Blazing stallion, crouching fox.
By Wonky_Donkey
fukuwearer87@yahoo.com.au
Disclaimer: I ain't typing new one each chapter, go read the one on chapter 1!!
"Speech"
'Thoughts'
*Flash backs*
-Dr Tofu's Clinic-
Ranma's mind was in turmoil as the sun rose into the morning sky. He had just used a technique so powerful that he could've killed the man that raised him for the last seven years of his life. This was not what scared him most of all. The fact that he had used it in such a reckless fashion, was that if his mother hadn't jumped out of the way, practically all the way onto the street, she would've been caught up in the attack and lying next to his bedridden father who hadn't moved since Ranma carefully deposited him into Dr Tofu's arms at the local clinic.
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Ranma was in no better shape than his father. The fighting and injuries had taken it's toll on him. As soon as he had made sure his father was in good hands, he had collapsed bodily onto the floor. He was weak from blood-loss and the vacuum blade had left a deep cut that required thirty or so stitches. All through the operation, Ranma had awoken, well to the point where he could pick up snatches of conversations. He could sense his mother nearby saying that all was going to be right. She was not just saying it for Ranma. She was saying it for everyone in the room.
Genma was in a bad state, he had lost a lot of blood in the fight, and Dr Tofu was unclear if he would make it through the night. Both Genma's legs were broken, his right arm fractured, shattered ribs, and both his lungs were pierced by shrapnel and bone.
Ranma had lost a lot of blood as well. He had lain on the ground for a good 10 minutes planning his attack while his parents stared in shock, thinking he was dead. All that time he had been bleeding profusely from his chest and had been unable to try and stop the blood flow with his ki, lest alert his parents of him being alive. He had lost just as much blood as his father had, because Genma was immediately given medical attention. If his son and wife had waited before taking Genma to the clinic, he would've died in half hour.
Dr Tofu wasn't used to dealing with such severe injuries. It was usually cuts/bruises, toxin induced pain and dislocations/breaks/fractures from people who either attempted to date Akane, eat her food or be in the same room as her on a bad day (any day of the week ending with 'day'). Having to deal with two patients bleeding to death, in high danger of dying at any moment at the same time, didn't help much either. If not for Nodoka's help, both patients would have died that night.
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Throughout the operation Nodoka had not left the room. Sensing her son's worry, she tried to assure him by saying as she changed the bandages on his chest for the umpteenth time, "Don't worry about your father dear, he's a tough ol' panda. He's been in worse states before and will, no doubt be put in worse ones later in his life. Mark my words. " Even through Ranma's foggy, sedated state of mind, he could hear the affection in her voice. "Just concentrate on your own well being for the time being." Ranma's guilty feeling had declined a little after hearing that, yet it still hid in the back of his mind as he entered the dark world of unconsciousness.
- As soon as he awoke he had immediately asked if his father was alright. Nodoka was relieved by him awaking, but had to restrain him from getting out of bed. When he continued to struggle Dr Tofu pushed the trolley- stretcher (A/N: a stretcher with wheels. I don't know what they're called. 6-_- you know, the ones they use on ER and all those other hospital sitcoms when a patient is being rolled into the ER by the ambulance peoples.) that Genma was on, next to Ranma.
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He had been using his body in a new and strange way and like when you thoroughly exercise a new muscle, or a muscle that hasn't been used in a long time, (say five years) it aches like hell afterwards.
It had been over twelve hours since his fight with his father (now 5:00 in the morning), and Ranma had been awake for over an hour. Genma had failed to break from the "meditative trance", so called by Nodoka.
Nodoka claimed that there were many ways that could break him free of it, but all of them would aggravate the injuries further. She knew this from countless attempts when he had entered this state suddenly, usually without warning. It was the equivalent of a coma.
Ranma continued to watch over his father, waiting for him to awaken. At that point in time, he would give up the scroll if it meant getting his father back. He wasn't the best father, but he had been the main parental figure in his life since Ranma was 8. Ranma didn't know how he'd continue on with his life if he wasn't woken up everyday, by being thrown out the window.
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"Oyaji.." Ranma sadly whispered to himself as a torrent of happy and (mostly) sad thoughts flashed through his mind's eye.
