Me: Let's do another review response thing. This comes from Isaac says
Booga. "Aw man, not another one of these UNORIGINAL, UNREADABLE, stories.
But aside from that, you're a good writer."
My first response: Thank you for flattering me by saying I'm a good writer.
Your critique wasn't complete. Can you explain how is it unoriginal and
unreadable? Give examples next time when you give a critique. I can answer
that question myself. The reason the story is unreadable is because my
Microsoft word is not working properly or fan fiction isn't using the right
format for my stories. The reason my story is unoriginal is because it
talks about the overly used Sol and Luna and the extra elemental stars.
Also this story talks about Alex taking revenge. Yes my story seems to be
unoriginal but if you read on you might find it to be special on it's own.
This review comes from Sora. "more love scenes please(not SEX, love)! Don't
Just let Isaac fight all the boss! let the others help!! may be U could
have them learn new psynergy from dungeons like in GS2. How many
djinn(sp)are there?? THIS STORY IS GREAT!"
My second response: This is a very good critique. I will apply your
suggestions to my story. I will try to add more love scenes but it is kinda
tough to do it right now. The reason I let Isaac to fight all bosses is
because he is uber-powerful. If he didn't fight in any of the boss fight
then what is the point for him to man's savior. Your new psynergy idea is a
brilliant way to rectify this problem. Thank you for this review.
" Ha! Ha! Ha! I thought I took care of you guys a long time ago. How
did you come back from my trap?" Alex said with curiosity. Karst responded,
" We've battled you all the way to here and you expect a little trap
door to take care of us? You're as low as you can get." Alex laughed,
" Insults aren't getting you anywhere. If you think you can stop me,
you are so wrong."
He raised his scimitar poised to strike Isaac's vulnerable white neck. Alex
commenced his attack but Agatio lunged forward and took down Alex before it
was too late. The blow was so strong that Alex lost control of his
scimitars.
Agatio and Alex immediately were locked in a fistfight. Agatio had the
advantage because he was on top of Alex. Alex wasn't much of a physical
attacker decided to use psynergy. He laid his hand on Agatio's chest and
yelled,
" Take this you son of a bitch." Blue shards of ice appeared from his hands
and sheered through Agatio's armor and pierced into his raw skin. The power
behind the psynergy blew Agatio across the lighthouse floor.
During this time, Karst reached the injured adepts. She used cool aura to
heal Jenna, Felix, Sheba, Ivan, Piers, Mia, and Garet. They stood up not
knowing who revived them. Ivan immediately recognized Karst. He had a close
glimpse of her when she defeated him in the Jupiter lighthouse. She smiled
back (oh! What does this mean?).
Alex reclaimed his scimitars and was ready to slash Isaac again but Isaac
regained consciousness and tripped Alex. He immediately ran towards to
safety of his friends. Alex was getting pissed because he lost his hostage
and he didn't killed Isaac. Alex eyes turned red in anger. His blue hair
flared with energy. He raised his hands and a blue orb of swirling water
appeared. It grew larger and larger. He said,
" Do you see now? None of you can stop me? After lighting all lighthouses,
I will be invincible." His hands were now channeling more psynergy into the
orb. The orb was now gigantic even beating the size of the black orb
sitting on top of the Uranus lighthouse.
Garet did not like the situation. He shot fireballs at Alex to distract
him. Alex grunted due to the weakness but he continued to conjure the huge
orb. The others tried to follow Garet's example and started using their
strongest psynergys against Alex. Alex didn't phase and was ready to throw
the fireball when suddenly Agatio stabbed him in the back. Alex squealed.
His psynergy now directly flowed to his wound. The sword was pushed away
from the wound and the wound healed. Alex lost concentration and was forced
to retract his orb of destruction to replenish lost psynergy. Before he had
time to react, Garet, Jenna, Agatio and Karst let loose their strongest
fire psynergy. Flames surrounded Alex and engulfed him. Alex psynergy was
flowing through his body to heal the scar tissue from the burns. Alex knew
he wasn't going to win. He panted and he slowly picked up his scimitars.
Isaac rushed towards him with his Sol blade but Alex dodged. Alex used his
last ounce of psynergy to teleport away.
