A/N: I would just like to take a moment to respond to my reviewers:
Bloody Dead Rose: I appreciate your comments, really I do. But I do not take kindly to have my work referred to as a "piece of slop". Or as "completely sickening". My writing has flaws, sure, I mean, are you the perfect writer? And please, give Elanor a chance, it's only chapter three after all – she's hardly had any time to give away any character flaws. I never said she was beautiful. Just pretty. There is a difference. An extremely BIG one. But I do see what you mean. Just you could have put it in a slightly nicer way, that's all. Oh, and the thing about her being stronger than a regular fairy – I'm going by the idea that humans do, to an extent, have their own form of "magic". You will understand, if you care to read on.
Cecile li(): Thanks, I will try and make her a bit more "teenish" – in fact I'm going to have a lot of fun doing just that!
Jane-doe49: Ok. I will try and address your problems one by one: a) Root OOC – there are a lot of hints in the books that Root was once, in fact, very much like Holly – impulsive, quirky. Though I see what you mean. I will try to explain that a bit more. Though you may have noticed that I've done just that in Chapter Three, to some extent. B) Artemis OOC – hey, give it a chance. I've hardly started yet. And what do you mean, "not the type to fall in love"? He's a teenager, for goodness sake. Puberty is wreaking havoc in his system. I know I'm not very good at sticking to the character, but you never know, we haven't even seen three paragraphs of Artemis yet. He's gonna be the same arrogant, annoying little brat we all know and love, as he was after the mind-wipe. But his involvement with the fairies is going to have affected him in ways he could never have imagined. C) Potential Mary-Sue - Ok, look up to my response to Bloody Dead Rose's review. I am doing my best not to make Elanor a Mary-Sue. As I said, she has hardly had enough time to show any character flaws. She's not amazingly beautiful – just pretty. Not an elegant rose, but a cute little daisy (ok, rubbish metaphor, I know). D) Holly OOC – Pixies, as Foaly mused at the end of the Eternity Code, are decidedly temperamental creatures. And Holly has just found out that her Commander has broken virtually every rule in the book. Therefore I think she has good reason to shout. And Root deserved it. E) I noticed that your review is to chapter One. Did you even glance at the other chapters before making these comments? You claim in your bio that you are a "constructive flamer". And yes, you have put all your comments in a polite manner, for which I thank you. But if you hadn't read the other available chapters, then how were you supposed to know fully my reasons behind Root's OOCness and Elanor's Mary-Sueness? I apologise profusely if you have read the other chapters. Thankyou for your help, and if I have "flamed you back" in any way, shape or form then I apologise.
Phew! Now I've got all that out of the way, we can continue with the story!
Disclaimer: I own Elanor. And I don't care if she is a Mary-Sue. She's still mine. And I like her, even if no one else does. Everything else belongs to Mr Eoin Colfer. Enough said.
Chapter Four
Artemis scowled dangerously as Elanor laid her plate down next to him at the dinner table. He glanced at her – a shadow of a smile was playing at her lips.
"What's so funny?" He asked sharply, his voice full of biting annoyance. Elanor grinned.
"Oh, nothing." Artemis scowled and began shovelling food into his mouth.
"In a rush?" Elanor asked dryly, and Artemis gave her a glare.
"Yes." He said sharply. "Why aren't you sitting over there with all your girlie friends?" Elanor raised an eyebrow, taking a moment to idly flick a speck of dust off her painted nails.
"I dunno." She shrugged. "I guess I thought you seemed more interesting." She flashed him a mischievous grin which he did not return.
"Well, you can go annoy someone else then." He glared at her. "Go on then." Elanor looked furious, and for a moment, her famous Root temper flared up.
"Fine then." She snapped, grabbing her tray as she stood up. "Fine." And she stormed off, leaving a cynically amused Artemis behind.
