Dracos Plights
((If You don't want to read the complaint on a flame I got please skip down
to the bottom! Then look for where the story begines))
Remember how I said no flames? WELL!
I'm gunna beat who ever does that again!! Listen I understand a "Please
touch up on your spelling." Or even a,"I really like the story but it's a
little bit difficult to understand." But NO!!! What I got is just what
pisses me off! & she sent it twice! I GET IT THE FIRST TIME LADY!!!
Is as fallows:
Just 2 things I want to say. Number 1: There is a thing called spell check
or, say it with me:
D-I-C-T-I-O-N-A-R-Y! Or at any rate, you parents or a sibling. If you don`t know what that word means, look it up!! And anothe thing SORCERY? Oh please! You could of come up with SOMEthing better than that!
I thought that the imagery was pretty good, you could do a little better on that. You like to make things...trail, don`t you? I like the way Draco originally got his name MUCH better! Do I seem OVERLLY critical? Forgive me! I do like where you are going with this story.
HARSH!!!! OMG! OVERLY CRITICAL was a HUGE understatement! That was a flame! Oh & DON'T-TREAT-ME-LIKE-I'M-A-RETARD! THAT'S DISRESPECTFUL YOU FOTHER MUCKER! Oh & i'm sorry if I MADE A TYPO!! Everybody does! Oh & I don't give a damn if you like one thing in this story better than the other, I wrote this as my version of how i'd like it!! we have likes & dislikes! I'm NOT changing the whole thing just cuase YOU don't like it! When ya find something ya don't like....IGNOR IT!! Or don't read it! I'm not forceing you to am I?! & WHAT THE FREAK DO YA MEAN TRAIL!! GIVE ME A BREAK IT'S MY FIRST FIC!!& anotherthing, It's the mid ages!! What do you WANT me to say!? Magic witch craft?! The words I choose to discribe things is none of your concern! Yes i'm glad you said that I need to work on spelling but next time DON'T SHOOT MY DIGNITY DOWN!! Just a warning........if I get another flame like this i'm shutting down the story! Yes I even thought about tracking this person down but no. I intend to let everybody know that in the future I WON'T tolerate this kind of feedback! Oh yeah & as I said in the first few chapters......I DON'T HAVE SPELL CHECK!! I'll take time out of my life just to make sure this is more readable cuase I DID see I made alot of mistakes in my earlier chapters & i'll try to fix that. Next time ya wanna give me advise KNOW THIS! More about what you like but make sure you get your point across WITHOUT the sarcassim! Don't tell me what you don't like about this,well, AT LEAST not like that! Now dispite what this person said i'm still gunna go on with my story! I'll do the best I can with vocabulary but i'm not reading the whole friggin dictionary....& Sorccery is a good word! If ya know how to spell it! I trail cuase I move to the next scean! It ain't as easy as you think!! You hurt my pride my feelings & my brain!
You are admired if you read that! Sept for the person who wrote the FLAME!! this means war.............to all in advance, sorry no summery!
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It was evening & the sky was like a beautiful painting. It was a mix of colors ranging from navyblue to fusichia. The land scape assisted in the effect making it seem just perfect.Draco was resting on the ledge enjoying the sceanery. It had been twelve years since his total out look changed. He had once felt like a useless being living in a world of terror & distruction. He felt like giving up, twelve years ago his depressing lonely way of life came to a screaching holt. He gave a sigh & shifted his weight, spreading out his wings in the process. Draco continued to stare at the setting sun not paying attention to anything around him. He suddenly felt a peirceing pain in his back side. Leaping up & wailing in pain he tried to reach the spear in his backside. He then changed his attention to the attacker. Before he was able to get a look at his assailent he was struck by another arrow that launched into his shoulder. He knew if he stayed like this he would surely die. Without attemting to look at his openent he quickly spread his wings & painfully lept off the cliff. He felt yet another arrow peirce him between his shoulders. He was somehow able to get back to his domain when he collapsed into the water. He was loseing consiousness fast. He then heard someone shout & felt his head being lifted from the water. He weakly opend his eyes to faintly see Aura pushing him to the side of the small river. He then closed his eyes & slowly submitted to his exsatuion & weakness.
