Wow, it looked like wrote a lot in Microsoft...I wrote three pages!!
(that's a lot for me) well, thank you for all your input..I'll keep it all
in mind!! I'll add more detail and I'll drop the scene play thing..thank
you, thank you!!! ^_^ I'll keep everything in mind!! I'm just repeating
things now...
Oh, I said in the last chapter that Maddison is a half-breed. It means that she had demon and human powers, no, it doesn't make her stronger, but weaker because she can't have all of one power, if you know what I mean. Half-breeds are rare, come on, think about it.a demon and a human...
" " = talking
' ' = thinking
( )= author (me) talking
~ ~ ~ = time passed
------ = the 'other' side
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(This is what's going on at the evil side, lol)
Makoto (evil human, person) paced up and down his corridor, in front a girl, chained to a wall. Her hair dangled over her face, and her wrists and ankles were bloody from attempts to free herself.
"Soon, Maddison, I shall kill that idiot Koenma" Makoto said with a laugh that rang through the corridor.
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After Yuske, Hiei, Kuwabara, and Kurama entered, Botan, from the other side said, "I'll see you guys when you get back, good luck" and with that, she tapped another rock and the wall slowly closed, leaving them in a dark alley.
"Well, are we just going to stand around here?" Hiei asked, impatiently. He had his arms crossed and his eyes were glaring at Yuske to lead the way.
"Yeah, Yeah, come on" Yuske gestured with his hands to follow him out of the of the dark, narrow alley.
They emerged on a street with demons packed everywhere, sitting, talking, and buying items. There was a variety of demons, some were blue while others were red. Some had one eye when others had many. Others looked more human when some looked more like ogres.
After the four came out of the alley, all the demons stopped to stare at them. As Yuske and the others walked down the street towards a dark looking castle in the horizon, they could here the demons whispering and pointing, "Look, humans."
'I feel like I'm at a zoo, being observed by all the demons' Kuwabara started to feel very uncomfortable.
"All weaklings." Hiei muttered as he walked passed a few more demons.
Kurama laughed, but kept his fast pace going.
Yuske kept his head up and focused on where he was going.
~ ~ ~
They finally made it out of the city. They were now walking along dusty plains, there were no signs of life anywhere. Suddenly a piercing screech sounded behind them. They all looked up and saw a black bird pass overhead. It was kind of like a crow, except it had a lashing tail and a long beak covered in what looked like blood. The bird flew towards the dark castle.
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Makoto was sitting down, staring at his prize (Maddison) when his spy bird flew in. It screeched an ear piercing note telling of intruders.
"I was waiting for them," Makoto said with a laugh, "Now I can get back at Koenma for banishing me to hell. And you," he said, locking his eyes on Maddison's, "You will watch me take my revenge."
Maddison glared right back, "You wish" -------------
Yuske, Kurama, Kuwabara, and Hiei arrived at the entrance. They walked right in and started up the steps in front of them.
"It's quiet" Yuske said aloud.
"Too quiet" Kurama added.
They entered a long a passageway which seemed to go in a spiral. A shadow zoomed over them. Hiei saw it from the corners of his eyes and turned around quickly, but saw nothing. After the spiral passageway, which seemed to last forever, they ended up with in an arena, on the other side were the steps to continue up. They all walked towards the stairs, when from underneath them, came the shadow and covered the doorway to the stairs.
"I am The Shadow." Shadow said in his whispery voice, "Master Makoto has summoned me to destroy you."
Kuwabara stepped up, "I'll go" he said.
"hm, very well, let's get going." Shadow said and the arena turned black like someone turned the lights off in a windowless room.
Kuwabara looked around, but couldn't spot Shadow. Out of no where, Shadow attacked and sent Kuwabara flying. Kuwabara got up and used his spirit energy to make his sword, now he could see his surrounding area. Shadow punched Kuwabara, he got hit, but quickly countered by hitting him before Shadow disappeared again. He got hit several times before he, suddenly had a great idea, he put more spirit energy into his sword and immediately, it illuminated the blackness. He saw Shadow traveling on the floor of the arena. Kuwabara charged and slashed his sword down on the ground where Shadow was. The arena went up in smoke from the debris of the slashed arena floor. When it cleared, Kuwabara was standing, beaten up, but with the unconscious Shadow laying where he slashed his sword.
----------------------- Makoto, looking through a holographic image of Shadow's defeat, pounded on his chair arms. They were stronger than he thought.
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"Come on," Yuske said, and headed for the opposite set of stairs.
