Chapitre trois (chapter three)
First, I apologize for rewriting the first chapter ontop of the second (if infact, I did, I'm not sure) this computer is screwed up. Good news: I fixed the problem.
Sorry this took me so long, I'm having writer's block, the final exams have left me with no inspiration for this. I'm going to try to make Goku's speech a bit more understandable, without losing the effect entirely. Bear with me as I figure this out. I think I fixed the punctuation problem, but tell me if I'm wrong.
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When he came-to the sun was significantly lower in the sky. He hurried back to the house, hoping no one had noticed.
"Where were you? You missed dinner!" Chichi said when he walked in.
"Uh, I did? I fell asleep." Goku scratched his head.
"Do you want me to fix you something?" She asked.
"Nah, I'm really tired. I think I'll just go t' bed." He yawned. Chichi fell over.
For a while he was able to hide from Chichi his utter revulsion at taking the pills, but eventually he decided (with aid of the voices in his head) not to take his medicine at all. Then things started to go awry.
"Dad, why are you staring out the window like that?" Gohan asked his father one afternoon when he was able to take a break from his book work because his new book hadn't come yet (wow, what an interesting life he leads. . . .not).
"I'm just lookin' at that rabbit." Goku pointed out the window.
"What, I don't see. Where is it?"Gohan squinted at the glass.
"But it's right. . .um. . .nevermind." Goku's hand twitched.
"Did it hop away?" Gohan asked.
"Y-yeah. . .that's it. . .it hopped away. . ." Goku continued to look at where he was still seeing a rabbit. Of course, now he knew that it wasn't real.
"Um, can I ask you something?" Gohan turned away from the window.
"You just did, but ok." Goku gave him a funny sort of smile.
"Have you been taking your medicine?"
Goku stopped smiling. "Why're you asking?"
"Well, . . Mom kind of told me to ask you." Gohan said sheepishly. "Since she's
"I. . .forgot to today. . .but I will now, if you want me to."
"I think you'd better," Gohan said nervously.
"Fine." Goku got up, walked out of the room, and got his bottle of pills. He went to the kitchen window and muttered to himself "Sure I'll take 'em. . I'll take 'em and throw 'em as far as I can, so there!" He tossed them out the window.
"That's great and everything, but some will probably find those," Said a voice.
Goku's eyes widened. The voice continued. "Really, how about just putting them right in the kids hand? Like nobody's gonna realize you got rid of them? You moron."
"Shut UP." Goku hissed, trying to make sure Gohan didn't hear his one-sided conversation.
"I can talk AS LOUD AS I WANT TO! You baka, go stick your head in the sink."
Goku fell over. Inside his head, that had been awfully loud. He looked over to see if Gohan had heard, and was shocked to find that the boy hadn't even turned around.
"You. . .you aren't real! Gohan would have heard that. . .what's wrong with me?" Goku was horrified.
"Oh, you think I was kidding? Stick your head in the sink, baka!"
Goku looked at the sink. e caught himself taking a step towards it.
"No. . .no. . .this isn't right. . ."
"It's just a sink. You're not scared of it, are you? Come on!"
"I don't want to. . ." Goku edged toward the door.
"Did you take them yet?" Gohan yelled. "There's another rabbit in the yard."
"This time its a real one!" Goku blurted out. He c lapped his hands over his mouth.
"What?" Gohan asked.
"Yeah, what stupid? Gonna paint the words 'I'm psycho' on your forehead, or do you think they'll figure it out anyway?" The voice intoned.
Goku sank to the floor, left eye twitching erratically.
Gohan walked into the room. "Are you ok?" His expression displayed that he was totally weirded out.
"I bit my tongue." Goku lied. It wasn't a very good lie, and Goku wasn't a very good liar, but Gohan had never been lied to by his father before, so he believed it.
First, I apologize for rewriting the first chapter ontop of the second (if infact, I did, I'm not sure) this computer is screwed up. Good news: I fixed the problem.
Sorry this took me so long, I'm having writer's block, the final exams have left me with no inspiration for this. I'm going to try to make Goku's speech a bit more understandable, without losing the effect entirely. Bear with me as I figure this out. I think I fixed the punctuation problem, but tell me if I'm wrong.
* * *
When he came-to the sun was significantly lower in the sky. He hurried back to the house, hoping no one had noticed.
"Where were you? You missed dinner!" Chichi said when he walked in.
"Uh, I did? I fell asleep." Goku scratched his head.
"Do you want me to fix you something?" She asked.
"Nah, I'm really tired. I think I'll just go t' bed." He yawned. Chichi fell over.
For a while he was able to hide from Chichi his utter revulsion at taking the pills, but eventually he decided (with aid of the voices in his head) not to take his medicine at all. Then things started to go awry.
"Dad, why are you staring out the window like that?" Gohan asked his father one afternoon when he was able to take a break from his book work because his new book hadn't come yet (wow, what an interesting life he leads. . . .not).
"I'm just lookin' at that rabbit." Goku pointed out the window.
"What, I don't see. Where is it?"Gohan squinted at the glass.
"But it's right. . .um. . .nevermind." Goku's hand twitched.
"Did it hop away?" Gohan asked.
"Y-yeah. . .that's it. . .it hopped away. . ." Goku continued to look at where he was still seeing a rabbit. Of course, now he knew that it wasn't real.
"Um, can I ask you something?" Gohan turned away from the window.
"You just did, but ok." Goku gave him a funny sort of smile.
"Have you been taking your medicine?"
Goku stopped smiling. "Why're you asking?"
"Well, . . Mom kind of told me to ask you." Gohan said sheepishly. "Since she's
"I. . .forgot to today. . .but I will now, if you want me to."
"I think you'd better," Gohan said nervously.
"Fine." Goku got up, walked out of the room, and got his bottle of pills. He went to the kitchen window and muttered to himself "Sure I'll take 'em. . I'll take 'em and throw 'em as far as I can, so there!" He tossed them out the window.
"That's great and everything, but some will probably find those," Said a voice.
Goku's eyes widened. The voice continued. "Really, how about just putting them right in the kids hand? Like nobody's gonna realize you got rid of them? You moron."
"Shut UP." Goku hissed, trying to make sure Gohan didn't hear his one-sided conversation.
"I can talk AS LOUD AS I WANT TO! You baka, go stick your head in the sink."
Goku fell over. Inside his head, that had been awfully loud. He looked over to see if Gohan had heard, and was shocked to find that the boy hadn't even turned around.
"You. . .you aren't real! Gohan would have heard that. . .what's wrong with me?" Goku was horrified.
"Oh, you think I was kidding? Stick your head in the sink, baka!"
Goku looked at the sink. e caught himself taking a step towards it.
"No. . .no. . .this isn't right. . ."
"It's just a sink. You're not scared of it, are you? Come on!"
"I don't want to. . ." Goku edged toward the door.
"Did you take them yet?" Gohan yelled. "There's another rabbit in the yard."
"This time its a real one!" Goku blurted out. He c lapped his hands over his mouth.
"What?" Gohan asked.
"Yeah, what stupid? Gonna paint the words 'I'm psycho' on your forehead, or do you think they'll figure it out anyway?" The voice intoned.
Goku sank to the floor, left eye twitching erratically.
Gohan walked into the room. "Are you ok?" His expression displayed that he was totally weirded out.
"I bit my tongue." Goku lied. It wasn't a very good lie, and Goku wasn't a very good liar, but Gohan had never been lied to by his father before, so he believed it.