Meanwhile.......
Aura had been practiceing her fire skills. She was doing her best but all she could manage was smoke. She was about to give up when she finaly managed a small puff of flame. She felt extreamly pleased with herself. It wasn't anything near Draco's flame streams but it was her first. She kept attempting to get something else but wasn't able to. She gave up & decided to get a drink. She almost died of a heart attack to se who was laying in the middle of the river. Draco was hunched up over a rock & had blood streaming from his back, side ,& neck & his head was laying in the stream. She wasn't even able to scream she was so shocked. She had seen Draco come back from hunting or flying with a few wounds but nothing like this. She quickly ran up to him & emmidiatly used her head to lift his against the shore to keep him from drowning. She wasn't sure what else to do but get the spears & arrows out of him. She then layed beside him with her eyes tear filled. She tried to stay awake & watch over him, failing, she fell asleep by his side.
& then.......
Draco awoke the next morning feling soar. He weakly lifted his head & felt something geantly leaned against him. He looked lovingly down at his mate. She had slept out in the cold in order to watch over him." Aura..aura...wake up." He said nudgeing her side with his snout. "mmmf....draco?!" She said lifting her head. Draco smiled looking down at her. She looked up at him then buryed her head into his chest. "I was so worried." she sobbed. Draco brought his talon & gently stroked her arm with his claw."It's okay..i'm alright." He coaxed Watching her fall asleep. He closed his eyes hopeing he would.
It had been a few days since the life threatining encounter & Draco had recoverd almost completely. Aura was once again practiceing her fire breathing skills. She was steadily doing better but she still relied on draco for every basic need. Draco didn't mind at all but felt very pressured by her not being able to fend for herself. He would breath much easier if she was to learn how to fend for herself.
"Aura.....you should rest." He said softly."huh uh!! No way! I'm gunna insinerate this tree If I must rip my throat to shreds doing it!" She said briskly. Draco smiled getting upuntil Aura glared, making Draco plop back down giving her his little 'what did I do?' look. "Don't try that on me! You're not getting up until you're fully healed......or i'll hurt you!" She nagged. Draco couldn't hold in his chuckle."That defeats the perpose doesn't it?" Draco said cleverly."Yes....BUT IF YOU'D LISTEN WE WON'T HAVE TO GET THERE!" She yelled making draco cringe. Even he found her frightening in the sense of someone being afraid of their mother. "It won't get there." He said horsely. Aura giggled at his reaction."Or it could." He added smileing."Oh enough!" She said , going over to him."Lonely?"He said welcoming her presence."Maybe.."Aura said laying close to him. Draco spread out his wing & drapped it over her."Well then I guess that's why you have me now." He said pulling her closer to him. He loved the way they could go from bickering & yelling to just enjoying eachothers company. She snuggled closely to him closing her eyes & enjoying his warmth. Draco used his claw to gently stroke the side of her neck. He then layed beside her & fell asleep.
The next day! They sure do fall asleep alot!
The village was mostly quiet that morning. The peasents were working their backs out. Draco thought it was heartless of Inon to make the peasents work so hard. Draco thought it was fun to kep the knights on their toes. Draco took to the sky like a victoriouse pheonix riseing in the whitish tinged skies. Aura was flying about somewhere, & don't get him wrong, he was worried to death about Aura. He begane hearing screams from under him."Good god i'm going to get my self killed." He thought to himself. He planned on getting Inon out to settle the score for betraying his mate. What Draco hadn't expected was that his plan was about to backfire. Umungst the crowed of running & cowering peasents a man rideing a black horse with long gold hair rode galiantly & fearlessly after the dragon. Draco cot wind of this awhile before the Knight had even seen him, how couldn't he. He stood out like a sour thumb. This was aggitateing Draco, & truth be told, it frightend him a little. His wings flapped with more streangth, he was trying to force the speed from him. This only sucieeded in draining his energy faster.Oh well it wasn't like he could get him way up there. But unfortunantly Draco was wrong. Draco suddenly felt cold binds wrap around his leg, the knight was however foolish. Draco decided to have himself a little fun.
