This is my half-baked attempt to reply to the reviewers so far. I've never
done this--; sorry if I'm being inadequate. Oh and I've completely turned
my summary around, I tried to pinpoint the plot better.
vernal equinox: Ehehehe^^ I'm sorry it's not really clear in the beginning of the story. I started it off a little weird and shaky without a solid plot in mind for the future so it was kind of .. Uh wily nily and rattlesome --; but I tried to kind of build the characters and situations better when I did decide on the story line (key word: tried^^*) and the feeling of resentment ::nervous laugh:: it -was- sort of random, now that I think back to the point I was trying to make, I did it really badly =] (I'll try to explain another if I can think of a good way to do so =P) I should seriously proofread stuff better. And I can not thank you enough for telling me about the HTML. I kind of embarrassed-.- to ask but I really wanted italics and stuff to work AND for telling me about the anonymous review thing. Ahhh, I had no idea. BAD ff.net for automatically checking the 'no anonymous review' box. Grrrr... I am soooo sorry to readers that didn't sign in, ugh I feel like an idiot. I actually can't say 'thank you' enough because you were a million X's and then some helpful. I'm overjoyed you like my story. =]
Dark Star: Omgosh thanks sooo much for the suggestions =] ironically I was actually thinking of using 'Hitomi' lol. And I think I might, I'm too lazy to look now that it appeals to me more and more. Thank you for all the support. And I'm itching to put Sesshoumaru in, it's soooo tempting but, the story hasn't really begun yet and I wanna get the ball rolling cos I have great plans for him.^^ I loovveee alternate pairings and the worst thing about my AU is his lack of a fluffy =*[
Unknow: ahh! I know, I know I'll try to post longer chapter^^
chibi kawaii inu: I'm glad you like it =] If no one did I probably would've dropped it..shame on me-.-;..so thanks for the encouragement.
just peachy: Wow that's flattering. I was kind of worried about my dialogue because I didn't think I handled the conversations well. I'll post again as soon as I can.
Lyn/Lin: Heh.^^ my writing is kinda weird. I apologize for Kagome's strong OOCness;;; I'm down with the traditional, but I'm giving her a umm..a more alternate personality to fit the story. =]
Kitten-with-claws: Thanks so much. I enjoy writing this.
DemonBlade; You were the first to review =] thank you for giving my lil fic a chance.
Naoko Cat Girl: I kind of posted your reply on my bio.--; But I was anxious to explain a few things. I'm delighted you like the story. You made great points and your tips were greatly appreciated. Your review was definitely helpful and 'well rounded' =]
J.Garibaldi: I didn't want to be really harsh on Kikyo but I needed a good antagonist. =] Thanks for the review.
Lady Dark Angel: I'll try to get the next chapter out asap.
A/N: SORRY SORRY SORRY!!! AHHH TO READERS THAT DIDN'T SIGN IN. I DON'T KNOW IF YOU TRIED TO REVIEW, BUT IF YOU DID AND COULDN'T IT WAS ALL MY STUPID FAULT FOR NOT UNCLICKING THE 'NO ANONYMOUS REVIEW' BUTTON. I FEEL TERRIBLE, REALLY I DO. UMMM I UNCLICKED IT ^^*
Only Normal on the Average
Disclaimer: I don't own Inuyasha.
I shifted my feet, trying not to make it too obvious I was bored and squirming. It was a bit of a nervous habit. I wished I had a watch to glare down at. Instead I glanced at the sky, still dim and ashen. Where -was- Sango? I was waiting for her, where else, but near my locker. I couldn't say 'little did I know things were going to get interesting' because I did know, but it slipped my mind and I didn't expect Kikyo to act so -fast- and within 20 feet of my radius. I thought that she could have a least did him the small favor and dumped him privately; somewhere and with no people or breakables around. But I guess I gave her too much credit.
The couple were obviously arguing. And I felt strange standing there because it seemed like they were strategically set there for my show. Not too close but definitely not far.
"Why?" *surprise surprise*
"Inuyasha, it is best for us to be allowed breathing space, our relationship can only grow that way. I feel smothered. We should have more experiences to bring in, I'm doing this for US." Was the soft, watery plea.
Pssh.what b.s..all that time in PE and -this- is the best she could do? Inuyasha seemed to think so too but was instinctively submissive to her.
