred nodded and continued with the next presentation.
"What do you want, love?" He asked her as they sat down at a table.
"I'll take a Butterbeer. The only thing I don't like is that some people go to that one teashop just to make out. It's really nasty. Then they have to Cupids drop flowers and stuff on them."
"Yeah. I hate that too." He said as he came back drinks. "Besides you can do it here, and get good drinks." He said kissing her. She put her hands around his neck as he pulled her out of her chair and into his lap.
After a good thirty minutes they stopped. Hermione felt her lip swollen, and her face flushed. She picked up her drink and started on it.
"Are you okay?" She asked him seeing the funny look on his face as he looked into her eyes.
"I'm fine." He said blushing incredibly.
A shine of the platinum hair caught her eye. She looked and saw Draco looking past a girl and right at Hermione.
For a few minutes she looked him straight into the eyes. She felt her heart flutter as she saw his eyes flicker with emotion.
"Hermione? Hermione?" She heard her name being called and she broke eye contact.
"What is it?" She asked trying to keep a steady voice.
"Nothing. You want to go?" He asked her. She gave Draco one last glance, and looked at George and nodded.
A/N I already have part of the next chapter written! Also whatd you think? This story is for yall and I think its original! For a kid Im doing fine! Yes I am not eighteen! I am not sixteen! I'm almost thirteen though! Don't make me stop you from reading though! Remember flames are accepted! Reviews are cool too! LOL Anyway
NEXT CHAPTER: AWW ISNT NEVILLE SWEET?
SOMEONE IS GETTING MARRIED
It's called "motivation" and it explains why characters act the way they act. You failed to deliver Hermione's motivation on one of the greatest scales I've ever witnessed. And so is your Hermione not only incredibly out-of-character, but also unexplained so. If I were a betting man... eh woman I would suspect that your Hermione is nothing but a blatant self-insertion also known as Mary Sue.
THIS IS ONE OF MY FUN THINGS WHY I NEEDED FLAMES THAT ARE STUPID!
NOW, I AM SO SURE THAT DRACO AND HERMIONE COULD EVER BE TOGETHER! EVERY HERMIONE DRACO STORY IS OUT OF CHARACTER AT LEAST A LITTLE! I MEAN SOMEONE TORMENTS YOU FOR SO MANY YEARS YOU REALLY WOULD FORIGVE THEM? I AM SO SURE! SO IF YOU ARE READING DRACO HERMIONE FFS YOU SHOULD HAVE SOME BRAINS TO COME TO TERM WITH IT ALREADY! ANYTHING ELSE? GOOD DIDN'T EVEN HAVE GUTS TO LEAVE YOUR REAL NAME?
A/N I promise that it is a Draco Hermione fic! I swear it! LOL! Please review and comedy is coming in the next few chapters! And lots of it!
Hermione kissed George on the lips, and stepped onto the train with Harry and Ron.
Hermione was glad that it was Thursday. She had one day of school tomorrow, and then it was already Hogsmeade, and she would see George again.
"Slytherin, McGonagall needs to see us in the front compartment." She snapped out of it, and looked at Draco. His eyes were void of all emotions.
"I'll see you guys later, hopefully." She said following Draco. "Head boy/girl stuff?" She asked him.
He said nothing just walked. She rolled her eyes, and followed him. The train hadn't even left station yet.
"Good, you are both here. We are flooing the Head Boy girl rooms. We have already discussed all responsibilities in letter, so I assume you know them?" They nodded at her.
"Now let's move." She said shooing them along.
Hermione looked around the grand common room. The ceiling was like the one in the great hall. The common room itself was twice as big as the Gryffindor's.
"The door there leads to whatever classroom you need to go to. It magically just appears there, or wherever you need to go.
"The bathroom is adjoined, your bedrooms require a password, you may choose one. Your common room is third floor in front of the picture of the centaur. His name is Chas and he has the power to go out of his portrait at any time, so please be respectful.
"You are to be seated at the Head Table in twenty minutes time. The other students arrive in thirty minutes. Understood." The both nodded so she left.
Hermione's room was like the one she had at home. Her closet was already unpacked along with her vanity. She put on her school robes and pinned on her Head Girl badge.
"Ready to go then Slytherin?" He asked her when she came down about fifteen minutes later.
"What do we want our common room password to be?"
"Betrayal." He said walking out of the common room. She collapsed on the ground and started crying. She could only have one.