He flapped his wings less fluently then ,as he felt the rope tighten around his leg, he forced a stroke & laughed as he heard the knight yell."Having fun?" He called down jeering with amusment."Not really" The knight moaned as he was dragged along in the muk. Draco got a rush of excitment when he saw the forest. He looked down with a horrid smirk, well he's a dragon so you can guess how horrid."A little trip through the woods would be nice?" Draco said sarcasticaly, merely taunting the knight until he gave up. Unfortunantly he made the mistake of turning away for to long & that cost him the game. Boen dismounted the sattle, making sure he stil had a hold of it,& led it up between two trees, forceing the sattle tightly in place. The knights clever act was impressive but to Dracos dismay. He continued to fly, assuming the knight was still miserably dragging behind, when he was yanked down with the same force of his flight. With a yelp he fell down on his side, kicking up dust everywhere. Now being a dragon the size of an elephant, size not width!, & weighing about a ton didn't make landing on the ground any less painful.
Keeping in mind that there was someone getting ready to kill him, not to menchean a nearly defenseless mate waiting for him, kept him from faltering for long. He painfully rolled ober to a stand & immediatly started nipping the bind around his hind leg. "Oh you're good. Haven't had this sorta challenge in some time." Said the knight with his sword drawn."Not likely to again!" He retorted being sure to keep his eye on him while he attempted to wrench his leg free from the ropeing." I will not stop till i've rid the world of every last one of you." This remark made Draco freeze.The knight surveyed Dracos expression with great fear. Draco's eyes arched into a glare. He leaned his head down to level with the knight. He knew the remark wasn't ment for Aura but it still deeply offended him. He gleaming sun lit eyes glowerd dangerousely, deep growles emitted within his throat & his nostrils flared. With a deep breath he unleashed a furry of fire. The knight sheilded himself with the dragon skin sheild. Their querral was cut short when a loud ear peirceing scream echoed through the air. Draco froze & his eyes were wide with horror. Suddenly Draco snapped his head toward where the direction of the scream originated."Oh god AURA!!" Draco said attempting to take flight, forgetting his leg was still binded. He struck & lashed at the rope, praying it would break. Finally he wrenched his leg fre & rapidly darted into the skies.
D-I-C-T-I-O-N-A-R-Y! Or at any rate, you parents or a sibling. If you don`t know what that word means, look it up!! And anothe thing SORCERY? Oh please! You could of come up with SOMEthing better than that!
I thought that the imagery was pretty good, you could do a little better on that. You like to make things...trail, don`t you? I like the way Draco originally got his name MUCH better! Do I seem OVERLLY critical? Forgive me! I do like where you are going with this story.
HARSH!!!! OMG! OVERLY CRITICAL was a HUGE understatement! That was a flame! Oh & DON'T-TREAT-ME-LIKE-I'M-A-RETARD! THAT'S DISRESPECTFUL YOU FOTHER MUCKER! Oh & i'm sorry if I MADE A TYPO!! Everybody does! Oh & I don't give a damn if you like one thing in this story better than the other, I wrote this as my version of how i'd like it!! we have likes & dislikes! I'm NOT changing the whole thing just cuase YOU don't like it! When ya find something ya don't like....IGNOR IT!! Or don't read it! I'm not forceing you to am I?! & WHAT THE FREAK DO YA MEAN TRAIL!! GIVE ME A BREAK IT'S MY FIRST FIC!!& anotherthing, It's the mid ages!! What do you WANT me to say!? Magic witch craft?! The words I choose to discribe things is none of your concern! Yes i'm glad you said that I need to work on spelling but next time DON'T SHOOT MY DIGNITY DOWN!! Just a warning........if I get another flame like this i'm shutting down the story! Yes I even thought about tracking this person down but no. I intend to let everybody know that in the future I WON'T tolerate this kind of feedback! Oh yeah & as I said in the first few chapters......I DON'T HAVE SPELL CHECK!! I'll take time out of my life just to make sure this is more readable cuase I DID see I made alot of mistakes in my earlier chapters & i'll try to fix that. Next time ya wanna give me advise KNOW THIS! More about what you like but make sure you get your point across WITHOUT the sarcassim! Don't tell me what you don't like about this,well, AT LEAST not like that! Now dispite what this person said i'm still gunna go on with my story! I'll do the best I can with vocabulary but i'm not reading the whole friggin dictionary....& Sorccery is a good word! If ya know how to spell it! I trail cuase I move to the next scean! It ain't as easy as you think!! You hurt my pride my feelings & my brain!
