::dances around:: YAY!! I did some major revamping of this whole story 'cause quite frankly the grammar and stuff sucked! I know that it seemed like I'd dropped off the face of the planet and that this story is really taking a long time in comparison to my other stories, but this is a lot more in depth, at least I think it is. I can't believe no one put in the review how bad this grammar and sentence structure bit though! I can't fix all of it, but I've done what I can in a short time. I am on the last leg of my spring break right now and so I'm trying to get work on this done. I think I'll try to end the story soon though because I think people are getting bored. Anyway, here are my original author notes and the redone prologue etc. Keep up the reviews!
::Sigh:: Yes, this is Fate's Child with yet another story for your reading pleasure. Let me tell you a few things though. I WANT E-MAIL AND I WANT REVIEWS. Flames are welcome as long as their productive. I hate shit that says 'I hated this because you put so-and-so with so-and-so'. WELL DUH!! You're entitled to your opinion. BUT I WANT TO KNOW WHY YOU DON'T LIKE THOSE TWO TOGETHER OR SOMETHING MORE THEN JUST "I DIDN'T LIKE IT"!!! Anyway, I would like to thank everyone who has supported me in the past, it helps.
With school, and my English teacher (a nun from hell) things have been really busy and will be really busy with all the homework she's giving us and therefore my chapters will be slow coming out. BUT LOOK AT MY PROFILE PAGE!! Is there a single story I've posted that I haven't completed? Huh? Is there? No, I didn't think so. Errrr... actually there is. Son Usagi-the real Usagi IS finished, but I can't find the disk. When I get to my home computer tonight, it will be posted tomorrow. Now you may look and see that I've been a member for almost a year now... I think. So having that many stories out and almost ALL finished isn't too shabby, don't ya think? Anyway, my birthday is on the 13 of December and I AM EXCITED!!! Okay, so that was random. Anywho, on with the story.
Author: Fate's Child (Terra Brooks)
Date: December 2, 2001
E-mail: Prncss_Earth@hotmail.com
Prologue
Going home and finding Serenity
Kino Makoto, senshi of Jupiter, was crying. One fist clenched at the material above her heart, the other covered her face a tears coursed down her cheeks and sobs wracked her body. Rain fell softly from the sky above her, washing away the blood and dirt that covered her tall frame. Sunset had come and gone, leaving her cloaked in indigo night. Out of the darkness walked three figures. Heads bent, they approached her.
"You let her die." The voice came out like a punch to the gut as a wave of fresh shame washed over her.
"Mars, I-"
"We left you to protect her and you let her die!" Venus' voice cut her off.
"We trusted you." Mercury's voice came soft and covered with hurt. "You betrayed us. You betrayed her." The hurt she experienced that day hardened to anger as she glared at the three figures in front of her.
"And where were you? All of you were off doing your own thing. I was here, I died for her, damn it! I died for her! If you were here, if one of you had been here, maybe I would have lived. Or if I had still died, you would have been there to stop her from giving her life for mine." Tears sprang fresh, into her eyes. "It is you who are traitors, you who are the betrayers. You forsook your duty for your own lives and now blame me for your mistake. May Serenity have pity on your worthless souls." The senshi of Jupiter stood and powered down, walking away from the three figures she had thought were her friends. And she still cried.
Makoto threw her clothes into the gray bag resting on her bed. Pictures came off the walls and were placed in tissue before being thrown into her space pocket. Her tears had stopped hours ago and now only emptiness remained. As she picked up a picture that had been resting on her dresser, she stared at it, eyes clouding with memories long repressed. The photo was one that she had stared at every night before bed, one of a younger her and a small boy with her hair and indigo eyes.
"Duo." The name escaped her lips as a memory slid to her mind.
Flashback
"DUO!" Lita frantic voice called out. "DUO, RUN!"
"LITA!!" A panicked look crossed the face of a young boy. "I won't leave you."
"Duo, go. Get help. Run and GET HELP!" Struggling against the men holding her, she watched as Duo took one last look in her direction before dodging between the legs of the third man, that was trying to grab him, and heading off into the woods towards the Maxwell church. She closed her eyes for a moment, nearly weeping in relief. They had her, but they'd never have her brother.
"Bitch, shut the fuck up!" One of the men holding her slapped her. A second later, a voice whispered out of the shadows as a ball of purple light appeared.
"Dead Scream." She closed her eyes again as it washed over her, leaving no trace of pain... on her. The men on the other hand, screamed in agony and fell down unconscious. A woman walked out of the shadows clad in a dark sailor fuku with an extremely short skirt.
"Pluto." The name fell from Lita's lips and for a moment, she knew, she remembered all. A portal opened and they stepped through, disappearing in an instant.
End Flashback
Pluto had set her up in her own apartment and given her a background. Lita Trio changed her name to Kino Makoto and had lived her life, her duty, and protected Serenity-Usagi. But now that duty was over. She threw the picture in her bag and zipped it shut, eyes shimmering with tears. Her duty was over and she wanted to go home. She wanted, most of all, to find the brother she'd left behind. Her voice rang out in the room, loud and clear calling the time senshi's name. There was nothing left for her here and in a flash, she was gone. Only a few seconds later, her phone began to ring, her answering machine finally picking up.
