Here it is chapter 4. Glad that I have 16 reviews, not sure if that's
a lot of reviews or not but am glad just the same. One thing that I think
needs to be mentioned is the fact that in the reviews people keep talking
about who they want Keitaro to end up with. While I am glad that people are
into this fic enough to care, these kinds of expectations are going to end
up disappointing some of the readers. So please just let the fic unfold,
believe me, with somewhere between 20 and 30 more chapters planned for this
thing, a lot is going to change before the end.
On an interesting side note, I am seriously considering adopting this into a full length feature story. The characters and locations and ideas from Love Hina would change of course but the story idea would remain the same and I would create my own story that leads up to this point, which gives me more flexibility and also gives it more substance. For in depth comments, e-mail me at PsychoDragon_ofDoom@hotmail.com
Tell me what you think of the idea, and don't worry I'll work on the fic as well.
Sorry for the slow update, not my idea. Finals week paired with last chapter test of the tri week equals hell for me. I had 9 essays, 6 quizzes and 10 fucking tests in 12 days. Throw in a deadline for my schools magazine, brass choir and 3 band rehearsals before Italy. Along with conformation, this equals absolutely no time. Lucky for me though, the tri is now over and I may get another chapter up sometime later this week as well. I'm thinking Thursday or Friday ish.
Thanks to these reviewers
Vivi: So you like Shinobu and Mitsumi as choices then huh. They are great characters and they add a lot to the series and as it goes on will become more and more important along with Naru, Motoko and Seta as characters. (None of you even try guessing what's going to happen, it'll be way off.)
Vash: Still with the whole Mot/Kei thing. Ah well, keep your hopes up because this fic is in its early stages, and a lot is going to happen. Also, thank you for reviewing after each chapter to keep me updated on ideas.
Knights: Thank you for your 3rd review and your continued support. As for Mongolia, first, it has a very cool ancient history that has influence on all of Asia and most of Western Europe. Second, I'm 1/8 Mongolian so that influenced my decision as well.
PotterMan1: glad you think its good and plan to update soon.
J: Settle down, it is only a story. I will update every week to two weeks and as time permits of course. Overall, just glad you like the story and love to hear from you whenever you have some comment on the fic.
Now a message from your local Hina girl:
Naru: Hey, this is Naru here reminding all of you to sit back, and enjoy your fic. While reading, we advise you to keep your seat in its upright and locked position. Also, please keep all appendages inside the vehicle at all times. Also, at the end of your journey, please tell the pilot anything you enjoyed or disliked in a written review form. This is encouraged and we always look forward to your input to make this a better overall experience. Thank you in advanced.
Nick: Well, a little different then I expected but it will do, I suppose, now on to your feature presentation.
Niak: HAHAHA, that's fucking hilarious!!!
Nick: ....Lets the start the fic...
Chapter 4: Knocking on Heaven's Door
Naru poked her head out from the bathroom; her eyes were red with tears at this point. She looked up and down the hall for any signs of the ever sneaky Kitsune. After making sure Kitsune was no where to be seen, Naru stepped outside of the door and walked into her room. Once inside she quickly locked the door, and then her eyes landed on the clock. The clock read the ominous time of 1:37 AM.
"Holy shit, I was in the bathroom for the last 7 hours..." One look out the window confirmed this as it was now pitch black outside. Naru sighed and knew that she had to make good use of this time if she wanted to continue to avoid Kitsune from prying into the details of what happened to her and Keitaro. Looking back on it now, she still can't believe she had done what she did, but she needed too.
At this point she decided to sneak downstairs and quick grab some food to satisfy her growing hunger. She slowly stepped down the stairs. Lucky for her, with the repairs to the Hinata-Sou just a few months prior to this, she was able to make it down the stairs without making any of the stairs squeak. She peered down the hall into the living room, and she could see an apparently drunk Kitsune asleep on the couch.
'Well, at least I have something going for me,' she though as she walked past the couch and into the kitchen. She flicked on the light and moved to the fridge. She opened it up and grabbed a carton of milk, at which point she promptly dropped when she felt something come to rest on her shoulder.