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Genma stirred. Ranma, who had been staring at his body for over an hour now, was wondering if he had imagined it.
Genma stirred again. This time Ranma knew it happened. He watched his father, hoping for another sign of life.
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Genma snorted, rolled over and scratched his butt.
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Birds flew happily in the morning sky, singing their songs of joy.
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Squirrels happily frolicked in the trees, enjoying the fresh morning air.
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Several popping noises came from Dr Tofu's clinic. (A/N: Anime anger marks make a popping sound when they appear) About two seconds after that, an angry cry sounded from the recovery room in Dr Tofu's clinic, "HOW DARE YOU SLEEP PEACEFULLY WHEN I'M WORRYING ABOUT YOUR LIFE?!! DAMN YOU OYAJI!! GENMA SAOTOME, PREPARE TO DI-urkk!!" Ranma was restrained from killing his father when his mother rushed into the room. (She was concerned that the popping sound was the stitches in Ranma's chest coming out)
Upon hearing a death threat directed at him, Genma, (with practiced ease) woke up, jumped up out of his bed and got into a defensive stance to fend off his enraged attacker. This is usually quite painful when both your legs were broken the previous day.
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When Genma had been put back on his bed (it took both Nodoka and Dr Tofu to haul his giant butt onto the bed) , and had stopped crying like a baby, (uncontrollable eye spasms that result in mass amounts of moisture-real men don't cry after all) Ranma asked his mother, "Uh.. mom? I still have some questions about chakra. Could you and dad help explain it a little better?" Ranma thought back to fight and how he used his chakra. "When I used that final attack last night," he paused to give Genma an apologetic look before continuing, " I.. I think I used my chakra. But it doesn't seem to make sense how I did it, after listening to your explanation."
Ranma then gave his account of what happened when he released his ki into the air and 'grabbed hold of it'. Nodoka and Genma both listened to what Ranma had to say before Nodoka cleared up Ranma's misunderstandings about chakra.
"What I said before was the way how most ninjas use their chakra. Most ninjas drain small amounts of energy from their surroundings to perform elemental attacks such as fire, water, wind, lightning, stone, ice etc. If there isn't a nearby source of power to drain the chi from, (A/N: I'll call the energy from nature 'chi', unless someone gives me a better idea.) the ninjas have to create the elemental 'pattern' themselves using 'Hand Seals'. Hand seals are used to direct the flow of the ki ."
"Even when ninjas have an available source of power nearby, they still need to create certain amounts of the element with their ki, to control the jutsu. Think of the fireballs Saffron was throwing at you. He created all the fire himself, since there was no fire nearby and he has an incredible source of power, within himself so there was little strain. If the mountain was on fire, he would've probably gathered chi from the flames, (fire is pretty much chi) make a fireball and make a 'coating' of his own fire-ki around it, to control it."
"Without the 'coating' the fireball would fizzle out, but the coating holds it together like a bag, and all he would have to do is to throw/expel it with his ki in your direction."
Nodoka glanced at Genma to see if her theories were correct. He had his eyes closed and simply nodded, so she continued.
"Last night when you extended your ki, you gathered wind-chi and used it to propel yourself and increase the power of your technique. I also sensed that you used your chakra to heat up the air around you when you finished the spiral and jumped into the air, making your attack more powerful." Nodoka explained.
"But.. you said that ninjas use hand seals to direct the flow of the ki. I'm pretty sure that I didn't do any hand movements that I haven't done before. I just pushed of the ground.." Ranma revealed.
Nodoka and Genma seemed pleased at hearing that (well, Nodoka smiled, but Genma nodded again)
"Ranma, when ninjas use an elemental pattern enough times, they become accustomed to it and no longer need to perform the seal. This takes many decades of practice, but can be handy in battle as it considerably shortens the amount of time needed to perform a jutsu."
Nodoka smiled as she remembered a happy memory, "You were trained in Wind and Fire-chi ever since you could walk. Myself being from the Fire country and your father being from the Wind country. When ninja children are first taught to walk and talk, their parents try to incorporate and teach them about a specific elemental pattern. It's usually the element from their countries. The pattern that is taught to children when they are young, will usually be their strongest element, later on in life. It is unusual for a child to learn more than one type of pattern when they are young as it is rare for joining' s of two ninjas from different countries, such as the marriage between your father and myself."
