LAVENDER SHADOW
Little Wings - Hi! . May change the rating. Changed my pen name.
Disclaimer - I don't own anything but the plot. I also don't own 'Born to try' it belongs to Delta Goodrem. Very, very talented singer/songwriter.
'word' = thoughts ~word~ = little voice in your head
Reviewers : Xonnie - Thank you for reading and reviewing
Sign85 - Thank you for reading and reviewing. I know it's a bit OOC, what do you mean by 'adding more stuff'?
Kawaii wolf - Thank you for reading and reviewing. They will come into the story later on.
"Adrenaline"
It was a Tuesday and the school day had been cancelled because of a big teachers meeting that went for the rest of the week, and because Tomoyo had the week off, she wanted to practice her song instead of hanging out with her new friends. She quickly changed into jeans and a graffiti tank top and a chain belt, grabbed her guitar and snuck off to the recording studio where there was always one abandoned room that she went to practice it. No- one knew she did this, not even the people that worked there knew. They were always way too busy to notice their was one extra person practicing in an old recording room, now used for storage.
Tomoyo walked in casually and went up to the security guard.
"Where do you think you're going, missy?" He asked in a gruff voice.
"Well, I have to see my brother urgently, he works here you see so do you think I could deliever the message to my brother? It's really important" Tomoyo lied convincingly.
"I want you out of there in twenty minutes, starting now" He narrowed his eyes but let her in.
"Ok, thanks" Tomoyo raced inside, knowing that the security guard would forget anyways.
She found the room easily and got herself set up and started to play. Tomoyo must have been practicing for around half an hour when she heard footsteps. Tomoyo stopped playing. They were definetly footsteps and voices. She dived behind the curtain quickly.
"...I just think that he'd be better with a different angle, you know? Maybe we should work on his image too, it'll boost his career a bit. The guy just seems a bit scared to do anything too" A male voice said.
"Yeah, I'll try to convince him and you get the spare records" Said another.
The guy who first spoke went into the room where Tomoyo had been practicing. He searched around for something. She took a deep breath but unfortunately inhaled dust. Tomoyo tried to block her nose but..
AAAAACCCCCHHHOOOOOOOOO
Tomoyo tripped over the hem of the curtain and fell. She looked up at the guy. He must've been 18 tops and VERY good looking. He had sandy blonde hair and brown eyes. He looked very confused
"Er..hey?" He questioned. "Do you..work here?"
"No, I'm so sorry, please don't tell anyone I was here" Tomoyo begged.
"Of course I won't. What were you doing here anyway?" The guy asked.
"Well.." She hesitated. "I'm in the music festival on Saturday and I have no idea what to sing so I come here to practice"
"Ah. Sounds reasonable. Oh, I'm Azumi Kei, just call me Kei" He said.
"Daidouji Tomoyo, please call me Tomoyo" Tomoyo smiled.
"That's pretty impressive, getting accepted to play something at the festival, they only accept two or three acts each year, you have a chance to be a star" Kei said.
"Yeah. Um..I don't know why I'm asking this, but, do you think you could give me a hand in deciding my song? Only if you have time, I mean" Tomoyo asked slowly.
"I have all the time in the world" Kei answered. Tomoyo thanked him.
"Now show me what you've got. You can sing a song already here or one of your own. If you do write your own songs, that is" He said.
Tomoyo sang 'Born to Try' for him.
"It'd sound a lot better on a piano, wouldn't it? Can you play that?" Kei asked.
"Yeah, I usually practice that song on a piano, that's how I wrote it" Tomoyo told him.
"Hmm..for the music festival on Saturday, do you plan to play the guitar or the piano? It should help narrow your search for the perfect song that'll blow everyone away. Especially the scouts who'll be there watching" Kei scratched his chin.
They practiced all day, Kei giving her tips and she finding out that he played the guitar himself. When it was four o'clock Tomoyo decided she'd better head home.
"Hey, well, do you..wanna grab a bite to eat before you're off?" Kei asked uncertainly.
"That'd be great" Tomoyo smiled and nodded.
"Okay. Your choice" Kei grinned.
"McDonalds? I know it's pretty cheap and stuff, but I'm not dressed for anywhere else" Tomoyo said sheepishly.
