This is my first ever attempt at writing and want to know if I can do it at all or if I am cr@p!!
Please write reviews and be brutal if you feel the need to, as this will encourage me to update it and improve in my writing.
This was started when Jonas was still on the team and since I liked him hence I have left him in it.
I have written it in script format, I hope that is not off putting.
Young teenage girl sits in corner booth of a diner, she looks moody and has a kind of mild Goth look going on.
(The short girl from the movie called The Craft is my template for her, Fairuza Balk??)
Enter Jack O'Neil, Teal'c and Jonas
Jack:
There is nothing more satisfying in the morning than a great fry up.
Teal'c:
Ah! The "fry-up" yes very satisfying
Jonas:
I cannot thank you enough for this opportunity to sample more of your planets food.
The teenage girl looks up warily at the three and starts to look down and then sharply looks at Teal'c with puzzlement on her face.
She stares at Teal'c with a dawning amazement, and then looks at Jack for awhile and then Jonas who she looks at with amazement as well.
Just then a bunch of loud "clueless" type girls bustle into the café, and the girl's expression drops.
The clueless girls spot her and nudge each other and walk over to the girl.
Clueless1:
Hey look it's the reject from the Blair witch project, how is it hanging willow? (sarcastically)
Halle:
Leave me alone Liz, I am not in the mood for this.
Clueless1:
Oh I am scared what are you going to do? Loser! I tell you what, you will never amount to anything you miserable cow. You sit in dark corners all day long watching people because you know that they all will amount to more than you. I heard what you did to Tracy, telling everybody about her being pregnant! Did you think that was clever?! No it wasn't it was just plain mean!
Halle:
I warned her to leave me alone, actually kind of like I'm warning you to now to back off.
Clueless1:
Screw you! You better watch your back because Tracy was a friend and you are going to get what you deserve, a hiding you won't soon forget.
Halle:
Like the one you got last week from your Dad?
Liz looks shaken by Halle's statement but quickly recovers, even though her friends are giving her funny looks.
Clueless1:
What are you talking about?(she blusters) Come on girls lets go, see you later bitch.
The group of girls leave diner in a dignified huff, all this time the SG crew are eating away in the background oblivious to all this. Now she refocuses on the guys for a while. In her mind she replays the scene that just happened and numerous other similar scenes, this has happened a lot to her. She particularly hears Liz's refrain that she will never amount to much.
All of a sudden Halle's face clears and she stands up and walks straight over to the SG crew. She calmly pulls out a seat and sits down.
Halle: (calmly)
Colonel, I would like to join the StarGate Mission
Jack:
What!?!! What are you talking about?! (the others look on with apprehension)
Halle:
(still calm)
I want to visit other worlds through the Stargate at Cheyenne mountain
Jack:
(trying to control his panic)
Young lady go back and sit down and leave us alone, we do not know what you are talking about and really we are not interested.
Halle:
He is called Jonas and is from another world, (turns to Teal'c) He is also from another world and carries in him an alien called Shango.
Jack:
(sputtering, but becoming deadly serious)
Leave us alone, you are obviously delusional or on drugs!
Teal'c:
(worried)
Shango?
Jonas:
(smiling)
It sure is never boring around here.
Halle:
Listen, you cannot just leave me here with all the knowledge I have shown you that I have, your own protocols ensure this, and I bet you are actually thinking of those protocols right now.
Jack:
If what you are saying is true and mind you I am NOT saying that it is true, but what makes you think that we will not just make you disappear?
Halle:
Because I know you are not like that, trust me, I'm a good judge of character.
Jack:
Listen, I have to take a leak please be gone by the time I'm back.
Jack looks meaningfully at Teal'c who slightly inclines his head in acknowledgement.
Jack walks to the gents and frantically pulls out his mobile and starts dialling
Jack:
(into his mobile)
General we have a problem.
We cut an interrogation room where General Hammond looks through a two way mirror at Halle sitting at a table. This is like a typical police interrogation cell.
Hammond turns around to Sam whose in the background..
Hammond:
Ready Sam?
Jack:
Why is Sam doing the interrogation? We brought her in!
Hammond:
She is a teenage girl, the more at ease she is the more we'll get out of her, and YOU do not put people at ease.
Jack:
Oh.
Sam enters interrogation room and draws up chair opposite Halle
Sam:
Hello Halle
Halle:
Hi
Sam:
So what is this cock and bull story you've been spewing all over the place
Halle:
You know it's not bull, that's why I am here now and I have had it with all this questioning, Jolanna
Sam looks puzzled and shaken.
Sam:
My name is not Jolanna it's Sam
Halle:
No it's not it's Jolanna stop fucking around with me your name is ….
Sam?!
Sam:
Yes
Halle:
Man, this just gets better
Sam:
What does?
Halle:
You lot!
Halle:
First it's two aliens with one carrying another alien inside himself, now we have a human with the memories of another alien!
