Well, here is chapter 2, despite no reviews; I think I need to add more
before anyone can be interested..... R+R please! I really want a opinion
izzydurah: yeah, I understand completely, the first chapter has undergone 3 changes already for mechanic and grammar purposes. And I'm sure this chapter will need quite a few too.
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Renzoff warps in the field and looks around for anything unusual.....however it is a typical water field, and nothing appears out of place
"Nothing here is wrong at all, is this some hoax.... Lios may just want to waste my time, or maybe those other guys have handled it..... better test the field though"
Renzoff wanders to a magic gate and lets it open, inside a Terra armor walks out, its large, knight like form with 2 maces as hands lumbers at Renzoff
"Well, the monsters seem normal... but I guess ill try this new ability in these blades"
Renzoff selects the Infinity Vortex on his list of skills, he loses control of his body as the skill activates, and spins around in a circle and flies in the air. At his peak height his body angles downwards at the enemy, his body spins rapidly, creating a vortex as he dives at the enemy as if freefalling. But when Renzoff makes contact something weird occurs, instead of just appearing at the other side he actually cracks through the shell of the armor. Renzoff ends the attack, his eyes are burned with the unbelievable sight of the terra armor's insides, and red blood covers his sleeves. The terra armor falls and disappears from sight.
"What in the world just happened!?! I'm covered in blood from a digital image.... This is not right, what in the world can cause something as weird as this..... I better check out another one, but no skills if that's gonna happen"
Renzoff walks to another magic gate and wait for it to open, however once again he is caught off guard by what happens
"A....a.....a... ASTRO KING! B....b....but that's way too high a level for anything in Delta!"
The Astro King swings its blades at Renzoff, however he shakes out of the amazement long enough to block. (Gah.... Ill never beat this thing without something drastic). Renzoff activates another skill frantically, however suddenly his screen flashes "SP locked" and the skill fails to activate. (WHAT THE! This is not right..... a SP lock can only be done in a event, and that's very rare to do anyways, and why didn't it activate on the terra armor? Since its field wide.....). During this Time the Astro King strikes again, hitting Renzoff, sending his HP to nearly nothing (whoa..... that's way too much damage for an Astro King too! That would have killed off a level 99 wavemaster). Renz uses a speed scroll and runs like mad while healing; eventually the Astro king disappears from being out of range.
"Well at least something is normal today!"
Renzoff screams in his frustration, he sits down near the magic spring
(No monsters near here normally, I should be safe.... Until I can sort this out)
Renzoff thinks for a short amount of time, however Renzoff look notices a virtual shadow blocking the little bit of sun, he looks up to see a wavemaster, in his hand is a golden staff, common among medium level wavemasters who show off their riches, his face is similar to Kite's with the green tattoos, but his robe is the simple one of a newcomer to the game, and covers the majority of his body.
"Hi.... Is this place acting weird to you?" the wavemaster asks
"So I'm not insane after all? Well, I suggest you get out as soon as you can... this place gave a high level like me some hassle"
From behind the wavemaster a guardian appears, Renzoff looks at it in horror
"Look out kid! A guardian!"
Renzoff pushes the other player aside and gets ready to face the guardian, however before Renzoff or the Guardian can do anything, the wavemaster gets up, anger is complete on his face
"NOONE MAY TOUCH THE ALMIGHTY AZURE FLAME! I will show you my powers!"
*the wavemaster taps his staff on the ground, Renzoff covers in green slug like creatures, and becomes frozen in his spot*
(What the.... What is this, this is crazy!)
Renzoff suddenly sees the familiar sign of "Logging Off" appear on the screen, and he tears off his VR helmet, the seventeen year old looked around his dorm room, he had never felt such fear in the game, even when he was beginning and the monsters seemed so real, his body is still shaking lightly from the memory of the slugs, and the few crazy thoughts that were forced into his mind.
izzydurah: yeah, I understand completely, the first chapter has undergone 3 changes already for mechanic and grammar purposes. And I'm sure this chapter will need quite a few too.
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Renzoff warps in the field and looks around for anything unusual.....however it is a typical water field, and nothing appears out of place
"Nothing here is wrong at all, is this some hoax.... Lios may just want to waste my time, or maybe those other guys have handled it..... better test the field though"
Renzoff wanders to a magic gate and lets it open, inside a Terra armor walks out, its large, knight like form with 2 maces as hands lumbers at Renzoff
"Well, the monsters seem normal... but I guess ill try this new ability in these blades"
Renzoff selects the Infinity Vortex on his list of skills, he loses control of his body as the skill activates, and spins around in a circle and flies in the air. At his peak height his body angles downwards at the enemy, his body spins rapidly, creating a vortex as he dives at the enemy as if freefalling. But when Renzoff makes contact something weird occurs, instead of just appearing at the other side he actually cracks through the shell of the armor. Renzoff ends the attack, his eyes are burned with the unbelievable sight of the terra armor's insides, and red blood covers his sleeves. The terra armor falls and disappears from sight.
"What in the world just happened!?! I'm covered in blood from a digital image.... This is not right, what in the world can cause something as weird as this..... I better check out another one, but no skills if that's gonna happen"
Renzoff walks to another magic gate and wait for it to open, however once again he is caught off guard by what happens
"A....a.....a... ASTRO KING! B....b....but that's way too high a level for anything in Delta!"
The Astro King swings its blades at Renzoff, however he shakes out of the amazement long enough to block. (Gah.... Ill never beat this thing without something drastic). Renzoff activates another skill frantically, however suddenly his screen flashes "SP locked" and the skill fails to activate. (WHAT THE! This is not right..... a SP lock can only be done in a event, and that's very rare to do anyways, and why didn't it activate on the terra armor? Since its field wide.....). During this Time the Astro King strikes again, hitting Renzoff, sending his HP to nearly nothing (whoa..... that's way too much damage for an Astro King too! That would have killed off a level 99 wavemaster). Renz uses a speed scroll and runs like mad while healing; eventually the Astro king disappears from being out of range.
"Well at least something is normal today!"
Renzoff screams in his frustration, he sits down near the magic spring
(No monsters near here normally, I should be safe.... Until I can sort this out)
Renzoff thinks for a short amount of time, however Renzoff look notices a virtual shadow blocking the little bit of sun, he looks up to see a wavemaster, in his hand is a golden staff, common among medium level wavemasters who show off their riches, his face is similar to Kite's with the green tattoos, but his robe is the simple one of a newcomer to the game, and covers the majority of his body.
"Hi.... Is this place acting weird to you?" the wavemaster asks
"So I'm not insane after all? Well, I suggest you get out as soon as you can... this place gave a high level like me some hassle"
From behind the wavemaster a guardian appears, Renzoff looks at it in horror
"Look out kid! A guardian!"
Renzoff pushes the other player aside and gets ready to face the guardian, however before Renzoff or the Guardian can do anything, the wavemaster gets up, anger is complete on his face
"NOONE MAY TOUCH THE ALMIGHTY AZURE FLAME! I will show you my powers!"
*the wavemaster taps his staff on the ground, Renzoff covers in green slug like creatures, and becomes frozen in his spot*
(What the.... What is this, this is crazy!)
Renzoff suddenly sees the familiar sign of "Logging Off" appear on the screen, and he tears off his VR helmet, the seventeen year old looked around his dorm room, he had never felt such fear in the game, even when he was beginning and the monsters seemed so real, his body is still shaking lightly from the memory of the slugs, and the few crazy thoughts that were forced into his mind.