A/N: Anonymous Card Captor pointed out in an e-mail to me that it seemed
unnatural for Wendy to just go off with Peter like that; the review does
bring up some good points. However, what ACC may not have noticed is that
in that chapter, I at no time get into what the characters are actually
thinking; I'm planning to get into that in a later chapter.
At any rate, this probably won't be the last version of these chapters; if my previous behavior holds true, before I get to chapter 6 (assuming I get that far -_-;) I will probably turn around and do a massive rewrite (because by then I'll know exactly what I want to do, and how I want to do it; which I don't really, at this point). Then, around the time I get to chapter 13, I'll hit massive writer's block and after a year of agonizing, I'll realize I have do another one; please note, I've never gotten through that second rewrite (I have a Sailor Moon fic that's still waiting for it).
This chapter, as you may notice, does get into the characters' heads. Since I haven't published any of my other multi-chapter fics, no one would be familiar with my tendency to introduce the story from an entirely third- person perspective (and sometimes I stay in that perspective for the whole story), before moving into a third-person perspective where I describe the thoughts and emotions of only one or maybe two characters at a time. I rarely ever do third-person omnipotent and only occasionally do I do POV.
Chapter 2
Jealousies
Tinkerbell was not happy.
She hadn't been happy since Peter had brought that silly ass-girl, Wendy to Neverland so long ago. She'd thought things would go back to normal once Wendy left, but there was still that new alliance with Tiger Lilly and the Indians, then Peter had brought Kodomo [1], the first Lost Girl, to Neverland, and now Peter was going to fetch Wendy again. Why hadn't Peter listened to her when she said that they were better of only bringing boys to Neverland?
She didn't want to share Peter with those females! Tinkerbell glared from the branch she sat on at Kodomo and Tiger Lilly, who were trying to find the Lost Boys and other Indians in an impromptu game of hide-n-seek that had evolved from a food-gathering expedition; but then the little fairy smirked at the girls spitefully, they didn't really know Peter at all, after all. Only Tinkerbell really knew and truly loved Peter. They knew nothing of Peter's past. She watched as Peter descended holding tightly to Wendy, as the Lost Boys and Indians rushed out of their hiding places to greet him, and smiled wider; for Wendy could no longer fly, and was therefore no different than Kodomo or the Indian females; nothing special, really. The gift of flight still belonged exclusively to Peter and Tinkerbell.
"And just who is that?" Kodomo growled, to herself, putting her hands on her hips.
"Peter Pan bring'um Wendy-lady back." Tiger Lilly commented, narrowing her eyes.
"Wendy-lady?" Kodomo asked.
"She the one told'um Peter Pan stories," Tiger Lilly said, crossing her arms Indian-style (one on top of the other). "Tiger Lilly not like'um Wendy."
"Atashi mo [2]." The eleven-year-old (by appearance) Japanese girl agreed.
Even though Tiger Lilly and Kodomo were essentially rivals for Peter's affection, they got along surprisingly well; probably because the Indian Princess didn't consider Kodomo much of a threat, being so much younger in appearance than Tiger Lilly and Peter, and Kodomo was the only girl in the group, so she instinctively looked to Tiger Lilly to talk about "girl-stuff."
A/N: I so didn't mean to write something this short (again)! But I wrote the first and second chapters while I was between muses; I let this one sit for a while in the hopes that it would grow, but it hasn't. This will have to do for now. But now that I have a new muse (Cyra), the story will hopefully take off.
Of course the new girl is Japanese, I'm such an Anime fan that I couldn't resist having the option to stick the occasional Japanese sentence in the story.
[1] "Kodomo" is the Japanese word for "child". Incidentally, if anyone has played Chrono Cross, this is what I named Kid when I played.
[2] "Atashi mo" means "me too" or, in this instance, "me neither".
At any rate, this probably won't be the last version of these chapters; if my previous behavior holds true, before I get to chapter 6 (assuming I get that far -_-;) I will probably turn around and do a massive rewrite (because by then I'll know exactly what I want to do, and how I want to do it; which I don't really, at this point). Then, around the time I get to chapter 13, I'll hit massive writer's block and after a year of agonizing, I'll realize I have do another one; please note, I've never gotten through that second rewrite (I have a Sailor Moon fic that's still waiting for it).
This chapter, as you may notice, does get into the characters' heads. Since I haven't published any of my other multi-chapter fics, no one would be familiar with my tendency to introduce the story from an entirely third- person perspective (and sometimes I stay in that perspective for the whole story), before moving into a third-person perspective where I describe the thoughts and emotions of only one or maybe two characters at a time. I rarely ever do third-person omnipotent and only occasionally do I do POV.
Chapter 2
Jealousies
Tinkerbell was not happy.
She hadn't been happy since Peter had brought that silly ass-girl, Wendy to Neverland so long ago. She'd thought things would go back to normal once Wendy left, but there was still that new alliance with Tiger Lilly and the Indians, then Peter had brought Kodomo [1], the first Lost Girl, to Neverland, and now Peter was going to fetch Wendy again. Why hadn't Peter listened to her when she said that they were better of only bringing boys to Neverland?
She didn't want to share Peter with those females! Tinkerbell glared from the branch she sat on at Kodomo and Tiger Lilly, who were trying to find the Lost Boys and other Indians in an impromptu game of hide-n-seek that had evolved from a food-gathering expedition; but then the little fairy smirked at the girls spitefully, they didn't really know Peter at all, after all. Only Tinkerbell really knew and truly loved Peter. They knew nothing of Peter's past. She watched as Peter descended holding tightly to Wendy, as the Lost Boys and Indians rushed out of their hiding places to greet him, and smiled wider; for Wendy could no longer fly, and was therefore no different than Kodomo or the Indian females; nothing special, really. The gift of flight still belonged exclusively to Peter and Tinkerbell.
"And just who is that?" Kodomo growled, to herself, putting her hands on her hips.
"Peter Pan bring'um Wendy-lady back." Tiger Lilly commented, narrowing her eyes.
"Wendy-lady?" Kodomo asked.
"She the one told'um Peter Pan stories," Tiger Lilly said, crossing her arms Indian-style (one on top of the other). "Tiger Lilly not like'um Wendy."
"Atashi mo [2]." The eleven-year-old (by appearance) Japanese girl agreed.
Even though Tiger Lilly and Kodomo were essentially rivals for Peter's affection, they got along surprisingly well; probably because the Indian Princess didn't consider Kodomo much of a threat, being so much younger in appearance than Tiger Lilly and Peter, and Kodomo was the only girl in the group, so she instinctively looked to Tiger Lilly to talk about "girl-stuff."
A/N: I so didn't mean to write something this short (again)! But I wrote the first and second chapters while I was between muses; I let this one sit for a while in the hopes that it would grow, but it hasn't. This will have to do for now. But now that I have a new muse (Cyra), the story will hopefully take off.
Of course the new girl is Japanese, I'm such an Anime fan that I couldn't resist having the option to stick the occasional Japanese sentence in the story.
[1] "Kodomo" is the Japanese word for "child". Incidentally, if anyone has played Chrono Cross, this is what I named Kid when I played.
[2] "Atashi mo" means "me too" or, in this instance, "me neither".