You are admired if you read that! Sept for the person who wrote the FLAME!! this means war.............to all in advance, sorry no summery!
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It was evening & the sky was like a beautiful painting. It was a mix of colors ranging from navyblue to fusichia. The land scape assisted in the effect making it seem just perfect.Draco was resting on the ledge enjoying the sceanery. It had been twelve years since his total out look changed. He had once felt like a useless being living in a world of terror & distruction. He felt like giving up, twelve years ago his depressing lonely way of life came to a screaching holt. He gave a sigh & shifted his weight, spreading out his wings in the process. Draco continued to stare at the setting sun not paying attention to anything around him. He suddenly felt a peirceing pain in his back side. Leaping up & wailing in pain he tried to reach the spear in his backside. He then changed his attention to the attacker. Before he was able to get a look at his assailent he was struck by another arrow that launched into his shoulder. He knew if he stayed like this he would surely die. Without attemting to look at his openent he quickly spread his wings & painfully lept off the cliff. He felt yet another arrow peirce him between his shoulders. He was somehow able to get back to his domain when he collapsed into the water. He was loseing consiousness fast. He then heard someone shout & felt his head being lifted from the water. He weakly opend his eyes to faintly see Aura pushing him to the side of the small river. He then closed his eyes & slowly submitted to his exsatuion & weakness.
Meanwhile.......
Aura had been practiceing her fire skills. She was doing her best but all she could manage was smoke. She was about to give up when she finaly managed a small puff of flame. She felt extreamly pleased with herself. It wasn't anything near Draco's flame streams but it was her first. She kept attempting to get something else but wasn't able to. She gave up & decided to get a drink. She almost died of a heart attack to se who was laying in the middle of the river. Draco was hunched up over a rock & had blood streaming from his back, side ,& neck & his head was laying in the stream. She wasn't even able to scream she was so shocked. She had seen Draco come back from hunting or flying with a few wounds but nothing like this. She quickly ran up to him & emmidiatly used her head to lift his against the shore to keep him from drowning. She wasn't sure what else to do but get the spears & arrows out of him. She then layed beside him with her eyes tear filled. She tried to stay awake & watch over him, failing, she fell asleep by his side.
& then.......
Draco awoke the next morning feling soar. He weakly lifted his head & felt something geantly leaned against him. He looked lovingly down at his mate. She had slept out in the cold in order to watch over him." Aura..aura...wake up." He said nudgeing her side with his snout. "mmmf....draco?!" She said lifting her head. Draco smiled looking down at her. She looked up at him then buryed her head into his chest. "I was so worried." she sobbed. Draco brought his talon & gently stroked her arm with his claw."It's okay..i'm alright." He coaxed Watching her fall asleep. He closed his eyes hopeing he would.
It had been a few days since the life threatining encounter & Draco had recoverd almost completely. Aura was once again practiceing her fire breathing skills. She was steadily doing better but she still relied on draco for every basic need. Draco didn't mind at all but felt very pressured by her not being able to fend for herself. He would breath much easier if she was to learn how to fend for herself.
