Well, I read some of the reviews and I find some people really like this
story. I had a great idea for this story, but then I stopped because I
wasn't getting a lot of reviews and I started thinking of the idea I had
and didn't think it was so good. But then all of a sudden I kept getting
reviews, so I'm going to write a short next chapter then I'll see where it
goes from there.
"Sttt.....stay... here? With... with you?" she stuttered. "I... oh.....um...."
Rab didn't seem to hear her and she headed inside. "Here's who I found for the job." he announced.
"You got a girl?" one of them said.
"I thought you said you talked to them about me!" she whispered.
"I did! I just didn't tell them you were a girl." answered Rab.
"Why not?" she hissed.
"She's not doing the delivery job, is she?"
"Of course not!" said Rab. "She clean the shop a bit. Does need cleaning."
"Right there. You did good." said one of them who came up and started looking Rebecca up and down. She suddenly felt uncomfortable.
They went back to work and the girl sighed as she started cleaning. She had to clean at home, and now she had to clean here. This wasn't what she dreamed it would be like.
[sorry! that's really all I can do now it's late where I live so that's as far as I got. another thing I should warn you about is, as people said in the reviews, I can't really do the way they talked very well. I read the reviews and many people said I got the dialogue wrong, which will probably happen often. Well, I really have to go now! sorry!]
"Sttt.....stay... here? With... with you?" she stuttered. "I... oh.....um...."
Rab didn't seem to hear her and she headed inside. "Here's who I found for the job." he announced.
"You got a girl?" one of them said.
"I thought you said you talked to them about me!" she whispered.
"I did! I just didn't tell them you were a girl." answered Rab.
"Why not?" she hissed.
"She's not doing the delivery job, is she?"
"Of course not!" said Rab. "She clean the shop a bit. Does need cleaning."
"Right there. You did good." said one of them who came up and started looking Rebecca up and down. She suddenly felt uncomfortable.
They went back to work and the girl sighed as she started cleaning. She had to clean at home, and now she had to clean here. This wasn't what she dreamed it would be like.
[sorry! that's really all I can do now it's late where I live so that's as far as I got. another thing I should warn you about is, as people said in the reviews, I can't really do the way they talked very well. I read the reviews and many people said I got the dialogue wrong, which will probably happen often. Well, I really have to go now! sorry!]