I am, as many of you probably are, sick of the Mary Sue wars. I will
confess that I am an avid Mary Sue and Original Character hater, but I am
only writing this fic to poke fun at and hopefully enlighten. It is meant
for entertainment purposes only, not to add any fuel to the fire. So sit
back and have a good laugh.
First, however, I would like to express my opinion as to why I am against OCs and Mary Sues. I am not only against them, but against bad writing in general. And, many of those fics containing OCs does fall into this category. So, here are a few suggestions for improvement.
The Summary. This is the most crucial part of writing on ff.net. This is what will capture readers' attention, make them interested in your story. This is what attracts the readers. Yet an astonishingly high portion of the so called 'writers' on ff.net can not write an effective summary. The summary is like a commercial for a product. If the commercial sucks, then it is assumed that the product sucks as well. If you can not string a few sentences together to effectively tell a reader what your story is about, then the naturally drawn conclusion is that the fic sucks as well. If you can't write two sentences, how can you write a paragraph, let alone an entire story? Also, do NOT beg for people to read your story. It is shameless, humiliating and disgraceful on your part, and causes the opposite reaction of your intentions. It makes it seem that your story is so horrible that no one wants to read it, and you have to beg for attention.
Spelling/ Grammar errors. A few misspelled words or a couple of grammatical errors are acceptable, as none of us here are perfect. But....for God's sake, people, USE A SPELL CHECKER!! Word upon misspelled/ incorrectly used word makes the story atrocious and unreadable! It is harder to concentrate upon the content and context of the story when attention must be paid to the basest of mechanics! I know for a fact that Microsoft Word contains a built in spell checker. But, if you do not have this, go to google.com or yahoo.com or some other search engine and find one. They are out there. Also, do NOT be afraid to consult a dictionary! THE DICTIONARY IS YOUR FRIEND. It will not bite or harm you. You can increase your vocabulary and spelling by looking unfamiliar words/ phrases up. Although, many of you out there don't know what one is, let alone how to use it, I'm sure. Also, do not be afraid of a thesaurus, either. FF.net has a dictionary and thesaurus built right in! Please, help stop the spread of illiteracy. Americans are dumb enough as it is. (Yes, I, unfortunately, am an American. German and Japanese students run rings around us. -_-)
OCs and Mary Sues. There is nothing wrong with writing these, just now when every bloody person decides to. It transforms the genre into something all together different. Beyblade fan fiction is exactly that: STORIES FEATURING/ FOCUSING ON THE CHARACTERS OF BEY BLADE or whatever other category your writing for. OCs belong in the original fiction category. However, if you are just dying to write a story with an oc, down play your oc and place more emphasis on the bey blade characters themselves. They are the ones, after all, the fans have come to see. Many 'writers' are still learning to grasp the barest basics of story writing, and when they try to invent a character and integrate them with the already established characters of an anime, beyblade for example, their oc often comes across as a crudely cut out paper doll. The beyblade characters were created by professionals, kiddies, and have established character traits, pasts, etc. They're fully developed 3-D, aka not flat. Yet it is highly impossible for a person who is still learning how to construct a correct sentence to create an original character of equal caliber.
I have, however, seen this successfully done before. A prime example of these ideas in action is Katya's fic, "Broken Angel", in the Yugioh section. Go check it out, and learn from her. Not just her story or what she writes, but HOW she writes. Go pick up a few pointers. Lord knows many of you out there need them.
And now.....on to the story!! Remember, this is for entertainment only, but, if I do happen to offend anyone...... goodies for me. I'm writing this b/c I decided since they're so many oc stories, those against ocs might need....well....a reprieve.
plot: ch.2.: now it's kai's turn to be tortured!
warnings: oc/mary sue bashing. shounen-ai (boi x boi) kai x rei.
no likes? get lost *points to door *
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The sun was setting, painting the sky brilliant shades of pink, orange and dark red while the stars started to creep out. It was a blending of day and night. The evening air was cool and sweet as Kai and Rei walked along the sidewalk from the ice cream parlor. In one hand, Kai held an ice cream cone while his other hung loosely at his side. Rei had both his arms wrapped around one of Kai's, the one holding their shared ice cream cone.
Rei's head lay on Kai's shoulder and he sighted contentedly, his beautiful amber eyes smiling up at his koi. He lowered his head, a few strands of raven hair falling forward with his momentum, and licked at the semi melting ice cream blob, his tongue running over Kai's hand and removing all of the melting, gooey stickiness from it.
