Shiny Inuyasha
Disclaimer: yea like I would be writing fan fics if I owned it......
Wow hi. Yea I am writing again..... I hope there are still some of you out there!! Any way.....
If any one is still reading this if you have an idea for a better summery let me know kuz I don't think the one that is up now is very good and it is getting to me! ^_^ thanx!
Responses to reviews below chapter. Sorry this chapter is SO short!!!! (specially compared to how long it has been since I posted last!)
((my notes in story))
"spoken"
'thought'
*one's OTHER voice in head* (like when arguing with one's self)
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Chapter 3: Stupid Inuyasa.....
Inuyasha sat on the roof of Kiade's hut listening to the even breathing of the only person left sleeping in it, Kagome. 'Man what am I supposed to do now?'
*apologize*
'What just jump out ((of a tree probably)) and say "sorry Kagome!" then what? run? I am going to hit the ground HARD for this one...........'
*it will be much worse if you do not do it today.*
'maybe I don't have to apologize?'
*......* ((I would say the equivalent of an evil glare!))
'Ok! Ok! I was kidding! I will.... I just.....'
*am only good at plowing impulsively a head and not thinking about what you say or do or there consequences?* ((is trying to finish his sentence in case you could not tell ^_^;;))
'.......... I hate you'
*only because I am right*
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Kagome drifted back to reality slowly. 'Why does my arm hurt?...' she thought drowsily as her mind flashed back to the events of the day prior 'oh yea....' She blinked her eyes open and was greeted by a worried kit barley an inch from her nose.
"You feeling better Kagome-chan?" he asked tilting his head cutely to the side
Kagome chuckled as she sat up "yes I am." She looked around the empty hut "where did every one get off to?"
"Well Sango and Kerara went for a walk and Miroku headed off shortly after them, Kiade is looking for earbs and Inuyasha is..." he paused a moment thinking about what had happened the night before 'did I just dream that?'
Kagome raised an eye brow at the hanging sentence "Inuyasha is?"
Shippo looked up at her "I don't know. I have not seen him today" he blinked 'well not since I woke up any way......'
Kagome nodded "I should pack up and start getting ready to go back"
Shippo sighed 'I don't want you to go....' He smiled up at her any way and then nodded "ok I will help!"
Kagome smiled "thank you Shippo-chan"
Together they packed her bag and then walked out side. As she placed it by the door Kagome looked around "Shippo would you mind running and finding every one"
Shippo started to run off then stopped and looked back at her "even Inuyasha?"
She flinched ever so slightly. So slightly in fact that the young eyes of Shippo missed it entirely but it did not escape certain golden eyes transfixed on her. "no" she stated coldly "leave him where ever he is"
Shippo nodded his eyes momentarily darting to the Hanyou 's hiding spot before he ran off shouting "ok" over his shoulder
Kagome sighed as she leaned against the wall of the hut watching the kit run off. She smiled as he dodged people in the village as he ran. 'such a good kid.... He does not disserve to be in the middle of this' her good hand fingered the shards.
Inuyasha watched Kagome as she fingered the shards 'what am I supposed to say!! How am I supposed to do this!!!!'
The voice snorted *Just say I. AM. SORRY.! *
Inuyasha crossed his arms 'hn'
*when all else fails. Fall back on the all-powerful "hn" *
Inuyasha fidgeted 'ok I am not so weak that I can't do this!...... but......'
Kagome looked down at her arm with a frown. "Stupid Inuyasha" she mumbled
Inuyasha narrowed his eyes "stupid ME you're the one who took what is mine!" he yelled at her as he leaned over the edge of the roof
*Actually you really ARE ...* Inuyasha's other voice mumbled who Inuyasha, by the way, promptly ignored
Kagome jumped and worled around to look up at him "I was just looking at it! No reason to do this!" she yelled as she held up her arm.
"Yea like I meant to make you more useless!!" he yelled back as several villagers shook there heads.