"Ninja countries are like major clans and clans, such as the Uchiha Clan, are like sub-clans. Some ninja countries are at war, some have treaties etc. The wind country and the fire country haven't been in the best of terms, especially recently." Nodoka seemed to trail off a bit, thinking about the recent strife with the wind country and the Kaze-kage. (A/N: it was just recently that the chunin exams finished ^_^)
Ranma, wanting to know about the ninja countries, got his mother back to explaining by giving a cough. Nodoka continued with her explanation after apologizing.
"The wind country and the fire country haven't been in the best of terms because of wars and such. Ninjas are commonly used as soldiers during a war and because of this, marriages between ninjas from apposing countries are rare."
Ranma looked shocked when he heard that ninjas were soldiers. He thought that they were assassins or body-guards.
Sensing Ranma's shock, Nodoka calmed him by saying: "Ninjas are only soldiers during times of war, and even then they are usually messengers, or do convert-ops. During more peaceful times, they (ninjas) are paid by the amount of missions they do, pending on their level of skill and the difficulty of the mission."
"As you were raised by two different types of elemental users, both fire and wind patterns were imbedded into your subconscious. So when you used your chakra last night, it was a melding of both: Hot air."
"Because your memory was erased, the subconscious ability to use both these elements should be a lot easier to learn use now." Nodoka was happy that something good came out of having to erase Ranma's memory.
"We'll find out more about your description of 'making the wind become an extension of your body' later when we arrive at my village."
"If my theory is correct, then you might have slight telekinetic abilities." Nodoka mused. "but that will have to wait till later. I would like to see what your real form looks like, if you are certain of your decision on the pledge." Nodoka requested.
"I'm sure. Oyaji? Could you pass me the scroll, it's on the bedside drawer."
Genma nodded again.
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"Oyaji?" Ranma asked when Genma didn't move.
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Genma's head rolled to the side and let out a snore. (A/N: Saotome secret technique! Undetected napping! When you sleep when you should be listening/fighting/talking, and fool your opponent into thinking you are in deep thought. BWAHHAHAHAH!! BE AFRAID!!)
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Genma had obviously been sleeping ever since he stopped crying.
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Nodoka exploded, "DAMN YOU GENMA!! HOW DARE YOU SLEEP THROUGH MY EXCELLENT EXPLANATION OF CHAKRA?!!! GENMA SAOTOME, PREPARE TO DI- urkk!!"
This time it was Ranma who had to restrain the normally calm Nodoka from maiming his father. Not that he needed to, as Genma prepared to defend himself, with the same results as last time.
"EEEKKKKKKK!!!" Genma squealed like a little girl as he rolled on the floor.
Dr Tofu came into the room hearing all the racket and watched as Ranma tried to restrain his mother (who had the katana out) from killing his father, while Genma rolled on the floor squealing (vocal chords tightening, causing breathing to sound more high pitched-'cause real men don't go "eeeek!") like a pig.
"..Right. looks like you've got everything in order, then." Dr Tofu said as he went off in search of a cold drink.
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A/N:
HOO-HAH!! Yet another mighty chapter falls!! The largest chapter yet!! I'm sorry bout saying the transformation would happen this chapter and about Genma revealing his past and the relevance of the martial artist's code, but it'll happen later on. (Maybe next chapter 6-_-)
Thanx to: Night hunter, thanx for the ego booster!
Alex Ultra, yeah, I knew that stuff bout the spirit bomb, but the connection stuff, (while I didn't really understand it) helped a lot.
LSama's shadow puppet, 6-_- actually, I've been using that site for a while now, nearly a year... 6-_- but it didn't really help much. The pics describing the actions were pretty cool though.. Thanx for the accidental flaming!! (read what you wrote when you reviewed me, just after you wrote ".And as good as I am at writing even semi-dark fics..." ^_^ V peace-out!
Evil Kasumi, thanx for bringing up the rivals! I was going to just have Ranma beat the tar out of Ryoga and Mousse, but now I'll make them relatives of Ninjas!!! BWAHAHAHAH!! Yeh, the Naruto crew will be introduced to Ranma when he goes to the village. (a ninja team of 4 perhaps?)