Kai reached up with his free hand and wiped the ice cream off of Rei's mouth with his thumb, which he promptly stuck in his mouth, licking the melted sweetness off then smiling down at his kitten.
"Move. You are in my way." A harsh voice huffed.
As soon as Rei heard the female tone, he clung tightly to Kai's arm, nuzzling against his lover. Kai looked up, his cold crimson orbs promising death and burning with an intense fire.
A very beautiful girl stood with her hands on her slim hips and a scowl marring her lovely features. She had a beautiful, heart shaped face with dark blue lipstick on her full lips, bright blue eyeliner, and soft baby blue eye shadow. Her eyes were a snapping dark navy blue. Her hair was waist length and pulled back into a pony tail. It was midnight black with light blue streaks in it, and her bangs were entirely light blue. She had a nose ring, wore a black mesh top, and semi worn, baggy dark green pants. She was holding a skateboard under one slim arm.
"I said, Get out of my way." The girl snapped again, and stepped closer to Kai. They glared into each other's eyes for moments at a time. Dark blue clashed against ruby red, each vying for supremacy.
Suddenly, the girl stepped back and smiled, the look in her eyes softened to one of adoration as she continued to gaze at Kai. "I think- I think....I've just fallen in love! Please excuse my rude behavior moments before, but I've had a very hard life; I was raped as a child, then thrown out onto the streets and the only way I could survive was to become a prostitute, but then I met some man named Voltaire and he took me off of the streets to a special training facility. I trained very hard and am now the new leader of the Blade Sharks. Oh, dear me, I forgot to tell you my name. My name is Veronica Violet."
Kai merely rolled his eyes and turned his attention to his koibito. He wanted to wrap his kitten up in his arms, but Rei was clinging to his arm that still held the ice cream cone. "Are you finished yet?" He growled, growing irritated.
"Not even started, buster!" Veronica snapped back, her eyes going hard for a moment then instantly softening once they gazed back into his eyes. Kai felt the urge to vomit as she continued again.
"Oh, Kai, " She sighed. "I'm so glad I met you! I feel like I now have the strength to battle my inner demons. Thank you so much!" Veronica was about to launch herself into Kai's strong arms when her blue covered face suddenly met with something soft and very cold.
Veronica wiped the ice cream off to the sound of two chuckles grating in her ears. Opening her eyes, hurt and mad that Kai, her love, would do such a thing, she came almost nose to nose with a pair of laughing amber eyes.
"You!" She hissed. "You little wench!" She spat at Rei.
Rei snarled back, tightening his grip on Kai's arm and very glad that his koi had shoved the ice cream into her face. Rei bared his fangs as she glared at him. "Kai is mine, now back off!" He retaliated.
Veronica growled. "No! He's mine! I challenge you to a beybattle; whoever wins is Kai's true love!"
"Challenge accepted!" Rei reached down with one had, still holding tightly onto Kai's arm, and was about to withdraw Driger when Kai's other hand stopped him. He looked up at his koi, surprised. "K-kai?"
Kai looked down at Rei, trying to soothe the boy. "Hush, kitten, it's alright. I'll handle her."
"Awww, what's the matter? Is the little kitten going to cry? Go back to your litter box and leave the bey blading to the real pros." Veronica sneered and with drew a blue bey blade.
"You could never defeat my bit beast, Persian!! We're a team; we've been through a lot together. We're unstoppable!"
"Yeah right." Kai snorted. He used his hand, which was now cone free since it had been shoved into Veronica's face, to wrap around Rei's slim waist, pulling the boy protectively against him and walking straight past Veronica.
Kai paused momentarily to reach out and grasp her beyblade in his palm. His fingers closed into a fist, and he handed the mangled pieces back to her. The sticker of her supposed bit beast fell to the ground, now stuck to the cement. Veronica cupped the broken pieces and looked as if she was about to cry. But she was a strong girl, and strong girls didn't cry. That's why she had tears coursing down her face.
"Use metal, not aluminum next time. Aluminum is too light and breaks easily." Kai snorted then walked away with Rei, who shot a triumphant look at Veronica before snuggling under Kai's chin.
"That was a perfectly good waste of ice cream." He whispered.
Kai snorted. "You sound like Takao. Besides, now it leaves me free to do this." He stopped and turned Rei around in his arms.
"Do what-aaa! Kai!" Rei's question turned into a yelp of surprise as Kai bent and picked Rei effortlessly up. Rei sighed and snuggled against Kai's shoulder as the stoic blader carried him off into the sunset.