"You should make sure someone's really asleep before trying to sneak past them next time." Naru turned around and faced Kitsune who was looking at her very seriously. "Now, please sit down and tell me what happened between you and Keitaro."
Naru turned to leave when Kitsune said that, but Kitsune grabbed a hold of her arm. "Naru, I'm your best friend and this is obviously hurting you greatly." "So tell me what is bothering you and then you can go and do whatever you want and I won't try to stop you." Naru finally conceded and walked over to the table and sat down.
"Well," Naru sighed "where do you wish for me to begin?"
Kitsune smiled inwardly at this 'at least were getting somewhere.' "Just tell me what happened this morning, and anything that might help me to solve this problem with the least amount of hurt feelings possible." Naru nodded and gave a half hearted smile as she looked at Kitsune. As far as Kitsune could tell though, she was staring right through her.
Kitsune felt as if Naru was trapped inside herself, and no matter what she did it would always be so. Thoughts never did stop Kitsune though, so she went ahead and continued to push Naru to give some answers on the current situation.
Naru on the other hand, felt like complete shit. Unlike Kitsune, she wasn't used to this 20 hour days, with 7 of those being crying. This really wore on her body and now she was extremely fatigued. The rings around her eyes seemed to grow darker by the minute and her body was in a complete slump. Even through all this though, she managed to pull out the words that Kitsune needed to hear.
"Well, to begin, the reason Keitaro left was because I told him I had no feelings for him." She sighed after that and Kitsune had a scared look upon her face, she had no idea what to think. Naru, the one who could never decide anything, had told Keitaro she had no feelings for him. Sensing she had more to say though, Kitsune kept listening, ever attentive.
"What I told him was not necessarily true though," Naru muttered as her eyes slowly sunk towards her lap. "I still do have feelings for him, but I know he can no longer be with me."
Kitsune snapped at that "What do you mean you can't love him anymore, he's waited for you for 2 fucking years, what are you thinking Naru."
Naru muttered to herself and then struggled to lift her head. When she finally met Kitsune's eyes, tears had begun to well up in her eyes. Tears began to flow freely from her eyes, as her body began to shut down from exhaustion. "Because, if I can't make up my, he needs to find someone better then me." With that her head hit her arms and came to rest. With that, all that could be heard were her sobs for Keitaro.
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"NARU!" screamed Keitaro as he snapped awake from his fitful sleep. 'Oh, it was just a dream,' he thought as he kicked of his covers and sat up on the couch. He reached for his glasses, and slid them over the bridge on his nose. "I should have expected sleeping troubles, I mean, I never slept well before and now this happened."
Keitaro had to admit something though; he did feel better after sleeping for a bit. "Maybe it helped me clear my head, I couldn't think at all before I slept, even if it was brief." Now that his mind had become clear, he needed to do something about his current situation.
Keitaro began to walk around the house, and upon further inspection; he found an exit into the smaller backyard. He slowly walked out, still deep in thought, and he came to a rest, sitting cross legged on the ground. After a few minutes of resting there, he entered a near meditative state.
Keitaro's mind began to fly into motion again, this time though, his thoughts were on what he should do now, not what could have been with the loss of Naru. After incoherent ideas for a while, his mind slowed down to a pace where he could begin to pick apart the problems which would definitely face him in the near future. This is when his mind became filled with memories, the ones that his friends had been with him in all of his happy times.
Keitaro couldn't help but smile at this, as memories often are the most emotional part of us. 'I've had such a great time there, Seta really is right, I can't permanently leave the Hinata-Sou' 'I do need this vacation though, so I'll still leave with Seta, but it won't be for more then a few weeks.'
Just then though, a new conflict arouse in Keitaro's mind as he had begun to drift away into his meditative state once more. He knew that once they heard about Naru and himself breaking apart and losing contact with each other, there would be a great backlash. It was quite possible for fights to start over the two of them breaking apart. Now Keitaro really felt bad, he didn't want any of his friends to argue over him, he just wanted them to be happy. 'Well, I must do something when I get back, or else the Hinata-Sou may become a bad place to live.'