"Aura.....you should rest." He said softly."huh uh!! No way! I'm gunna insinerate this tree If I must rip my throat to shreds doing it!" She said briskly. Draco smiled getting upuntil Aura glared, making Draco plop back down giving her his little 'what did I do?' look. "Don't try that on me! You're not getting up until you're fully healed......or i'll hurt you!" She nagged. Draco couldn't hold in his chuckle."That defeats the perpose doesn't it?" Draco said cleverly."Yes....BUT IF YOU'D LISTEN WE WON'T HAVE TO GET THERE!" She yelled making draco cringe. Even he found her frightening in the sense of someone being afraid of their mother. "It won't get there." He said horsely. Aura giggled at his reaction."Or it could." He added smileing."Oh enough!" She said , going over to him."Lonely?"He said welcoming her presence."Maybe.."Aura said laying close to him. Draco spread out his wing & drapped it over her."Well then I guess that's why you have me now." He said pulling her closer to him. He loved the way they could go from bickering & yelling to just enjoying eachothers company. She snuggled closely to him closing her eyes & enjoying his warmth. Draco used his claw to gently stroke the side of her neck. He then layed beside her & fell asleep.
The next day! They sure do fall asleep alot!
The village was mostly quiet that morning. The peasents were working their backs out. Draco thought it was heartless of Inon to make the peasents work so hard. Draco thought it was fun to kep the knights on their toes. Draco took to the sky like a victoriouse pheonix riseing in the whitish tinged skies. Aura was flying about somewhere, & don't get him wrong, he was worried to death about Aura. He begane hearing screams from under him."Good god i'm going to get my self killed." He thought to himself. He planned on getting Inon out to settle the score for betraying his mate. What Draco hadn't expected was that his plan was about to backfire. Umungst the crowed of running & cowering peasents a man rideing a black horse with long gold hair rode galiantly & fearlessly after the dragon. Draco cot wind of this awhile before the Knight had even seen him, how couldn't he. He stood out like a sour thumb. This was aggitateing Draco, & truth be told, it frightend him a little. His wings flapped with more streangth, he was trying to force the speed from him. This only sucieeded in draining his energy faster.Oh well it wasn't like he could get him way up there. But unfortunantly Draco was wrong. Draco suddenly felt cold binds wrap around his leg, the knight was however foolish. Draco decided to have himself a little fun.
He flapped his wings less fluently then ,as he felt the rope tighten around his leg, he forced a stroke & laughed as he heard the knight yell."Having fun?" He called down jeering with amusment."Not really" The knight moaned as he was dragged along in the muk. Draco got a rush of excitment when he saw the forest. He looked down with a horrid smirk, well he's a dragon so you can guess how horrid."A little trip through the woods would be nice?" Draco said sarcasticaly, merely taunting the knight until he gave up. Unfortunantly he made the mistake of turning away for to long & that cost him the game. Boen dismounted the sattle, making sure he stil had a hold of it,& led it up between two trees, forceing the sattle tightly in place. The knights clever act was impressive but to Dracos dismay. He continued to fly, assuming the knight was still miserably dragging behind, when he was yanked down with the same force of his flight. With a yelp he fell down on his side, kicking up dust everywhere. Now being a dragon the size of an elephant, size not width!, & weighing about a ton didn't make landing on the ground any less painful.
Keeping in mind that there was someone getting ready to kill him, not to menchean a nearly defenseless mate waiting for him, kept him from faltering for long. He painfully rolled ober to a stand & immediatly started nipping the bind around his hind leg. "Oh you're good. Haven't had this sorta challenge in some time." Said the knight with his sword drawn."Not likely to again!" He retorted being sure to keep his eye on him while he attempted to wrench his leg free from the ropeing." I will not stop till i've rid the world of every last one of you." This remark made Draco freeze.The knight surveyed Dracos expression with great fear. Draco's eyes arched into a glare. He leaned his head down to level with the knight. He knew the remark wasn't ment for Aura but it still deeply offended him. He gleaming sun lit eyes glowerd dangerousely, deep growles emitted within his throat & his nostrils flared. With a deep breath he unleashed a furry of fire. The knight sheilded himself with the dragon skin sheild. Their querral was cut short when a loud ear peirceing scream echoed through the air. Draco froze & his eyes were wide with horror. Suddenly Draco snapped his head toward where the direction of the scream originated."Oh god AURA!!" Draco said attempting to take flight, forgetting his leg was still binded. He struck & lashed at the rope, praying it would break. Finally he wrenched his leg fre & rapidly darted into the skies.