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Legend of Zelda:The New life
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part 5-Dampe's Grave
Matt and I went to the graveyard. Kids, weren't really aloud to go there on account most kids would move graves and spray paint the grave stones.
Matt and I ran past the guards and lost them when we hide behind a grave stone. They looked further on.
I swiped the sweat from my forhead. Matt smiled. Then, suddenly the gravestone moved.
Matt jumped forward away from the stone, but I fell into a black hole.
I yelled loudly and closed my eyes. Expecting to fall onto the hard ground, but landing on something softer. I sat up and looked around. Everything was pitch black. I got up dusted myself off. Then I started to walk blindly. Holding my arms out trying to fell for a wall.
Then light.
"What the..?"I started. Looking around the place. It was huge! Tile and coloums made up the room. Each glowing a light blue. The ground was tiled too. Then I saw something. A see through man holding a lantern.
"AHHHHHHHHHHH!"I screamed.
"Hey, hey cool it would you? I can hear every well and I don't need you yelling at me. Now, what are you doing in my grave young man?"He asked. Floating above the ground.
"Well, I ummm I ......who are you?"Was all that came out of my mouth.
"Hmph. I should be asking you that. But I surpose you would want to know. I am Dampe. The old grave yard worker. I used to be the only worker when the grave yard started out. I helped bury all the royal family members and villagers. And who are you?"He asked.
"My name is Link."I said. Inching closer to him.
"Link?! Link, Link?! My good friend that came to visit me so many years ago I can't even remember? How good it is to see you! You look younger than I remember though but yes, I can tell you are Link when you stepped into the light. I can't beleive you would be scared of me. I'm such a softy you know. Well, have you had fun playing with the hook-shot you've come back to challendge me for it again?" He said. A glint in his eyes at the challendge.
"Challendge? What do I have to do?"I asked. Trying to go along with him. Apparently he knew the Real Link and I wanted to know wha he used to do. When he was alive.
'So, he used to challendge ghosts? Wow. He was so cool!'I thought.
"Well, a race boy! Of course. Do you want to try?"He asked.
"Um sure. I guess a race would be fun to do."I said. Alittle unsure.
Dampe smiled and yelled,"Keep up with me if you can!" Then took off through an open door.
I blinked them ran as fast as I could trying to keep up with him. I turned the corner and nearly ran into fire!
I yelped, went around it and ran after him again. I saw he was dropping the fire. So, I didn't follow his exact path so I wouldn't run into the fire. After turning many corners, getting a slight burn on my finger and nearly falling off of the stairs, I made it.
I ran out of breath in the last part, but managed to keep up with him.
"Ummm. Your alittle slugish Link. I told you to challendge me more often, but you did indeed keep up with me. I guess you till win even though you took fifty seconds longer than you used too."He said.
"Thanks. Umm, where's the hook-shot?"I asked.
"Oh, through that door. It will also lead you out. Come back and chellendge me again sometime. I'd loved to challendge you when you get back into shape!"He said laughing and then dissappearing.
I stood wided-eyed for a second before going to the door. I entered it and saw a chest. I opened the chest, and had dust fly up at me.
After hacking for awhile, I reached in and grabbed the prize. It was a weird looking object. I put the hook-shot in my shit and went through the open way. When I got ot the end it seemed blocked off. I puched on the heavy door and saw where I was.
I was in a vent to the village windmill.
I hoped out and went through the door before anyone could ask me a question. I ran to the grave yard, but the guards weren't there that time. Probably still looking for Matt and me.
I went in and went to Dampe's grave where Matt was last time. I saw him huntched over the black pit yelling my name. The guards over his shoulders. Yelling my name too.
'I'm in trouble.'I thought.
I went around another grave stone and whispered'Matt. Matt. over here.'
Matt looked up and saw my hand. He was about to yell my name when he remembered the guards.
"I'll go get some help. You try to see if you can find him."Matt said.
The guards being as stupid as they are, let him go. Matt ran over to me and we got out of there.
"How did you get out of the grave?"Yelled matt at me.
"I have good hearing and I don't need you yelling at me."I said.
"Well, then how did you? You didn't come back up that was for sure."He said.
"Well, I came through the windmill. I fell down there and saw a real live ghost! He challendged me to a race. I keep up with him. So, I was free to go."I said.
"Hold up. You. Saw a ghost. In the grave. And you keep up with him in a race under the grave yard. Then, you were free to go. You ended up coming out of the windmil?"He said.
"Yep."I answered.
"I don't beleive it!"He said.