"Couldn't sleep, could ya part timer" chuckled Seta as Keitaro leaped into the air in surprise.
"Seta, don't do that to me, you scared the living shit out of me." Keitaro was still panting, having been scared thoroughly from Seta.
"Well, at least it looks like your feeling better today," Seta commented as Keitaro actually did have a small smile on his face, even if Keitaro wasn't happy about being scared.
"Yeah," Keitaro said, now calming down "I realized that the future needs to be fixed, because fixing the past is imposable"
"Now your learning, come on, lets go and buy you some stuff before we take-off in a few hours."
Keitaro just looked at Seta dumbly for a moment, before realizing what he meant. He knew instantly that Seta was right though, he had forgotten to get anything before he took off, but he did have his wallet. So Seta's idea of getting new stuff sounded pretty good right then and there. So Seta slapped Keitaro on the back and they walked inside. Both of them getting ready for the big day ahead of them.
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Down in Okinawa, a women clad in a training gi tossed in her sleep. In her dreams, all she could see in it was a man, running from her. All she could think about was catching this stranger. As if he was hiding something from her. No matter how hard she exerted herself though, he continued to outrun her. Then he stopped suddenly and turned to look at her. Then she realized it was Keitaro, and he was bleeding profusely from his arm. Then, looking down, she saw a long trail of blood extending back from whence they came.
All the girl could do was watch as Keitaro pulled a knife from his belt, and with tears streaming down his face, stabbed himself in the temple. The blood shot out from the wound as the knife continued to penetrate the weak flesh on the side of him head. His glasses flew off of him, and Keitaro began to crumple, losing energy. The girl could only witness all this, and then his glasses came to a halt at her feet. Paralyzed, viewing this horrible atrocity, she looked down into the glasses, and she saw her own reflection. In the reflection though, the girl was crying over the loss of a loved one, now dying next to her.
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Down crept over the horizon, but it was slow this day. The gang of Shinobu, Motoko, Su, Mitsumi and Sarah all had gotten an early start in hopes of catching there target. The man named Keitaro, and they needed to hurry. Su had been first up and had positioned the plan for takeoff just as the others had gotten outside. Then, as the horizon began to lighten, Su gunned the engine, and the chase was on again.
As the gang sat in the plane, they all watched as dawn broke. They had began the final flight towards Tokyo, where they all hoped Keitaro was still residing. Perhaps the most affected though, were Motoko, Mitsumi and Shinobu. All of which were trying to get the one they loved back. For them, they could never move fast enough, and it took all of there hope to get them through that ride in hope of getting to the man they loved.
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"Well, part timer, looks like we have everything we need for you." This was noted by a slightly anxious Seta, because there flight was rapidly approaching and they needed to hurry if they wasted anymore time.
"Yeah, everything I need, but here lets just check out this last store." "I have a feeling that I need to go in here." Keitaro added as he stepped through the door, with the manager just beginning to get ready for business that day inside. The manager just looked up and smiled at the two customers, then went back to business.
Keitaro thought at first that he must have been mistaken, because there seemed to be nothing of importance inside. As he continued to look though, he found a few things he might like on his trip. The first of which was a diary, which would be useful for sorting his thoughts. The second was a new pair of glasses, much sportier and modern then his current ones. He just smiled and picked them up, somehow he knew this was one of the images he needed to leave behind in his old life, so this seemed a good thing to get.
Then, walking down the last row in the store, he noticed something that called out to him. Sitting there amidst all the modern things found in a convenience store, was an ancient sword. It seemed to pulse in front of him, with a faint aura that seemed to blend the ki's of ying and yang as one. The sign below the sword read The Sword of Hope, and below it lay an inscription.
"Further down your path is darkness and despair, yet it can be overcome. Search for the light at the end the works with the forces of darkness, not against them. Only by understanding and moving with your enemies can you defeat them. This is why your mind, body and soul must fight as a fluid being, and crash into your enemies with a torrent of strength. Only this way will you find your true road, where you and those you love will be safe. This is your true desire and your ultimate goal in life."