"Either am I. Good choice" Kei looked down at his old T-shirt and baggy pants.
"Let's go then!" Tomoyo said.
They talked all the way to McDonalds.
"You know how fattening this stuff is" Tomoyo said through a mouthful of fries.
Kei laughed. "How old are you anyway?"
"I'm fifteen, I'll be turning sixteen next week" She answered. "You?"
"I just turned eighteen, I skipped a year at school so I've been working for a year and a half. Tell me more about yourself" Kei answered.
"I'm a cheerleader, I dance, I love music, singing and hanging out with my friends, I haven't got a boyfriend" Tomoyo told him.
"Oh yeah. I didn't go to university because I got a job instantly at the studio, and that's where my life's taken me so far and whatever happens next, just happens I guess" Kei nodded.
"I like not knowing what's gonna happen. It makes life so much funner" Tomoyo finished her drink
"Cool. Wanna go?" He asked.
"Yeah" Tomoyo replied.
Kei took hold of Tomoyo's hand and walked her the whole way home. They got to her front door.
"So will I ever see you again, Azumi Kei?" She asked with a smile.
"I hope so" He whispered. Kei tilted Tomoyo's chin up and kissed her gently.
Tomoyo closed her eyes and wanted the kiss to last forever. The kiss made her feel tingly. It just felt so right to be with Kei.
"Tomoyo, will you be my girlfriend?" Kei asked.
"Yes" She said softly. She felt a connection to him like no other guy. Except Eriol.
"I'll call you" He said as he backed away. Kei waved and blew her kiss before he went out of sight.
Tomoyo sighed and let herself into the huge mansion. She grinned to herself. Her first boyfriend. She had to call Sakura.
"Hey Sakura guess what?" Tomoyo said when Sakura picked up the phone.
"What?" Sakura asked.
"I have a boyfriend!" Tomoyo yelled.
"OH MY GOSH! THAT'S SO COOL!" Sakura screamed.
"I know! It all started when I was at the recording place practicing.." Tomoyo repeated the story to her best friend.
"Wow, your first boyfriend. How do you feel?" Sakura said in awe.
"Great. I don't know why, it's just a GUY, I mean I shouldn't be so excited. You've had loads of boyfriends. Wanna give me some good girlfriend tips?" Tomoyo said.
"Well, all guys are different and they like different things but you should respect what he likes and don't try to change him. Oh and don't be too clingy. Call him once every second day, tops. He can call you if he wants to talk any other time" Sakura pointed out.
"Okay. What do I say if I want to dump him?" Tomoyo asked.
"You wanna dump him already? Tomoyo, it's only been a day, I feel sorry for the poor guy!" Sakura giggled.
"No! Let's just forget that. How was your day?" She questioned.
"I spent the day comforting a crying Mika. Honestly, she needs to get over it. He dumped her two weeks ago, I mean, ok, she should still be sad but Mika shouldn't still be bawling her eyes out. It nearly drove me insane. I was so close to blowing up at the girl" Sakura moaned.
"That's a pretty bad day, Sakura. Eriol's taking me somewhere tomorrow, he wouldn't say where but he said to wear pants" Tomoyo said thoughtfully.
"Hmm. . .I wonder where he's going to take you. Oh, I was going to ask if you wanted to come go-kart racing with Syaoran and I. Bring Kei too, I wanna meet him, see if he's up to scratch and good enough for my best friend" Sakura said. Tomoyo laughed.
"Ok, we'll be there. See you then" She answered.
"Fantastic. Bye!" Sakura said before they both hung up.
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"Eriol! Hey!" Tomoyo bounded down the stairs to give her best guy friend a hug.
"Hey, how's it goin?" He asked.
"Great! I'm in such a good mood" She giggled.
"Okay then. That's good. You ready to try something new?" Eriol asked with a glint of mischief in his eye.
"What do you have planned?" Tomoyo asked suspiciously.
"You'll see" Eriol took her hand and led her into the car.
All the way, Tomoyo wouldn't stop asking questions about where they were going, what they were going to do, would it be fun, would it hurt and so on. They arrived in front of a building.
"Tomoyo, we're going bungee jumping" Eriol said.
"No! Eriol, I'm scared, noooooo!" Tomoyo shook her head.
