THE STORY WILL BE REWRITTEN
First of all. The way I wrote the two chapters sucks. Still I like the idea of the story so I'll write it again. There will be a lot of changes in the story cause I'll think it over again.
About the ages. The thing is that I don't have much of experience about the ways the people in my age act. Less I know about what they usually do. I never like to be with those guys who maybe knew. My way was to hang with my closest friends and that we did at my home or theirs. Most of my friends also are many years older than I am.
Other fact is that I never did go to High-school and never will. I don't know how the Finnish high-school is or even less how the high-school in USA is (or in any other country).
In other words I'm going to just try to improvise. Come up with some stuff they do and how they act.
Still. I noticed myself that they did act like older people. I'm very thankfull for the first review cause it helps me to think on the ages and what is wrong.
I try to get this started, but I have to also get written the other stories. Oh well. I hope I'll get chapter here soon.
-Dreamer from North
First of all. The way I wrote the two chapters sucks. Still I like the idea of the story so I'll write it again. There will be a lot of changes in the story cause I'll think it over again.
About the ages. The thing is that I don't have much of experience about the ways the people in my age act. Less I know about what they usually do. I never like to be with those guys who maybe knew. My way was to hang with my closest friends and that we did at my home or theirs. Most of my friends also are many years older than I am.
Other fact is that I never did go to High-school and never will. I don't know how the Finnish high-school is or even less how the high-school in USA is (or in any other country).
In other words I'm going to just try to improvise. Come up with some stuff they do and how they act.
Still. I noticed myself that they did act like older people. I'm very thankfull for the first review cause it helps me to think on the ages and what is wrong.
I try to get this started, but I have to also get written the other stories. Oh well. I hope I'll get chapter here soon.
-Dreamer from North