Keitaro just looked wide eyed at the inscription, and he knew what he must do. He needed to take up the sword that he had forgotten in keeping his promise of making it to Tokyo U for Naru. Now that he had succeeded, it was time he took back the sword` and continued to gain strength. For now he had those he loved and cared for back at the Hina house, so it was his job to do all he could to protect them from harms way.
Keitaro, stood there and smiled as Seta walked up to him and smacked him on the back. "Found what your looking for part-timer?" Keitaro just nodded and picked up the sword as if it was a new-born baby. He took it along with the glasses and the journal, and walked up to the owner.
The owner just smiled and acted as if nothing was out of the ordinary. Something told Keitaro though that there was more to this guy then he knew, but he decided it was unimportant now. So he took his things and stepped into the world, with a new goal in life. He would be the protector of the Hina estates, now all he needed was to go with Seta. There he would retrain his body and then he could finally sort out his feelings. From then on, he would be settled into his new life, with his old loved friends.
At least he hoped so......
There we go, and I am so going to regret this. It's now 12 AM and I have school tomorrow. Ah well, at least I can sleep in first hour, that will give me enough energy to get through the day.
Now, as for the fic, I ended it a bit early, and I changed from my original plan. This chapter was originally going to end one scene change later, but this seems to work quite well so I have no problems with this setup.
Now, I'm hoping that this will update by 7 AM tomorrow so you will all get a good chance to read it and then I can get your reviews. This allows me to get some inspiration which hopefully will get me the energy along with some spare time to update again by Saturday night.
Now, some things I should have included earlier but will do now.
(note, thank you Vash for this creative and vary kind idea)
Fics to check out:
Last Dance With Shinobu-Chan by Project Pegasus
May be my favorite fic ever, quite possibly the most heart felt thing I have read. Especially great for those who love the character Shinobu.
5/5
And Life Goes On by Yamiga'sLight
My other choice for favorite fic. Has very descriptive storyline and is one of the few writers who has made Naru into an incredibly likable character. Enjoy this one and can't wait for the end.
5/5
Same Story, Different Guy by RPGer
This is one of the more creative stories, it has 2 inserted characters at this point and continues to make me laugh. The author has a great sense of humor and he updates often, so check it out, this is greatly under appreciated and great work for a first fic.
3.9/5
Loss and Redemption by Hawker-748
An author who I have great respect for after reading this fic. Has made the part of the Love Hina story where Motoko and Keitaro are forced to marry if they lose a very interesting plot line. Still in the early stages and continuing to improve.
4.2/5
Steel Wings of the Phoenix by Vash the Unholy
This is a great fic on its second chapter, but Vash is one of the largest contributors to the Love Hina fan fiction scene. So check out this writer if you have not and see where he takes this new fic. Also, this is where the idea for recommendations of other Fics from, which is something nice that I should have done long ago.
4/5 (will change with time for sure, too early to be sure)
Nick: OK, that's all for that, now I'm signing off before I'm declared an insomniac along with everything else that's wrong with me. Niak: Hey that's no way to talk about an imaginary friend
Nick: Your not a friend when you won't leave me the fuck alone and you hate me.
Kitsune: Nick, stop with the whole Niak thing, just beat the crap outta him.
Nick: How, he lives inside my head, and has for the last 3 years.
Naru: Why do I work for you, first you screw up my relationship with Keitaro and now you've gone bonkers.
Su: Maybe I can help, Niak sounds nummy, I want to meet and eat him.
Nick: I'm going now....
(Su and Naru chasing after me, ain't that fun.)
Kitsune: Well as the "helper" person here, I guess all I can say is that were trying to fix this problem here and that you must read and review. I am Rudy Juliany, do as I say. (for those who don't know, that was Kitsune doing a corny rip-off on the Simpson's)
Niak: HAHAHAHA, I love all you crazy people. Hell, you make me look sane.
Nick: Just end this thing so I can get out of here.
