OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD!! I FINISHED!!
This story sucked out five months of my life. I'm officially TIRED. I started at around April 2003, and ended in August 2003… It was just a simple idea really – a fantasy that I was considering doing. I really like both mangas – CCS and DNAngel. I was also really inspired by Ruri-chan's "Shape of the Heart". PLUS, I wanted there to be a way for Daisuke to like someone, since I highly dislike all the girls in DNAngel… well, just Risa and Riku. I just REALLY got into CCS, and decided that I really liked Sakura and Tomoyo. I first considered Tomoyo… but then eh. There are already a lot of fics with uncanon pairings for Tomoyo. I decided to follow Ruri-chan and do Sakura.
I really went for the "RIKU REJECTED ME" thing, because from the looks of the manga now, she really doesn't like Dark. So I didn't want her to be with Daisuke – Sakura was a better choice since she could understand Dark and Daisuke's relationship and misfortune and connect with them. I wanted to make this story as plausible as possible…
Also, this story actually finished earlier than I expected. The whole second meeting in the park thing with Dark? That wasn't supposed to be the last get-together they had. I was planning at least one more… but things got a little carried away when I was writing, and I just couldn't stop myself. So oh well. The climax came faster than was planned. But it's still good. I hope.
When I first began writing this, I hadn't actually wanted to post this at fanfiction.net either. But as the story went along, I decided, "Eh, why not." Wouldn't hurt… plus, I'd get feedback on how I did. This story had originally been just for me and my friends. Just for my own enjoyment. A toying with power and a new world… I want things to go my way! *laughs evilly*
Anyway, that is why there is a serious lack of good storytelling here. My character growth was really choppy and messy and there were a lot of holes in the plots, I think. The story doesn't really flow…
The main problem I had was that there were too. Many. Characters. CCS had enough own its own but to add in the characters from DNAngel was chaotic. I didn't give enough introspect onto Touya, Yukito, Fujitaka, Nadeshiko, Cerberus, or Yue. I mentioned Daiki only ONCE in this entire fic and With was just Dark's wings. …Whoopee. Towa-chan wasn't described that much either. I felt really bad about this since all those characters have really great personalities and would be great for a fic that was placed in a different perspective. The main focus were the last four characters – but mainly Sakura and Daisuke/Dark. I loved writing Touya scenes, though. Just sooo fun. And Dark. I love Dark. His personality is SO COOL that I think I almost pushed for Sakura to be with Dark… but eh. She's not. She's with Daisuke, who I love even more.
The thing with Sakura though, is that I didn't want her to be too whiny or annoying. "Oh boohoo, my boyfriend never answered me," That's all fine and good, but I was kinda straining it when she continued to be in pain and sad. And her constant changing of her mind. But that's real life, I suppose. You chose to do something, and then immediately change your mind the next moment something scary pops up. And I didn't want her to have a romantic relationship with Dark. She isn't like that – she really loved Daisuke in this fic, and Dark just happened to like Daisuke too.
At the end, I was kinda vying for the "Dark might very well grow his own feelings," I believe that because Dark was always chained down to the Niwa family, he had to kinda… go along with the Niwa boy's feelings. Maybe if he drew away from Daisuke long enough, he'd stop loving Sakura. Or love her even more for his own reasons. (Yukito and Sakura flashback…) OR MAYBE… there'll be a sequel to this about that. But I'm still considering. Fifty percent chance I will, but right now I'm just feeling like "THANK GOD. I'M DONE."
Gosh, and POOR SYAORAN. I love that boy to pieces. But he didn't get much of the limelight. How sad – but I needed him outta the way for Sakura and Daisuke to develop a relationship. And the only way those two lovebirds would get separated is if one died, and so that's what I did. …Heh. Right now, I'm up for some S+S fics …
Emiko and Kosuke… I love them too. They're so great in the manga, but I'm afraid I didn't catch their personality quite well. I kinda narrowed them down to "We love Daisuke only and Dark is just a side dish," or something like that. I wanted some Dark angst in there, so I threw that in. But I guess I zoned in on that way too much and didn't get their real essence. Heh, oh well.
Oh yeah. I hate my ending. Too happy. Dark conveniently got separated from Daisuke… but considering Sakura's character, I assumed she would use her magic to separate the two. I just couldn't think of an ending for the "Dark stays in Daisuke's body until he has a son". In order to do that ending, I'd have to fastforward about ten years into the future and have a Mini!Dark… which I VERY MUCH did not want to do. So I stuck with this crap. I hate writing endings – I just can't find the decent one to give a good wrap-up. I left way too much room for a sequel as well. Maybe I will do one. o_O
Overall, I'm pretty proud of this thing, although there are still a few kinks to work out. If I grow old enough to learn how to critique a story properly, I'll revamp it. Or reedit, seeing as revamping might take a long long time.
I'm so glad I finished!! (happy squeal)
P.S.: Sorry about the chapter separations – they're really bad I know… o_O. They stop and begin at odd places. But, mind you, I did this whole story without stopping to consider how to divide it (since I assumed I wasn't going to post it), and just decided last minute to do it. OH WELL – deal with it.
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DAAAAAAAAMN.