"Hermione, it's good. You are fine. You have George now. You don't need Draco." She said trying desperately to get rid of the ache in her heart.
True, she liked George. She loved Draco. She wiped her tears, and walked to the Great Hall.
"Agh, we have N.E.W.T potions first. Remind me why I want to be an Auror again." Ron said looking at his time table.
"Ron, stop whining." Hermione scolded him nibbling on her toast.
"You can't say you enjoy that class." Ron said piling more food on his plate.
"Actually I do. I do want to be a potions scientist, you know." Hermione rolled her eyes at him.
"Guys, stop bickering. We have potions and I don't need a headache before it. Snape gets worse my the second." Harry said getting up from the table.
"You're right Harry. Ron, are you coming?" Hermione agreed.
Ron nodded, stuffing food into his mouth rapidly.
"Chew and swallow, breathe, breathe." Harry said laughing. Ron flipped him off. Hermione smiled at them.
"You already know what I expect from my N.E.W.T class, so let's just start. For the next week we will be working an extremely complicated potion.
"The Mortal Filax will disable anyone else to see you or hear you. You will be able to go through anything solid. You will virtually disappear." The class was filled with excited whispers.
"Quiet!" Snape yelled at them. "There are however ways of noticing you, so do not even try to use it in school. It is not allowed to work in Hogwarts." There were disappointed moans from the class.
"You will be doing this in pairs. I will choose them for you since there are only few people in this class.
"Malfoy and Weasley, Brown and Malaya, Slytherin and Potter…" He continued until everyone was paired off. Hermione was glad that she was with Harry. She have Ron a sympathetic pat on the back.
"Potter, the Hippogriff blood goes in after it boils. Ms. Slytherin you had better watch him! Twenty points off Gryffindor." Harry shot him a glare, and moved the vial of green blood away from the cauldron.
"That wasn't too bad." Hermione said looking at the points status.
"For you. Malfoy kept muttering something under his breathe. I thought that he lost his marbles." Ron said his face looking as if it had a bad taste in his mouth.
"What have you got next? I've got Transfiguration." Hermione told them.
"We haven't got Transfiguration until after lunch, double. We have Charms." Ron said. She nodded, and bid him goodbye.
"The reasons we have divided our class is, because one is a bit more complicated about potions, and one is for everyone else." Professor McGonagall told them.
"The potions course is a bit more difficult only. Since there is so few of you that managed to make it, we will not need to pair off.
"Today we are learning to accurately transfigure yourself into partial Animagi." There was a loud whisper of excitement between the five of them.
"After Christmas if you manage to make yourself a true Animagi then I will pass you off. I am credible to give you a license if you are legal.
"The reason you need this is because, well, there are some things animals can get, as in potion ingredients that humans can not. It also comes in handy for other things." The Professor said smiling a bit at her students.
"First you need a form. The best way is to do a Patronus." She said doing one as a cat popped out and walked around them. With another flick of her wand it disappeared.
"Begin." She said as the students began to do their own form.
Justin Finch-Fletchy had a beaver, Padma Patil had a bee, Chris Alfaro had a crab. The most surprising of animals were Draco's and Hermione's.
Hermione and Draco had matching Ravens. Draco looked at hers disgustedly.
"Now, these are all satisfactory. For next class remember to have your favorite place picked out, and have a clear image of it. Class is dismissed." She told them.
"So, what are we going to do in Transfiguration?" Harry asked her at lunch while Ron was getting stuffed.
"I dunno. We are in different classes. There is five of us who are doing more advanced stuff that will come on handy in our different career paths.
"We're learning to be Animagi." She said not wanting to make a big deal out of it.
"Ashy lama?" Ron shouted through a full mouth of food. Everyone looked at him. He blushed and sank back down.
"Yes, Ron ashy lama." Hermione said rolling her eyes at him. He swallowed quickly and almost choked.
"Animagi? Legally?" Ron asked her. She nodded at him.
"That's cool, Hermione." Harry said putting a sandwich on his plate. Hermione followed suit.
"It is. I'm going to be a raven since it's my Patronus." Hermione said taking a small bite, "So what about Charms?" She asked them.
"Not much. We learn to make our shadows disappear. It's great fun. We're outside for that since we need sun." Harry told her. She nodded.
Hermione went back to her room. Charms had been fun with the exception of some Hufflepuff accidentally making her bald.