Xylix, Thanx for the helpful criticism. about the line breaks: I'm having difficulty with making well spaced paragraphs, when I put two lines in- between dialogues, it comes out as one, so I put a (-) cause anything more than one empty line gets deleted. This lets me evenly space out the fic. It gives the readers time to breath, rather than clumping it all together.
IF ANYONE CAN HELP ME WITH THIS I'D APPRECIATE IT!! (Remember, it's for your convenience, not mine.)
I'll explain the mushroom effect next chapter when Ranma transforms, this chapter they didn't really discuss the scroll, so because the subject didn't come up, I didn't explain it.
About the Gen-jutsu illusion. if you read the 4th chapter carefully, the technique was called "kage-henge jutsu". This is a mixture between the HENGE and the SHADOW CLONE jutsus. Meaning the extra mass is there, just instead of disappearing when it's hit, because of the scroll, it always stays there.
About chakra detection, well you can't find something if you don't know what it looks/smells/tastes/sound/etc like, right? I think the ninjas would've eventually found Naruto, but Iruka knows him better than most people (therefore knows his chakra better), and that other sneaky guy (I've forgotten his name) had tricked Naruto into stealing the scroll, so he obviously had some sort of way to know where Naruto was, so he could find and steal the scroll off him.
Remember Genma had dozens of jounins after his blood, when he married Nodoka. (Nodoka was like a female version of Ranma, eg. Dozens of crazies trying to marry him/her). Not to mention Itachi as well. So they actually could recognize Genma's 'scent', from fighting him so many times, and they had the skill to actually chase after him and catch him.
And about giving away future scenes. well I only do it as not to disappoint the audience. The amount of times I've read a fic, thinking that it was good, only to find out 20 chapters later that it's trash, or goes of in a different direction from what I'd like, really pissed me off. I felt like I wasted my time, so I'm just letting the audience know in which direction it goes.
(and anyway, there's no way that Ranma could meet someone strong and not fight and defeat them, huh? It's a martial arts comic.)
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WONKY DONKEY SIGNING OFF!!
By Wonky_Donkey
fukuwearer87@yahoo.com.au
Disclaimer: I ain't typing new one each chapter, go read the one on chapter 1!!
"Speech"
'Thoughts'
*Flash backs*
-Dr Tofu's Clinic-
Ranma's mind was in turmoil as the sun rose into the morning sky. He had just used a technique so powerful that he could've killed the man that raised him for the last seven years of his life. This was not what scared him most of all. The fact that he had used it in such a reckless fashion, was that if his mother hadn't jumped out of the way, practically all the way onto the street, she would've been caught up in the attack and lying next to his bedridden father who hadn't moved since Ranma carefully deposited him into Dr Tofu's arms at the local clinic.
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Ranma was in no better shape than his father. The fighting and injuries had taken it's toll on him. As soon as he had made sure his father was in good hands, he had collapsed bodily onto the floor. He was weak from blood-loss and the vacuum blade had left a deep cut that required thirty or so stitches. All through the operation, Ranma had awoken, well to the point where he could pick up snatches of conversations. He could sense his mother nearby saying that all was going to be right. She was not just saying it for Ranma. She was saying it for everyone in the room.
Genma was in a bad state, he had lost a lot of blood in the fight, and Dr Tofu was unclear if he would make it through the night. Both Genma's legs were broken, his right arm fractured, shattered ribs, and both his lungs were pierced by shrapnel and bone.
Ranma had lost a lot of blood as well. He had lain on the ground for a good 10 minutes planning his attack while his parents stared in shock, thinking he was dead. All that time he had been bleeding profusely from his chest and had been unable to try and stop the blood flow with his ki, lest alert his parents of him being alive. He had lost just as much blood as his father had, because Genma was immediately given medical attention. If his son and wife had waited before taking Genma to the clinic, he would've died in half hour.
Dr Tofu wasn't used to dealing with such severe injuries. It was usually cuts/bruises, toxin induced pain and dislocations/breaks/fractures from people who either attempted to date Akane, eat her food or be in the same room as her on a bad day (any day of the week ending with 'day'). Having to deal with two patients bleeding to death, in high danger of dying at any moment at the same time, didn't help much either. If not for Nodoka's help, both patients would have died that night.