"Kikyo.." his voice cracked, ok even *I* felt bad for the guy.
"We can work it out, I know we can. We've been through so much, this will be a walk in the park." Every time he said 'we' he sounded more convinced.
He reached out to her. Tremble fingers and quivering lips, really it was hard to watch.
"Just tell me what the problem is...."
God, what was this guy, a masochist?
"-You- are the problem, Inuyasha." Putting a more subtle emphasize on 'problem.'
"And you're making a scene and a fool out of yourself," she added, quieter and in a no nonsense voice.
"Kikyo...how...."
"Suck it up Inuyasha, I thought you were better than this, a silly, emotional mess."
"I gave you my reason, I thought you were more practical and understanding than this. This is *obviously* the right decision."
You couldn't say that girl didn't have nerves of steel.
He snapped at last.
'Finally' I thought. No one should be a sad, sorry puddle in the palm of her hand; it was degrading, jerks like him shouldn't even be subjected to -that-.
"Fine! If that's how you want it, I'm not rising to your bait. You can play your games, but I won't take you back."
*yes you will* her thought displayed on her face. If she was surprised I didn't catch it.
"I can't believe you're so cold, you're closing me out, I thought...."
"You thought wrong Inuyasha." She cut in angrily. "I can't stand the sight of you right now," she managed to spit out primly before gracefully stalking out, not a hair out of place. If no one were around I'm sure a smile of some degree would be coloring her lovely face.
A few moments passed. All eyes turning from the dumpee to the dumped. Everyone seemed to want to rush to either one of them and coo sympathetically. I think I might have spied some girls licking their chops.
Gross. That's just not right.
Sango conveniently showed up then, blissfully unaware. The whole episode went over my head.
"Sorry I'm late but my Art History teacher....uh, Kagome?"
"Hmmm?"
With a second thought, "Come on, lets get something to eat, I'm starved. You can tell me what's up then."
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o.O "Let me get this straight. You tear down the streets this morning because you think you're in the twilight zone knocking down a few pedestrians, spaz; see certain pedestrian grabble and slobber with another all over your locker, spaz again; end up on everyone's hit list, and next to the biggest perv in school, spaz yet again, ends up a target of groping perv, out does tongue hockey girl, all climaxing to a spat between this couple somehow staged for you."
Ah, Sango and her way with words. Sitting in a quiet noodle shop, rehearing the misfit chain of events with no names from Sango; it's a harder pill to swallow.
"How did you *do* that in one breath?"
"....."
"Kagome!! Focus, this is a little unbelievable. I mean who are these people and why are they suddenly running amuck in your life? In a 4.5 hour interval?"
"You know as much as I do at this point."
Sango sat back a bit, mystified. Then with an accepting shrug she made a grab at her chopsticks. She had the right idea. We ate and talked comfortably about saner things like classes and summer. I was beginning to feel like normal Kagome again. Thank God for the Sango's of the world.
Biology, Home Ec., and Physics. Smooth sailing all the way. Sango must have been some ward against spooky ploys and situations. Did I mention what a great friend Sango is?
The school day ended with a luxurious finality. I usually had work after this but thankfully my mom convinced me to take the first day off.
My muscles felt achy. And I wanted nothing more than to bury myself alive with sheets and comforters and gladly fall into a lucid comatose sleep. The more I thought about sleep, my tiredness seemed to multiplied tenfold; so by the time I was at my front door some divine force was obviously the only thing keeping me on my feet. I felt bad for a second about not rushing into the kitchen to have a spot of tea with my mom and talking about my first day but that thought went right out the window when I saw the outrageous task ahead of me.... the stairs.
*This chapter is again premature, but I have a reason this time -_-' .er...I was wayyy to anxious to get my review replies out to write properly. Heh sorry. It'll be better next time, I promise!