"Yup. No buts, ifs or whys" He told her.
Eriol dragged her into the building where they were checked in, given safety gear and an instructor to follow.
"Hello, I'm Sachi and I'll be your instructor today" Sachi said.
"Tomoyo's a bit scared so can we jump together?" Eriol asked.
"Sure, it's always a little frightening for your first time but it really is great fun when you do it a couple of times. Here, let me get this safety gear strapped on" Sachi started helping them with the gear. "Don't worry, it's very safe" she added at the look on Tomoyo's face.
"Mmm" She squeaked. They gear was securely on her.
"Ok, jump when you're ready" Sachi smiled.
"You ready?" Eriol's husky voice whispered in her ear.
"No" Tomoyo muttered.
"One..two..THREE!" Eriol grabbed Tomoyo's waist and jumped.
Tomoyo screamed the whole way down until they were just hanging there.
"Oh my god, Oh my god! Eriol, I DID IT!" She yelled.
"Yeah, not that hard was it, huh?" Eriol laughed and hugged her.
"I can't believe we're upside down. It seems so weird that we're on a different angle than we usually are. Isn't it amazing? Let's do it again! Please can we do it again?" Tomoyo said excitedly.
"Of course" Eriol replied.
They slowly got back up to safe standing ground.
"One two threeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!" Tomoyo shouted and jumped again.
The wind soared through her hair, messing it up, but she didn't care. The air refreshed her as she breathed in the fresh oxygen, speeding faster and faster toward the ground. Then there was the sudden jerk of the chain that stopped you from plummeting head first into the waterfall below them.
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"Whoa. Three words. Extreme Adrenaline" Tomoyo said.
"That's two words, sweetie" Eriol laughed.
"Yeah, whatever. Lets get some sushi, I'm so starving!" Tomoyo giggled.
When they found a seat at the sushi place, the two of them just talked.
"Have you gotten started on that assignment yet? It's been a bitch for me. Nakuru wants to help out way too much. I can't believe she actually likes ancient history, it all seems a bore to me" Eriol said.
"It is, but I guess you aren't into that sort of thing, it's one of your weaknesses. You must be better at something else than history. What are your strong points?" Tomoyo asked.
"Soccer. Sport. Music" He replied.
"Okay, well, pretend that Aincent Eygpt is one big soccer game. The Pharaoh is the referee, he calls the shots. The slaves are the players, working so that the other team doesn't score, or the other city doesn't take over their own. Then you think up the rest" Tomoyo sugessted.
"And then, put the game into play" Eriol finished. "Wow, that helps. Now I actually WANT to do that assignment!"
"Hey, I have to tell you something" Tomoyo said.
"What is it?" Eriol asked, taking another bit of his sushi roll.
"I met a guy yesterday while I was practicing and he helped me so much with my music then he took me out to McDonalds and we had something to eat before he walked me home. The he..er..kissed me and now he's my boyfriend" Tomoyo said happily.
"What?! You've known the guy for not even a day and now your all lovey- dovey with him?" Eriol said.
"What's it to you? Why does it bother you this much?" Tomoyo retorted.
"It just does. You hardly know him. What if he tries something on you? He must be at least eighteen, if he works already" Eriol said stubbornly.
"So? It shouldn't matter to you if I have a boyfriend or not. Tell me WHY you don't like the idea" Tomoyo shot back.
"I-" Eriol shook his head and ran his hands through his hair. "I l-love you, Tomoyo" He got up and left the restaurant, leaving Tomoyo wide-eyed and surprised.
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'I can't believe he LOVES me' Tomoyo thought. 'Oh forget it. Why should he care so much, he hasn't known me for long'
~Yeah, but he knows you better than anyone else, beside Sakura and Jordyn~ said a little voice in the back of her head.
'Oh shut up'
~You know it's right~
'I'm just going to stop fretting about Eriol, it's none of his business'
~Then why do you care so much?~
It was true. Why DID she care so much?
Little Wings - Hehe. I know this chapter was a bit cheesy, I really didn't like it at all, I would've skimmed through it if I were you, only coz it has some important points of Tomoyo getting a boyfriend and Eriol being jealous. Otherwise skip it entirely. Please review! And I'm always open to constructive critiscism and ways to improve the story!