She went to the common room. Draco was sitting there reading a book. She decided to no say anything. She was just about to go through the door that would take her to the Gryffindor Common room when he spoke.
"We have patrol. So don't forget. We start in half an hour." He said possibly even more emotionless then last year.
She ignored the ache in her heart and headed through the door.
"Hermione!" Ron said looking up. Harry's face was blacked out almost completely while Ron's sleeve was missing.
"I'll play." She said repairing the cards along with Ron's robes.
Exploding Snap left them with ash everywhere. Hermione almost singed her wand.
A/N MORE STORY BELOW THIS NOTE! THIS IS JUST SO YOU MAKE SURE TO READ! NEXT CHAPPY SOMEONE IS GETTING MARRIED!
Hermione headed for the Great Hall. She saw a huge sign above it that said 'Hogwarts welcomes former students Fred and George Weasley for an introduction to their shop!'.
Hermione smiled at entered with Harry and Ron. They had the tables removed. There was a stage for them to be on, and lots of merchandise spread out all along the great hall.
At the entrance was a clerk for anyone who wanted to buy something.
"Now on to something a little more useful! FAKE WANDS!" George said through his wand.
"We have a new line of fake wands that transform into animals or transform the holders into objects. I will be handing George a wand that will turn him into an inanimate object!" Fred said handing him what looked like a perfectly real wand.
George waved it trying to do a simple summoning spell. With a thump he turned into a quill. There was a roar of applause. Within fifteen seconds he turned back.
"Only five Knuts! That is cheaper then other imitation wands! They are available right over there," He said pointing to a table on his right that was covered with wands. "Or in our twenty shops that we have throughout England. You can find one in Hogsmeade and Diagon Alley. For a full list of places please ask our checkout clerk!"
"Fred can you handle it by yourself for a while?" George asked him. George jumped down the stage as Fred started on pumpkin juice that turned you into a pumpkin.
"Ickle little Ronnikins. You two get free stuff, and of course you do love." George said putting a hand around Hermione's waist.
"I bet most of the school is in here." Hermione said beaming at him. He kissed her slightly.
"Nasty. Come on mate let's check out the stuff." Ron said pulling Harry with him to the other side of the Great Hall.
"Even the Slytherins are buying. I have to say these wands look incredibly real." She said as they walked over to the fake wands.
"Just some charms. We used a simple potion when we were mixing them to make them look like the user's wand." He said picking one up.
"So how do you get it to work? Just try to use a spell or charm?" She asked him picking one up that immediately looked like her own.
"That was the idea. We all owe it to Harry who gave us enough money to start up. Now we have a chain of successful shops. We tried to give some money to Mum and Dad but they refused. We still buy Ron and Ginny everything they need for school." George said looking over at his little brother.
"That's good of you to do that. How about a trip to The Three Broomsticks?" She asked him. He grabbed her hand wand walked to the stage.
"Fred, I'll be back later." He said. Fred nodded and continued with the next presentation.
"What do you want, love?" He asked her as they sat down at a table.
"I'll take a Butterbeer. The only thing I don't like is that some people go to that one teashop just to make out. It's really nasty. Then they have to Cupids drop flowers and stuff on them."
"Yeah. I hate that too." He said as he came back drinks. "Besides you can do it here, and get good drinks." He said kissing her. She put her hands around his neck as he pulled her out of her chair and into his lap.
After a good thirty minutes they stopped. Hermione felt her lip swollen, and her face flushed. She picked up her drink and started on it.
"Are you okay?" She asked him seeing the funny look on his face as he looked into her eyes.
"I'm fine." He said blushing incredibly.
A shine of the platinum hair caught her eye. She looked and saw Draco looking past a girl and right at Hermione.
For a few minutes she looked him straight into the eyes. She felt her heart flutter as she saw his eyes flicker with emotion.
"Hermione? Hermione?" She heard her name being called and she broke eye contact.
"What is it?" She asked trying to keep a steady voice.
"Nothing. You want to go?" He asked her. She gave Draco one last glance, and looked at George and nodded.
A/N I already have part of the next chapter written! Also whatd you think? This story is for yall and I think its original! For a kid Im doing fine! Yes I am not eighteen! I am not sixteen! I'm almost thirteen though! Don't make me stop you from reading though! Remember flames are accepted! Reviews are cool too! LOL Anyway
NEXT CHAPTER: AWW ISNT NEVILLE SWEET?
SOMEONE IS GETTING MARRIED