tear of a dragon: I totally agree with the hot Hiei comment!-blushes
Thanks a lot for the review it helped me out after the flame I got from
Youko&Kurama's1&onlyGurl
Allie: It kills me when I can't get the next chappie up right away, so I'll continue as often as I can! Thanks for the review!
Youko&Kurama's1&onlyGurl: If you think it's so stupid don't read it and don't comment, I don't mind flames but make it constructive. Like WHY you thought it was stupid. Just saying it was stupid with no reason is like saying Kurama's an ugly hore and not saying why. I DO NOT THINK THAT! It's JUST AN EXAMPLE. I worked on this story and put all my imagination into it, so constructive criticism won't hurt as bad as what you did, but thanks for the review anyway.
Me: Wow ...... that was my first flame... ever...
Hiei: Stop wasting time and type before I flame you, and my flame hurts more! Me: Fine I'll start typing, but I'm restricting your sweet snow in-take till you are being nice again! Hiei: ......glare
Chapter 3 (you may refer to this chapter as the "F" word and the race snickers) 'I know she won't know but might as well try' Hiei thought then said fealing rather depressed, "You wouldn't by chance know where Genkai's Temple is?" "YEP!!! I've been there before with my sister!" Kitsura said jumping off the chair and running over to him. "You want something to eat? Then I can take you to Genkai's!" "No, let's just go." Hiei said rather irritated by the continual delay. (Wow did I really just type BIG words?) A hurt look crossed Kitsura's face, then she sighed and shrugged it off and smiled at Hiei again. "Ok! It's just over the hill" she said pointing. Hiei set off without waiting for the little fox girl. time goes by
Kitsura had been fallowing Hiei from the moment he set off and was chewing on a sandwich she had brought along watching Hiei walking. She swallowed the sandwich and said "I'll race you to Genki's if you're bored of walking."
"Hn..." 'This girl must be thick, well this will be a good chance to lose her for a wile' Hiei thought then said, "sure" And with that they both took off. Somehow Hiei knew the girl wasn't really racing she was keeping in perfect step with him. 'This isn't logical! NO ONE CAN GO AS FAST AS ME... OR FASTER... ASPECIALLY NO KID FOX GIRL!...... did I lose my speed as well? Apparently my endurance too.' Hiei was drenched in sweat and the girl wasn't even breathing hard. Hiei wasn't watching where he was going and tripped over a rock with his bad ankle. He flew forward and blocked his fall with his injured arm causing him more pain. He cursed as he held his arm agents his body. Kitsura's eyes got wide and she threw her hands over her mouth and said "YOU SAID THE "F" WORD!" "You never cursed?" Hiei asked skeptically. Kitsura seemed a little upset for a moment then said "Should I have? I never ... well ... umm... I didn't think it was necessary... Should I curse then?" "What kind of demon are you?" Hiei asked totally forgetting his irritation from earlier. "Umm..." Kitsura looked herself over, she was obviously becoming more and more self-conscious "I thought I was a good demon... I mean the only other demons I know are my sissy and papaw... I think they're decent demons. I'm a fox demon, I have pretty good agility and I think I'm powerful-ish...... Is that a good demon? Or am I just a lousy one? Does that mean you hate me?" Kitsura's voice started getting high like she was going to cry. Hiei was at a loss of how to react to this. Then an idea hit him, "We better get a move on, it's getting late and you wouldn't want the sweet snow at Genkai's to melt" "SHE HAS SWEET SNOW!?!?!?!?! LET'S MOVE IT THEN!!!!!" Kitsura grabbed Hiei's hand and went off as fast as she could dragging Hiei along behind her. A/N wasn't that sweet of Hiei, of course he could have just apologized, it was his falt. But I guess it's a start. I think I'm cursed I can't write/type long chapters! Well thanks to the reviews inspiration struck and I got the above idea, I think inspiration actually just tapped me lightly on the shoulder but it's better than nothing so enjoy! -
Hiei: Keep reviewing! Now can I have some sweet snow?
Me: No!
