REWRITE = The Battle Begins
By: Dark Akashi
Shinji wrapped his hands around Asuka's neck, his grip tightening around it. Asuka placed her hand upon Shinji's cheek, tears rolling down her face. Shinji's eyes widened as he looked down at her face, he slowly moved his hands, and his head fell upon her chest as he cried lightly. Asuka slowly put her arms around his body and hugged him; tears falling down her face as she listened to him cry.
"I'm sorry Asuka" he said between sobs.
Shinji stood and helped Asuka up as well, he held her up by putting his arm around her waist and drapping her arm around his neck. Both Shinji and Asuka stared at the now ruined city of Tokyo 3.
"It's gone, everything... everyone" Asuka said her voice was filled with sadness and grief.
"Shinji were all alone" Shinji looked at Asuka and then back at the ruined city.
"I know," Shinji said walking with her toward the city.
Asuka looked around frantically, she saw humans, animals, and pieces of an angel or two. Dead. "All these people" Asuka said, "they died not knowing what happened, or why." Shinji spotted a bench and wabbled over toward it; he sat Asuka down on it and then he sat down on it beside her.
"Shinji," Asuka said with a trembling voice; Shinji turned his head toward Asuka "what is it Asuka," "are you scared?" Asuka sked, while her bottom lipped trembled slowly. Shinji looked to Asuka, and nodded slowly. "Yes I am scared." The ruines of the NERV headquarter where litered with body parts, from the soilders inside.
"This wasn't done by angels" Shinji said walking with Asuka. Thoughts of Misato ran through his head, her last actions ran through his head like a video. Shinji looked over at Asuka and grabbed her and pulled her into a hug, encircling his arms around her body. Shinji could feel Asuka's heart beating against his, hers was normal and beating regular paces, his was beating rapidly from the terror inside of his body.
He stood there still holding her, he ran his fingers through her red hair then he pulled away and looked at her. "Lets go look fr some fod and water" Asuka nodded to Shinji's demand. Shinji stood then he helped Asuka up.
They walked to the closest room and walked in. Shinji looked around the room, and then he spotted a chair that was turned upside down, several of the chairs where like that, he set Asuka against a wall, then he walked over picked up one the chair, and walked over to Asuka and set the chair down for her to sit in. "What happened to us, why did we survive" Shinji asked Asuka. "I'm not sure Shinji, maybe we were spared.. by who I don't know." Shinji looked around the room,then there was a loud crash and then darkness covered the room.
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Well here is the rewriting of The Battle Begins, its not that different I just added some new things and took out some stuff. Well R&R.
By: Dark Akashi
Shinji wrapped his hands around Asuka's neck, his grip tightening around it. Asuka placed her hand upon Shinji's cheek, tears rolling down her face. Shinji's eyes widened as he looked down at her face, he slowly moved his hands, and his head fell upon her chest as he cried lightly. Asuka slowly put her arms around his body and hugged him; tears falling down her face as she listened to him cry.
"I'm sorry Asuka" he said between sobs.
Shinji stood and helped Asuka up as well, he held her up by putting his arm around her waist and drapping her arm around his neck. Both Shinji and Asuka stared at the now ruined city of Tokyo 3.
"It's gone, everything... everyone" Asuka said her voice was filled with sadness and grief.
"Shinji were all alone" Shinji looked at Asuka and then back at the ruined city.
"I know," Shinji said walking with her toward the city.
Asuka looked around frantically, she saw humans, animals, and pieces of an angel or two. Dead. "All these people" Asuka said, "they died not knowing what happened, or why." Shinji spotted a bench and wabbled over toward it; he sat Asuka down on it and then he sat down on it beside her.
"Shinji," Asuka said with a trembling voice; Shinji turned his head toward Asuka "what is it Asuka," "are you scared?" Asuka sked, while her bottom lipped trembled slowly. Shinji looked to Asuka, and nodded slowly. "Yes I am scared." The ruines of the NERV headquarter where litered with body parts, from the soilders inside.
"This wasn't done by angels" Shinji said walking with Asuka. Thoughts of Misato ran through his head, her last actions ran through his head like a video. Shinji looked over at Asuka and grabbed her and pulled her into a hug, encircling his arms around her body. Shinji could feel Asuka's heart beating against his, hers was normal and beating regular paces, his was beating rapidly from the terror inside of his body.
He stood there still holding her, he ran his fingers through her red hair then he pulled away and looked at her. "Lets go look fr some fod and water" Asuka nodded to Shinji's demand. Shinji stood then he helped Asuka up.
They walked to the closest room and walked in. Shinji looked around the room, and then he spotted a chair that was turned upside down, several of the chairs where like that, he set Asuka against a wall, then he walked over picked up one the chair, and walked over to Asuka and set the chair down for her to sit in. "What happened to us, why did we survive" Shinji asked Asuka. "I'm not sure Shinji, maybe we were spared.. by who I don't know." Shinji looked around the room,then there was a loud crash and then darkness covered the room.
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Well here is the rewriting of The Battle Begins, its not that different I just added some new things and took out some stuff. Well R&R.