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Throughout the operation Nodoka had not left the room. Sensing her son's worry, she tried to assure him by saying as she changed the bandages on his chest for the umpteenth time, "Don't worry about your father dear, he's a tough ol' panda. He's been in worse states before and will, no doubt be put in worse ones later in his life. Mark my words. " Even through Ranma's foggy, sedated state of mind, he could hear the affection in her voice. "Just concentrate on your own well being for the time being." Ranma's guilty feeling had declined a little after hearing that, yet it still hid in the back of his mind as he entered the dark world of unconsciousness.
- As soon as he awoke he had immediately asked if his father was alright. Nodoka was relieved by him awaking, but had to restrain him from getting out of bed. When he continued to struggle Dr Tofu pushed the trolley- stretcher (A/N: a stretcher with wheels. I don't know what they're called. 6-_- you know, the ones they use on ER and all those other hospital sitcoms when a patient is being rolled into the ER by the ambulance peoples.) that Genma was on, next to Ranma.
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He had been using his body in a new and strange way and like when you thoroughly exercise a new muscle, or a muscle that hasn't been used in a long time, (say five years) it aches like hell afterwards.
It had been over twelve hours since his fight with his father (now 5:00 in the morning), and Ranma had been awake for over an hour. Genma had failed to break from the "meditative trance", so called by Nodoka.
Nodoka claimed that there were many ways that could break him free of it, but all of them would aggravate the injuries further. She knew this from countless attempts when he had entered this state suddenly, usually without warning. It was the equivalent of a coma.
Ranma continued to watch over his father, waiting for him to awaken. At that point in time, he would give up the scroll if it meant getting his father back. He wasn't the best father, but he had been the main parental figure in his life since Ranma was 8. Ranma didn't know how he'd continue on with his life if he wasn't woken up everyday, by being thrown out the window.
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"Oyaji.." Ranma sadly whispered to himself as a torrent of happy and (mostly) sad thoughts flashed through his mind's eye.
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Genma stirred. Ranma, who had been staring at his body for over an hour now, was wondering if he had imagined it.
Genma stirred again. This time Ranma knew it happened. He watched his father, hoping for another sign of life.
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Genma snorted, rolled over and scratched his butt.
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Birds flew happily in the morning sky, singing their songs of joy.
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Squirrels happily frolicked in the trees, enjoying the fresh morning air.
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Several popping noises came from Dr Tofu's clinic. (A/N: Anime anger marks make a popping sound when they appear) About two seconds after that, an angry cry sounded from the recovery room in Dr Tofu's clinic, "HOW DARE YOU SLEEP PEACEFULLY WHEN I'M WORRYING ABOUT YOUR LIFE?!! DAMN YOU OYAJI!! GENMA SAOTOME, PREPARE TO DI-urkk!!" Ranma was restrained from killing his father when his mother rushed into the room. (She was concerned that the popping sound was the stitches in Ranma's chest coming out)
Upon hearing a death threat directed at him, Genma, (with practiced ease) woke up, jumped up out of his bed and got into a defensive stance to fend off his enraged attacker. This is usually quite painful when both your legs were broken the previous day.
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When Genma had been put back on his bed (it took both Nodoka and Dr Tofu to haul his giant butt onto the bed) , and had stopped crying like a baby, (uncontrollable eye spasms that result in mass amounts of moisture-real men don't cry after all) Ranma asked his mother, "Uh.. mom? I still have some questions about chakra. Could you and dad help explain it a little better?" Ranma thought back to fight and how he used his chakra. "When I used that final attack last night," he paused to give Genma an apologetic look before continuing, " I.. I think I used my chakra. But it doesn't seem to make sense how I did it, after listening to your explanation."
Ranma then gave his account of what happened when he released his ki into the air and 'grabbed hold of it'. Nodoka and Genma both listened to what Ranma had to say before Nodoka cleared up Ranma's misunderstandings about chakra.