"Well, i did when something. He thought I was the real Link. You know the hero of time. So when I challendged him, he gave me a hook-shot."I said.
"A hook-shot? Sorry. Don't beleive it until I see it."He said.
I pulled it out of my shirt and showed him.
"Whoa. What is that thing?"he asked.
"A hook-shot. It's really cool too. I only wonder what it does."I said.
"Well, try it out and see what it does."He said.
I held it in my right hand and aimed it to a pole. To the very top too. I pulled the triger. The hook flew from the base and onto the pole. It clicked and pulled me to it.
"WHOAAAAAAAAAAA!"I yelled when it pulled me. I was at the top of the pole. Holding onto the hook-shot with one hand.
"Whoa! That was so cool! Get down and let me try Link!"Shoted Matt running up to the pole.
"I would if I could."I said. Then letting go of the trigger button. It released the hook from the pole and I fell down to the ground.
I landed on Matt.
"Thanks for the catch."I said.
"Get off! You weigh a ton!"He asked below me.
I hopped off and helped him up.
Then looked at the hook-shot.
"This thing is really neat. If Link had it, what did he use it for? I know not to impress his friends."I said.
"Maybe to get to ledges. That would really help you there."Matt said. Looking at the hook-shot too.
"Yeah. That would be cool, being in a temple and hook-shotting across to the ledge. Man, I wonder what else tools he had!"I said.
"Well, you still haven't proven to me that the Temples are real. Or any of that legend."He said.
"Hey! You have to beleive me now! Where could I get this? And how could I be in a grave the first minute and come out later? Think about it. Magic books, moving graves. Ghosts. Weapons. You can't say nothing is going on! You have to atleast beleive that SOMETHING is strange around here."I said.
"Well, I didn't see the book fall off the shelf or a ghost. But, the moving grave is kind of strange and that Hook-shot it cool. But still. It could be all some aceint weapons they used for war. Think about it. Your letting your Imgination go to your head."Matt said.
"Alright. Fine. Don't beleive me. I'm going to go home, get my stuff packed and leave. With or without you."I said. Huffing of my steam.
"Wait a second. Leave? Where are you going?"Matt asked running after me.
"Smiple. The temple of time."I said. Turing on my heels and running to my house.
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How do you like it so far? I hope you like it. Thanks to all you reviewers!
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Legend of Zelda:The New life
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part 5-Dampe's Grave
Matt and I went to the graveyard. Kids, weren't really aloud to go there on account most kids would move graves and spray paint the grave stones.
Matt and I ran past the guards and lost them when we hide behind a grave stone. They looked further on.
I swiped the sweat from my forhead. Matt smiled. Then, suddenly the gravestone moved.
Matt jumped forward away from the stone, but I fell into a black hole.
I yelled loudly and closed my eyes. Expecting to fall onto the hard ground, but landing on something softer. I sat up and looked around. Everything was pitch black. I got up dusted myself off. Then I started to walk blindly. Holding my arms out trying to fell for a wall.
Then light.
"What the..?"I started. Looking around the place. It was huge! Tile and coloums made up the room. Each glowing a light blue. The ground was tiled too. Then I saw something. A see through man holding a lantern.
"AHHHHHHHHHHH!"I screamed.
"Hey, hey cool it would you? I can hear every well and I don't need you yelling at me. Now, what are you doing in my grave young man?"He asked. Floating above the ground.
"Well, I ummm I ......who are you?"Was all that came out of my mouth.
"Hmph. I should be asking you that. But I surpose you would want to know. I am Dampe. The old grave yard worker. I used to be the only worker when the grave yard started out. I helped bury all the royal family members and villagers. And who are you?"He asked.
"My name is Link."I said. Inching closer to him.
"Link?! Link, Link?! My good friend that came to visit me so many years ago I can't even remember? How good it is to see you! You look younger than I remember though but yes, I can tell you are Link when you stepped into the light. I can't beleive you would be scared of me. I'm such a softy you know. Well, have you had fun playing with the hook-shot you've come back to challendge me for it again?" He said. A glint in his eyes at the challendge.
"Challendge? What do I have to do?"I asked. Trying to go along with him. Apparently he knew the Real Link and I wanted to know wha he used to do. When he was alive.
'So, he used to challendge ghosts? Wow. He was so cool!'I thought.
"Well, a race boy! Of course. Do you want to try?"He asked.
"Um sure. I guess a race would be fun to do."I said. Alittle unsure.
Dampe smiled and yelled,"Keep up with me if you can!" Then took off through an open door.