Little Wings - Hi! . May change the rating. Changed my pen name.
Disclaimer - I don't own anything but the plot. I also don't own 'Born to try' it belongs to Delta Goodrem. Very, very talented singer/songwriter.
'word' = thoughts ~word~ = little voice in your head
Reviewers : Xonnie - Thank you for reading and reviewing
Sign85 - Thank you for reading and reviewing. I know it's a bit OOC, what do you mean by 'adding more stuff'?
Kawaii wolf - Thank you for reading and reviewing. They will come into the story later on.
"Adrenaline"
It was a Tuesday and the school day had been cancelled because of a big teachers meeting that went for the rest of the week, and because Tomoyo had the week off, she wanted to practice her song instead of hanging out with her new friends. She quickly changed into jeans and a graffiti tank top and a chain belt, grabbed her guitar and snuck off to the recording studio where there was always one abandoned room that she went to practice it. No- one knew she did this, not even the people that worked there knew. They were always way too busy to notice their was one extra person practicing in an old recording room, now used for storage.
Tomoyo walked in casually and went up to the security guard.
"Where do you think you're going, missy?" He asked in a gruff voice.
"Well, I have to see my brother urgently, he works here you see so do you think I could deliever the message to my brother? It's really important" Tomoyo lied convincingly.
"I want you out of there in twenty minutes, starting now" He narrowed his eyes but let her in.
"Ok, thanks" Tomoyo raced inside, knowing that the security guard would forget anyways.
She found the room easily and got herself set up and started to play. Tomoyo must have been practicing for around half an hour when she heard footsteps. Tomoyo stopped playing. They were definetly footsteps and voices. She dived behind the curtain quickly.
"...I just think that he'd be better with a different angle, you know? Maybe we should work on his image too, it'll boost his career a bit. The guy just seems a bit scared to do anything too" A male voice said.
"Yeah, I'll try to convince him and you get the spare records" Said another.
The guy who first spoke went into the room where Tomoyo had been practicing. He searched around for something. She took a deep breath but unfortunately inhaled dust. Tomoyo tried to block her nose but..
AAAAACCCCCHHHOOOOOOOOO
Tomoyo tripped over the hem of the curtain and fell. She looked up at the guy. He must've been 18 tops and VERY good looking. He had sandy blonde hair and brown eyes. He looked very confused
"Er..hey?" He questioned. "Do you..work here?"
"No, I'm so sorry, please don't tell anyone I was here" Tomoyo begged.
"Of course I won't. What were you doing here anyway?" The guy asked.
"Well.." She hesitated. "I'm in the music festival on Saturday and I have no idea what to sing so I come here to practice"
"Ah. Sounds reasonable. Oh, I'm Azumi Kei, just call me Kei" He said.
"Daidouji Tomoyo, please call me Tomoyo" Tomoyo smiled.
"That's pretty impressive, getting accepted to play something at the festival, they only accept two or three acts each year, you have a chance to be a star" Kei said.
"Yeah. Um..I don't know why I'm asking this, but, do you think you could give me a hand in deciding my song? Only if you have time, I mean" Tomoyo asked slowly.
"I have all the time in the world" Kei answered. Tomoyo thanked him.
"Now show me what you've got. You can sing a song already here or one of your own. If you do write your own songs, that is" He said.
Tomoyo sang 'Born to Try' for him.
"It'd sound a lot better on a piano, wouldn't it? Can you play that?" Kei asked.
"Yeah, I usually practice that song on a piano, that's how I wrote it" Tomoyo told him.
"Hmm..for the music festival on Saturday, do you plan to play the guitar or the piano? It should help narrow your search for the perfect song that'll blow everyone away. Especially the scouts who'll be there watching" Kei scratched his chin.
They practiced all day, Kei giving her tips and she finding out that he played the guitar himself. When it was four o'clock Tomoyo decided she'd better head home.
"Hey, well, do you..wanna grab a bite to eat before you're off?" Kei asked uncertainly.
"That'd be great" Tomoyo smiled and nodded.
"Okay. Your choice" Kei grinned.
"McDonalds? I know it's pretty cheap and stuff, but I'm not dressed for anywhere else" Tomoyo said sheepishly.
"Either am I. Good choice" Kei looked down at his old T-shirt and baggy pants.