"What I said before was the way how most ninjas use their chakra. Most ninjas drain small amounts of energy from their surroundings to perform elemental attacks such as fire, water, wind, lightning, stone, ice etc. If there isn't a nearby source of power to drain the chi from, (A/N: I'll call the energy from nature 'chi', unless someone gives me a better idea.) the ninjas have to create the elemental 'pattern' themselves using 'Hand Seals'. Hand seals are used to direct the flow of the ki ."
"Even when ninjas have an available source of power nearby, they still need to create certain amounts of the element with their ki, to control the jutsu. Think of the fireballs Saffron was throwing at you. He created all the fire himself, since there was no fire nearby and he has an incredible source of power, within himself so there was little strain. If the mountain was on fire, he would've probably gathered chi from the flames, (fire is pretty much chi) make a fireball and make a 'coating' of his own fire-ki around it, to control it."
"Without the 'coating' the fireball would fizzle out, but the coating holds it together like a bag, and all he would have to do is to throw/expel it with his ki in your direction."
Nodoka glanced at Genma to see if her theories were correct. He had his eyes closed and simply nodded, so she continued.
"Last night when you extended your ki, you gathered wind-chi and used it to propel yourself and increase the power of your technique. I also sensed that you used your chakra to heat up the air around you when you finished the spiral and jumped into the air, making your attack more powerful." Nodoka explained.
"But.. you said that ninjas use hand seals to direct the flow of the ki. I'm pretty sure that I didn't do any hand movements that I haven't done before. I just pushed of the ground.." Ranma revealed.
Nodoka and Genma seemed pleased at hearing that (well, Nodoka smiled, but Genma nodded again)
"Ranma, when ninjas use an elemental pattern enough times, they become accustomed to it and no longer need to perform the seal. This takes many decades of practice, but can be handy in battle as it considerably shortens the amount of time needed to perform a jutsu."
Nodoka smiled as she remembered a happy memory, "You were trained in Wind and Fire-chi ever since you could walk. Myself being from the Fire country and your father being from the Wind country. When ninja children are first taught to walk and talk, their parents try to incorporate and teach them about a specific elemental pattern. It's usually the element from their countries. The pattern that is taught to children when they are young, will usually be their strongest element, later on in life. It is unusual for a child to learn more than one type of pattern when they are young as it is rare for joining' s of two ninjas from different countries, such as the marriage between your father and myself."
"Ninja countries are like major clans and clans, such as the Uchiha Clan, are like sub-clans. Some ninja countries are at war, some have treaties etc. The wind country and the fire country haven't been in the best of terms, especially recently." Nodoka seemed to trail off a bit, thinking about the recent strife with the wind country and the Kaze-kage. (A/N: it was just recently that the chunin exams finished ^_^)
Ranma, wanting to know about the ninja countries, got his mother back to explaining by giving a cough. Nodoka continued with her explanation after apologizing.
"The wind country and the fire country haven't been in the best of terms because of wars and such. Ninjas are commonly used as soldiers during a war and because of this, marriages between ninjas from apposing countries are rare."
Ranma looked shocked when he heard that ninjas were soldiers. He thought that they were assassins or body-guards.
Sensing Ranma's shock, Nodoka calmed him by saying: "Ninjas are only soldiers during times of war, and even then they are usually messengers, or do convert-ops. During more peaceful times, they (ninjas) are paid by the amount of missions they do, pending on their level of skill and the difficulty of the mission."
"As you were raised by two different types of elemental users, both fire and wind patterns were imbedded into your subconscious. So when you used your chakra last night, it was a melding of both: Hot air."
"Because your memory was erased, the subconscious ability to use both these elements should be a lot easier to learn use now." Nodoka was happy that something good came out of having to erase Ranma's memory.
"We'll find out more about your description of 'making the wind become an extension of your body' later when we arrive at my village."
"If my theory is correct, then you might have slight telekinetic abilities." Nodoka mused. "but that will have to wait till later. I would like to see what your real form looks like, if you are certain of your decision on the pledge." Nodoka requested.
"I'm sure. Oyaji? Could you pass me the scroll, it's on the bedside drawer."
Genma nodded again.
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"Oyaji?" Ranma asked when Genma didn't move.
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Genma's head rolled to the side and let out a snore. (A/N: Saotome secret technique! Undetected napping! When you sleep when you should be listening/fighting/talking, and fool your opponent into thinking you are in deep thought. BWAHHAHAHAH!! BE AFRAID!!)
