I know... my fic got some flaws...
Well... hmm. I'm not really fixing my stuff (well... except for putting "AU" on the fic ...)
Well to the person whoever had to "write" that comment... Arigato for making me feel horrible. Just terribly SPOILED my day.
Anywayz, I CAN'T put italics... (actually, i don't know how... ^_^)
Also, I know I'm not really good at the whole "detail" thing and all that... so that's the whole purpose of the "LINE" in the middle. I know that it drives people nuts how you keep switching scenes without any word... so that's the whole purpose of the "LINE" (which is ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~)
Okay?? You don't like it... you don't like it... dat's it. If you don't like it, juss... leave... don't read it... better than criticisms.
~ k i y o u n g e e
p.s. i don't switch the 3rd person and 1st person...
the thing in the beginning is the "summary" of the chapter, in someone's opinion...
jeesh. so many things to explain.
The Father - Chapter Six
"Excuse me," Mr. Wheeler spoke out. "Who are you to step into our house without our permission?"
"I'm so sorry," the man apologizes. "But I wanted to talk to you about something."
"Fine, then. We will talk, but not here."
"Okay." He stands outside.
Mrs. Wheeler looked as if she saw a ghost. Her lips were immensely pale. "Mom... are you okay?" Joey asked.
"Yes, Joseph. I'm fine."
She still quivered; Mr. Wheeler put his arms around her and whispered in her ear, "It's going to be alright."
Reassured, she walked out the door. Mr. Wheeler spoke to Joey and Serenity. "Joey... you don't mind taking care of Serenity, do you?"
"Nah, it's alright. You adults go have fun." He grinned widely.
"I thank you so much," he said, and closed the door.
Joey's grin disappeared in an instant.
"What do you think that was about?" Serenity asked. She looked out the window.
Joey went to join her. "I don't know... but that sure didn't look like happy bunnies to me."
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'WHY HAVE YOU RETURNED?!" Mrs. Wheeler shrieked. Her face was red with fury, and her lips were quivering. Her hands were shaking uncontrollably.
"He's my son. How can you talk to me like this?" the man said coolly.
"You... you kichi-gai!!" she screamed. "You are no father!! You have no ability!! Tell me what you have been doing for the last 15 years without your son!!"
"it's true, I have no ability. But I do have all rights."
"No!!" she cried. "This... this cannot be!! You lie!! You..." Mrs. Wheeler broke down into tears.
Ignoring her, he continues. "You know for sure that it's true."
Finally, Mr. Wheeler steps in and speaks. He is also furious, but does not show it. "You gave him to us personally. You said that you'll stay quiet forever. And now... you break your promise?? Are you truly a man?"
The man laughs. "Yes, I do break my promise. I am not a man of my word. Is this the answer that you wanted?"
".... No. I expected no answer at all. ...It sounds as if you are proud of the things you did."
The man spat on the ground. "Does it really?" He scowled and went closer to Mr. Wheeler. "Do you think any man would be proud of disowning his child?"
"Just then, you said you are not a man."
The man closes his eyes and let his anger go. "Let's change the subject. I am not here to talk about me. I am here to talk about Joey Omiya-"
"He is Joey Wheeler, and always will be," Mr. Wheeler interrupts.
"No, he is Joey Omiya, and I promise that I can take care of him."
"You have no ability-"
"Trust me, Mr. Wheeler. I have the house, money... FOOD... In fact, I am living in a much better condition than you."
Mr. Wheeler is growing furious every second. "That does not mean you have the ability."
"I promise, he will be living in a better environment." He takes his hat off and bows. "Please give him to me, I promise I will be a father figure... even after 15 years. I'm sorry I could not take care of him, and I will make it up to him."
Well... hmm. I'm not really fixing my stuff (well... except for putting "AU" on the fic ...)
Well to the person whoever had to "write" that comment... Arigato for making me feel horrible. Just terribly SPOILED my day.
Anywayz, I CAN'T put italics... (actually, i don't know how... ^_^)
Also, I know I'm not really good at the whole "detail" thing and all that... so that's the whole purpose of the "LINE" in the middle. I know that it drives people nuts how you keep switching scenes without any word... so that's the whole purpose of the "LINE" (which is ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~)
Okay?? You don't like it... you don't like it... dat's it. If you don't like it, juss... leave... don't read it... better than criticisms.
~ k i y o u n g e e
p.s. i don't switch the 3rd person and 1st person...
the thing in the beginning is the "summary" of the chapter, in someone's opinion...
jeesh. so many things to explain.
The Father - Chapter Six
"Excuse me," Mr. Wheeler spoke out. "Who are you to step into our house without our permission?"
"I'm so sorry," the man apologizes. "But I wanted to talk to you about something."
"Fine, then. We will talk, but not here."
"Okay." He stands outside.
Mrs. Wheeler looked as if she saw a ghost. Her lips were immensely pale. "Mom... are you okay?" Joey asked.
"Yes, Joseph. I'm fine."
She still quivered; Mr. Wheeler put his arms around her and whispered in her ear, "It's going to be alright."
Reassured, she walked out the door. Mr. Wheeler spoke to Joey and Serenity. "Joey... you don't mind taking care of Serenity, do you?"
"Nah, it's alright. You adults go have fun." He grinned widely.
"I thank you so much," he said, and closed the door.
Joey's grin disappeared in an instant.
"What do you think that was about?" Serenity asked. She looked out the window.
Joey went to join her. "I don't know... but that sure didn't look like happy bunnies to me."
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'WHY HAVE YOU RETURNED?!" Mrs. Wheeler shrieked. Her face was red with fury, and her lips were quivering. Her hands were shaking uncontrollably.
"He's my son. How can you talk to me like this?" the man said coolly.
"You... you kichi-gai!!" she screamed. "You are no father!! You have no ability!! Tell me what you have been doing for the last 15 years without your son!!"
"it's true, I have no ability. But I do have all rights."
"No!!" she cried. "This... this cannot be!! You lie!! You..." Mrs. Wheeler broke down into tears.
Ignoring her, he continues. "You know for sure that it's true."
Finally, Mr. Wheeler steps in and speaks. He is also furious, but does not show it. "You gave him to us personally. You said that you'll stay quiet forever. And now... you break your promise?? Are you truly a man?"
The man laughs. "Yes, I do break my promise. I am not a man of my word. Is this the answer that you wanted?"
".... No. I expected no answer at all. ...It sounds as if you are proud of the things you did."
The man spat on the ground. "Does it really?" He scowled and went closer to Mr. Wheeler. "Do you think any man would be proud of disowning his child?"
"Just then, you said you are not a man."
The man closes his eyes and let his anger go. "Let's change the subject. I am not here to talk about me. I am here to talk about Joey Omiya-"
"He is Joey Wheeler, and always will be," Mr. Wheeler interrupts.
"No, he is Joey Omiya, and I promise that I can take care of him."
"You have no ability-"
"Trust me, Mr. Wheeler. I have the house, money... FOOD... In fact, I am living in a much better condition than you."
Mr. Wheeler is growing furious every second. "That does not mean you have the ability."
"I promise, he will be living in a better environment." He takes his hat off and bows. "Please give him to me, I promise I will be a father figure... even after 15 years. I'm sorry I could not take care of him, and I will make it up to him."