To Viper: Wow, that was a lot of criticism. But you know what? You are
right. When I first read your review, I thought "WHAT?!" But then I thought
about it and looked over my story. You are completely right, what was I
thinking? I have decided to rewrite the story, make it better. I have some
ideas too. Yeah, I shouldn't have put y'all all in there, sorry I'm used to
talking that way. I'll pay more attention when I rewrite it. Also, you're
right the sex scene sucked, especially since they haven't seen each other
for so long. They would want to touch each other and do all the foreplay,
again what was I thinking? I'll work hard on the rewrite, it'll be really
different, I have decided to take your criticism and use it to better my
story. If you'd like to help, by being my beta reader or something, just
let me know. If you don't want to I'll understand. I just want to better
the story for my readers. Oh and Angel isn't my real name, my real name is
Carissa. But your right, she is like me. I have decided to change that
also, and be more descriptive about things. Also, I'll do it from other
people's point of views, also. I won't do Angel from my point of view
anymore. Like I said, the rewrite will be really different. It might take a
while to write it, but I hope you're not disappointed. Thanx.
