Yu Yu Hakusho Cast Meets Yugioh Cast

The Yu Yu Hakusho cast goes on vacation and so does the Yugioh cast . Their plane crashes into each other and they get stranded in the middle of Egypt . How will they survive and get back home?
Hey everybody ! This is my first fanfic so please tell me how I did.Please,no flames.R&R
The Crash
Yusuke¡¯s House
Yusuke:Hey guys,guess what?
Keiko,Kurama,Kuwabara,Botan,Hiei,Yukina,Koenma, Shizuru:What?
Yusuke:I¡¯ve just won 9 tickets to¡­¡­¡­..HAWAII!!!!
Everyone:OoO
Yusuke:Yeah,I know
Kuwabara:Yusuke,how did you win those tickets?
Yusuke:Oh¡­I won¡¯t tell,:P
Kuwabara:Damn!
Yusuke:Anyway,I¡¯ve decided to take you guys with me.If you don¡¯t want to go,than¡­¡­¡­.oh well.
Everyone:OF COURSE,WE¡¯LL GO!!!!!
Yusuke:-_-

Game Shop
Yugi:Granpa,I¡¯m home.
Grandpa(I¡¯m used to calling him that):Hey Yugi.
Yugi:What¡¯s this packet for?*looks at packet*
Grandpa:Why,it¡¯s for you.
Yugi:What for?
Grandpa:It¡¯s so you could enjoy your vacation.Why,I spent most of my money just for it.
Joey:What is it,Gramps?
Grandpa:Open it up and see for yourselp.
Yugi:*opens packet*
Joey,Yugi,Tristan,Tea,Mai,Serenity,Yami:OoO
Grandpa:They¡¯re all for you!!
Yugi:Aren¡¯t you going?
Grandpa:Nah,I got a shop to take care of.
Joey:What are we waiting for?Let¡¯s get packing!!!
Tristan:Wait a minute.There¡¯s 12 tickets,we could invite other people!
Tea:Then,who should we invite?
Everyone:Hmmmm¡­¡­..
Yugi:We could invite¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­¡­
Yami:Yugi!We can¡¯t invite them!They¡¯re evil!Well,except for Ryou,but Marik,YM,and Bakura are crazy!!They¡¯ll kill everybody on the plane!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Serenity:Then who can we invite?
Yami:-_________-
Tea:*sighs*Come on,let¡¯s go tell them¡­
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Airport
All:*Gets on plane same time*
YYH cast
Yusuke,Kuwabara:Hawaii,Here we come!
Yugioh cast
Joey,Tristan:Florida here we come!!
YYH cast
Everyone:*sits down*
Woman:What would you like to drink?
Yusuke,Botan,Keiko,Kuwabara,Yukina:Soda.
Kurama:Tea,please.
Woman:Sorry,we don't have tea.
Kurama:Then give me some hot water.*Takes out one of one hundred bags of tea leaves*
Everybody:-__-,okayyyyyyyyyy................................
Hiei,Koenma:Water.
Yugioh Cast
Man:What would you like to eat?
Yugi,Yami,Tea,Ryou:Chips.
Tristan:I'll have some steak,vegetables,cakes,everykind of desert you got,and 3 bags of chips,please.
Joey:Give me triple of every thing he got.
YM:Bacareful of what you eat,you might just find a knife"accidently"stashed there.*smirks*
Bakura:Along with one million thorns.*chuckles*
Joey:Hey,watch it!
Man:Um Sir.....We don't have anything of what you ordered,except for the chips.
Joey,Tristan:*groans*Than just give us the chips.
YYH Cast
Kurama:*Drinking tea,suddenly drops it*Oh man!Now i gotta make another patch!
Kuwabara:*Drops soda*Man,who's driving around here?
Yusuke:You mean "piloting".
Hiei:*chuckles*Wow,finally somthing you actually know.
Yusuke:That's it!*tries to tackle Hiei,but misses*
Keiko:Yusuke,sit down.
Yusuke:Grr...*plane tilts**drops soda*Hey, what's going on?
Pilot on speaker:................BURPPPPPPPPPPP.................................
Speaker:Ladies and gentleman,I'm afraid we have some problems.Our pilot just got drunk so...........RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Kuwabara:RUN!!!
Shizuru:Sit down,Little Brother,there's no place to run.
Hiei:Unless you're willing to jump.Now that's something I'll enjoy.*smirks*
Yukina:Hiei!
Koenma:Um guys,I think you better take a look outside.....
Everybody:*looks outs
Kuwabara:We're gonna crash!!*while looking outside ahen they are about to crash into another plane*
To be countinued..................

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