The adepts rejoiced for defeating Alex, rescuing Sheba, and forcing him to
retreat. Garet interrupted the celebration by saying,
" Why should we be celebrating? Alex has lit 2 lighthouses and he still has
the elemental stars. We must hurry to the next lighthouse. Oh yeah, by the
way I'm really hungry so we should rush to the next town." Everybody
laughed at his last sentence. They decided to "bond" with each other,
somewhere safe. Mia began using the wish spells to heal the whole party.
Karst helped Mia with her aura spells. Felix asked Agatio,
"Why have you decided to help us? This is our mission to complete?" Agatio
was taken aback by the comment and grunted,
" Why shouldn't we? Alex threatens the whole world with his new power. We
want to stop him just as badly as you guys do." Karst butted in and said,
" We always had a grudge on Alex since the day he joined us. We knew he was
untrustworthy but we couldn't crush his ambitions. He manipulated us like
puppets to get his aims. Oh how I despise that man." Agatio continued,
" Since you left Prox, me and Karst were appointed the commanders of the
Prox army. The elders respected us even if we did fail to light the mars
lighthouse. Since then, Prox received reports that there was a strange
surge of water psynergy near the location of Lemuria. To us this meant only
one thing. Lemuria was training adepts to do something. We didn't know what
that "something" was until we heard reports about water adepts attacking
Alfarha, Champa and Izumo. They conquered those cities and continued their
war campaign. We Proxians took the Lemurians' actions as hostile and
mobilized our army. The last few months we've been sending scouts to
Lemuria's location to find a way in. After countless tries, we've finally
found a way. Using fire psynergy, we could disrupt the currents and travel
safely to Lemuria. Luckily Tobli allied with us and promised to deal with
the Lemurian army. This left us open to send a raiding party to Lemuria
with us leading it." Agatio took a breather and Karst continued the story,
" Once we reached Lemuria, we sacked the guards and forced them to us where
the leader was. They told us Conservato was in Ancient Lemuria. That was
where we met. Once we saw Alex. Agatio's rage and mine began to build up.
We wanted to kill Alex for his crimes against humanity. We took that
opportunity by going to Luna Gaia. We didn't know our paths would meet."
Karst took a breather and Mia asked,
" What happened after you reached Luna Gaia?" Agatio explained,
" We could tell that Alex wasn't far behind. We followed his trail and
caught up with him at the bluish lighthouse I'm assuming was the Neptune
lighthouse. We ambushed him every step of the way. He was powerful I tell
you. He warded us off like we were a bunch of flies. We fell behind and
Alex managed to beat us to the beacon. He lit it before we could do
anything and teleported away. We continued to follow him. Whatever he told
about killing us was total bullshit. We slowed him down the best we could."
Isaac complimented,
" Thank you for your help. We could have never asked more from a pair of
the best of the Northern fire clan. Would you choose to join us? After all
we do have the same goal." Karst quickly replied,
" Thank you for your flattery but we Proxians like to do it our own way.
Agatio and me work better as a couple. If you don't mind, we will decline
your offer. We're too stubborn so don't try to convince us." Felix said,
" We understand perfectly of your proposition. May we meet again." Agatio
replied,
" It shall be done." Agatio and Karst walked towards the elevator of the
lighthouse. They stepped on it and just like that they disappeared from the
adepts' sight.
Suddenly the lighthouse eerie was shaking. The lighthouse began to crumble.
The shaking of the lighthouse caused Uranus to awake from the deep slumber.
He saw his lighthouse lit and went into total rage. He appeared in front of
the adepts and yelled,
" Why have you disobeyed your orders, Isaac? I gave you a direct command to
stop the lighthouse from being lit. If you failed your task, I must kill
you." Uranus took out his sickle. The sickle was brimming with energy.
Before he could strike, Mia appeared in front of Isaac and replied,
" You can't kill my loved one. He has done his best to fight Alex, our true
enemy." Piers chimed in,
" You're a very powerful god, Uranus. Why don't you help us to spoil Alex's
plans in the next lighthouse?" Uranus retracted his sickle and pondered the
situation. He said,
" Interesting proposition, Piers. There is no point in wasting my energy
killing a person when I could help save the world from one man's ultimate
quest for power." The lighthouse started to lose its foundation. Pieces of
the lighthouse were falling off. The lighthouse sunk towards the ground.
Both Isaac and Felix's psynergys were tapped during the battle and were
unable to use retreat. Uranus knew the adepts would die so he used his huge
cloak to engulf the adepts and teleported to an unknown place.