Kagome blinked at him and took a step back from the hut "sit boy" she said flatly as Inuyasha plummeted over the edge of the hut and landed hard on the ground.
Inuyasha mumbled into the ground "Inu-hole number 952..."
Kagome narrowed her eyes not having understood what he said "what did you say?"
Inuyasha jumped up, the spell having warn off, and yelled at her "I said you are an annoying bitch!!"
Kagome scoffed "like you aren't annoying, doggie-boy!"
Inuyasha snorted "I am only annoying because you are a useless bitch!!" ((Is it just me or does that logic suck?))
Sango and Miroku, who had a fresh hand print on his cheek, walked towards them shaking there heads. Shortly behind folowed Kiade and Shippo.
Miroku whispered to Sango "well at lest they are fighting like normal"
Sango frowned "I don't know......."
Kagome blinked as her mind flashed back on the fight the day prior. Her voice was early cold as she grabbed her bag turned around and shot over her shoulder "whatever. Go find the shards your self."
Sango stepped towards Kagome "Kagome-chan" she paused a moment and glanced at Inuyasha "we will walk you to the well"
Miroku nodded "yes shall we?" he moved to motion to the path to the well
Kagome smiled softly "yes thank you"
Inuyasha blinked as she walked off 'Kagome........'
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Kagome and company arrived at the well with out so much as glimpsing a strand of silver hair.
Kagome looked down at the well then looked up to her group of dear friends "I will see you in a week" she said while smiling at them.
Sango nodded "take as long as you need to recover as well." She shook her head "we will try our best to keep Inuyasha out of your hair for a while!"
Kagome smiled thankfully "thanks a lot" Kagome then hugged Shippo, Kiade and Sango and gave Miroku a pat on the shoulder.
Miroku pouted "what no hug for me?"
Sango promptly hit him "have a good week!"
Kagome smiled "you too! Bye" she then jumped in to the well the pink light surrounding her in her trip home.
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Inuyasha watched as she jumped in to the well from his perch not far away. He sighed 'no more Kagome-age.....'
*Kagome what?*
'oh shut up!'
*so now what are you going to do?*
'What do you think!....... wait here for her to return like I always do......' Inuyasha pouted as his eyes were fixed on the well.
*such a good little "Doggie-boy!"* the voice mumbled ((in his best Kagome voice ofcorse!))
'WHAT DID YOU SAY!!!'
*EEP! Nothing!!!!*
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END CHAPTER 3!! Yea I know short right! But this seemed like the place to stop.... oh and I have a friend who ads "-age" to the end of my name to describe the time we spend together..... so yea I think it is funny and odd so I added it in.
If you have some ideas for demon names let me know. The characters are 3 male dog demons, 2 female dog demons,3 male wolf demons, 3 female wolf demons, and a mako. This might change, sence I have not goten this far in the story.
REVIEWS!!
Hellslibrarian #1: no ur a good speller and the notes dont bother mne at all i like this fic its good. Inu must be really obsessed with that rock thing to cut kagome. but keepupdating
Hellslibrarian #2: hehe inu haveing conversations with himself! thats so great! lol but i liked this chapter. good job update soon! Plz
ME!: ^_^ I am glad you like it! also yea.... He is obsessed with it. I will get to why eventually
Zoey Lives: Wow! I'll have to tell more people to read this story. That whole groping thing was just hillarious. Is Kagome gonna find out about InuYasha's past? Oh, I loved the mental help thing at the end. Very cute!!
ME!: thanx!! Word of mouth is good!! And yea they will talk about his past eventually. I am glad you liked it!
Neko-Kyolover: I like! I like!
ME!: ^_^ YAY!!!!
Cherry Arrow: one thing he will never call her fucking bitch. and inuyasha is not that violence.
ME!: ::nodds:: I actually agree......... v_v;;; I know Inuyasha is out of character so is every one else. But yea... ::sigh:: I suppose he has been under more stress than normal?