A/N: SORRY SORRY SORRY!!! AHHH TO READERS THAT DIDN'T SIGN IN. I DON'T KNOW IF YOU TRIED TO REVIEW, BUT IF YOU DID AND COULDN'T IT WAS ALL MY STUPID FAULT FOR NOT UNCLICKING THE 'NO ANONYMOUS REVIEW' BUTTON. I FEEL TERRIBLE, REALLY I DO. UMMM I UNCLICKED IT ^^* (to express the extent of my sorryness I had to post this a/n twice--; it's annoying but please bear with me =]
vernal equinox: Ehehehe^^ I'm sorry it's not really clear in the beginning of the story. I started it off a little weird and shaky without a solid plot in mind for the future so it was kind of .. Uh wily nily and rattlesome --; but I tried to kind of build the characters and situations better when I did decide on the story line (key word: tried^^*) and the feeling of resentment ::nervous laugh:: it -was- sort of random, now that I think back to the point I was trying to make, I did it really badly =] (I'll try to explain another if I can think of a good way to do so =P) I should seriously proofread stuff better. And I can not thank you enough for telling me about the HTML. I kind of embarrassed-.- to ask but I really wanted italics and stuff to work AND for telling me about the anonymous review thing. Ahhh, I had no idea. BAD ff.net for automatically checking the 'no anonymous review' box. Grrrr... I am soooo sorry to readers that didn't sign in, ugh I feel like an idiot. I actually can't say 'thank you' enough because you were a million X's and then some helpful. I'm overjoyed you like my story. =]
Dark Star: Omgosh thanks sooo much for the suggestions =] ironically I was actually thinking of using 'Hitomi' lol. And I think I might, I'm too lazy to look now that it appeals to me more and more. Thank you for all the support. And I'm itching to put Sesshoumaru in, it's soooo tempting but, the story hasn't really begun yet and I wanna get the ball rolling cos I have great plans for him.^^ I loovveee alternate pairings and the worst thing about my AU is his lack of a fluffy =*[
Unknow: ahh! I know, I know I'll try to post longer chapter^^
chibi kawaii inu: I'm glad you like it =] If no one did I probably would've dropped it..shame on me-.-;..so thanks for the encouragement.
just peachy: Wow that's flattering. I was kind of worried about my dialogue because I didn't think I handled the conversations well. I'll post again as soon as I can.
Lyn/Lin: Heh.^^ my writing is kinda weird. I apologize for Kagome's strong OOCness;;; I'm down with the traditional, but I'm giving her a umm..a more alternate personality to fit the story. =]
Kitten-with-claws: Thanks so much. I enjoy writing this.
DemonBlade; You were the first to review =] thank you for giving my lil fic a chance.
Naoko Cat Girl: I kind of posted your reply on my bio.--; But I was anxious to explain a few things. I'm delighted you like the story. You made great points and your tips were greatly appreciated. Your review was definitely helpful and 'well rounded' =]
J.Garibaldi: I didn't want to be really harsh on Kikyo but I needed a good antagonist. =] Thanks for the review.
Lady Dark Angel: I'll try to get the next chapter out asap.
A/N: SORRY SORRY SORRY!!! AHHH TO READERS THAT DIDN'T SIGN IN. I DON'T KNOW IF YOU TRIED TO REVIEW, BUT IF YOU DID AND COULDN'T IT WAS ALL MY STUPID FAULT FOR NOT UNCLICKING THE 'NO ANONYMOUS REVIEW' BUTTON. I FEEL TERRIBLE, REALLY I DO. UMMM I UNCLICKED IT ^^*
Only Normal on the Average
Disclaimer: I don't own Inuyasha.
I shifted my feet, trying not to make it too obvious I was bored and squirming. It was a bit of a nervous habit. I wished I had a watch to glare down at. Instead I glanced at the sky, still dim and ashen. Where -was- Sango? I was waiting for her, where else, but near my locker. I couldn't say 'little did I know things were going to get interesting' because I did know, but it slipped my mind and I didn't expect Kikyo to act so -fast- and within 20 feet of my radius. I thought that she could have a least did him the small favor and dumped him privately; somewhere and with no people or breakables around. But I guess I gave her too much credit.
The couple were obviously arguing. And I felt strange standing there because it seemed like they were strategically set there for my show. Not too close but definitely not far.
"Why?" *surprise surprise*
"Inuyasha, it is best for us to be allowed breathing space, our relationship can only grow that way. I feel smothered. We should have more experiences to bring in, I'm doing this for US." Was the soft, watery plea.
Pssh.what b.s..all that time in PE and -this- is the best she could do? Inuyasha seemed to think so too but was instinctively submissive to her.
"Kikyo.." his voice cracked, ok even *I* felt bad for the guy.