I wonder about myself sometimes, maybe I really am that fucked up. Ah well, doesn't matter I guess, just need to keep working on the fic for you. If I work on the fic though, you need to do me the favor or be loyal readers and reviewers. Any comments, compliments or flames are greatly wanted. So you better submit your reviews ASAP.
On an interesting side note, I am seriously considering adopting this into a full length feature story. The characters and locations and ideas from Love Hina would change of course but the story idea would remain the same and I would create my own story that leads up to this point, which gives me more flexibility and also gives it more substance. For in depth comments, e-mail me at PsychoDragon_ofDoom@hotmail.com
Tell me what you think of the idea, and don't worry I'll work on the fic as well.
Sorry for the slow update, not my idea. Finals week paired with last chapter test of the tri week equals hell for me. I had 9 essays, 6 quizzes and 10 fucking tests in 12 days. Throw in a deadline for my schools magazine, brass choir and 3 band rehearsals before Italy. Along with conformation, this equals absolutely no time. Lucky for me though, the tri is now over and I may get another chapter up sometime later this week as well. I'm thinking Thursday or Friday ish.
Thanks to these reviewers
Vivi: So you like Shinobu and Mitsumi as choices then huh. They are great characters and they add a lot to the series and as it goes on will become more and more important along with Naru, Motoko and Seta as characters. (None of you even try guessing what's going to happen, it'll be way off.)
Vash: Still with the whole Mot/Kei thing. Ah well, keep your hopes up because this fic is in its early stages, and a lot is going to happen. Also, thank you for reviewing after each chapter to keep me updated on ideas.
Knights: Thank you for your 3rd review and your continued support. As for Mongolia, first, it has a very cool ancient history that has influence on all of Asia and most of Western Europe. Second, I'm 1/8 Mongolian so that influenced my decision as well.
PotterMan1: glad you think its good and plan to update soon.
J: Settle down, it is only a story. I will update every week to two weeks and as time permits of course. Overall, just glad you like the story and love to hear from you whenever you have some comment on the fic.
Now a message from your local Hina girl:
Naru: Hey, this is Naru here reminding all of you to sit back, and enjoy your fic. While reading, we advise you to keep your seat in its upright and locked position. Also, please keep all appendages inside the vehicle at all times. Also, at the end of your journey, please tell the pilot anything you enjoyed or disliked in a written review form. This is encouraged and we always look forward to your input to make this a better overall experience. Thank you in advanced.
Nick: Well, a little different then I expected but it will do, I suppose, now on to your feature presentation.
Niak: HAHAHA, that's fucking hilarious!!!
Nick: ....Lets the start the fic...
Chapter 4: Knocking on Heaven's Door
Naru poked her head out from the bathroom; her eyes were red with tears at this point. She looked up and down the hall for any signs of the ever sneaky Kitsune. After making sure Kitsune was no where to be seen, Naru stepped outside of the door and walked into her room. Once inside she quickly locked the door, and then her eyes landed on the clock. The clock read the ominous time of 1:37 AM.
"Holy shit, I was in the bathroom for the last 7 hours..." One look out the window confirmed this as it was now pitch black outside. Naru sighed and knew that she had to make good use of this time if she wanted to continue to avoid Kitsune from prying into the details of what happened to her and Keitaro. Looking back on it now, she still can't believe she had done what she did, but she needed too.
At this point she decided to sneak downstairs and quick grab some food to satisfy her growing hunger. She slowly stepped down the stairs. Lucky for her, with the repairs to the Hinata-Sou just a few months prior to this, she was able to make it down the stairs without making any of the stairs squeak. She peered down the hall into the living room, and she could see an apparently drunk Kitsune asleep on the couch.
'Well, at least I have something going for me,' she though as she walked past the couch and into the kitchen. She flicked on the light and moved to the fridge. She opened it up and grabbed a carton of milk, at which point she promptly dropped when she felt something come to rest on her shoulder.
"You should make sure someone's really asleep before trying to sneak past them next time." Naru turned around and faced Kitsune who was looking at her very seriously. "Now, please sit down and tell me what happened between you and Keitaro."