*
Elanor scowled as she entered the blissfully quiet darkness of her dormitory. She ran a hand through her stubbornly thick hair and swore under her breath. She glanced in the mirror and breathed a sigh of relief, Her bandanna was still safely in place, hiding her ever so slightly pointed ears. She had told the teacher that she had a scar beneath the bandanna which she was frightfully shy of showing anyone. Well, it was half true. She did have a scar there, received during the same boating accident which had claimed her mother's life, but she wasn't particularly vain about it. She knew she wasn't a stunner as far as the looks department went, and never would be. She would leave the idle hair flicking to the girls who could do so without looking stupid. She sighed, and glanced at her timetable for the afternoon. French and Science. Elanor groaned. Her two least favourite subjects – even though she had inherited the gift of tongues from her father, it still made her head spin. And Science was just as incomprehensible – she'd never understood half that stuff about circuits and elements, anyway.
Elanor took a moment to glance at her watch. There was still half an hour left of lunchtime – more than enough time to take a quick sojourn with a little something borrowed from Foaly's labs...
*
Julius Root scowled furiously as he stared at the images coming from his daughter's iris-cam.
"Stupid, stupid girl." He muttered. "Flying, in broad daylight. Stupid girl." Beside him, Foaly smirked.
"Takes after you then, doesn't she?" He ducked as a small, booted foot was swung in his direction. Foaly grinned.
"You'd better be careful, Julius. I'm pretty much indispensable, you know." Root shot him a venomous look. Root was all the more annoyed because Foaly was right. The centaur had practically created their underground city– and if anything happened to Foaly, then Haven went under as well.
"And she was actually talking to Artemis Fowl! After all I've told her about that boy!" Foaly frowned theatrically.
"Wasn't the whole point of her going to this school so that she could make sure that the mind-wipe had actually worked?" Root nodded, confused.
"Yes. And?" Foaly sighed. Root may have been Recon's best ever officer, but he wasn't exactly the most intelligent fairy to have graced the uniform. All brawn, no brain.
"Then surely she's going to have to talk to him if she wants to find that out?" Foaly said I an exasperated tone. Realisation dawned across Root's face.
"Oh yes..." Foaly rolled his eyes.
"Goodness, you're a bit of an Einstein, aren't you?" He guffawed. Unfortunately, this time Foaly forgot to duck.
*
A/N: Ok, I know it's a weak ending. I know it's short. Please tell me what you think – but nicely. Nasty flames will be used to cook my Sunday roast. Constructive ones will be considered carefully and acted upon.
Bloody Dead Rose: I appreciate your comments, really I do. But I do not take kindly to have my work referred to as a "piece of slop". Or as "completely sickening". My writing has flaws, sure, I mean, are you the perfect writer? And please, give Elanor a chance, it's only chapter three after all – she's hardly had any time to give away any character flaws. I never said she was beautiful. Just pretty. There is a difference. An extremely BIG one. But I do see what you mean. Just you could have put it in a slightly nicer way, that's all. Oh, and the thing about her being stronger than a regular fairy – I'm going by the idea that humans do, to an extent, have their own form of "magic". You will understand, if you care to read on.
Cecile li(): Thanks, I will try and make her a bit more "teenish" – in fact I'm going to have a lot of fun doing just that!
Jane-doe49: Ok. I will try and address your problems one by one: a) Root OOC – there are a lot of hints in the books that Root was once, in fact, very much like Holly – impulsive, quirky. Though I see what you mean. I will try to explain that a bit more. Though you may have noticed that I've done just that in Chapter Three, to some extent. B) Artemis OOC – hey, give it a chance. I've hardly started yet. And what do you mean, "not the type to fall in love"? He's a teenager, for goodness sake. Puberty is wreaking havoc in his system. I know I'm not very good at sticking to the character, but you never know, we haven't even seen three paragraphs of Artemis yet. He's gonna be the same arrogant, annoying little brat we all know and love, as he was after the mind-wipe. But his involvement with the fairies is going to have affected him in ways he could never have imagined. C) Potential Mary-Sue - Ok, look up to my response to Bloody Dead Rose's review. I am doing my best not to make Elanor a Mary-Sue. As I said, she has hardly had enough time to show any character flaws. She's not amazingly beautiful – just pretty. Not an elegant rose, but a cute little daisy (ok, rubbish metaphor, I know). D) Holly OOC – Pixies, as Foaly mused at the end of the Eternity Code, are decidedly temperamental creatures. And Holly has just found out that her Commander has broken virtually every rule in the book. Therefore I think she has good reason to shout. And Root deserved it. E) I noticed that your review is to chapter One. Did you even glance at the other chapters before making these comments? You claim in your bio that you are a "constructive flamer". And yes, you have put all your comments in a polite manner, for which I thank you. But if you hadn't read the other available chapters, then how were you supposed to know fully my reasons behind Root's OOCness and Elanor's Mary-Sueness? I apologise profusely if you have read the other chapters. Thankyou for your help, and if I have "flamed you back" in any way, shape or form then I apologise.