"Mako? Mako? Pick up!" A desperate voice sobbed. "It's Minako. Mako, I'm sorry, so sorry. I didn't mean anything I said-" The machine cut her off. It didn't matter anyway, the apartment was empty.
TBC
Review if you are interested in me finishing this story. If you don't tell me that you like it, I won't write just to write.
Ja - Terra
::Sigh:: Yes, this is Fate's Child with yet another story for your reading pleasure. Let me tell you a few things though. I WANT E-MAIL AND I WANT REVIEWS. Flames are welcome as long as their productive. I hate shit that says 'I hated this because you put so-and-so with so-and-so'. WELL DUH!! You're entitled to your opinion. BUT I WANT TO KNOW WHY YOU DON'T LIKE THOSE TWO TOGETHER OR SOMETHING MORE THEN JUST "I DIDN'T LIKE IT"!!! Anyway, I would like to thank everyone who has supported me in the past, it helps.
With school, and my English teacher (a nun from hell) things have been really busy and will be really busy with all the homework she's giving us and therefore my chapters will be slow coming out. BUT LOOK AT MY PROFILE PAGE!! Is there a single story I've posted that I haven't completed? Huh? Is there? No, I didn't think so. Errrr... actually there is. Son Usagi-the real Usagi IS finished, but I can't find the disk. When I get to my home computer tonight, it will be posted tomorrow. Now you may look and see that I've been a member for almost a year now... I think. So having that many stories out and almost ALL finished isn't too shabby, don't ya think? Anyway, my birthday is on the 13 of December and I AM EXCITED!!! Okay, so that was random. Anywho, on with the story.
Author: Fate's Child (Terra Brooks)
Date: December 2, 2001
E-mail: Prncss_Earth@hotmail.com
Prologue
Going home and finding Serenity
Kino Makoto, senshi of Jupiter, was crying. One fist clenched at the material above her heart, the other covered her face a tears coursed down her cheeks and sobs wracked her body. Rain fell softly from the sky above her, washing away the blood and dirt that covered her tall frame. Sunset had come and gone, leaving her cloaked in indigo night. Out of the darkness walked three figures. Heads bent, they approached her.
"You let her die." The voice came out like a punch to the gut as a wave of fresh shame washed over her.
"Mars, I-"
"We left you to protect her and you let her die!" Venus' voice cut her off.
"We trusted you." Mercury's voice came soft and covered with hurt. "You betrayed us. You betrayed her." The hurt she experienced that day hardened to anger as she glared at the three figures in front of her.
"And where were you? All of you were off doing your own thing. I was here, I died for her, damn it! I died for her! If you were here, if one of you had been here, maybe I would have lived. Or if I had still died, you would have been there to stop her from giving her life for mine." Tears sprang fresh, into her eyes. "It is you who are traitors, you who are the betrayers. You forsook your duty for your own lives and now blame me for your mistake. May Serenity have pity on your worthless souls." The senshi of Jupiter stood and powered down, walking away from the three figures she had thought were her friends. And she still cried.
Makoto threw her clothes into the gray bag resting on her bed. Pictures came off the walls and were placed in tissue before being thrown into her space pocket. Her tears had stopped hours ago and now only emptiness remained. As she picked up a picture that had been resting on her dresser, she stared at it, eyes clouding with memories long repressed. The photo was one that she had stared at every night before bed, one of a younger her and a small boy with her hair and indigo eyes.
"Duo." The name escaped her lips as a memory slid to her mind.
Flashback
"DUO!" Lita frantic voice called out. "DUO, RUN!"
"LITA!!" A panicked look crossed the face of a young boy. "I won't leave you."
"Duo, go. Get help. Run and GET HELP!" Struggling against the men holding her, she watched as Duo took one last look in her direction before dodging between the legs of the third man, that was trying to grab him, and heading off into the woods towards the Maxwell church. She closed her eyes for a moment, nearly weeping in relief. They had her, but they'd never have her brother.
"Bitch, shut the fuck up!" One of the men holding her slapped her. A second later, a voice whispered out of the shadows as a ball of purple light appeared.
"Dead Scream." She closed her eyes again as it washed over her, leaving no trace of pain... on her. The men on the other hand, screamed in agony and fell down unconscious. A woman walked out of the shadows clad in a dark sailor fuku with an extremely short skirt.
"Pluto." The name fell from Lita's lips and for a moment, she knew, she remembered all. A portal opened and they stepped through, disappearing in an instant.
End Flashback
Pluto had set her up in her own apartment and given her a background. Lita Trio changed her name to Kino Makoto and had lived her life, her duty, and protected Serenity-Usagi. But now that duty was over. She threw the picture in her bag and zipped it shut, eyes shimmering with tears. Her duty was over and she wanted to go home. She wanted, most of all, to find the brother she'd left behind. Her voice rang out in the room, loud and clear calling the time senshi's name. There was nothing left for her here and in a flash, she was gone. Only a few seconds later, her phone began to ring, her answering machine finally picking up.
"Mako? Mako? Pick up!" A desperate voice sobbed. "It's Minako. Mako, I'm sorry, so sorry. I didn't mean anything I said-" The machine cut her off. It didn't matter anyway, the apartment was empty.
TBC
Review if you are interested in me finishing this story. If you don't tell me that you like it, I won't write just to write.
Ja - Terra