The adepts recovered from teleportation and began to survey the place. They
were in a cave with water dripping from the stalagmites. Fumes were blown
out of a hole inside the ground and the fumes smelled like rotten eggs with
a hint of acid. This wasn't a very peaceful place. Uranus noticing the
distraught in the adepts faces said,
" I would've teleported you guys to a safer places such as an Inn but I
decided to send you here to start training." Felix asked,
" What is this "training" you speak of, Master Uranus. (the only person
with decent respect for a god)." Uranus replied,
" Good question, Felix. I've used my psynergy to survey Alex's power. He
has the power to heal any part of his body quickly and unconsciously. Does
he not?" Garet replied rudely,
" Yeah! Whenever we try to stab him, he always heals his wound and strikes
back. That fucking bastard who uses his power to gain an unfair advantage
on the battlefield."
"Hmm. I don't respect your rudeness, Garet but you are correct. It isn't
fair for him to abuse that power. I know how to pass on this power but only
if you're a carrier of the Sol Sun." Isaac stuttered and shyly said,
" I. have some. of the power of Sol Sun." Uranus looked closely at Isaac
and replied,
" I have noticed your power when we fought. Your powers were astronomical
and your confidence was so high. Now look at you. You got an ass whooping
from your nemesis and you're now not confident of your own abilities. I
can't teach you unless you believe in yourself. (clichéd so what?)" Felix
came to Isaac and gave a friendly punch to Isaac's shoulders and said,
" We all believe in you, Isaac. Don't we?" Ivan spoke,
" You've been always the leader of the group." Felix smacked Ivan because
he liked to be called the leader of the group. Jenna then said,
" You've always put your life first in front of others." Garet chimed,
" Nothing can compare to your power, not even Alex." Mia embraced Isaac and
said lovingly,
" You've sacrificed so much. Why give up?" Isaac gave a soft kiss to Mia's
cheek. Piers then said,
" You're wise person, Isaac. To me you are like a god." Uranus gave a huge
cough with the words.
" He's not a god." Sheba then said,
" You've managed to rescue me. You're a true hero." Karst added,
" On the behalf of both of us and all of Prox, you've made a wise decision
to save Wayward once. The wise one bestowed this power to you, Isaac. Use
it well to save Wayward once again." Suddenly a little black figure
appeared by Uranus's side and said,
" You guys woke me up from my beauty sleep. I was listening to your
pathetic and boring conversation and I decided to help Uranus out for the
sake of the human race. Not that I really care." Uranus said,
" Ah. The Luna djinn, Shadow. I was hoping you would come. I was merely
stalling them so you would come and teach Isaac the special technique of
healing. I really don't know that power." Shadow replied,
" Spoken like a true liar. Oh well, Isaac step forward. By the way, Uranus
may you send the other adepts away from our training?" Uranus obeyed and
hushed the other adepts into another room. Shadow began the speech,
" Acquiring me and learning the ancient technique of healing is not going
to be an easy task. Now show me the normal way you heal, savior." Isaac
began to cast Cure. His hands were targeted to his most sore body part. He
felt energy back in that region. Shadow yelled,
" Do it faster! Don't stop and make haste." Isaac began heal over and over
again. It seemed like the Luna djinn was never satisfied. Isaac felt his
psynergy was losing its touch and he asked,
" How is this going to teach me the technique?" Shadow replied,
" Practice makes perfect. Eventually you can heal without using your hands
to direct the flow of psynergy. The psynergy should be able to flow to any
part of your body. One tip I can give you, free your mind. Your mind is the
hindrance to this technique." Isaac asked again,
" I have to use my mind. Psynergy is controlled by the mind and I must use
it to heal."
" Stubborn fool. Just do what I ask you to do." Isaac began to clear his
mind. Thoughts of the physical and emotional world began to leave his mind.
Shadow noticed the change and said softly,
" You're entering the subconscious state. Being the holder of the Sol sun,
you're able to heal without thinking. Do you feel this new power?" Isaac
opened his eyes and replied,
" Yes I feel new energy brimming around my body."
" Are you sure? Now I'm going to test you. Stand on top of the hole over
there. The hole spits out fumes. The fumes are acidic and will burn your
skin. If you mastered your new healing skill, you should be fine. Failure
to do so will obviously lead you to your downfall. Are you ready?" Isaac
nodded and walked on to the top of the hole. The fumes surrounded his body.