Naru turned to leave when Kitsune said that, but Kitsune grabbed a hold of her arm. "Naru, I'm your best friend and this is obviously hurting you greatly." "So tell me what is bothering you and then you can go and do whatever you want and I won't try to stop you." Naru finally conceded and walked over to the table and sat down.
"Well," Naru sighed "where do you wish for me to begin?"
Kitsune smiled inwardly at this 'at least were getting somewhere.' "Just tell me what happened this morning, and anything that might help me to solve this problem with the least amount of hurt feelings possible." Naru nodded and gave a half hearted smile as she looked at Kitsune. As far as Kitsune could tell though, she was staring right through her.
Kitsune felt as if Naru was trapped inside herself, and no matter what she did it would always be so. Thoughts never did stop Kitsune though, so she went ahead and continued to push Naru to give some answers on the current situation.
Naru on the other hand, felt like complete shit. Unlike Kitsune, she wasn't used to this 20 hour days, with 7 of those being crying. This really wore on her body and now she was extremely fatigued. The rings around her eyes seemed to grow darker by the minute and her body was in a complete slump. Even through all this though, she managed to pull out the words that Kitsune needed to hear.
"Well, to begin, the reason Keitaro left was because I told him I had no feelings for him." She sighed after that and Kitsune had a scared look upon her face, she had no idea what to think. Naru, the one who could never decide anything, had told Keitaro she had no feelings for him. Sensing she had more to say though, Kitsune kept listening, ever attentive.
"What I told him was not necessarily true though," Naru muttered as her eyes slowly sunk towards her lap. "I still do have feelings for him, but I know he can no longer be with me."
Kitsune snapped at that "What do you mean you can't love him anymore, he's waited for you for 2 fucking years, what are you thinking Naru."
Naru muttered to herself and then struggled to lift her head. When she finally met Kitsune's eyes, tears had begun to well up in her eyes. Tears began to flow freely from her eyes, as her body began to shut down from exhaustion. "Because, if I can't make up my, he needs to find someone better then me." With that her head hit her arms and came to rest. With that, all that could be heard were her sobs for Keitaro.
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"NARU!" screamed Keitaro as he snapped awake from his fitful sleep. 'Oh, it was just a dream,' he thought as he kicked of his covers and sat up on the couch. He reached for his glasses, and slid them over the bridge on his nose. "I should have expected sleeping troubles, I mean, I never slept well before and now this happened."
Keitaro had to admit something though; he did feel better after sleeping for a bit. "Maybe it helped me clear my head, I couldn't think at all before I slept, even if it was brief." Now that his mind had become clear, he needed to do something about his current situation.
Keitaro began to walk around the house, and upon further inspection; he found an exit into the smaller backyard. He slowly walked out, still deep in thought, and he came to a rest, sitting cross legged on the ground. After a few minutes of resting there, he entered a near meditative state.
Keitaro's mind began to fly into motion again, this time though, his thoughts were on what he should do now, not what could have been with the loss of Naru. After incoherent ideas for a while, his mind slowed down to a pace where he could begin to pick apart the problems which would definitely face him in the near future. This is when his mind became filled with memories, the ones that his friends had been with him in all of his happy times.
Keitaro couldn't help but smile at this, as memories often are the most emotional part of us. 'I've had such a great time there, Seta really is right, I can't permanently leave the Hinata-Sou' 'I do need this vacation though, so I'll still leave with Seta, but it won't be for more then a few weeks.'
Just then though, a new conflict arouse in Keitaro's mind as he had begun to drift away into his meditative state once more. He knew that once they heard about Naru and himself breaking apart and losing contact with each other, there would be a great backlash. It was quite possible for fights to start over the two of them breaking apart. Now Keitaro really felt bad, he didn't want any of his friends to argue over him, he just wanted them to be happy. 'Well, I must do something when I get back, or else the Hinata-Sou may become a bad place to live.'
"Couldn't sleep, could ya part timer" chuckled Seta as Keitaro leaped into the air in surprise.