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that's enough for now! reviews are appreciated; I seriously enjoy hearing what you guys think.
First, however, I would like to express my opinion as to why I am against OCs and Mary Sues. I am not only against them, but against bad writing in general. And, many of those fics containing OCs does fall into this category. So, here are a few suggestions for improvement.
The Summary. This is the most crucial part of writing on ff.net. This is what will capture readers' attention, make them interested in your story. This is what attracts the readers. Yet an astonishingly high portion of the so called 'writers' on ff.net can not write an effective summary. The summary is like a commercial for a product. If the commercial sucks, then it is assumed that the product sucks as well. If you can not string a few sentences together to effectively tell a reader what your story is about, then the naturally drawn conclusion is that the fic sucks as well. If you can't write two sentences, how can you write a paragraph, let alone an entire story? Also, do NOT beg for people to read your story. It is shameless, humiliating and disgraceful on your part, and causes the opposite reaction of your intentions. It makes it seem that your story is so horrible that no one wants to read it, and you have to beg for attention.
Spelling/ Grammar errors. A few misspelled words or a couple of grammatical errors are acceptable, as none of us here are perfect. But....for God's sake, people, USE A SPELL CHECKER!! Word upon misspelled/ incorrectly used word makes the story atrocious and unreadable! It is harder to concentrate upon the content and context of the story when attention must be paid to the basest of mechanics! I know for a fact that Microsoft Word contains a built in spell checker. But, if you do not have this, go to google.com or yahoo.com or some other search engine and find one. They are out there. Also, do NOT be afraid to consult a dictionary! THE DICTIONARY IS YOUR FRIEND. It will not bite or harm you. You can increase your vocabulary and spelling by looking unfamiliar words/ phrases up. Although, many of you out there don't know what one is, let alone how to use it, I'm sure. Also, do not be afraid of a thesaurus, either. FF.net has a dictionary and thesaurus built right in! Please, help stop the spread of illiteracy. Americans are dumb enough as it is. (Yes, I, unfortunately, am an American. German and Japanese students run rings around us. -_-)
OCs and Mary Sues. There is nothing wrong with writing these, just now when every bloody person decides to. It transforms the genre into something all together different. Beyblade fan fiction is exactly that: STORIES FEATURING/ FOCUSING ON THE CHARACTERS OF BEY BLADE or whatever other category your writing for. OCs belong in the original fiction category. However, if you are just dying to write a story with an oc, down play your oc and place more emphasis on the bey blade characters themselves. They are the ones, after all, the fans have come to see. Many 'writers' are still learning to grasp the barest basics of story writing, and when they try to invent a character and integrate them with the already established characters of an anime, beyblade for example, their oc often comes across as a crudely cut out paper doll. The beyblade characters were created by professionals, kiddies, and have established character traits, pasts, etc. They're fully developed 3-D, aka not flat. Yet it is highly impossible for a person who is still learning how to construct a correct sentence to create an original character of equal caliber.
I have, however, seen this successfully done before. A prime example of these ideas in action is Katya's fic, "Broken Angel", in the Yugioh section. Go check it out, and learn from her. Not just her story or what she writes, but HOW she writes. Go pick up a few pointers. Lord knows many of you out there need them.
And now.....on to the story!! Remember, this is for entertainment only, but, if I do happen to offend anyone...... goodies for me. I'm writing this b/c I decided since they're so many oc stories, those against ocs might need....well....a reprieve.
plot: ch.2.: now it's kai's turn to be tortured!
warnings: oc/mary sue bashing. shounen-ai (boi x boi) kai x rei.
no likes? get lost *points to door *
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The sun was setting, painting the sky brilliant shades of pink, orange and dark red while the stars started to creep out. It was a blending of day and night. The evening air was cool and sweet as Kai and Rei walked along the sidewalk from the ice cream parlor. In one hand, Kai held an ice cream cone while his other hung loosely at his side. Rei had both his arms wrapped around one of Kai's, the one holding their shared ice cream cone.
Rei's head lay on Kai's shoulder and he sighted contentedly, his beautiful amber eyes smiling up at his koi. He lowered his head, a few strands of raven hair falling forward with his momentum, and licked at the semi melting ice cream blob, his tongue running over Kai's hand and removing all of the melting, gooey stickiness from it.
Kai reached up with his free hand and wiped the ice cream off of Rei's mouth with his thumb, which he promptly stuck in his mouth, licking the melted sweetness off then smiling down at his kitten.