He felt his skin being torn off by the acid of the fumes. He felt so much
pain that he couldn't clear his mind. He thought he was going to die there
right now. He calmed himself down and sure enough psynergy reached to the
upper layer of the skin. The skin began to heal. The fumes continued to do
damage but Isaac's psynergy counteracted the pain from the acid. Shadow was
impressed and said,
" Ok now step out. I still have one more challenge for you. Remember the
sword breakers? I will summon 12 of them. It will be impossible to dodge
their relentless attacks. You will get cuts and bruises throughout the
entire battle. This training exercise will show you that you can focus on
the battle while healing subconsciously at the same time. Ready?" Twelve
Sword breakers appeared each carrying two swords. Isaac was only allowed to
use his Sol blade to battle. This was definitely a lop-sided battle.
The battle started. The sword breakers immediately surrounded him and
started gang-raping him. Isaac couldn't defend quickly enough. He got cuts
in all sides of his body. The pain screamed inside his head. His instincts
told him to surrender but Isaac knew better than to do that. He
concentrated on defeating one of them. To his surprise, his body healed all
wounds from all sides. He didn't even need to "clear" his mind. He kicked
one of them out of the way and slashed the other in the gut. He back
flipped out of the circle and slashed 2 of them behind the back. He jumped
and stabbed his sword inside the skull of another one and slashed 3 of them
in a long Japanese Samurai slash. The five surrounded him again and
started pounded him again. Isaac took the blows and looked for an opening.
He took the liberty to do a 360 slash around him and diced the last 5 in
brilliant fashion. Shadow commented,
" Nice job. I see Lunaro has taught you well. I wish to join your team."
Shadow jumped into Isaac's pack and sparked a conversation with Lunaro,
" Yo what's up?"
" Nothing I suppose. Didn't you notice that we seem to be the only djinn
that can talk?"
" Yeah so?"
"This means we're special."
" Cool but I really don't care." Isaac told them to shut up. He proceeded
in the next cave to check out his friends.
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(Important must read)
It seems this story is heading in a different way than I expected.
Originally I wanted Sheba to be prisoner for a long time. Also the
introduction of Agatio and Karst was unexpected when I first wrote this
story. After the reviews I believe my story should be longer. I might have
to add more side quest in between each major event. If you don't like the
direction this story is going to, please tell me in your reviews. Thank
you.
Booga. "Aw man, not another one of these UNORIGINAL, UNREADABLE, stories.
But aside from that, you're a good writer."
My first response: Thank you for flattering me by saying I'm a good writer.
Your critique wasn't complete. Can you explain how is it unoriginal and
unreadable? Give examples next time when you give a critique. I can answer
that question myself. The reason the story is unreadable is because my
Microsoft word is not working properly or fan fiction isn't using the right
format for my stories. The reason my story is unoriginal is because it
talks about the overly used Sol and Luna and the extra elemental stars.
Also this story talks about Alex taking revenge. Yes my story seems to be
unoriginal but if you read on you might find it to be special on it's own.
This review comes from Sora. "more love scenes please(not SEX, love)! Don't
Just let Isaac fight all the boss! let the others help!! may be U could
have them learn new psynergy from dungeons like in GS2. How many
djinn(sp)are there?? THIS STORY IS GREAT!"
My second response: This is a very good critique. I will apply your
suggestions to my story. I will try to add more love scenes but it is kinda
tough to do it right now. The reason I let Isaac to fight all bosses is
because he is uber-powerful. If he didn't fight in any of the boss fight
then what is the point for him to man's savior. Your new psynergy idea is a
brilliant way to rectify this problem. Thank you for this review.
" Ha! Ha! Ha! I thought I took care of you guys a long time ago. How
did you come back from my trap?" Alex said with curiosity. Karst responded,
" We've battled you all the way to here and you expect a little trap
door to take care of us? You're as low as you can get." Alex laughed,
" Insults aren't getting you anywhere. If you think you can stop me,
you are so wrong."
He raised his scimitar poised to strike Isaac's vulnerable white neck. Alex
commenced his attack but Agatio lunged forward and took down Alex before it
was too late. The blow was so strong that Alex lost control of his
scimitars.
Agatio and Alex immediately were locked in a fistfight. Agatio had the
advantage because he was on top of Alex. Alex wasn't much of a physical
attacker decided to use psynergy. He laid his hand on Agatio's chest and
yelled,
" Take this you son of a bitch." Blue shards of ice appeared from his hands
and sheered through Agatio's armor and pierced into his raw skin. The power
behind the psynergy blew Agatio across the lighthouse floor.