Heartsfire: aw cute story, keep it going!
ME!: ^_^ thanx! It is supposed to be cute and sad and odd. Well I got one of those! Probably two.... ^_^ but I am not all that good at sad... so whoops off topic! :-p
Syaoran Li lover: WOW great fanfic so far! I loved it... keep on writing. update soon!
ME!: THANX YOU! ^_^ I am so glad! And I will try to update as fast as I can!
Fish : lol i love how he has a pet rock and is mental...lol
Love,
Fish
*Hurry write more!*
ME!: ^_^ well as much of a loner as he is he MUST have SOME thing to talk to....... :-p I am glad you like Inuyasha's problems!
LadyKoneko: wonderful story i luv it
ME!: THANK YOU SO MUCH!
Koinekid: I accept that many Fanfiction.net writers are not the best spellers. However, the summary is that which convinces the reader to take a first glance at your story. If nowhere else in the story, the spelling in the spelling must be top notch. "Languidge" is not a word. Language, however, is.
Keep writing, however.
And one more suggestion--make sure your dialogue evidences proper characterization established by the series. For example, "butt ugly fucking bitch" is not a phrase Inu Yasha would likely use. "Butt ugly" is more of a twentieth century English phrase. A Japanese character from the fifteenth century, even one who makes semi-frequent trips to the twentieth/twenty- first, would not likely use the phrase.
Thanks.
ME!: O_O! AHHH!!! GOOD POINTS!! Ok! I am going to change that and re do the chapter to change the "butt ugly" ::nodds:: I did not think of that! also I will change it to "Language" too v_v;;; I did not realize I had not checked the spelling on that! thank you for pointing that out!
Smiley: you don't suck!! i thought it was a really good beggining! and im sure it will be a really good story when you get some more chapters up and going, so keep it up=D
ME!: THANX! I will try to make it as good as I can!
END REVIEWS!!
Disclaimer: yea like I would be writing fan fics if I owned it......
Wow hi. Yea I am writing again..... I hope there are still some of you out there!! Any way.....
If any one is still reading this if you have an idea for a better summery let me know kuz I don't think the one that is up now is very good and it is getting to me! ^_^ thanx!
Responses to reviews below chapter. Sorry this chapter is SO short!!!! (specially compared to how long it has been since I posted last!)
((my notes in story))
"spoken"
'thought'
*one's OTHER voice in head* (like when arguing with one's self)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Chapter 3: Stupid Inuyasa.....
Inuyasha sat on the roof of Kiade's hut listening to the even breathing of the only person left sleeping in it, Kagome. 'Man what am I supposed to do now?'
*apologize*
'What just jump out ((of a tree probably)) and say "sorry Kagome!" then what? run? I am going to hit the ground HARD for this one...........'
*it will be much worse if you do not do it today.*
'maybe I don't have to apologize?'
*......* ((I would say the equivalent of an evil glare!))
'Ok! Ok! I was kidding! I will.... I just.....'
*am only good at plowing impulsively a head and not thinking about what you say or do or there consequences?* ((is trying to finish his sentence in case you could not tell ^_^;;))
'.......... I hate you'
*only because I am right*
----------------------------------
Kagome drifted back to reality slowly. 'Why does my arm hurt?...' she thought drowsily as her mind flashed back to the events of the day prior 'oh yea....' She blinked her eyes open and was greeted by a worried kit barley an inch from her nose.
"You feeling better Kagome-chan?" he asked tilting his head cutely to the side
Kagome chuckled as she sat up "yes I am." She looked around the empty hut "where did every one get off to?"
"Well Sango and Kerara went for a walk and Miroku headed off shortly after them, Kiade is looking for earbs and Inuyasha is..." he paused a moment thinking about what had happened the night before 'did I just dream that?'
Kagome raised an eye brow at the hanging sentence "Inuyasha is?"