I blinked them ran as fast as I could trying to keep up with him. I turned the corner and nearly ran into fire!
I yelped, went around it and ran after him again. I saw he was dropping the fire. So, I didn't follow his exact path so I wouldn't run into the fire. After turning many corners, getting a slight burn on my finger and nearly falling off of the stairs, I made it.
I ran out of breath in the last part, but managed to keep up with him.
"Ummm. Your alittle slugish Link. I told you to challendge me more often, but you did indeed keep up with me. I guess you till win even though you took fifty seconds longer than you used too."He said.
"Thanks. Umm, where's the hook-shot?"I asked.
"Oh, through that door. It will also lead you out. Come back and chellendge me again sometime. I'd loved to challendge you when you get back into shape!"He said laughing and then dissappearing.
I stood wided-eyed for a second before going to the door. I entered it and saw a chest. I opened the chest, and had dust fly up at me.
After hacking for awhile, I reached in and grabbed the prize. It was a weird looking object. I put the hook-shot in my shit and went through the open way. When I got ot the end it seemed blocked off. I puched on the heavy door and saw where I was.
I was in a vent to the village windmill.
I hoped out and went through the door before anyone could ask me a question. I ran to the grave yard, but the guards weren't there that time. Probably still looking for Matt and me.
I went in and went to Dampe's grave where Matt was last time. I saw him huntched over the black pit yelling my name. The guards over his shoulders. Yelling my name too.
'I'm in trouble.'I thought.
I went around another grave stone and whispered'Matt. Matt. over here.'
Matt looked up and saw my hand. He was about to yell my name when he remembered the guards.
"I'll go get some help. You try to see if you can find him."Matt said.
The guards being as stupid as they are, let him go. Matt ran over to me and we got out of there.
"How did you get out of the grave?"Yelled matt at me.
"I have good hearing and I don't need you yelling at me."I said.
"Well, then how did you? You didn't come back up that was for sure."He said.
"Well, I came through the windmill. I fell down there and saw a real live ghost! He challendged me to a race. I keep up with him. So, I was free to go."I said.
"Hold up. You. Saw a ghost. In the grave. And you keep up with him in a race under the grave yard. Then, you were free to go. You ended up coming out of the windmil?"He said.
"Yep."I answered.
"I don't beleive it!"He said.
"Well, i did when something. He thought I was the real Link. You know the hero of time. So when I challendged him, he gave me a hook-shot."I said.
"A hook-shot? Sorry. Don't beleive it until I see it."He said.
I pulled it out of my shirt and showed him.
"Whoa. What is that thing?"he asked.
"A hook-shot. It's really cool too. I only wonder what it does."I said.
"Well, try it out and see what it does."He said.
I held it in my right hand and aimed it to a pole. To the very top too. I pulled the triger. The hook flew from the base and onto the pole. It clicked and pulled me to it.
"WHOAAAAAAAAAAA!"I yelled when it pulled me. I was at the top of the pole. Holding onto the hook-shot with one hand.
"Whoa! That was so cool! Get down and let me try Link!"Shoted Matt running up to the pole.
"I would if I could."I said. Then letting go of the trigger button. It released the hook from the pole and I fell down to the ground.
I landed on Matt.
"Thanks for the catch."I said.
"Get off! You weigh a ton!"He asked below me.
I hopped off and helped him up.
Then looked at the hook-shot.
"This thing is really neat. If Link had it, what did he use it for? I know not to impress his friends."I said.
"Maybe to get to ledges. That would really help you there."Matt said. Looking at the hook-shot too.
"Yeah. That would be cool, being in a temple and hook-shotting across to the ledge. Man, I wonder what else tools he had!"I said.
"Well, you still haven't proven to me that the Temples are real. Or any of that legend."He said.
"Hey! You have to beleive me now! Where could I get this? And how could I be in a grave the first minute and come out later? Think about it. Magic books, moving graves. Ghosts. Weapons. You can't say nothing is going on! You have to atleast beleive that SOMETHING is strange around here."I said.
"Well, I didn't see the book fall off the shelf or a ghost. But, the moving grave is kind of strange and that Hook-shot it cool. But still. It could be all some aceint weapons they used for war. Think about it. Your letting your Imgination go to your head."Matt said.
"Alright. Fine. Don't beleive me. I'm going to go home, get my stuff packed and leave. With or without you."I said. Huffing of my steam.
"Wait a second. Leave? Where are you going?"Matt asked running after me.
"Smiple. The temple of time."I said. Turing on my heels and running to my house.
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How do you like it so far? I hope you like it. Thanks to all you reviewers!