"Seta, don't do that to me, you scared the living shit out of me." Keitaro was still panting, having been scared thoroughly from Seta.
"Well, at least it looks like your feeling better today," Seta commented as Keitaro actually did have a small smile on his face, even if Keitaro wasn't happy about being scared.
"Yeah," Keitaro said, now calming down "I realized that the future needs to be fixed, because fixing the past is imposable"
"Now your learning, come on, lets go and buy you some stuff before we take-off in a few hours."
Keitaro just looked at Seta dumbly for a moment, before realizing what he meant. He knew instantly that Seta was right though, he had forgotten to get anything before he took off, but he did have his wallet. So Seta's idea of getting new stuff sounded pretty good right then and there. So Seta slapped Keitaro on the back and they walked inside. Both of them getting ready for the big day ahead of them.
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Down in Okinawa, a women clad in a training gi tossed in her sleep. In her dreams, all she could see in it was a man, running from her. All she could think about was catching this stranger. As if he was hiding something from her. No matter how hard she exerted herself though, he continued to outrun her. Then he stopped suddenly and turned to look at her. Then she realized it was Keitaro, and he was bleeding profusely from his arm. Then, looking down, she saw a long trail of blood extending back from whence they came.
All the girl could do was watch as Keitaro pulled a knife from his belt, and with tears streaming down his face, stabbed himself in the temple. The blood shot out from the wound as the knife continued to penetrate the weak flesh on the side of him head. His glasses flew off of him, and Keitaro began to crumple, losing energy. The girl could only witness all this, and then his glasses came to a halt at her feet. Paralyzed, viewing this horrible atrocity, she looked down into the glasses, and she saw her own reflection. In the reflection though, the girl was crying over the loss of a loved one, now dying next to her.
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Down crept over the horizon, but it was slow this day. The gang of Shinobu, Motoko, Su, Mitsumi and Sarah all had gotten an early start in hopes of catching there target. The man named Keitaro, and they needed to hurry. Su had been first up and had positioned the plan for takeoff just as the others had gotten outside. Then, as the horizon began to lighten, Su gunned the engine, and the chase was on again.
As the gang sat in the plane, they all watched as dawn broke. They had began the final flight towards Tokyo, where they all hoped Keitaro was still residing. Perhaps the most affected though, were Motoko, Mitsumi and Shinobu. All of which were trying to get the one they loved back. For them, they could never move fast enough, and it took all of there hope to get them through that ride in hope of getting to the man they loved.
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"Well, part timer, looks like we have everything we need for you." This was noted by a slightly anxious Seta, because there flight was rapidly approaching and they needed to hurry if they wasted anymore time.
"Yeah, everything I need, but here lets just check out this last store." "I have a feeling that I need to go in here." Keitaro added as he stepped through the door, with the manager just beginning to get ready for business that day inside. The manager just looked up and smiled at the two customers, then went back to business.
Keitaro thought at first that he must have been mistaken, because there seemed to be nothing of importance inside. As he continued to look though, he found a few things he might like on his trip. The first of which was a diary, which would be useful for sorting his thoughts. The second was a new pair of glasses, much sportier and modern then his current ones. He just smiled and picked them up, somehow he knew this was one of the images he needed to leave behind in his old life, so this seemed a good thing to get.
Then, walking down the last row in the store, he noticed something that called out to him. Sitting there amidst all the modern things found in a convenience store, was an ancient sword. It seemed to pulse in front of him, with a faint aura that seemed to blend the ki's of ying and yang as one. The sign below the sword read The Sword of Hope, and below it lay an inscription.
"Further down your path is darkness and despair, yet it can be overcome. Search for the light at the end the works with the forces of darkness, not against them. Only by understanding and moving with your enemies can you defeat them. This is why your mind, body and soul must fight as a fluid being, and crash into your enemies with a torrent of strength. Only this way will you find your true road, where you and those you love will be safe. This is your true desire and your ultimate goal in life."