Hiei: I'll take my shirt off to eat it.
Me: ......Ok blushes and hands him some sweet snow
Allie: It kills me when I can't get the next chappie up right away, so I'll continue as often as I can! Thanks for the review!
Youko&Kurama's1&onlyGurl: If you think it's so stupid don't read it and don't comment, I don't mind flames but make it constructive. Like WHY you thought it was stupid. Just saying it was stupid with no reason is like saying Kurama's an ugly hore and not saying why. I DO NOT THINK THAT! It's JUST AN EXAMPLE. I worked on this story and put all my imagination into it, so constructive criticism won't hurt as bad as what you did, but thanks for the review anyway.
Me: Wow ...... that was my first flame... ever...
Hiei: Stop wasting time and type before I flame you, and my flame hurts more! Me: Fine I'll start typing, but I'm restricting your sweet snow in-take till you are being nice again! Hiei: ......glare
Chapter 3 (you may refer to this chapter as the "F" word and the race snickers) 'I know she won't know but might as well try' Hiei thought then said fealing rather depressed, "You wouldn't by chance know where Genkai's Temple is?" "YEP!!! I've been there before with my sister!" Kitsura said jumping off the chair and running over to him. "You want something to eat? Then I can take you to Genkai's!" "No, let's just go." Hiei said rather irritated by the continual delay. (Wow did I really just type BIG words?) A hurt look crossed Kitsura's face, then she sighed and shrugged it off and smiled at Hiei again. "Ok! It's just over the hill" she said pointing. Hiei set off without waiting for the little fox girl. time goes by
Kitsura had been fallowing Hiei from the moment he set off and was chewing on a sandwich she had brought along watching Hiei walking. She swallowed the sandwich and said "I'll race you to Genki's if you're bored of walking."
"Hn..." 'This girl must be thick, well this will be a good chance to lose her for a wile' Hiei thought then said, "sure" And with that they both took off. Somehow Hiei knew the girl wasn't really racing she was keeping in perfect step with him. 'This isn't logical! NO ONE CAN GO AS FAST AS ME... OR FASTER... ASPECIALLY NO KID FOX GIRL!...... did I lose my speed as well? Apparently my endurance too.' Hiei was drenched in sweat and the girl wasn't even breathing hard. Hiei wasn't watching where he was going and tripped over a rock with his bad ankle. He flew forward and blocked his fall with his injured arm causing him more pain. He cursed as he held his arm agents his body. Kitsura's eyes got wide and she threw her hands over her mouth and said "YOU SAID THE "F" WORD!" "You never cursed?" Hiei asked skeptically. Kitsura seemed a little upset for a moment then said "Should I have? I never ... well ... umm... I didn't think it was necessary... Should I curse then?" "What kind of demon are you?" Hiei asked totally forgetting his irritation from earlier. "Umm..." Kitsura looked herself over, she was obviously becoming more and more self-conscious "I thought I was a good demon... I mean the only other demons I know are my sissy and papaw... I think they're decent demons. I'm a fox demon, I have pretty good agility and I think I'm powerful-ish...... Is that a good demon? Or am I just a lousy one? Does that mean you hate me?" Kitsura's voice started getting high like she was going to cry. Hiei was at a loss of how to react to this. Then an idea hit him, "We better get a move on, it's getting late and you wouldn't want the sweet snow at Genkai's to melt" "SHE HAS SWEET SNOW!?!?!?!?! LET'S MOVE IT THEN!!!!!" Kitsura grabbed Hiei's hand and went off as fast as she could dragging Hiei along behind her. A/N wasn't that sweet of Hiei, of course he could have just apologized, it was his falt. But I guess it's a start. I think I'm cursed I can't write/type long chapters! Well thanks to the reviews inspiration struck and I got the above idea, I think inspiration actually just tapped me lightly on the shoulder but it's better than nothing so enjoy! -
Hiei: Keep reviewing! Now can I have some sweet snow?
Me: No!
Hiei: I'll take my shirt off to eat it.
Me: ......Ok blushes and hands him some sweet snow