(*-*) I'm only 9 years old. This is my first fanfic. So if you have any ideas (*-*)
on how to make my story better just tell me in a review. I need all the help I
can get.
WARNING: This story makes no sense. It's supposed to take place in the future.
So here is my story:
(At a park in some city with a long name)
Inuyasha: Hey Miroku.
Miroku: Hello. Have you seen Sango and Kagome.
Inuyasha: I think they went shopping at the mall.
Miroku: Let's go and say hi or something.
Inuyasha: Yeah. We can go in my new car.
Miroku: So what if you have a new car. You are such a show off. I'm not going with you. I'll rather walk to
the STUPID MALL!
Inuyasha: Fine. Who needs you anyway. IDIOT!
(At the mall)
Kagome: Hey Sango, come here look at this dress. I've gotta have it, or do you want it.
Sango: Ok I'll take it.
Kagome:*holds dress in front of Sango then pulls it away* Psyche!
Inuyasha walks in.
Inuyasha: Would you guys hurry up, you take too long.
Kagome: So you want to help us.
Inuyasha: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
*people stare at him*
Inuyasha: What you looking at?!
Kagome: Here Inuyasha hold this dress in front of you so I can see how it looks.
Inuyasha: I.......told....you...NOO!!
Kagome: Pretty please :(
Inuyasha: NO!
Miroku walks in sweaty and out of breath.
Miroku: Hey Sango, Kagome and slow Inuyasha.
Kagome and Sango: Hey.
Inuyasha: Shutup Miroku. No one told you to walk.
Kagome: Wow, I'm so hungry *holds her stomach* Are you guys?
Everyone: Yeah.
Kagome: Ok. Let's go find somewhere to eat.
(At a restaurant)
Waitress: Hello. What do you guys want?
Kagome: I would like some chicken nuggets and a milkshake.
Sango: Cornbread and a soda.
Inuyasha: Give me some cornbread.
Miroku: I would like your number. *winks*
Waitress: uhh...no. Seriously what will it be.
Miroku: *pouts* OK, I'll have a hamburger.
Waitress: Alright. Coming right up.
(15 minutes later)
Waitress: Here's your food.
Kagome: Thank you.
Waitress leaves
*everyone is eating*
Old Man: Hey you *points to Inuyasha and Sango* (in a hoarse voice) Do you want your cornbread?
Sango: Of course I want my cornbread.
Inuyasha: You're not having my cornbread you old fart. *pulls out Tetsusaiga*
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Will Inuyasha kill the old man for his cornbread? Will he wear a dress? Will Miroku get the waitress' number?
Tune in next time for a episode of CORNBREAD.
on how to make my story better just tell me in a review. I need all the help I
can get.
WARNING: This story makes no sense. It's supposed to take place in the future.
So here is my story:
(At a park in some city with a long name)
Inuyasha: Hey Miroku.
Miroku: Hello. Have you seen Sango and Kagome.
Inuyasha: I think they went shopping at the mall.
Miroku: Let's go and say hi or something.
Inuyasha: Yeah. We can go in my new car.
Miroku: So what if you have a new car. You are such a show off. I'm not going with you. I'll rather walk to
the STUPID MALL!
Inuyasha: Fine. Who needs you anyway. IDIOT!
(At the mall)
Kagome: Hey Sango, come here look at this dress. I've gotta have it, or do you want it.
Sango: Ok I'll take it.
Kagome:*holds dress in front of Sango then pulls it away* Psyche!
Inuyasha walks in.
Inuyasha: Would you guys hurry up, you take too long.
Kagome: So you want to help us.
Inuyasha: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
*people stare at him*
Inuyasha: What you looking at?!
Kagome: Here Inuyasha hold this dress in front of you so I can see how it looks.
Inuyasha: I.......told....you...NOO!!
Kagome: Pretty please :(
Inuyasha: NO!
Miroku walks in sweaty and out of breath.
Miroku: Hey Sango, Kagome and slow Inuyasha.
Kagome and Sango: Hey.
Inuyasha: Shutup Miroku. No one told you to walk.
Kagome: Wow, I'm so hungry *holds her stomach* Are you guys?
Everyone: Yeah.
Kagome: Ok. Let's go find somewhere to eat.
(At a restaurant)
Waitress: Hello. What do you guys want?
Kagome: I would like some chicken nuggets and a milkshake.
Sango: Cornbread and a soda.
Inuyasha: Give me some cornbread.
Miroku: I would like your number. *winks*
Waitress: uhh...no. Seriously what will it be.
Miroku: *pouts* OK, I'll have a hamburger.
Waitress: Alright. Coming right up.
(15 minutes later)
Waitress: Here's your food.
Kagome: Thank you.
Waitress leaves
*everyone is eating*
Old Man: Hey you *points to Inuyasha and Sango* (in a hoarse voice) Do you want your cornbread?
Sango: Of course I want my cornbread.
Inuyasha: You're not having my cornbread you old fart. *pulls out Tetsusaiga*
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Will Inuyasha kill the old man for his cornbread? Will he wear a dress? Will Miroku get the waitress' number?
Tune in next time for a episode of CORNBREAD.