During this time, Karst reached the injured adepts. She used cool aura to
heal Jenna, Felix, Sheba, Ivan, Piers, Mia, and Garet. They stood up not
knowing who revived them. Ivan immediately recognized Karst. He had a close
glimpse of her when she defeated him in the Jupiter lighthouse. She smiled
back (oh! What does this mean?).
Alex reclaimed his scimitars and was ready to slash Isaac again but Isaac
regained consciousness and tripped Alex. He immediately ran towards to
safety of his friends. Alex was getting pissed because he lost his hostage
and he didn't killed Isaac. Alex eyes turned red in anger. His blue hair
flared with energy. He raised his hands and a blue orb of swirling water
appeared. It grew larger and larger. He said,
" Do you see now? None of you can stop me? After lighting all lighthouses,
I will be invincible." His hands were now channeling more psynergy into the
orb. The orb was now gigantic even beating the size of the black orb
sitting on top of the Uranus lighthouse.
Garet did not like the situation. He shot fireballs at Alex to distract
him. Alex grunted due to the weakness but he continued to conjure the huge
orb. The others tried to follow Garet's example and started using their
strongest psynergys against Alex. Alex didn't phase and was ready to throw
the fireball when suddenly Agatio stabbed him in the back. Alex squealed.
His psynergy now directly flowed to his wound. The sword was pushed away
from the wound and the wound healed. Alex lost concentration and was forced
to retract his orb of destruction to replenish lost psynergy. Before he had
time to react, Garet, Jenna, Agatio and Karst let loose their strongest
fire psynergy. Flames surrounded Alex and engulfed him. Alex psynergy was
flowing through his body to heal the scar tissue from the burns. Alex knew
he wasn't going to win. He panted and he slowly picked up his scimitars.
Isaac rushed towards him with his Sol blade but Alex dodged. Alex used his
last ounce of psynergy to teleport away.
The adepts rejoiced for defeating Alex, rescuing Sheba, and forcing him to
retreat. Garet interrupted the celebration by saying,
" Why should we be celebrating? Alex has lit 2 lighthouses and he still has
the elemental stars. We must hurry to the next lighthouse. Oh yeah, by the
way I'm really hungry so we should rush to the next town." Everybody
laughed at his last sentence. They decided to "bond" with each other,
somewhere safe. Mia began using the wish spells to heal the whole party.
Karst helped Mia with her aura spells. Felix asked Agatio,
"Why have you decided to help us? This is our mission to complete?" Agatio
was taken aback by the comment and grunted,
" Why shouldn't we? Alex threatens the whole world with his new power. We
want to stop him just as badly as you guys do." Karst butted in and said,
" We always had a grudge on Alex since the day he joined us. We knew he was
untrustworthy but we couldn't crush his ambitions. He manipulated us like
puppets to get his aims. Oh how I despise that man." Agatio continued,
" Since you left Prox, me and Karst were appointed the commanders of the
Prox army. The elders respected us even if we did fail to light the mars
lighthouse. Since then, Prox received reports that there was a strange
surge of water psynergy near the location of Lemuria. To us this meant only
one thing. Lemuria was training adepts to do something. We didn't know what
that "something" was until we heard reports about water adepts attacking
Alfarha, Champa and Izumo. They conquered those cities and continued their
war campaign. We Proxians took the Lemurians' actions as hostile and
mobilized our army. The last few months we've been sending scouts to
Lemuria's location to find a way in. After countless tries, we've finally
found a way. Using fire psynergy, we could disrupt the currents and travel
safely to Lemuria. Luckily Tobli allied with us and promised to deal with
the Lemurian army. This left us open to send a raiding party to Lemuria
with us leading it." Agatio took a breather and Karst continued the story,
" Once we reached Lemuria, we sacked the guards and forced them to us where
the leader was. They told us Conservato was in Ancient Lemuria. That was
where we met. Once we saw Alex. Agatio's rage and mine began to build up.
We wanted to kill Alex for his crimes against humanity. We took that
opportunity by going to Luna Gaia. We didn't know our paths would meet."
Karst took a breather and Mia asked,
" What happened after you reached Luna Gaia?" Agatio explained,
" We could tell that Alex wasn't far behind. We followed his trail and
caught up with him at the bluish lighthouse I'm assuming was the Neptune
lighthouse. We ambushed him every step of the way. He was powerful I tell
you. He warded us off like we were a bunch of flies. We fell behind and
Alex managed to beat us to the beacon. He lit it before we could do
anything and teleported away. We continued to follow him. Whatever he told
about killing us was total bullshit. We slowed him down the best we could."
