The Planet of Destruction
Disclaimer: I don't own starcraft or any names, places, or anything else from the game
A/N: This is the revised Chapter 1. My first three reviewers gave me some info and feedback, so I decided to change the first chapter. Enjoy.
A/N2: {} This means thoughts, [] this is telepathic communication, "" and this is speech
Chapter 1: Abduction
Elisia Gomez was your average twenty year old woman. She had a job, a car, and a small family. She worked as a secretary for the United Earth Directorate's Command office on Earth. But she had a secret. While she lived a fairly normal life, she was a psychic. Able to read peoples minds and to see the future, she was a very valuable member of the UED's executive council. The executive board seemed to be unaware of her gift, which she was fine with, for she knew what happened to psychics nowadays. They were taken to the ghost corps headquarters, whose location is known to only the highest members of the UED. The ghost corps was known for the way the training was. The rumors stated that many different tactics were used to achieve top psychic performance. These methods included, according to the rumors, Starvation, physical exhaustion, and implants. She had no desire to become a ghost. One day she was at the office when the UED field commander entered.
"Good morning sir." Elisia said.
"Morning Elisia" he answered
Elisia started to get images in her mind. These images consisted of pictures of a horrendous race of creatures, purely biological, with no technology. These creatures were merciless, soulless killers, living for one thing. Killing. She saw countless humans be ripped to shreds under the blades of these creatures. There were many types of these creatures, from small six legged runners to huge flying things spitting gobs of acid. One word drifted into her mind.
"Zerg" she whispered to herself
"What was that Elisia? What did you just say?" the field commander asked
"Uh. . . nothing sir" she said, realizing what she did
"You said Zerg, How do you know of the Zerg? The general public hasn't been informed of them yet." He asked with some understanding of the situation.
{Shit! Now I've done it!}
"With all due respect sir, I must be going home."
She then left very quickly, to avoid further questions.
THE UED GHOSTS CORPS OFFICE
"I'm just saying I think she's a telepath" said Corporal Jones
"What proof have you to back up your claim?" asked Commander Nelson
"When I entered my office she was sitting at her desk. I had just been briefed on the Zerg, and had them on my mind. We exchanged greetings, and then she said the word Zerg. She could not have known of them yet! She read my mind and slipped. Now she will be on guard and ready to fight us if we go. We should go and get her. If she could get that much out of me, she must have very developed powers." Corporal Jones said
"Hmmmmm, very well. You have my authorization to 'collect' her." Commander Nelson replied
"Sir, Thank You Sir!" Corporal Jones saluted before turning on his heels, and walking out the door.
Elisia had gone directly home after the incident in the office. She was scared. They would come for her, she knew it. All she could do was prepare for them. The walls of her house needed reinforcing, the family needed to take a 'vacation', and she needed the help of her friends. First, she laid her furniture against the walls and imbued the house with her psychic energy to shield her. Second she sent her family to her mother's house, two towns away. And lastly, she called.
[Brother Torin, I need your help.] she projected
[I am here, sister] he answered almost immediately.
Elisia was relieved. The Protoss High Templar had arrived quickly. He was about six feet tall and wore the characteristic armor of his rank and caste.
[En Taro Adun, Praetor] she thought to him.
[What is it you ask of me?] he answered
"The Ghosts corps will come for me. I wish not to go with them. Will you help me fight them?" she asked
[I will help you, but I cannot be seen. Therefore, I will help from my ship. I will give you the power of a Templar.]
He then reached out and touched his hand to her forehead. She felt a queasy feeling in the pit of her stomach, then a burning explosion that traveled throughout her body. When the feeling subsided, she was on her feet. Elisia Gomez ceased to exist. Now Elisia Torin Gomez took her place. She was powerful. The incredible amount of power threatened to destroy her. But she kept in check.
"Now let's see the Ghost Corps get me!" She yelled
And try they did. Not long after Torin left for his ship, the UED's 'collection squad' arrived. Corporal Jones led the unit.
"Alright, spread out and locate the subject. Bring her back to me alive." He said, as he barked orders.
"Sir, yes Sir!" The squad replied
The marines led the search and soon encountered the psionic wall.