"Let's go then!" Tomoyo said.
They talked all the way to McDonalds.
"You know how fattening this stuff is" Tomoyo said through a mouthful of fries.
Kei laughed. "How old are you anyway?"
"I'm fifteen, I'll be turning sixteen next week" She answered. "You?"
"I just turned eighteen, I skipped a year at school so I've been working for a year and a half. Tell me more about yourself" Kei answered.
"I'm a cheerleader, I dance, I love music, singing and hanging out with my friends, I haven't got a boyfriend" Tomoyo told him.
"Oh yeah. I didn't go to university because I got a job instantly at the studio, and that's where my life's taken me so far and whatever happens next, just happens I guess" Kei nodded.
"I like not knowing what's gonna happen. It makes life so much funner" Tomoyo finished her drink
"Cool. Wanna go?" He asked.
"Yeah" Tomoyo replied.
Kei took hold of Tomoyo's hand and walked her the whole way home. They got to her front door.
"So will I ever see you again, Azumi Kei?" She asked with a smile.
"I hope so" He whispered. Kei tilted Tomoyo's chin up and kissed her gently.
Tomoyo closed her eyes and wanted the kiss to last forever. The kiss made her feel tingly. It just felt so right to be with Kei.
"Tomoyo, will you be my girlfriend?" Kei asked.
"Yes" She said softly. She felt a connection to him like no other guy. Except Eriol.
"I'll call you" He said as he backed away. Kei waved and blew her kiss before he went out of sight.
Tomoyo sighed and let herself into the huge mansion. She grinned to herself. Her first boyfriend. She had to call Sakura.
"Hey Sakura guess what?" Tomoyo said when Sakura picked up the phone.
"What?" Sakura asked.
"I have a boyfriend!" Tomoyo yelled.
"OH MY GOSH! THAT'S SO COOL!" Sakura screamed.
"I know! It all started when I was at the recording place practicing.." Tomoyo repeated the story to her best friend.
"Wow, your first boyfriend. How do you feel?" Sakura said in awe.
"Great. I don't know why, it's just a GUY, I mean I shouldn't be so excited. You've had loads of boyfriends. Wanna give me some good girlfriend tips?" Tomoyo said.
"Well, all guys are different and they like different things but you should respect what he likes and don't try to change him. Oh and don't be too clingy. Call him once every second day, tops. He can call you if he wants to talk any other time" Sakura pointed out.
"Okay. What do I say if I want to dump him?" Tomoyo asked.
"You wanna dump him already? Tomoyo, it's only been a day, I feel sorry for the poor guy!" Sakura giggled.
"No! Let's just forget that. How was your day?" She questioned.
"I spent the day comforting a crying Mika. Honestly, she needs to get over it. He dumped her two weeks ago, I mean, ok, she should still be sad but Mika shouldn't still be bawling her eyes out. It nearly drove me insane. I was so close to blowing up at the girl" Sakura moaned.
"That's a pretty bad day, Sakura. Eriol's taking me somewhere tomorrow, he wouldn't say where but he said to wear pants" Tomoyo said thoughtfully.
"Hmm. . .I wonder where he's going to take you. Oh, I was going to ask if you wanted to come go-kart racing with Syaoran and I. Bring Kei too, I wanna meet him, see if he's up to scratch and good enough for my best friend" Sakura said. Tomoyo laughed.
"Ok, we'll be there. See you then" She answered.
"Fantastic. Bye!" Sakura said before they both hung up.
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"Eriol! Hey!" Tomoyo bounded down the stairs to give her best guy friend a hug.
"Hey, how's it goin?" He asked.
"Great! I'm in such a good mood" She giggled.
"Okay then. That's good. You ready to try something new?" Eriol asked with a glint of mischief in his eye.
"What do you have planned?" Tomoyo asked suspiciously.
"You'll see" Eriol took her hand and led her into the car.
All the way, Tomoyo wouldn't stop asking questions about where they were going, what they were going to do, would it be fun, would it hurt and so on. They arrived in front of a building.
"Tomoyo, we're going bungee jumping" Eriol said.
"No! Eriol, I'm scared, noooooo!" Tomoyo shook her head.
"Yup. No buts, ifs or whys" He told her.
