Chapter two : true evil

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Riku : Sora you don't get it do you? Your not going to stop me from getting the black destiny.

Sora : the black destiny that's what it is?

A keyhole opened front of Riku and a light shot from the keyblade into the keyhole.

Riku : crap I feel horrible at least I'm not that creep.

Sora : good to have you back.

Riku : good to be back.

The truth is for some reason Riku has not been turned back to good.

Riku : I think I'll rest that took the crap out of me. Ugh

Sora : you rest.

Riku : ok.

Sora left the little house to go challenge Tidus.

Riku : simple minded idiot…

When Riku was sure he couldn't here his footsteps anymore he climbed out the window.

Riku : it's close I can feel it…

And just as quickly as the feeling came it evaporated.

Riku : The guardian is obviously very good at his job…

Suddenly the darkness in Riku grew larger.

A black Aura went around Riku's body.

Riku swung his weapon a portal opened and with that he disappeared.

He was at the deep jungle.

Riku : I will have the black destiny and no one will stop me.

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Phantom : come closer it's almost done….

Phantom : a little more it will be game over for you!

Black destiny : (thought) you know I am the power you want come seek me.

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Sora : where is Riku?

Where could he have gone?

A few hours later.

Sora : I searched the whole island and he's not here.

How could he have gotten away was all that was going through Sora's mind.

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Riku : where are you?

Phantom : right here and I've got what you want.

He disappeared in a piece of smoke.

Riku : playing games are we? You act like an amateur.

Riku heard a voice in his mind.

Phantom : don't act so high and mighty you may find that you are in more danger than you think you are.

Riku : we'll see.

Phantom : yes we will. You should of took heed of the legends.

Riku : trying to scare me?

Phantom : I'm trying to make you afraid of what you should be afraid of. But even if you are afraid it won't make a difference.

Riku : I have no idea what you're talking about. But it won't make a difference anyway.



The voice suddenly disappeared.

Black destiny : (thinking) yes that's it lure him to his destiny or should I say fate.

Riku opened a portal where he thought the black destiny would be.

Phantom teleported to the hollow bastion where he sensed Riku would be.

Riku : so you're here.

Phantom shot a blast of energy at Riku and Riku reflected it.

The phantom then disappeared.

Phantom : he's getting stronger which means…

Black destiny : he's almost done for.

Phantom : soon another soul gone…

To be continued…

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