Sam:
Halle, you better tell where you are getting all this stuff from and now!
Halle:
Ok, Ok,
Halle:
I am Phoenix, (she says dramatically and then laughs).
Sam
Huh?!
Halle:
Charles Xavier?
Jonas shows dawning comprehension
Sam:
I do not follow
Halle:
(in exasperated tone)
You know, Carrie? A scanner?
Sam:
Plain language please
Halle:
I see thoughts (spoken in a calm, quiet and eerie manner).
Sam still looking puzzled.
Halle:
Jeesh you should get out more, I 'm telepathic!
There are looks of understanding and disbelief in the gallery where the General and Jonas and Jack are reacting to the news
Sam:
Telepathic?
Halle:
Yes
Sam looks at her pensively
Sam:
What am I thinking now?
Halle:
(with smirk on face)
Naquada, what is Naquada?
Sam looks pleasantly surprised.
Cut to Hammond's office with SG1 in attendance and the presidential liaison.
Liaison:
She is a massive security risk and I do not believe how shabbily this has been handled!!
Hammond:
We had no choice but to bring her in when she started revealing knowledge of this operation. For all we know she could have been a Gould operative.
Liaison:
But now she knows its real, we have just confirmed it by bringing her here!
Hammond:
She already KNEW it was real, whether we brought her here or not! Remember she can read minds.
Liaison:
Are you sure she did not come by this information in any other way?
Hammond:
How?
Liaison:
I don't know, leaks or misplaced documents, maybe she hacked into Military databases, god knows it's happened before!
Hammond:
We have tested her abilities and as far as we can tell she is a genuine telepath and… get this she says it is easier to read Gould minds!
Apparently Gould minds are used to impressing their thoughts on the host, kind of like raising the volume on the TV to drown out other noise, which makes it louder to anyone with psychic abilities.
Liaison:
Can I meet her?
Hammond:
That might not be such a good idea.
Liaison:
Why?
Hammond:
She has shown a decided lack of respect for other people's private thoughts. You would have to avoid thinking about anything top-secret while she is in here, it is not an easy thing to do, trust me I know.
Liaison:
I'll take my chances.
Cut to the SGC, one of their holding rooms. Halle is busy eating. The Liaison enters with Sam in tow.
Halle:
The food round here is terrible, no wonder you go off base for meals.
Liaison:
My name is Richard I have come to ask you a few things
Halle
Why are you thinking about that annoying song?
Oh, you think it will keep me out of your mind, I must admit it is distracting but if I concentrate I can get past it.
Liaison:
Can you? Well tell me then what am I thinking.
Halle:
Well apart from the fact that you think I am a danger to national security and that you think Major Carter is cute, (smirking) you have a number in your mind, 666.
Liaison:
(blushing)
I have heard enough.
The liaison turns and walks off in a huff, Halle laughs out loud.
Cut to Hammond's briefing room.
Hammond:
I have spoken to the girls parents and they have been made to understand that their daughter is helping the US Government in their efforts to track down hackers. It seems that Miss Munroe is also quite the hacker as well, so for now the cover story is holding.
The question is what do we do next with her?
Sam:
She will be invaluable in gathering information and helping in understanding the tactics of our opponents
Jack:
You mean a spy, right?
Sam:
Well basically.
Jack:
Can she really read Gould minds?
Hammond:
Let's find out shall we? (he gestures to a guard)
In walks Halle
Halle:
Hi ya Jack!
Jack:
(grimaces)
Hi
Hammond:
We called you in to …
Halle:
You want me to read the mind of the alien symbiote in Teal'c?
Hammond:
Yes.
Halle:
Okay.
She goes silent for a while, with her eyes closed
Halle:
Hmm, this is weird
Jack:
What?
Halle:
I am getting certain information from it, but also I am having difficulty discerning it's motive. It seems aware of the fact that I am able to probe it and is trying to confuse me by thinking lots of thoughts.
Jonas:
How does it know that you are trying to probe it.
Halle:
From Teal'c.
There seems to be a rudimentary mental link between Teal'c and the alien.
Sam:
(To Teal'c)
That must have come from the time you tried to communicate with it.
Jack:
Did you get anything of use?
Halle:
Yes.
Jack:
What?
Halle:
An address
Hammond:
Address?
Halle:
Yes, a StarGate address, you know seven symbols.
Hammond:
An address to where?
Halle:
It seems from what I could gather a weapons depot, he seemed to try and hide it from me but it only made me more aware of it.
Jack:
A weapons depot? General!
Hammond:
Write the address down.
General Hammond pushes a piece of paper to her.
Halle:
Uh uh.
Hammond:
What?
Halle:
I get to go along or no can do.
Jack:
No way!
Hammond:
No way!
Halle:
The place is lightly guarded as the security of the place mostly depends on it being a secret. And I can help by reading a few minds for combinations and passwords that will be needed.
Hammond:
I am not about to let a fifteen year old along on a SG mission! It'll never happen!