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Genma had obviously been sleeping ever since he stopped crying.
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Nodoka exploded, "DAMN YOU GENMA!! HOW DARE YOU SLEEP THROUGH MY EXCELLENT EXPLANATION OF CHAKRA?!!! GENMA SAOTOME, PREPARE TO DI- urkk!!"
This time it was Ranma who had to restrain the normally calm Nodoka from maiming his father. Not that he needed to, as Genma prepared to defend himself, with the same results as last time.
"EEEKKKKKKK!!!" Genma squealed like a little girl as he rolled on the floor.
Dr Tofu came into the room hearing all the racket and watched as Ranma tried to restrain his mother (who had the katana out) from killing his father, while Genma rolled on the floor squealing (vocal chords tightening, causing breathing to sound more high pitched-'cause real men don't go "eeeek!") like a pig.
"..Right. looks like you've got everything in order, then." Dr Tofu said as he went off in search of a cold drink.
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A/N:
HOO-HAH!! Yet another mighty chapter falls!! The largest chapter yet!! I'm sorry bout saying the transformation would happen this chapter and about Genma revealing his past and the relevance of the martial artist's code, but it'll happen later on. (Maybe next chapter 6-_-)
Thanx to: Night hunter, thanx for the ego booster!
Alex Ultra, yeah, I knew that stuff bout the spirit bomb, but the connection stuff, (while I didn't really understand it) helped a lot.
LSama's shadow puppet, 6-_- actually, I've been using that site for a while now, nearly a year... 6-_- but it didn't really help much. The pics describing the actions were pretty cool though.. Thanx for the accidental flaming!! (read what you wrote when you reviewed me, just after you wrote ".And as good as I am at writing even semi-dark fics..." ^_^ V peace-out!
Evil Kasumi, thanx for bringing up the rivals! I was going to just have Ranma beat the tar out of Ryoga and Mousse, but now I'll make them relatives of Ninjas!!! BWAHAHAHAH!! Yeh, the Naruto crew will be introduced to Ranma when he goes to the village. (a ninja team of 4 perhaps?)
Xylix, Thanx for the helpful criticism. about the line breaks: I'm having difficulty with making well spaced paragraphs, when I put two lines in- between dialogues, it comes out as one, so I put a (-) cause anything more than one empty line gets deleted. This lets me evenly space out the fic. It gives the readers time to breath, rather than clumping it all together.
IF ANYONE CAN HELP ME WITH THIS I'D APPRECIATE IT!! (Remember, it's for your convenience, not mine.)
I'll explain the mushroom effect next chapter when Ranma transforms, this chapter they didn't really discuss the scroll, so because the subject didn't come up, I didn't explain it.
About the Gen-jutsu illusion. if you read the 4th chapter carefully, the technique was called "kage-henge jutsu". This is a mixture between the HENGE and the SHADOW CLONE jutsus. Meaning the extra mass is there, just instead of disappearing when it's hit, because of the scroll, it always stays there.
About chakra detection, well you can't find something if you don't know what it looks/smells/tastes/sound/etc like, right? I think the ninjas would've eventually found Naruto, but Iruka knows him better than most people (therefore knows his chakra better), and that other sneaky guy (I've forgotten his name) had tricked Naruto into stealing the scroll, so he obviously had some sort of way to know where Naruto was, so he could find and steal the scroll off him.
Remember Genma had dozens of jounins after his blood, when he married Nodoka. (Nodoka was like a female version of Ranma, eg. Dozens of crazies trying to marry him/her). Not to mention Itachi as well. So they actually could recognize Genma's 'scent', from fighting him so many times, and they had the skill to actually chase after him and catch him.
And about giving away future scenes. well I only do it as not to disappoint the audience. The amount of times I've read a fic, thinking that it was good, only to find out 20 chapters later that it's trash, or goes of in a different direction from what I'd like, really pissed me off. I felt like I wasted my time, so I'm just letting the audience know in which direction it goes.
(and anyway, there's no way that Ranma could meet someone strong and not fight and defeat them, huh? It's a martial arts comic.)
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WONKY DONKEY SIGNING OFF!!