Isaac complimented,
" Thank you for your help. We could have never asked more from a pair of
the best of the Northern fire clan. Would you choose to join us? After all
we do have the same goal." Karst quickly replied,
" Thank you for your flattery but we Proxians like to do it our own way.
Agatio and me work better as a couple. If you don't mind, we will decline
your offer. We're too stubborn so don't try to convince us." Felix said,
" We understand perfectly of your proposition. May we meet again." Agatio
replied,
" It shall be done." Agatio and Karst walked towards the elevator of the
lighthouse. They stepped on it and just like that they disappeared from the
adepts' sight.
Suddenly the lighthouse eerie was shaking. The lighthouse began to crumble.
The shaking of the lighthouse caused Uranus to awake from the deep slumber.
He saw his lighthouse lit and went into total rage. He appeared in front of
the adepts and yelled,
" Why have you disobeyed your orders, Isaac? I gave you a direct command to
stop the lighthouse from being lit. If you failed your task, I must kill
you." Uranus took out his sickle. The sickle was brimming with energy.
Before he could strike, Mia appeared in front of Isaac and replied,
" You can't kill my loved one. He has done his best to fight Alex, our true
enemy." Piers chimed in,
" You're a very powerful god, Uranus. Why don't you help us to spoil Alex's
plans in the next lighthouse?" Uranus retracted his sickle and pondered the
situation. He said,
" Interesting proposition, Piers. There is no point in wasting my energy
killing a person when I could help save the world from one man's ultimate
quest for power." The lighthouse started to lose its foundation. Pieces of
the lighthouse were falling off. The lighthouse sunk towards the ground.
Both Isaac and Felix's psynergys were tapped during the battle and were
unable to use retreat. Uranus knew the adepts would die so he used his huge
cloak to engulf the adepts and teleported to an unknown place.
The adepts recovered from teleportation and began to survey the place. They
were in a cave with water dripping from the stalagmites. Fumes were blown
out of a hole inside the ground and the fumes smelled like rotten eggs with
a hint of acid. This wasn't a very peaceful place. Uranus noticing the
distraught in the adepts faces said,
" I would've teleported you guys to a safer places such as an Inn but I
decided to send you here to start training." Felix asked,
" What is this "training" you speak of, Master Uranus. (the only person
with decent respect for a god)." Uranus replied,
" Good question, Felix. I've used my psynergy to survey Alex's power. He
has the power to heal any part of his body quickly and unconsciously. Does
he not?" Garet replied rudely,
" Yeah! Whenever we try to stab him, he always heals his wound and strikes
back. That fucking bastard who uses his power to gain an unfair advantage
on the battlefield."
"Hmm. I don't respect your rudeness, Garet but you are correct. It isn't
fair for him to abuse that power. I know how to pass on this power but only
if you're a carrier of the Sol Sun." Isaac stuttered and shyly said,
" I. have some. of the power of Sol Sun." Uranus looked closely at Isaac
and replied,
" I have noticed your power when we fought. Your powers were astronomical
and your confidence was so high. Now look at you. You got an ass whooping
from your nemesis and you're now not confident of your own abilities. I
can't teach you unless you believe in yourself. (clichéd so what?)" Felix
came to Isaac and gave a friendly punch to Isaac's shoulders and said,
" We all believe in you, Isaac. Don't we?" Ivan spoke,
" You've been always the leader of the group." Felix smacked Ivan because
he liked to be called the leader of the group. Jenna then said,
" You've always put your life first in front of others." Garet chimed,
" Nothing can compare to your power, not even Alex." Mia embraced Isaac and
said lovingly,
" You've sacrificed so much. Why give up?" Isaac gave a soft kiss to Mia's
cheek. Piers then said,
" You're wise person, Isaac. To me you are like a god." Uranus gave a huge
cough with the words.