"Uh sir we have a problem." He said into his radio
"What kind of problem?" Asked Jones
"She was apparently expecting us, and it appears you were right, because we have run into a psionic wall encompassing the entire house." He reported.
Corporal Jones thought over the new turn of events. Elisia had known she screwed up, she had prepared for their arrival.
{But how could she have erected such a wall? Is she really that powerful?}
"Go ahead, soldier, use force." He ordered
The night suddenly looked and sounded like the fourth of July. The marines and firebats were attacking the wall, in an attempt to weaken and eventually destroy it. This actually worked. After about five minutes a small hole appeared. The Ghost they had brought to administer the tranquilizer hopped through it and continued his part of the mission. Once inside, he activated the personnel cloaking, and proceeded to find his target. He wandered the house until he came to the living room. The room was clear, except for one person. This person was sitting cross legged in the middle of the floor, apparently in deep meditation. The ghost readied the tranquilizer, and approached his target. As he was about to stick the needle into the subjects neck, she spoke.
"Wait, I want to show you something. Yes, I can see you. Your cloaking is disabled around me." She said
Naturally surprised that he had been found but not killed, he backed off.
"What is your name Ghost?" Elisia asked
"Justin." He answered
"Justin, I want you to listen to me. The UED wants me to become a Ghost. I would rather not. Do you want to know how I got that wall? I received the powers of a Protoss Templar. Watch." Elisia said
Outside, a blue cloud started to form. The infantry was amazed; at least, they were amazed right up until the blue cloud started to shoot lighting at them. The first psionic bolts killed many marines and firebats. Most were dead before there bodies hit the ground. The remaining infantry retreated, out of the clouds range. Justin saw it all in his minds eye. He was awestruck at the sheer power of this woman. He turned to look at her and saw her back to him. He took the tranquilizer needle and plunged it into her back. She arched, before quickly falling unconscious. The wall fell apart, and the cloud disappeared. Justin had done his job.
"Corporal Jones? This is Ghost number 3354. Mission accomplished." He radioed in.
A/N: There! The rewrite is done! The three that reviewed the original, is this better? If you didn't get to read the original, send me an email at daman0186@yahoo.com and I can send it to you. Please review this as reviews help me to write better. Thanks.
Disclaimer: I don't own starcraft or any names, places, or anything else from the game
A/N: This is the revised Chapter 1. My first three reviewers gave me some info and feedback, so I decided to change the first chapter. Enjoy.
A/N2: {} This means thoughts, [] this is telepathic communication, "" and this is speech
Chapter 1: Abduction
Elisia Gomez was your average twenty year old woman. She had a job, a car, and a small family. She worked as a secretary for the United Earth Directorate's Command office on Earth. But she had a secret. While she lived a fairly normal life, she was a psychic. Able to read peoples minds and to see the future, she was a very valuable member of the UED's executive council. The executive board seemed to be unaware of her gift, which she was fine with, for she knew what happened to psychics nowadays. They were taken to the ghost corps headquarters, whose location is known to only the highest members of the UED. The ghost corps was known for the way the training was. The rumors stated that many different tactics were used to achieve top psychic performance. These methods included, according to the rumors, Starvation, physical exhaustion, and implants. She had no desire to become a ghost. One day she was at the office when the UED field commander entered.
"Good morning sir." Elisia said.
"Morning Elisia" he answered
Elisia started to get images in her mind. These images consisted of pictures of a horrendous race of creatures, purely biological, with no technology. These creatures were merciless, soulless killers, living for one thing. Killing. She saw countless humans be ripped to shreds under the blades of these creatures. There were many types of these creatures, from small six legged runners to huge flying things spitting gobs of acid. One word drifted into her mind.
"Zerg" she whispered to herself
"What was that Elisia? What did you just say?" the field commander asked
"Uh. . . nothing sir" she said, realizing what she did
"You said Zerg, How do you know of the Zerg? The general public hasn't been informed of them yet." He asked with some understanding of the situation.
{Shit! Now I've done it!}
"With all due respect sir, I must be going home."
She then left very quickly, to avoid further questions.