Shippo looked up at her "I don't know. I have not seen him today" he blinked 'well not since I woke up any way......'
Kagome nodded "I should pack up and start getting ready to go back"
Shippo sighed 'I don't want you to go....' He smiled up at her any way and then nodded "ok I will help!"
Kagome smiled "thank you Shippo-chan"
Together they packed her bag and then walked out side. As she placed it by the door Kagome looked around "Shippo would you mind running and finding every one"
Shippo started to run off then stopped and looked back at her "even Inuyasha?"
She flinched ever so slightly. So slightly in fact that the young eyes of Shippo missed it entirely but it did not escape certain golden eyes transfixed on her. "no" she stated coldly "leave him where ever he is"
Shippo nodded his eyes momentarily darting to the Hanyou 's hiding spot before he ran off shouting "ok" over his shoulder
Kagome sighed as she leaned against the wall of the hut watching the kit run off. She smiled as he dodged people in the village as he ran. 'such a good kid.... He does not disserve to be in the middle of this' her good hand fingered the shards.
Inuyasha watched Kagome as she fingered the shards 'what am I supposed to say!! How am I supposed to do this!!!!'
The voice snorted *Just say I. AM. SORRY.! *
Inuyasha crossed his arms 'hn'
*when all else fails. Fall back on the all-powerful "hn" *
Inuyasha fidgeted 'ok I am not so weak that I can't do this!...... but......'
Kagome looked down at her arm with a frown. "Stupid Inuyasha" she mumbled
Inuyasha narrowed his eyes "stupid ME you're the one who took what is mine!" he yelled at her as he leaned over the edge of the roof
*Actually you really ARE ...* Inuyasha's other voice mumbled who Inuyasha, by the way, promptly ignored
Kagome jumped and worled around to look up at him "I was just looking at it! No reason to do this!" she yelled as she held up her arm.
"Yea like I meant to make you more useless!!" he yelled back as several villagers shook there heads.
Kagome blinked at him and took a step back from the hut "sit boy" she said flatly as Inuyasha plummeted over the edge of the hut and landed hard on the ground.
Inuyasha mumbled into the ground "Inu-hole number 952..."
Kagome narrowed her eyes not having understood what he said "what did you say?"
Inuyasha jumped up, the spell having warn off, and yelled at her "I said you are an annoying bitch!!"
Kagome scoffed "like you aren't annoying, doggie-boy!"
Inuyasha snorted "I am only annoying because you are a useless bitch!!" ((Is it just me or does that logic suck?))
Sango and Miroku, who had a fresh hand print on his cheek, walked towards them shaking there heads. Shortly behind folowed Kiade and Shippo.
Miroku whispered to Sango "well at lest they are fighting like normal"
Sango frowned "I don't know......."
Kagome blinked as her mind flashed back on the fight the day prior. Her voice was early cold as she grabbed her bag turned around and shot over her shoulder "whatever. Go find the shards your self."
Sango stepped towards Kagome "Kagome-chan" she paused a moment and glanced at Inuyasha "we will walk you to the well"
Miroku nodded "yes shall we?" he moved to motion to the path to the well
Kagome smiled softly "yes thank you"
Inuyasha blinked as she walked off 'Kagome........'
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Kagome and company arrived at the well with out so much as glimpsing a strand of silver hair.
Kagome looked down at the well then looked up to her group of dear friends "I will see you in a week" she said while smiling at them.
Sango nodded "take as long as you need to recover as well." She shook her head "we will try our best to keep Inuyasha out of your hair for a while!"
Kagome smiled thankfully "thanks a lot" Kagome then hugged Shippo, Kiade and Sango and gave Miroku a pat on the shoulder.
Miroku pouted "what no hug for me?"
Sango promptly hit him "have a good week!"
Kagome smiled "you too! Bye" she then jumped in to the well the pink light surrounding her in her trip home.
