Arashi
Prelude to Chapters
I feel kinda...insulted. I'm trying to figure something out.
I've just been alerted that this story is a "total Mary Sue".
My God.
Is it possible? Have I written a Mary Sue? An avatar of myself?
I've tried hard NOT to... Which one is the Mary Sue?
Yuko is Chihiro's mother...And she's nothing like me. So it's not her.
Chihiro herself...she's not a child anymore. She's older now. You'd EXPECT her to be a little more mature... I don't THINK she's a Mary Sue...
Benzaiten? Maybe SHE'S the Mary Sue. I drew her from Japanese mythology... A goddess of the Seven Lucky Gods. Her character hasn't even been drawn out yet. But maybe she does seem a little Mary Sue ish. I'm not sure. Maybe the reviewers can help me out.
How does one add an original character without making it seem like a Mary Sue?
Because I've read a lot of Mary Sue's before and I've tried so hard to make mine fit into the story.
Maybe I've drawn it out too long. Maybe I should have dropped her back into the Spirit World in Chapter 1 where she meets up with a grown handsome Haku.
Yep. I knew it. I should have had Haku and Chihiro make out sooner.
Or MAYBE I should have had an 18 year old girl act like she's 7! That way she maintains true to her movie character.
Can all you reviewers out there help me become a better writer? What can I do to make this a good fanfiction? Is it a Mary Sue? Is that why there are so little reviews (thank you to those who did!)?
I'm so sorry do have wasted you time with this rant. I'm just trying to understand.
But just so no one tells the host that I have posted an author's notes in place of a chapter, here's a little something to satisfy those who want a classic Spirited Away fanfiction.
Arashi
The Mock Chapter
Yuko – You're a bad daughter. We hate you and don't understand you. Go die.
Chihiro – I'm so lonely and depressed. Someone please save me. I want to die. Where is Haku?
(Goes back into Spirit World.)
Chihiro – I'm back.
Haku – I'm glad. You're hot now.
Chihiro – YAY!
Yubaba – Damn that Chihiro! I'm going to get her.
Zeniba – No you're not. Go Haku and Chihiro!
(Haku beats up Yubaba.)
Everyone – YAY!!
(Chihiro and Haku kiss.)
And they all lived happily ever after.
***
I couldn't resist. I'm sorry. I had to write that. Spelling errors and all.
If you haven't, go to the site called Tea With the White Dragon. Visit the author's page of Mandarin Huntress and Shibahime Hibiya. They will blow you away.
I'm sorry I didn't handle this more maturely. It takes so much effort to write. And for a few sentences to totally flame you away. It hurts. A lot.
I'm peeling this thing off as soon as the next chapter pops out.
Hope to hear from all of you soon.
-FinixGrl
Prelude to Chapters
I feel kinda...insulted. I'm trying to figure something out.
I've just been alerted that this story is a "total Mary Sue".
My God.
Is it possible? Have I written a Mary Sue? An avatar of myself?
I've tried hard NOT to... Which one is the Mary Sue?
Yuko is Chihiro's mother...And she's nothing like me. So it's not her.
Chihiro herself...she's not a child anymore. She's older now. You'd EXPECT her to be a little more mature... I don't THINK she's a Mary Sue...
Benzaiten? Maybe SHE'S the Mary Sue. I drew her from Japanese mythology... A goddess of the Seven Lucky Gods. Her character hasn't even been drawn out yet. But maybe she does seem a little Mary Sue ish. I'm not sure. Maybe the reviewers can help me out.
How does one add an original character without making it seem like a Mary Sue?
Because I've read a lot of Mary Sue's before and I've tried so hard to make mine fit into the story.
Maybe I've drawn it out too long. Maybe I should have dropped her back into the Spirit World in Chapter 1 where she meets up with a grown handsome Haku.
Yep. I knew it. I should have had Haku and Chihiro make out sooner.
Or MAYBE I should have had an 18 year old girl act like she's 7! That way she maintains true to her movie character.
Can all you reviewers out there help me become a better writer? What can I do to make this a good fanfiction? Is it a Mary Sue? Is that why there are so little reviews (thank you to those who did!)?
I'm so sorry do have wasted you time with this rant. I'm just trying to understand.
But just so no one tells the host that I have posted an author's notes in place of a chapter, here's a little something to satisfy those who want a classic Spirited Away fanfiction.
Arashi
The Mock Chapter
Yuko – You're a bad daughter. We hate you and don't understand you. Go die.
Chihiro – I'm so lonely and depressed. Someone please save me. I want to die. Where is Haku?
(Goes back into Spirit World.)
Chihiro – I'm back.
Haku – I'm glad. You're hot now.
Chihiro – YAY!
Yubaba – Damn that Chihiro! I'm going to get her.
Zeniba – No you're not. Go Haku and Chihiro!
(Haku beats up Yubaba.)
Everyone – YAY!!
(Chihiro and Haku kiss.)
And they all lived happily ever after.
***
I couldn't resist. I'm sorry. I had to write that. Spelling errors and all.
If you haven't, go to the site called Tea With the White Dragon. Visit the author's page of Mandarin Huntress and Shibahime Hibiya. They will blow you away.
I'm sorry I didn't handle this more maturely. It takes so much effort to write. And for a few sentences to totally flame you away. It hurts. A lot.
I'm peeling this thing off as soon as the next chapter pops out.
Hope to hear from all of you soon.
-FinixGrl
