ME: this is my story. I decided to make a completely new concept of
story. I hope everyone likes it.
And most of all, I need all of you guys review, that's the way I get new ideas for my story and how to fix the part that seems not suits to the story as the story goes on.
Sorry for changing the title...I think Ragnarok Online is very interesting. But, I really need a new concept. And what about my story that inspirited from Ragnarok Online? ....
Don't worry; I've just made a completely new concept about it. It will become a TRILOGI. Just wait.
OKAY EVERYONE PLEASE GIVE ME REVIEW AS MUCH AS YOU WANT. BECAUSE I WILL
RECEIVE ANYKIND OF REVIEW.
THE BEGINNING OF ALL
REN'S STORY
Morning has come, a young man walk to the room on the corner of the corridor. "Young prince...wake up" he called. There's no answer. "Young prince, don't get on my nerves please" he opened the door and pulled the blanket. But, instead of finding him, he found a dragon. "BASON!! WHAT ARE YOU DOING ON HIS BED" He looks completely shock. "HA..HA..HA.." he heard a voice. He turns around. There's him.
He looks at Ren, the boy with a single spike on his hair and beautiful golden eyes. It suits with his cute face. " Prince Ren.... I thought I told you not to put bason on your bed" Ren smiled "scared...scared...scared..." Ren is shouting and jumping around. " Stop it you...." Horohoro started to chase him. But Ren was just too fast for him.
*Ho...ho...ho... so stupid... I was just to smart for him Horohoro is stupid like a donkey Ho...ho...ho... so slow I was to fast for him Horohoro is as slow as a snail Ho...ho...ho...so ugly I was so scared to see his angry face Horohoro is an ugly man He doesn't had a girlfriend
"STOP THAT STUPID SONG" Horohoro screamed as he keeps trying to catch Ren. Ren keeps running away and singing the song that Horohoro hate so much. 30 minutes later, Horo was tired. Ren took that opportunity to run away from the castle.
GEFURE is the main kingdom in the land that called GEFUREYA. It was a semi-modern city. It was a busy city. Ren is walking around, by himself. "Good morning everyone" Ren is shouting. " Oh hello...prince" Everyone greet the Chinese boy. Yes, everyone loves Ren, he's always nice and kind to everyone. Even that he's prince, he just love to play with simple person.
He went on the small hill. That hill, he always plays with her older sister there until her older sister vanished. He saw a small stone standing near the big tree. " Nee-chan...I always wished that you still together with me..."Ren put some flower on it "One day.... I'll prove to everyone that you were still a life" Ren smiled sadly. Then, he is walking down the hill.
Ren come to a small house. That's the house of his friend. But, his friend was not there. "Rico is chasing that monster" Ren asked. "Yes...the monster that destroy our crop" His parent told him. 'Rico might be in danger' Ren look at his parent. "Do you know where the monster go?" "To cave on the Southeast of GEFURE." His parent told him. Ren did not wasting his time and he went to the cave as quickly as possible in order to helping his friend.
The cave, it was wet and creepy. Ren felt little scared, but he has to get in to the cave and saved his friend. Anyway, he brings his earth stone. A stone that he can use to called Bason, his dragon. Ren is walking further inside the cave. 'Singing a song would made me brave' Ren thought as he start to singing again
*A young boy in the darkness Maybe it sounds scary But I don't I was in the dark cave Maybe it sounds creepy But I don't I know there's someone... Yes, there's someone There's someone accompanied me I'm not alone again Yes, not alone again There's someone accompanied me
As Ren keep singing, he feel someone is behind him. When he turns around, he is face to face with a girl that always appears in his dream. But Ren was just to scare and shocked to realize it. "HYYYYAAAA IT'S A GHOST" Ren screamed as he tried to run, but the girl blocked his way. "No...wait....Ren...it's me" "Ah...ha..ha...ha...it's you" Ren laughed with his blushing face. "Ren...this monster...he's weak to thunder" the girl telling him. "I can fight with Bason...but..if it was mechanical monster..."Ren started to confuse, "It's mean there's someone moved him in purpose" The girl told him. "But..." Before Ren can ask further, the girl disappeared.
Ren decided to walk again, as he heard someone is screaming. Recordnizzing Rico's voice, Ren decided to follow his voice. He found the cave. Rico was tied up, with a mechanical monster in the front of him, ready to devoured him. Ren jumped on the front of the monster.
ARUGURA MECHANICAL WILD MONSTER
He used his Spear to fight this mechanical monster. He jumped and attacking the monster's back. But Arugura hits him hard. Ren use the power of the elemental stone, attach it to his spear, and then attack it with thunder power. The monster was wounded badly; it's make it angry and start to beating Ren without giving him a change to attack. 'Damn....i had to do something.' Ren took his stone from his spear and called Bason,
Ren was pretty surprise; Bason appeared not in his funny looking little dragon, but a great mature dragon. The dragon looks at Arugura and defeats him only with one hit.
GUARDIAN DATA
NAME: BASON ELEMENT: THUNDER TYPE: DRAGON ATTACK: CRASHING THUNDER JAIL
Ren finally win the battle. But, he's wounded. Rico decided to taking him back to his house, and taking care of the boy. Before he was taken back to his palace.
REN'S P.O.V
When I woke up, I found my self in my room Horohoro was locking the door Just to make sure I can't got away. I was so happy...I become a hero to my friend. But...did my family would understand this? I wish they had... Instead of treating me like this. Why did a person that live in luxury Always making sure his child didn't had a friend Just because 'they (my friends)' was different from 'us (me and my family)' And just like the other day... My heroic moment was end up being scold in my room. I wish I can get out of here...