THE UED GHOSTS CORPS OFFICE
"I'm just saying I think she's a telepath" said Corporal Jones
"What proof have you to back up your claim?" asked Commander Nelson
"When I entered my office she was sitting at her desk. I had just been briefed on the Zerg, and had them on my mind. We exchanged greetings, and then she said the word Zerg. She could not have known of them yet! She read my mind and slipped. Now she will be on guard and ready to fight us if we go. We should go and get her. If she could get that much out of me, she must have very developed powers." Corporal Jones said
"Hmmmmm, very well. You have my authorization to 'collect' her." Commander Nelson replied
"Sir, Thank You Sir!" Corporal Jones saluted before turning on his heels, and walking out the door.
Elisia had gone directly home after the incident in the office. She was scared. They would come for her, she knew it. All she could do was prepare for them. The walls of her house needed reinforcing, the family needed to take a 'vacation', and she needed the help of her friends. First, she laid her furniture against the walls and imbued the house with her psychic energy to shield her. Second she sent her family to her mother's house, two towns away. And lastly, she called.
[Brother Torin, I need your help.] she projected
[I am here, sister] he answered almost immediately.
Elisia was relieved. The Protoss High Templar had arrived quickly. He was about six feet tall and wore the characteristic armor of his rank and caste.
[En Taro Adun, Praetor] she thought to him.
[What is it you ask of me?] he answered
"The Ghosts corps will come for me. I wish not to go with them. Will you help me fight them?" she asked
[I will help you, but I cannot be seen. Therefore, I will help from my ship. I will give you the power of a Templar.]
He then reached out and touched his hand to her forehead. She felt a queasy feeling in the pit of her stomach, then a burning explosion that traveled throughout her body. When the feeling subsided, she was on her feet. Elisia Gomez ceased to exist. Now Elisia Torin Gomez took her place. She was powerful. The incredible amount of power threatened to destroy her. But she kept in check.
"Now let's see the Ghost Corps get me!" She yelled
And try they did. Not long after Torin left for his ship, the UED's 'collection squad' arrived. Corporal Jones led the unit.
"Alright, spread out and locate the subject. Bring her back to me alive." He said, as he barked orders.
"Sir, yes Sir!" The squad replied
The marines led the search and soon encountered the psionic wall.
"Uh sir we have a problem." He said into his radio
"What kind of problem?" Asked Jones
"She was apparently expecting us, and it appears you were right, because we have run into a psionic wall encompassing the entire house." He reported.
Corporal Jones thought over the new turn of events. Elisia had known she screwed up, she had prepared for their arrival.
{But how could she have erected such a wall? Is she really that powerful?}
"Go ahead, soldier, use force." He ordered
The night suddenly looked and sounded like the fourth of July. The marines and firebats were attacking the wall, in an attempt to weaken and eventually destroy it. This actually worked. After about five minutes a small hole appeared. The Ghost they had brought to administer the tranquilizer hopped through it and continued his part of the mission. Once inside, he activated the personnel cloaking, and proceeded to find his target. He wandered the house until he came to the living room. The room was clear, except for one person. This person was sitting cross legged in the middle of the floor, apparently in deep meditation. The ghost readied the tranquilizer, and approached his target. As he was about to stick the needle into the subjects neck, she spoke.
"Wait, I want to show you something. Yes, I can see you. Your cloaking is disabled around me." She said
Naturally surprised that he had been found but not killed, he backed off.
"What is your name Ghost?" Elisia asked
"Justin." He answered
"Justin, I want you to listen to me. The UED wants me to become a Ghost. I would rather not. Do you want to know how I got that wall? I received the powers of a Protoss Templar. Watch." Elisia said
Outside, a blue cloud started to form. The infantry was amazed; at least, they were amazed right up until the blue cloud started to shoot lighting at them. The first psionic bolts killed many marines and firebats. Most were dead before there bodies hit the ground. The remaining infantry retreated, out of the clouds range. Justin saw it all in his minds eye. He was awestruck at the sheer power of this woman. He turned to look at her and saw her back to him. He took the tranquilizer needle and plunged it into her back. She arched, before quickly falling unconscious. The wall fell apart, and the cloud disappeared. Justin had done his job.
"Corporal Jones? This is Ghost number 3354. Mission accomplished." He radioed in.
A/N: There! The rewrite is done! The three that reviewed the original, is this better? If you didn't get to read the original, send me an email at daman0186@yahoo.com and I can send it to you. Please review this as reviews help me to write better. Thanks.