Eriol dragged her into the building where they were checked in, given safety gear and an instructor to follow.
"Hello, I'm Sachi and I'll be your instructor today" Sachi said.
"Tomoyo's a bit scared so can we jump together?" Eriol asked.
"Sure, it's always a little frightening for your first time but it really is great fun when you do it a couple of times. Here, let me get this safety gear strapped on" Sachi started helping them with the gear. "Don't worry, it's very safe" she added at the look on Tomoyo's face.
"Mmm" She squeaked. They gear was securely on her.
"Ok, jump when you're ready" Sachi smiled.
"You ready?" Eriol's husky voice whispered in her ear.
"No" Tomoyo muttered.
"One..two..THREE!" Eriol grabbed Tomoyo's waist and jumped.
Tomoyo screamed the whole way down until they were just hanging there.
"Oh my god, Oh my god! Eriol, I DID IT!" She yelled.
"Yeah, not that hard was it, huh?" Eriol laughed and hugged her.
"I can't believe we're upside down. It seems so weird that we're on a different angle than we usually are. Isn't it amazing? Let's do it again! Please can we do it again?" Tomoyo said excitedly.
"Of course" Eriol replied.
They slowly got back up to safe standing ground.
"One two threeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!" Tomoyo shouted and jumped again.
The wind soared through her hair, messing it up, but she didn't care. The air refreshed her as she breathed in the fresh oxygen, speeding faster and faster toward the ground. Then there was the sudden jerk of the chain that stopped you from plummeting head first into the waterfall below them.
....::::::::::::::::::::::::::.......
"Whoa. Three words. Extreme Adrenaline" Tomoyo said.
"That's two words, sweetie" Eriol laughed.
"Yeah, whatever. Lets get some sushi, I'm so starving!" Tomoyo giggled.
When they found a seat at the sushi place, the two of them just talked.
"Have you gotten started on that assignment yet? It's been a bitch for me. Nakuru wants to help out way too much. I can't believe she actually likes ancient history, it all seems a bore to me" Eriol said.
"It is, but I guess you aren't into that sort of thing, it's one of your weaknesses. You must be better at something else than history. What are your strong points?" Tomoyo asked.
"Soccer. Sport. Music" He replied.
"Okay, well, pretend that Aincent Eygpt is one big soccer game. The Pharaoh is the referee, he calls the shots. The slaves are the players, working so that the other team doesn't score, or the other city doesn't take over their own. Then you think up the rest" Tomoyo sugessted.
"And then, put the game into play" Eriol finished. "Wow, that helps. Now I actually WANT to do that assignment!"
"Hey, I have to tell you something" Tomoyo said.
"What is it?" Eriol asked, taking another bit of his sushi roll.
"I met a guy yesterday while I was practicing and he helped me so much with my music then he took me out to McDonalds and we had something to eat before he walked me home. The he..er..kissed me and now he's my boyfriend" Tomoyo said happily.
"What?! You've known the guy for not even a day and now your all lovey- dovey with him?" Eriol said.
"What's it to you? Why does it bother you this much?" Tomoyo retorted.
"It just does. You hardly know him. What if he tries something on you? He must be at least eighteen, if he works already" Eriol said stubbornly.
"So? It shouldn't matter to you if I have a boyfriend or not. Tell me WHY you don't like the idea" Tomoyo shot back.
"I-" Eriol shook his head and ran his hands through his hair. "I l-love you, Tomoyo" He got up and left the restaurant, leaving Tomoyo wide-eyed and surprised.
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'I can't believe he LOVES me' Tomoyo thought. 'Oh forget it. Why should he care so much, he hasn't known me for long'
~Yeah, but he knows you better than anyone else, beside Sakura and Jordyn~ said a little voice in the back of her head.
'Oh shut up'
~You know it's right~
'I'm just going to stop fretting about Eriol, it's none of his business'
~Then why do you care so much?~
It was true. Why DID she care so much?
Little Wings - Hehe. I know this chapter was a bit cheesy, I really didn't like it at all, I would've skimmed through it if I were you, only coz it has some important points of Tomoyo getting a boyfriend and Eriol being jealous. Otherwise skip it entirely. Please review! And I'm always open to constructive critiscism and ways to improve the story!