************************ That was a bit longer, still three pages, but not bad in detail I think...and I did kinda get the idea from the 4 Saint Beasts, hehehe. R&R, please.
Oh, I said in the last chapter that Maddison is a half-breed. It means that she had demon and human powers, no, it doesn't make her stronger, but weaker because she can't have all of one power, if you know what I mean. Half-breeds are rare, come on, think about it.a demon and a human...
" " = talking
' ' = thinking
( )= author (me) talking
~ ~ ~ = time passed
------ = the 'other' side
***********************************
(This is what's going on at the evil side, lol)
Makoto (evil human, person) paced up and down his corridor, in front a girl, chained to a wall. Her hair dangled over her face, and her wrists and ankles were bloody from attempts to free herself.
"Soon, Maddison, I shall kill that idiot Koenma" Makoto said with a laugh that rang through the corridor.
-----------------------
After Yuske, Hiei, Kuwabara, and Kurama entered, Botan, from the other side said, "I'll see you guys when you get back, good luck" and with that, she tapped another rock and the wall slowly closed, leaving them in a dark alley.
"Well, are we just going to stand around here?" Hiei asked, impatiently. He had his arms crossed and his eyes were glaring at Yuske to lead the way.
"Yeah, Yeah, come on" Yuske gestured with his hands to follow him out of the of the dark, narrow alley.
They emerged on a street with demons packed everywhere, sitting, talking, and buying items. There was a variety of demons, some were blue while others were red. Some had one eye when others had many. Others looked more human when some looked more like ogres.
After the four came out of the alley, all the demons stopped to stare at them. As Yuske and the others walked down the street towards a dark looking castle in the horizon, they could here the demons whispering and pointing, "Look, humans."
'I feel like I'm at a zoo, being observed by all the demons' Kuwabara started to feel very uncomfortable.
"All weaklings." Hiei muttered as he walked passed a few more demons.
Kurama laughed, but kept his fast pace going.
Yuske kept his head up and focused on where he was going.
~ ~ ~
They finally made it out of the city. They were now walking along dusty plains, there were no signs of life anywhere. Suddenly a piercing screech sounded behind them. They all looked up and saw a black bird pass overhead. It was kind of like a crow, except it had a lashing tail and a long beak covered in what looked like blood. The bird flew towards the dark castle.
-------------------------
Makoto was sitting down, staring at his prize (Maddison) when his spy bird flew in. It screeched an ear piercing note telling of intruders.
"I was waiting for them," Makoto said with a laugh, "Now I can get back at Koenma for banishing me to hell. And you," he said, locking his eyes on Maddison's, "You will watch me take my revenge."
Maddison glared right back, "You wish" -------------
Yuske, Kurama, Kuwabara, and Hiei arrived at the entrance. They walked right in and started up the steps in front of them.
"It's quiet" Yuske said aloud.
"Too quiet" Kurama added.
They entered a long a passageway which seemed to go in a spiral. A shadow zoomed over them. Hiei saw it from the corners of his eyes and turned around quickly, but saw nothing. After the spiral passageway, which seemed to last forever, they ended up with in an arena, on the other side were the steps to continue up. They all walked towards the stairs, when from underneath them, came the shadow and covered the doorway to the stairs.
"I am The Shadow." Shadow said in his whispery voice, "Master Makoto has summoned me to destroy you."
Kuwabara stepped up, "I'll go" he said.
"hm, very well, let's get going." Shadow said and the arena turned black like someone turned the lights off in a windowless room.
Kuwabara looked around, but couldn't spot Shadow. Out of no where, Shadow attacked and sent Kuwabara flying. Kuwabara got up and used his spirit energy to make his sword, now he could see his surrounding area. Shadow punched Kuwabara, he got hit, but quickly countered by hitting him before Shadow disappeared again. He got hit several times before he, suddenly had a great idea, he put more spirit energy into his sword and immediately, it illuminated the blackness. He saw Shadow traveling on the floor of the arena. Kuwabara charged and slashed his sword down on the ground where Shadow was. The arena went up in smoke from the debris of the slashed arena floor. When it cleared, Kuwabara was standing, beaten up, but with the unconscious Shadow laying where he slashed his sword.
----------------------- Makoto, looking through a holographic image of Shadow's defeat, pounded on his chair arms. They were stronger than he thought.
--------------------
"Come on," Yuske said, and headed for the opposite set of stairs.
************************ That was a bit longer, still three pages, but not bad in detail I think...and I did kinda get the idea from the 4 Saint Beasts, hehehe. R&R, please.