Phew! Now I've got all that out of the way, we can continue with the story!
Disclaimer: I own Elanor. And I don't care if she is a Mary-Sue. She's still mine. And I like her, even if no one else does. Everything else belongs to Mr Eoin Colfer. Enough said.
Chapter Four
Artemis scowled dangerously as Elanor laid her plate down next to him at the dinner table. He glanced at her – a shadow of a smile was playing at her lips.
"What's so funny?" He asked sharply, his voice full of biting annoyance. Elanor grinned.
"Oh, nothing." Artemis scowled and began shovelling food into his mouth.
"In a rush?" Elanor asked dryly, and Artemis gave her a glare.
"Yes." He said sharply. "Why aren't you sitting over there with all your girlie friends?" Elanor raised an eyebrow, taking a moment to idly flick a speck of dust off her painted nails.
"I dunno." She shrugged. "I guess I thought you seemed more interesting." She flashed him a mischievous grin which he did not return.
"Well, you can go annoy someone else then." He glared at her. "Go on then." Elanor looked furious, and for a moment, her famous Root temper flared up.
"Fine then." She snapped, grabbing her tray as she stood up. "Fine." And she stormed off, leaving a cynically amused Artemis behind.
*
Elanor scowled as she entered the blissfully quiet darkness of her dormitory. She ran a hand through her stubbornly thick hair and swore under her breath. She glanced in the mirror and breathed a sigh of relief, Her bandanna was still safely in place, hiding her ever so slightly pointed ears. She had told the teacher that she had a scar beneath the bandanna which she was frightfully shy of showing anyone. Well, it was half true. She did have a scar there, received during the same boating accident which had claimed her mother's life, but she wasn't particularly vain about it. She knew she wasn't a stunner as far as the looks department went, and never would be. She would leave the idle hair flicking to the girls who could do so without looking stupid. She sighed, and glanced at her timetable for the afternoon. French and Science. Elanor groaned. Her two least favourite subjects – even though she had inherited the gift of tongues from her father, it still made her head spin. And Science was just as incomprehensible – she'd never understood half that stuff about circuits and elements, anyway.
Elanor took a moment to glance at her watch. There was still half an hour left of lunchtime – more than enough time to take a quick sojourn with a little something borrowed from Foaly's labs...
*
Julius Root scowled furiously as he stared at the images coming from his daughter's iris-cam.
"Stupid, stupid girl." He muttered. "Flying, in broad daylight. Stupid girl." Beside him, Foaly smirked.
"Takes after you then, doesn't she?" He ducked as a small, booted foot was swung in his direction. Foaly grinned.
"You'd better be careful, Julius. I'm pretty much indispensable, you know." Root shot him a venomous look. Root was all the more annoyed because Foaly was right. The centaur had practically created their underground city– and if anything happened to Foaly, then Haven went under as well.
"And she was actually talking to Artemis Fowl! After all I've told her about that boy!" Foaly frowned theatrically.
"Wasn't the whole point of her going to this school so that she could make sure that the mind-wipe had actually worked?" Root nodded, confused.
"Yes. And?" Foaly sighed. Root may have been Recon's best ever officer, but he wasn't exactly the most intelligent fairy to have graced the uniform. All brawn, no brain.
"Then surely she's going to have to talk to him if she wants to find that out?" Foaly said I an exasperated tone. Realisation dawned across Root's face.
"Oh yes..." Foaly rolled his eyes.
"Goodness, you're a bit of an Einstein, aren't you?" He guffawed. Unfortunately, this time Foaly forgot to duck.
*
A/N: Ok, I know it's a weak ending. I know it's short. Please tell me what you think – but nicely. Nasty flames will be used to cook my Sunday roast. Constructive ones will be considered carefully and acted upon.