" He's not a god." Sheba then said,
" You've managed to rescue me. You're a true hero." Karst added,
" On the behalf of both of us and all of Prox, you've made a wise decision
to save Wayward once. The wise one bestowed this power to you, Isaac. Use
it well to save Wayward once again." Suddenly a little black figure
appeared by Uranus's side and said,
" You guys woke me up from my beauty sleep. I was listening to your
pathetic and boring conversation and I decided to help Uranus out for the
sake of the human race. Not that I really care." Uranus said,
" Ah. The Luna djinn, Shadow. I was hoping you would come. I was merely
stalling them so you would come and teach Isaac the special technique of
healing. I really don't know that power." Shadow replied,
" Spoken like a true liar. Oh well, Isaac step forward. By the way, Uranus
may you send the other adepts away from our training?" Uranus obeyed and
hushed the other adepts into another room. Shadow began the speech,
" Acquiring me and learning the ancient technique of healing is not going
to be an easy task. Now show me the normal way you heal, savior." Isaac
began to cast Cure. His hands were targeted to his most sore body part. He
felt energy back in that region. Shadow yelled,
" Do it faster! Don't stop and make haste." Isaac began heal over and over
again. It seemed like the Luna djinn was never satisfied. Isaac felt his
psynergy was losing its touch and he asked,
" How is this going to teach me the technique?" Shadow replied,
" Practice makes perfect. Eventually you can heal without using your hands
to direct the flow of psynergy. The psynergy should be able to flow to any
part of your body. One tip I can give you, free your mind. Your mind is the
hindrance to this technique." Isaac asked again,
" I have to use my mind. Psynergy is controlled by the mind and I must use
it to heal."
" Stubborn fool. Just do what I ask you to do." Isaac began to clear his
mind. Thoughts of the physical and emotional world began to leave his mind.
Shadow noticed the change and said softly,
" You're entering the subconscious state. Being the holder of the Sol sun,
you're able to heal without thinking. Do you feel this new power?" Isaac
opened his eyes and replied,
" Yes I feel new energy brimming around my body."
" Are you sure? Now I'm going to test you. Stand on top of the hole over
there. The hole spits out fumes. The fumes are acidic and will burn your
skin. If you mastered your new healing skill, you should be fine. Failure
to do so will obviously lead you to your downfall. Are you ready?" Isaac
nodded and walked on to the top of the hole. The fumes surrounded his body.
He felt his skin being torn off by the acid of the fumes. He felt so much
pain that he couldn't clear his mind. He thought he was going to die there
right now. He calmed himself down and sure enough psynergy reached to the
upper layer of the skin. The skin began to heal. The fumes continued to do
damage but Isaac's psynergy counteracted the pain from the acid. Shadow was
impressed and said,
" Ok now step out. I still have one more challenge for you. Remember the
sword breakers? I will summon 12 of them. It will be impossible to dodge
their relentless attacks. You will get cuts and bruises throughout the
entire battle. This training exercise will show you that you can focus on
the battle while healing subconsciously at the same time. Ready?" Twelve
Sword breakers appeared each carrying two swords. Isaac was only allowed to
use his Sol blade to battle. This was definitely a lop-sided battle.
The battle started. The sword breakers immediately surrounded him and
started gang-raping him. Isaac couldn't defend quickly enough. He got cuts
in all sides of his body. The pain screamed inside his head. His instincts
told him to surrender but Isaac knew better than to do that. He
concentrated on defeating one of them. To his surprise, his body healed all
wounds from all sides. He didn't even need to "clear" his mind. He kicked
one of them out of the way and slashed the other in the gut. He back
flipped out of the circle and slashed 2 of them behind the back. He jumped
and stabbed his sword inside the skull of another one and slashed 3 of them
in a long Japanese Samurai slash. The five surrounded him again and
started pounded him again. Isaac took the blows and looked for an opening.
He took the liberty to do a 360 slash around him and diced the last 5 in
brilliant fashion. Shadow commented,
" Nice job. I see Lunaro has taught you well. I wish to join your team."
Shadow jumped into Isaac's pack and sparked a conversation with Lunaro,
" Yo what's up?"
" Nothing I suppose. Didn't you notice that we seem to be the only djinn
that can talk?"
" Yeah so?"
"This means we're special."
" Cool but I really don't care." Isaac told them to shut up. He proceeded
in the next cave to check out his friends.
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(Important must read)
It seems this story is heading in a different way than I expected.
Originally I wanted Sheba to be prisoner for a long time. Also the
introduction of Agatio and Karst was unexpected when I first wrote this
story. After the reviews I believe my story should be longer. I might have
to add more side quest in between each major event. If you don't like the
direction this story is going to, please tell me in your reviews. Thank
you.