And most of all, I need all of you guys review, that's the way I get new ideas for my story and how to fix the part that seems not suits to the story as the story goes on.
Sorry for changing the title...I think Ragnarok Online is very interesting. But, I really need a new concept. And what about my story that inspirited from Ragnarok Online? ....
Don't worry; I've just made a completely new concept about it. It will become a TRILOGI. Just wait.
OKAY EVERYONE PLEASE GIVE ME REVIEW AS MUCH AS YOU WANT. BECAUSE I WILL
RECEIVE ANYKIND OF REVIEW.
THE BEGINNING OF ALL
REN'S STORY
Morning has come, a young man walk to the room on the corner of the corridor. "Young prince...wake up" he called. There's no answer. "Young prince, don't get on my nerves please" he opened the door and pulled the blanket. But, instead of finding him, he found a dragon. "BASON!! WHAT ARE YOU DOING ON HIS BED" He looks completely shock. "HA..HA..HA.." he heard a voice. He turns around. There's him.
He looks at Ren, the boy with a single spike on his hair and beautiful golden eyes. It suits with his cute face. " Prince Ren.... I thought I told you not to put bason on your bed" Ren smiled "scared...scared...scared..." Ren is shouting and jumping around. " Stop it you...." Horohoro started to chase him. But Ren was just too fast for him.
*Ho...ho...ho... so stupid... I was just to smart for him Horohoro is stupid like a donkey Ho...ho...ho... so slow I was to fast for him Horohoro is as slow as a snail Ho...ho...ho...so ugly I was so scared to see his angry face Horohoro is an ugly man He doesn't had a girlfriend
"STOP THAT STUPID SONG" Horohoro screamed as he keeps trying to catch Ren. Ren keeps running away and singing the song that Horohoro hate so much. 30 minutes later, Horo was tired. Ren took that opportunity to run away from the castle.
GEFURE is the main kingdom in the land that called GEFUREYA. It was a semi-modern city. It was a busy city. Ren is walking around, by himself. "Good morning everyone" Ren is shouting. " Oh hello...prince" Everyone greet the Chinese boy. Yes, everyone loves Ren, he's always nice and kind to everyone. Even that he's prince, he just love to play with simple person.
He went on the small hill. That hill, he always plays with her older sister there until her older sister vanished. He saw a small stone standing near the big tree. " Nee-chan...I always wished that you still together with me..."Ren put some flower on it "One day.... I'll prove to everyone that you were still a life" Ren smiled sadly. Then, he is walking down the hill.
Ren come to a small house. That's the house of his friend. But, his friend was not there. "Rico is chasing that monster" Ren asked. "Yes...the monster that destroy our crop" His parent told him. 'Rico might be in danger' Ren look at his parent. "Do you know where the monster go?" "To cave on the Southeast of GEFURE." His parent told him. Ren did not wasting his time and he went to the cave as quickly as possible in order to helping his friend.
The cave, it was wet and creepy. Ren felt little scared, but he has to get in to the cave and saved his friend. Anyway, he brings his earth stone. A stone that he can use to called Bason, his dragon. Ren is walking further inside the cave. 'Singing a song would made me brave' Ren thought as he start to singing again
*A young boy in the darkness Maybe it sounds scary But I don't I was in the dark cave Maybe it sounds creepy But I don't I know there's someone... Yes, there's someone There's someone accompanied me I'm not alone again Yes, not alone again There's someone accompanied me
As Ren keep singing, he feel someone is behind him. When he turns around, he is face to face with a girl that always appears in his dream. But Ren was just to scare and shocked to realize it. "HYYYYAAAA IT'S A GHOST" Ren screamed as he tried to run, but the girl blocked his way. "No...wait....Ren...it's me" "Ah...ha..ha...ha...it's you" Ren laughed with his blushing face. "Ren...this monster...he's weak to thunder" the girl telling him. "I can fight with Bason...but..if it was mechanical monster..."Ren started to confuse, "It's mean there's someone moved him in purpose" The girl told him. "But..." Before Ren can ask further, the girl disappeared.
Ren decided to walk again, as he heard someone is screaming. Recordnizzing Rico's voice, Ren decided to follow his voice. He found the cave. Rico was tied up, with a mechanical monster in the front of him, ready to devoured him. Ren jumped on the front of the monster.
ARUGURA MECHANICAL WILD MONSTER
He used his Spear to fight this mechanical monster. He jumped and attacking the monster's back. But Arugura hits him hard. Ren use the power of the elemental stone, attach it to his spear, and then attack it with thunder power. The monster was wounded badly; it's make it angry and start to beating Ren without giving him a change to attack. 'Damn....i had to do something.' Ren took his stone from his spear and called Bason,
Ren was pretty surprise; Bason appeared not in his funny looking little dragon, but a great mature dragon. The dragon looks at Arugura and defeats him only with one hit.
GUARDIAN DATA
NAME: BASON ELEMENT: THUNDER TYPE: DRAGON ATTACK: CRASHING THUNDER JAIL
Ren finally win the battle. But, he's wounded. Rico decided to taking him back to his house, and taking care of the boy. Before he was taken back to his palace.
REN'S P.O.V
When I woke up, I found my self in my room Horohoro was locking the door Just to make sure I can't got away. I was so happy...I become a hero to my friend. But...did my family would understand this? I wish they had... Instead of treating me like this. Why did a person that live in luxury Always making sure his child didn't had a friend Just because 'they (my friends)' was different from 'us (me and my family)' And just like the other day... My heroic moment was end up being scold in my room. I wish I can get out of here...