Keitaro just looked wide eyed at the inscription, and he knew what he must do. He needed to take up the sword that he had forgotten in keeping his promise of making it to Tokyo U for Naru. Now that he had succeeded, it was time he took back the sword` and continued to gain strength. For now he had those he loved and cared for back at the Hina house, so it was his job to do all he could to protect them from harms way.
Keitaro, stood there and smiled as Seta walked up to him and smacked him on the back. "Found what your looking for part-timer?" Keitaro just nodded and picked up the sword as if it was a new-born baby. He took it along with the glasses and the journal, and walked up to the owner.
The owner just smiled and acted as if nothing was out of the ordinary. Something told Keitaro though that there was more to this guy then he knew, but he decided it was unimportant now. So he took his things and stepped into the world, with a new goal in life. He would be the protector of the Hina estates, now all he needed was to go with Seta. There he would retrain his body and then he could finally sort out his feelings. From then on, he would be settled into his new life, with his old loved friends.
At least he hoped so......
There we go, and I am so going to regret this. It's now 12 AM and I have school tomorrow. Ah well, at least I can sleep in first hour, that will give me enough energy to get through the day.
Now, as for the fic, I ended it a bit early, and I changed from my original plan. This chapter was originally going to end one scene change later, but this seems to work quite well so I have no problems with this setup.
Now, I'm hoping that this will update by 7 AM tomorrow so you will all get a good chance to read it and then I can get your reviews. This allows me to get some inspiration which hopefully will get me the energy along with some spare time to update again by Saturday night.
Now, some things I should have included earlier but will do now.
(note, thank you Vash for this creative and vary kind idea)
Fics to check out:
Last Dance With Shinobu-Chan by Project Pegasus
May be my favorite fic ever, quite possibly the most heart felt thing I have read. Especially great for those who love the character Shinobu.
5/5
And Life Goes On by Yamiga'sLight
My other choice for favorite fic. Has very descriptive storyline and is one of the few writers who has made Naru into an incredibly likable character. Enjoy this one and can't wait for the end.
5/5
Same Story, Different Guy by RPGer
This is one of the more creative stories, it has 2 inserted characters at this point and continues to make me laugh. The author has a great sense of humor and he updates often, so check it out, this is greatly under appreciated and great work for a first fic.
3.9/5
Loss and Redemption by Hawker-748
An author who I have great respect for after reading this fic. Has made the part of the Love Hina story where Motoko and Keitaro are forced to marry if they lose a very interesting plot line. Still in the early stages and continuing to improve.
4.2/5
Steel Wings of the Phoenix by Vash the Unholy
This is a great fic on its second chapter, but Vash is one of the largest contributors to the Love Hina fan fiction scene. So check out this writer if you have not and see where he takes this new fic. Also, this is where the idea for recommendations of other Fics from, which is something nice that I should have done long ago.
4/5 (will change with time for sure, too early to be sure)
Nick: OK, that's all for that, now I'm signing off before I'm declared an insomniac along with everything else that's wrong with me. Niak: Hey that's no way to talk about an imaginary friend
Nick: Your not a friend when you won't leave me the fuck alone and you hate me.
Kitsune: Nick, stop with the whole Niak thing, just beat the crap outta him.
Nick: How, he lives inside my head, and has for the last 3 years.
Naru: Why do I work for you, first you screw up my relationship with Keitaro and now you've gone bonkers.
Su: Maybe I can help, Niak sounds nummy, I want to meet and eat him.
Nick: I'm going now....
(Su and Naru chasing after me, ain't that fun.)
Kitsune: Well as the "helper" person here, I guess all I can say is that were trying to fix this problem here and that you must read and review. I am Rudy Juliany, do as I say. (for those who don't know, that was Kitsune doing a corny rip-off on the Simpson's)
Niak: HAHAHAHA, I love all you crazy people. Hell, you make me look sane.
Nick: Just end this thing so I can get out of here.
I wonder about myself sometimes, maybe I really am that fucked up. Ah well, doesn't matter I guess, just need to keep working on the fic for you. If I work on the fic though, you need to do me the favor or be loyal readers and reviewers. Any comments, compliments or flames are greatly wanted. So you better submit your reviews ASAP.