"We can work it out, I know we can. We've been through so much, this will be a walk in the park." Every time he said 'we' he sounded more convinced.
He reached out to her. Tremble fingers and quivering lips, really it was hard to watch.
"Just tell me what the problem is...."
God, what was this guy, a masochist?
"-You- are the problem, Inuyasha." Putting a more subtle emphasize on 'problem.'
"And you're making a scene and a fool out of yourself," she added, quieter and in a no nonsense voice.
"Kikyo...how...."
"Suck it up Inuyasha, I thought you were better than this, a silly, emotional mess."
"I gave you my reason, I thought you were more practical and understanding than this. This is *obviously* the right decision."
You couldn't say that girl didn't have nerves of steel.
He snapped at last.
'Finally' I thought. No one should be a sad, sorry puddle in the palm of her hand; it was degrading, jerks like him shouldn't even be subjected to -that-.
"Fine! If that's how you want it, I'm not rising to your bait. You can play your games, but I won't take you back."
*yes you will* her thought displayed on her face. If she was surprised I didn't catch it.
"I can't believe you're so cold, you're closing me out, I thought...."
"You thought wrong Inuyasha." She cut in angrily. "I can't stand the sight of you right now," she managed to spit out primly before gracefully stalking out, not a hair out of place. If no one were around I'm sure a smile of some degree would be coloring her lovely face.
A few moments passed. All eyes turning from the dumpee to the dumped. Everyone seemed to want to rush to either one of them and coo sympathetically. I think I might have spied some girls licking their chops.
Gross. That's just not right.
Sango conveniently showed up then, blissfully unaware. The whole episode went over my head.
"Sorry I'm late but my Art History teacher....uh, Kagome?"
"Hmmm?"
With a second thought, "Come on, lets get something to eat, I'm starved. You can tell me what's up then."
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o.O "Let me get this straight. You tear down the streets this morning because you think you're in the twilight zone knocking down a few pedestrians, spaz; see certain pedestrian grabble and slobber with another all over your locker, spaz again; end up on everyone's hit list, and next to the biggest perv in school, spaz yet again, ends up a target of groping perv, out does tongue hockey girl, all climaxing to a spat between this couple somehow staged for you."
Ah, Sango and her way with words. Sitting in a quiet noodle shop, rehearing the misfit chain of events with no names from Sango; it's a harder pill to swallow.
"How did you *do* that in one breath?"
"....."
"Kagome!! Focus, this is a little unbelievable. I mean who are these people and why are they suddenly running amuck in your life? In a 4.5 hour interval?"
"You know as much as I do at this point."
Sango sat back a bit, mystified. Then with an accepting shrug she made a grab at her chopsticks. She had the right idea. We ate and talked comfortably about saner things like classes and summer. I was beginning to feel like normal Kagome again. Thank God for the Sango's of the world.
Biology, Home Ec., and Physics. Smooth sailing all the way. Sango must have been some ward against spooky ploys and situations. Did I mention what a great friend Sango is?
The school day ended with a luxurious finality. I usually had work after this but thankfully my mom convinced me to take the first day off.
My muscles felt achy. And I wanted nothing more than to bury myself alive with sheets and comforters and gladly fall into a lucid comatose sleep. The more I thought about sleep, my tiredness seemed to multiplied tenfold; so by the time I was at my front door some divine force was obviously the only thing keeping me on my feet. I felt bad for a second about not rushing into the kitchen to have a spot of tea with my mom and talking about my first day but that thought went right out the window when I saw the outrageous task ahead of me.... the stairs.
*This chapter is again premature, but I have a reason this time -_-' .er...I was wayyy to anxious to get my review replies out to write properly. Heh sorry. It'll be better next time, I promise!
A/N: SORRY SORRY SORRY!!! AHHH TO READERS THAT DIDN'T SIGN IN. I DON'T KNOW IF YOU TRIED TO REVIEW, BUT IF YOU DID AND COULDN'T IT WAS ALL MY STUPID FAULT FOR NOT UNCLICKING THE 'NO ANONYMOUS REVIEW' BUTTON. I FEEL TERRIBLE, REALLY I DO. UMMM I UNCLICKED IT ^^* (to express the extent of my sorryness I had to post this a/n twice--; it's annoying but please bear with me =]