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Inuyasha watched as she jumped in to the well from his perch not far away. He sighed 'no more Kagome-age.....'
*Kagome what?*
'oh shut up!'
*so now what are you going to do?*
'What do you think!....... wait here for her to return like I always do......' Inuyasha pouted as his eyes were fixed on the well.
*such a good little "Doggie-boy!"* the voice mumbled ((in his best Kagome voice ofcorse!))
'WHAT DID YOU SAY!!!'
*EEP! Nothing!!!!*
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
END CHAPTER 3!! Yea I know short right! But this seemed like the place to stop.... oh and I have a friend who ads "-age" to the end of my name to describe the time we spend together..... so yea I think it is funny and odd so I added it in.
If you have some ideas for demon names let me know. The characters are 3 male dog demons, 2 female dog demons,3 male wolf demons, 3 female wolf demons, and a mako. This might change, sence I have not goten this far in the story.
REVIEWS!!
Hellslibrarian #1: no ur a good speller and the notes dont bother mne at all i like this fic its good. Inu must be really obsessed with that rock thing to cut kagome. but keepupdating
Hellslibrarian #2: hehe inu haveing conversations with himself! thats so great! lol but i liked this chapter. good job update soon! Plz
ME!: ^_^ I am glad you like it! also yea.... He is obsessed with it. I will get to why eventually
Zoey Lives: Wow! I'll have to tell more people to read this story. That whole groping thing was just hillarious. Is Kagome gonna find out about InuYasha's past? Oh, I loved the mental help thing at the end. Very cute!!
ME!: thanx!! Word of mouth is good!! And yea they will talk about his past eventually. I am glad you liked it!
Neko-Kyolover: I like! I like!
ME!: ^_^ YAY!!!!
Cherry Arrow: one thing he will never call her fucking bitch. and inuyasha is not that violence.
ME!: ::nodds:: I actually agree......... v_v;;; I know Inuyasha is out of character so is every one else. But yea... ::sigh:: I suppose he has been under more stress than normal?
Heartsfire: aw cute story, keep it going!
ME!: ^_^ thanx! It is supposed to be cute and sad and odd. Well I got one of those! Probably two.... ^_^ but I am not all that good at sad... so whoops off topic! :-p
Syaoran Li lover: WOW great fanfic so far! I loved it... keep on writing. update soon!
ME!: THANX YOU! ^_^ I am so glad! And I will try to update as fast as I can!
Fish : lol i love how he has a pet rock and is mental...lol
Love,
Fish
*Hurry write more!*
ME!: ^_^ well as much of a loner as he is he MUST have SOME thing to talk to....... :-p I am glad you like Inuyasha's problems!
LadyKoneko: wonderful story i luv it
ME!: THANK YOU SO MUCH!
Koinekid: I accept that many Fanfiction.net writers are not the best spellers. However, the summary is that which convinces the reader to take a first glance at your story. If nowhere else in the story, the spelling in the spelling must be top notch. "Languidge" is not a word. Language, however, is.
Keep writing, however.
And one more suggestion--make sure your dialogue evidences proper characterization established by the series. For example, "butt ugly fucking bitch" is not a phrase Inu Yasha would likely use. "Butt ugly" is more of a twentieth century English phrase. A Japanese character from the fifteenth century, even one who makes semi-frequent trips to the twentieth/twenty- first, would not likely use the phrase.
Thanks.
ME!: O_O! AHHH!!! GOOD POINTS!! Ok! I am going to change that and re do the chapter to change the "butt ugly" ::nodds:: I did not think of that! also I will change it to "Language" too v_v;;; I did not realize I had not checked the spelling on that! thank you for pointing that out!
Smiley: you don't suck!! i thought it was a really good beggining! and im sure it will be a really good story when you get some more chapters up and going, so keep it up=D
ME!: THANX! I will try to make it as good as I can!
END REVIEWS!!