Chapter 3- Plans
With the information that Kitty is the one who is causing the huge amounts of spirit energy, Yusuke and friends are reporting back to Koenma.
'But I still don't get it! How can such a sweet girl like Kitty have so much spirit energy?" asked Kuwabara.
"How many times does someone have to tell you, before it gets into the hollow hole in your head? Humans are made up of both spirit and life energy. In some cases there tends to be an increased amount of spirit energy. Obviously, Kitty is one of those special cases. Now do you understand, you brainless twit?" said Hiei.
"If the hole in my head is hollow, how can anything get in?" answered Kuwabara smiling at how smart he was. Hiei just gave his "heh" laugh once.
"We don't have time to waste on you two children. This is serious! So grow up," said Botan angrily. This caused both Hiei and Kuwabara to shut up.
"Yes, Botan is right. I want none of you to hurt her. Don't even get her the tiniest bit angry. The girl Kitty is a very very special case. I don't want to risk anything. Got it?" said Koenma. Everyone, except Hiei, nodded their heads in response. Then everyone set out to do their own thing.
"The incompetent fool! As if doing nothing will be able to help Kitty!" said Hiei as he went to put his plan into action.
*** Hiei knocked on the door to Kitty's house. It was a while before the door opened. A woman opened the door, who Hiei figured to be Kitty's mother.
"Hello, I was wondering if I could see Kitty," said Hiei.
"She's not here. She went for a hike about half an hour ago," said the woman.
"Can you tell me, where she went hiking?" asked Hiei.
"She went to the woods at the edge of the city," said the woman.
"Well, thank-you," said Hiei then set off to see Kitty.
*** Hiei finally made it to the woods and caught up with Kitty. Yet, he wasn't sure what he was going to do now. He decided to walk along next to her and, hope she didn't notice him, until he came up with the next step to his plan.
"Hello, Hiei," said Kitty with a small wave but, didn't look his way.
"How did you know my name?" asked Hiei.
"Well, that is what Yusuke called you, isn't it?" replied Kitty.
"But, he was whispering," said Hiei.
"I've got very good hearing," stated Kitty.
"Oh so it must hurt even more then. I mean when people make fun of you," said Hiei sadly.
"My hearing is good enough, that I can be deaf, when I want to be," answered Kitty. Hiei couldn't come up with something else to talk about. It was a while that the two walked together silently.
"Bye, Hiei," said Kitty out of nowhere. Causing Hiei to stop walking.
"What? Where are you going?" asked Hiei.
"Back. I've got maybe about an hour or so till, I have to meet a friend," answered Kitty.
"But can't I walk back with you?" asked Hiei.
"I'm sorry. But I try to run my way back and, I don't tend to stay on the path. Also, I run funny. And every so often I tend to hop alternating feet," said Kitty. Hiei still didn't understand why he couldn't go back with her.
"Oh, okay," said Hiei disappointedly.
"I'm really really sorry," said Kitty.
"Don't worry it's all right," said Hiei. Kitty waved goodbye as she ran off. It wasn't long before she was out of sight.
"Hiei, what do you think you were doing?" asked Kurama.
"None, of your business, Kurama," answered Hiei.
"Well, we're all going to have dinner at a restaurant. So come on," said Kurama. The two set off for the restaurant.
"What was Hiei doing here with Kitty? Great, now with both him and Kurama by her, it's going to be a lot harder to get the job done. Are you sure you want that girl, Kai," asked a demon to another.
"Yes. Kitty will make the perfect queen. I will not allow myself to settle for anyone but, the best," answered a demon with a human form, who must have been Kai.
Dear Reviewer,
The story is OOC. It's moving too fast. But you can fix that.
(That's part of your review!!!!)
Here's how the story works.
DAY 1:
Yusuke and friends find out that large amounts of spirit energy have shown up in his area.
DAY 2:
Yusuke and friends forced to go to school. Instead of looking for "thing" with the spirit energy. Hiei suspects a girl could be the one with the spirit energy.
THAT AFTERNOON Get spirit sensor from Botan Find out that Hiei was right Report back to Koenma
ADDED IN THIS CHAPTER Koenma tells them not to do anything Hiei tries to tell Kitty everything Two demons were watching Kitty and Hiei together The two demons are after Kitty
That is all so far. If you need another outline of what's happened. Write it in a review.
As for the story being OOC at least, there are no major changes. (meaning no over the characters were sent into the rainbow)
And no I'm not going to fix it.