"Move. You are in my way." A harsh voice huffed.
As soon as Rei heard the female tone, he clung tightly to Kai's arm, nuzzling against his lover. Kai looked up, his cold crimson orbs promising death and burning with an intense fire.
A very beautiful girl stood with her hands on her slim hips and a scowl marring her lovely features. She had a beautiful, heart shaped face with dark blue lipstick on her full lips, bright blue eyeliner, and soft baby blue eye shadow. Her eyes were a snapping dark navy blue. Her hair was waist length and pulled back into a pony tail. It was midnight black with light blue streaks in it, and her bangs were entirely light blue. She had a nose ring, wore a black mesh top, and semi worn, baggy dark green pants. She was holding a skateboard under one slim arm.
"I said, Get out of my way." The girl snapped again, and stepped closer to Kai. They glared into each other's eyes for moments at a time. Dark blue clashed against ruby red, each vying for supremacy.
Suddenly, the girl stepped back and smiled, the look in her eyes softened to one of adoration as she continued to gaze at Kai. "I think- I think....I've just fallen in love! Please excuse my rude behavior moments before, but I've had a very hard life; I was raped as a child, then thrown out onto the streets and the only way I could survive was to become a prostitute, but then I met some man named Voltaire and he took me off of the streets to a special training facility. I trained very hard and am now the new leader of the Blade Sharks. Oh, dear me, I forgot to tell you my name. My name is Veronica Violet."
Kai merely rolled his eyes and turned his attention to his koibito. He wanted to wrap his kitten up in his arms, but Rei was clinging to his arm that still held the ice cream cone. "Are you finished yet?" He growled, growing irritated.
"Not even started, buster!" Veronica snapped back, her eyes going hard for a moment then instantly softening once they gazed back into his eyes. Kai felt the urge to vomit as she continued again.
"Oh, Kai, " She sighed. "I'm so glad I met you! I feel like I now have the strength to battle my inner demons. Thank you so much!" Veronica was about to launch herself into Kai's strong arms when her blue covered face suddenly met with something soft and very cold.
Veronica wiped the ice cream off to the sound of two chuckles grating in her ears. Opening her eyes, hurt and mad that Kai, her love, would do such a thing, she came almost nose to nose with a pair of laughing amber eyes.
"You!" She hissed. "You little wench!" She spat at Rei.
Rei snarled back, tightening his grip on Kai's arm and very glad that his koi had shoved the ice cream into her face. Rei bared his fangs as she glared at him. "Kai is mine, now back off!" He retaliated.
Veronica growled. "No! He's mine! I challenge you to a beybattle; whoever wins is Kai's true love!"
"Challenge accepted!" Rei reached down with one had, still holding tightly onto Kai's arm, and was about to withdraw Driger when Kai's other hand stopped him. He looked up at his koi, surprised. "K-kai?"
Kai looked down at Rei, trying to soothe the boy. "Hush, kitten, it's alright. I'll handle her."
"Awww, what's the matter? Is the little kitten going to cry? Go back to your litter box and leave the bey blading to the real pros." Veronica sneered and with drew a blue bey blade.
"You could never defeat my bit beast, Persian!! We're a team; we've been through a lot together. We're unstoppable!"
"Yeah right." Kai snorted. He used his hand, which was now cone free since it had been shoved into Veronica's face, to wrap around Rei's slim waist, pulling the boy protectively against him and walking straight past Veronica.
Kai paused momentarily to reach out and grasp her beyblade in his palm. His fingers closed into a fist, and he handed the mangled pieces back to her. The sticker of her supposed bit beast fell to the ground, now stuck to the cement. Veronica cupped the broken pieces and looked as if she was about to cry. But she was a strong girl, and strong girls didn't cry. That's why she had tears coursing down her face.
"Use metal, not aluminum next time. Aluminum is too light and breaks easily." Kai snorted then walked away with Rei, who shot a triumphant look at Veronica before snuggling under Kai's chin.
"That was a perfectly good waste of ice cream." He whispered.
Kai snorted. "You sound like Takao. Besides, now it leaves me free to do this." He stopped and turned Rei around in his arms.
"Do what-aaa! Kai!" Rei's question turned into a yelp of surprise as Kai bent and picked Rei effortlessly up. Rei sighed and snuggled against Kai's shoulder as the stoic blader carried him off into the sunset.
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that's enough for now! reviews are appreciated; I seriously enjoy hearing what you guys think.