With the information that Kitty is the one who is causing the huge amounts of spirit energy, Yusuke and friends are reporting back to Koenma.
'But I still don't get it! How can such a sweet girl like Kitty have so much spirit energy?" asked Kuwabara.
"How many times does someone have to tell you, before it gets into the hollow hole in your head? Humans are made up of both spirit and life energy. In some cases there tends to be an increased amount of spirit energy. Obviously, Kitty is one of those special cases. Now do you understand, you brainless twit?" said Hiei.
"If the hole in my head is hollow, how can anything get in?" answered Kuwabara smiling at how smart he was. Hiei just gave his "heh" laugh once.
"We don't have time to waste on you two children. This is serious! So grow up," said Botan angrily. This caused both Hiei and Kuwabara to shut up.
"Yes, Botan is right. I want none of you to hurt her. Don't even get her the tiniest bit angry. The girl Kitty is a very very special case. I don't want to risk anything. Got it?" said Koenma. Everyone, except Hiei, nodded their heads in response. Then everyone set out to do their own thing.
"The incompetent fool! As if doing nothing will be able to help Kitty!" said Hiei as he went to put his plan into action.
*** Hiei knocked on the door to Kitty's house. It was a while before the door opened. A woman opened the door, who Hiei figured to be Kitty's mother.
"Hello, I was wondering if I could see Kitty," said Hiei.
"She's not here. She went for a hike about half an hour ago," said the woman.
"Can you tell me, where she went hiking?" asked Hiei.
"She went to the woods at the edge of the city," said the woman.
"Well, thank-you," said Hiei then set off to see Kitty.
*** Hiei finally made it to the woods and caught up with Kitty. Yet, he wasn't sure what he was going to do now. He decided to walk along next to her and, hope she didn't notice him, until he came up with the next step to his plan.
"Hello, Hiei," said Kitty with a small wave but, didn't look his way.
"How did you know my name?" asked Hiei.
"Well, that is what Yusuke called you, isn't it?" replied Kitty.
"But, he was whispering," said Hiei.
"I've got very good hearing," stated Kitty.
"Oh so it must hurt even more then. I mean when people make fun of you," said Hiei sadly.
"My hearing is good enough, that I can be deaf, when I want to be," answered Kitty. Hiei couldn't come up with something else to talk about. It was a while that the two walked together silently.
"Bye, Hiei," said Kitty out of nowhere. Causing Hiei to stop walking.
"What? Where are you going?" asked Hiei.
"Back. I've got maybe about an hour or so till, I have to meet a friend," answered Kitty.
"But can't I walk back with you?" asked Hiei.
"I'm sorry. But I try to run my way back and, I don't tend to stay on the path. Also, I run funny. And every so often I tend to hop alternating feet," said Kitty. Hiei still didn't understand why he couldn't go back with her.
"Oh, okay," said Hiei disappointedly.
"I'm really really sorry," said Kitty.
"Don't worry it's all right," said Hiei. Kitty waved goodbye as she ran off. It wasn't long before she was out of sight.
"Hiei, what do you think you were doing?" asked Kurama.
"None, of your business, Kurama," answered Hiei.
"Well, we're all going to have dinner at a restaurant. So come on," said Kurama. The two set off for the restaurant.
"What was Hiei doing here with Kitty? Great, now with both him and Kurama by her, it's going to be a lot harder to get the job done. Are you sure you want that girl, Kai," asked a demon to another.
"Yes. Kitty will make the perfect queen. I will not allow myself to settle for anyone but, the best," answered a demon with a human form, who must have been Kai.
Dear Reviewer,
The story is OOC. It's moving too fast. But you can fix that.
(That's part of your review!!!!)
Here's how the story works.
DAY 1:
Yusuke and friends find out that large amounts of spirit energy have shown up in his area.
DAY 2:
Yusuke and friends forced to go to school. Instead of looking for "thing" with the spirit energy. Hiei suspects a girl could be the one with the spirit energy.
THAT AFTERNOON Get spirit sensor from Botan Find out that Hiei was right Report back to Koenma
ADDED IN THIS CHAPTER Koenma tells them not to do anything Hiei tries to tell Kitty everything Two demons were watching Kitty and Hiei together The two demons are after Kitty
That is all so far. If you need another outline of what's happened. Write it in a review.
As for the story being OOC at least, there are no major changes. (meaning no over the characters were sent into the rainbow)
And no I'm not going to fix it.